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Reviews for When There Are Two of Me

By : chayron

From happycabbage on September 09, 2007
oooh...that doesn't bode well. That doesn't bode well at all.
I have decided that Trunks is terribly confusing. I can't quite figure out his feelings, and thusly I can't quite decide whether I like him or not. I'm very worried about how much Goten could end up hurt as a result of all of this, physically and emotionally.

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From Robyn on September 09, 2007
*SOBS* I don't want this Trunks to GO!!!! :( He's so good with Goten. I wish it didn't have to be that way!
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From ANON - Webtester01 on September 08, 2007
Looks like more of the old Trunks is coming through every day. It would be shocking if the old trunks popped out for a moment during sex. O.0

Looking forward to the next chapter.

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From ANON - confuzdgurl527 on September 07, 2007
another great chapter! Oh no, the other Trunks is returning!!! Is this going to end happily? I can't wait until next Friday!!! I'm a little confused though, as to why Goku and Gohan didn't get along before (I probably missed it somewhere in the other chapters). I love how when I'm reading this story, it feels like it could possibly be happening somewhere. It doesn't sound fictional at all! (except the Dende part and stuff but that's just DBZ right?) By the way, can you suggest any other authors that write DBZ that I should read? It's amazing to read such good stories and I just can't get enough of it! I'll be eagerly awaiting next Friday...
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From quatreofdoom on September 03, 2007
This fic is so awesome. I can hardly wait for the next chapter. I check AFF.net several times a day, just in case a new chapter has been posted. :P

Keep up the great work!
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From ANON - confuzdgurl527 on September 03, 2007
ok, i just had to review your story. i've actually never written a review and made an account so i could tell you how in love i am w/ this story! it's so amazing! you actually have a plot (and it's not a totally predictable one either) and i wanna see the ending! i cant wait for you next update! make it soon please so i dont die!
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From Lavinia on September 02, 2007
What? no threesome?? aww... and I was already waiting for it! I'm disappointed now!
By the way, I have read all of your fics ( and liked most of them, I'm just a lazy bum when it comes to reviewing), and by far this is the best of your fics. I also loved the GokuxVegeta trilogy, but this offers much bigger brain candy.
I have to congratulate you. With every fic you keep getting better. Hope to read more of your work soon!
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From ANON - Anon on August 31, 2007
Hello, goddess of mine. I saw your story today, august 31 and was completely in shock when I found out it wasn't finished. I gotta tell you, that's the most intense fanfiction I have ever read (my previous goddess Tangerine lost her post as #1). It's tearing me apart have to wait to find out what's gonna happen, but I just got really glad when I saw you had just updated, and it was not some story from five years ago. I wanted to praise you but I don't even know where to begin. This story caught my eye 'cause I wasn't (surprisingly) looking for a pwp, and when I was reading it I saw it all happening like a movie (geez, it would be heaven if someone could put this into the screen *�*) One of the things I had the most fun with was Trunks teasing the kidnappers and finally getting the car for himself... Trunks not knowing how to drive was pretty funny also. There was another thing but I don't remember riht now, but I'll probably just read it all over again later so I'll remember. Adn I get the feeling that you don't like Bulma very much... hehehe... Well... let's see what other things I had to say. Told you you're the best writer ever (and I've been reading fanfics for about 10 years now)? Yep. Told you I'll probably die completely miserable with all the life sucked out of me if I don't see the ending of this? Yeah... I get the feeling you know all your fans are going through this heh. Well, I mostly wanted to say thanks for the wonderful hours I spent reading your work of art and I guess I'll search your other works afterwards. I basically just registered on this site just to tell you all this, 'cause really, sometimes I couldn't believe what I was reading, SO good it was. Sorry if it wasn't much of a review, just me drooling over your story, but I really don't know what to say, after reading lots of Goten x Trunks romance I see this sarcastic evil Trunks, it was a whole new thing. Besides the man is so damn machiavellian, you got me believing he exists for real and that's pretty damn rare. Well, for now it's just this, brace yourself for the cliche - keep up the good work - and don't let us waiting to long. Oh, and pleeease, can you think maybe of a happy ending? *puppy eyes* (yeah, I get annoyed when people ask me this when I have another thing planned) but it doesn't hurt to try.... btw, your battle scenes and lemon scenes are so great, just like everything else I guess.. and oh my god, I can't stop talking, shut me up pleeeaasse! btw2, I love the fact that gt doesn't exist, but I can only imagine Goten with "that" hair =__= ok, I'll shut up now. Please forgive my mistakes, english's not my first language and all, and gotta go.
Love,
Nana666
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From Robyn on August 24, 2007
*snickers* I like seeing 'real' lemons. Drunken...why are we doing this again, lemons.

Wow...Trunks telling Gohan to do that. OC breaking up with Goten...and I have a feeling the sh*t has yet to hit the fan. *sighs* I predict angst!
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From ANON - Webtester01 on August 18, 2007
Well they finally got some things settled. But I know that is only temporary. :) I wonder if there will be some sort of Trunks/Goten/Ayame scene...

Great work! I look forward to more. :)

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From Robyn on August 16, 2007
Ah, more of the history revealed! YAY! The picture is getting clearer.

:D Lemons!

Interesting situation between Trunks/Goten/OC. Wonder how this will work, or if it will.
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From ANON - Webtester01 on August 11, 2007
Hot chapter! I liked how you transitioned the scenes from the hesitation, to the desperation between the two.

For quite a while, I was wondering about the dynamics in the relationship between Goten and Ayame; it seems Goten was the seme in that relationship, if not at first.

I wonder how the original Trunks will view this arrangement. I get the feeling that the point of view he has, is like a window in a room, where he sees all that is going on but cannot communicate with the outside world. (Yet…)

I look forward to the next chapter. :)

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From Achillona77 on August 09, 2007
Love this..

Trunks ITing into the bathroom...PRICELESS!

Goten's issues seem to have been resolved..he realized he's more in love Black haired Trunks as opposed to Purple haired Trunks...

And Trunks only held back because of Goten's confusion... but hell..he's not stupid..always knew Ayame was just a substitute for the real deal...

the question is: who's gonna break the news to Ayame... because now that Goten's had a taste of the real thing..will he be able to go back? and what about the OTHER? How does the OTHER feel about this turn of events? He can't be happy about what just happened to his body? Will he re-emerge and take his revenge? It seems Goten's more in danger now than he's ever been, if those data files are any indication...

and Black Haired Trunks...

will he be able to protect the one he loves..and he does love Goten. Will he be able to keep the Other from taking that precious life that means so much to him?

...and last but not least Goten.. after having tasted bliss... will he be able to pass his exams...? Will he meet 'The Other' again? and if he does...???

Questions... so many questions...!
Can't wait for the answers! ~_^!

LOVE IT! LOVE IT! LOVE IT!
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From Robyn on August 09, 2007
Well, they've finally confronted that situation. I wonder what other kinds of complications this is going to bring up now.

YAY for lemons!
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From happycabbage on August 08, 2007
mmmm.....gotta love a lemon. But, I'm a little split on it (not the lemon itself, that was fabulous)...I can't quite figure out if I'm glad it happened or not. How it came about is leaving me with slightly mixed feelings, and I'm nervous about the consequences. At any rate, its a good chapter, and a delicious lemon, and I can't wait to see what happens next (okay, more like I NEED to see what happens next but... ^-^).
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