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Reviews for Persistence

By : chayron
  • From ANON - Saiyanprincess on July 27, 2006
    hi there ^^

    I LOVE Your work! I love it!! I really do! ^^

    :3 !!
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  • From ANON - kikyo on February 07, 2006
    OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD!!!!!!! ^_^ :jumps up and down for joy!: I LOVE IT!! IT'S TOO PRECIOUS! :screams: ^_^ by the way, you did great with your writing. i really enjoyed this story! i hope there's others of yours that are just as good!! ^_^ :extremely happy:
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  • From ANON - majinbulgeta on February 04, 2006
    OMG THIS STORY WAS ABSOLUTELY WONDERFUL!!!! GREAT ENDING! IM SO GLAD IT ALL WORKED OUT! =D
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  • From ANON - ~anz~ ^_~ !!! on February 03, 2006
    Wow... so many revelations! ... so much to digest!

    The King...he tried for Kakarott too? Kakarott is very fortunate the Prince showed up when he did!

    And Damaro?! What a way for the Prince to find out about his child! From his lover's former lover?!

    Talk about Persistence they certainly had many obstacles to overcome to get back to each other...


    Thank you for sharing this wonderful story of perseverance with us. I really enjoyed it...

    You write wonderfully... please continue... I look foward to all of your endeavors...

    Bless you... Bless your talent.... and your talented imagination! ~_^!!!


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  • From ANON - Macha on February 03, 2006
    Well, I am glad things turned out well in the end. I do have to say I am a sucker for happy endings!

    Thank you for sharing this wonderful story. I hope to see another soon.
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  • From ANON - kit-kit on February 03, 2006
    nice i bet i can guess what that annoucement was that kakarott is pregnant
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  • From ANON - kikyo on January 22, 2006
    poor vegeta.. sniff sniff! T-T it so sad... i love it! ^-^ i hope you'll update soon, this is one of my favorite stories! i can't wait to read what comes next! you're a great writer. keep it up! maybe you'll write a novel and it'll become a best seller..? who knows! but you're great. PLEASE CONTINUE! i'll cry if you quit... T-T
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  • From ANON - kit-kit on January 14, 2006
    wow things just keep getting complex
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  • From ANON - Webtester01 on January 14, 2006
    Vegeta finnaly voiced his feelings...and Kakarot finally understands.

    Great chapter.
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  • From ANON - chibi_vegeta on January 14, 2006


    well damn...*blinks*...why is it your chapters always seem so short and I'm left staring at the freaking scroll bar wondering where the rest is? I'm glad Vegeta didn't just let Kakarrot wander off, I'd have been pissed. *snerks*

    a couple things; you have some tenses confusion in that some places use present tense while most of it has past tense. present tense should always be used in first-person perspective, past tense in third person perspective. also, a small thing, but contractions should not be used in narrative, only in speech. when narrating always use both words "He was" instead of "He's". hope that made sense, if not feel free to email me, it's in my profile.

    now hurry up with the next chapter already!


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  • From ANON - ~anz~ on January 14, 2006
    Kakarott has quite a delimma! The Prince wants him...as a mate! Damaro wants him dead! And the King wants him...?

    Turns out Veliro was the smartest and wisest of them all... ironic that.


    But Kakarott has a big heart... and Damaro was family for a long time... I understand his loyalty... misguided though it may be...but that's Kakarott...his loyalty will jeopardize him... compromise his life... get him in trouble... again!

    Maybe mating the Prince will both help and heal him... one can only hope...

    Hmm... wonder what the king is up to? Is he really gonna stand for this...? Somehow I just don't see daddy dearest letting go of his boy so willingly...


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  • From ANON - Macha on January 14, 2006
    Aaaahhh, this chapter twisted and turned, and threw in some angst, and then, when Vegeta finally figured out that Kakarott wasn't a mind reader, Kakarott still can't make the easy decision, because of his guilt about Damaro.

    Vegeta's nervousness about the possibility of Kakarott going to his father had in turn made ME nervous. Crap... what will happen if Kakarott does go?

    So MANY questions. *sobs* I am so sorry this is the second to last chapter.

    Thank you for the update!
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  • From Kugatsu on December 28, 2005
    And you've hooked me again!

    Ha! Fisherman Charyon! Once again I am hooked!

    Oh this is SUCH a good tale it started out slowly for me and I even got a bit bored around chapter five and went on a little break but then i came back and oooo! Sooo good! So good! I congratulate you again and again!
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  • From ANON - Macha on December 27, 2005
    Well, it is a very sad way for Kakarott and Vegeta to get back together. I do understand why Kakarott had to go and see Damro (sp?) but I am sad it ended the way it did.

    I am dreading to see how the loose end of Veliro gets fixed, adjusted, addressed.

    Update soon!
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  • From ANON - ~anz~ ^_~ on December 27, 2005
    CHAPTER 10:

    It appears our prince chose an inopportune time to show Kakarott his true feelings....but he did give Kakarott something to think about.

    Veliro...ugh!

    Hmm... King Vegeta seems to have really contemplated this issue...is he salivating? Has a seed been planted? Does King Vegeta want to know what the fuss is all about? Or does he just want Kakarott dead?

    Damaro? Damaro! How many suitors ~potential or otherwise~ does Kakarott have? The Prince will definitely have his work cut out for him when he recovers!

    CHAPTER 11:

    The Prince is very fortunate... had it not been for that explosion...would he even have Kakarott? Damaro did the Prince a favor.

    Apparently King Vegeta is still doubting his son's sanity, but that was very clever of him... making Kakarott nurse Prince Vegeta back to health... his way of saying: see what you've done to my son, third-class? And wasn't that sweet of Veliro... showing him what to do...NOT!

    So the rebel has come to his senses... he has finally acknowledged his feelings... did he stay out of guilt? or want? Whatever the reason, something between them has changed...

    What was he thinking?! Going into the dungeon to see his ex-lover...! What is he, crazy?! Just how delusional is Kakarott?! He's lucky Damaro didn't rape him for old times sake while he was in the process of killing him... damn lucky that one!

    That's right Prince Vegeta! Kill the bastard when you're better! Kill all the competion...

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