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Reviews for A Light in the Darkness

By : MiaSkywalker
  • From ANON - Trista on June 10, 2004
    Your view of how vegeta and bulma got started are great. It's a great story and you put emotion and depth into both characters. Keep up the good work. I have several stories on fanfiction.com, but the best one I have written in called A Twist of Fate. I've been told it's really good, though it did have a rocky start. A/w, I think this is a great story and can't wait to read more.
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  • From ANON - Vivian Lucia on November 13, 2003
    Hmmm...well to be frank I don't think this fic was as good as I had been told. The characterisation was off, the plot line was one I've seen 200 times and your writing style seemed a little childish. Apart from my complaints, which you're probaly going ot hate me for, I didn't actualy mind this fic. I had high expectations because people had told me that you were a good writer...and although I was a little let down this fic was written well enough for me to read most of it. The only thing I would suggest re-doing with your writing it to maybe start your sentences off differently each time. I think you started about 100 sentences off by saying 'He..." it made the fic hard to read.

    But yes, when I review I tend to tell people more what they could fix up so in no way think that I didn't enjoy your fic - I did. I just think that with a little more work it could be even better.
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  • From ANON - sarah on February 24, 2003
    wow...you're here now...interesting...hey..keep writing and i'll keep reading...even if i've got it on like...three or four different places...can't get enough of the story. now, is this one going to be the same as on mediaminer or on your site or what? sarah
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  • From ANON - Lis on February 09, 2003
    Good, now write more girl!!!!! i wanna know the end of it...
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