Reviews for UNSEEN

BY : setbl


  • From ANON - Abraxas on September 28, 2015

    OMG! Thank you sooo much for this wonderful story ( wich I very well hope you will continue sometime :) )! Finaly there is Piccolo! And Vegeta & Goku get along for once! haha! :D I love your portrayal of the Guys as a happy family, but what got me the most was suprisingly your portrayal of ChiChi, as she normally is some kind of villain in this kind of stories or is just ignored(or death^^). You not only menaged to make her in Charakter AND a kind loving Person, you actually gave her some love! X3 I'm SO happy you let her have some joy with all the boys and made them appreciate her!

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  • From Beautifulblo on May 06, 2015

    Really loved this, please write more

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  • From ANON - kit-kit on April 20, 2015

    Awesome story. Truly love your take on things. Im glad chi-chi is able to join them

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  • From ANON - Dragon96 on October 17, 2014

    Hi! It's been a little while... Do you think you might write some more for this story? I really enjoyed reading it! :)

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  • From ANON - Dragon96 on May 28, 2014

    Yay! More chapters!
    This was a great update... such a wonderful way to spend the evening! Each new chapter was well thought out, did a good job of furthering both character development and plot, and included some very nice love making for an added bonus. ;) I don't think you left a single character out.... Everyone had some time to shine and that was fantastic!

    Some nice points:

    We got to see the family develop and become closer without glossing over any difficulties. I love fluff, but a story can lose interest if there's no challenge. :)
    Every character has their own personal difficulties they're overcoming and also has something important to add to their relationships & the story.
    You addressed what was going on with Bulma! I had wondered about how she would react to Vegeta... and felt a little bad for leaving her by herself. But, she's a strong character and you're writing her with the same respect you write Chichi. A big thumbs up!
    Two adorable baby samekians! Who wouldn't love that?
    Gohan being shown plenty of love and support by all his parents.... His character didn't get left out either. And he still has that bit of hero worship for Piccolo, which I always found very sweet in the anime. :)
    Chichi doesn't have to sleep alone! The arrangement you set up works really well.
    Piccolo's new technique.... Very cool.
    Vegeta growing into his relationships and being more comfortable with himself! Both he and Piccolo had some really tough back stories.
    And plenty more, but I think that's enough for this review!

    Thanks again for sharing your writing! I can't wait for the next chapters!

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  • From ANON - Dragon96 on May 07, 2014

    You were right.... This chapter absolutely gave me reason to smile! I really wasn't expecting such a kind and well considered opinion from Chichi. She was really amazing. So lots of applause for her role in this! And Gohan too... He's such a sweet kid. :) I think it's very nice how you've made the five of them into one big caring family. Not too many authors have gone this particular route. I'll read stories that bring dbz characters into different familial groups.... But not quite like this. Very unique and really enjoyable to read. I also really, really like how Goku, Piccolo, and Vegeta are all sharing each others ki levels now. It means we don't have to worry so much about any one character out classing the other two. I love saiyans but the other dbz characters rarely get a chance to shine around them. And Piccolo pregnant always makes me grin! ;) The one and only thing that did disturb me just a little was when Piccolo stretched his neck.... I had a pretty similar reaction to Vegeta's. I'm not entirely sure why to be honest. I don't have any problem with the stretching ability being used with his arms or legs or any other part of his body. It's a cool ability to have in the bedroom! ;) But, with the neck stretching it just kinda weirdos me out. That's just me though..... So keep writing what you like! And thanks again for sharing your story! I can't wait to read the rest!

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  • From ANON - Dragon96 on May 02, 2014

    OMG, I love this! I can't even begin to tell you how long it's been since I read a well written yaoi fic with Piccolo.... Let alone one that involves him with both Goku and Vegeta at the same time! Seriously, thank you. This was fantastic to read! Please, update soon! :D I can't wait to see how their new relationship changes the timeline....

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