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Reviews for Eternity

By : HollyHK
  • From HollyHK on February 01, 2015
    Thank you SO much Kagome13318 for pointing that out! It turns out I completely forgot to upload Chapter 10! I really don't know how I didn't catch that. Thank you for bringing it to my attention. (: It means a lot.
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  • From ANON - Kagome13318 on January 30, 2015
    Where is chapter 11?
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  • From ANON - MonaHerSelf on November 17, 2014
    Hi there!

    I'm totally new to this pairing, though I learnt about them several days ago and am aware of the fact, that many of us ship them to no end. :D
    I'm a huuuuuuuuuuge Goten fan and refused to read this xD (Goten's miiiiiiiiine xDD) but... I don't know what made me read this but I love it. Your theory of Saiyan instincts, mating rituals, boiling blood and such was so reasonable, I bet if DBZ was rated R and higher, this would be included as a reasonable fact of the Saiyan race! I love this! And I love the pair. Bra seemed to be very arrogant, spoiled and clueless like her mother in younger years, like her father ever will be. But with creativity, passing years and a teacup full of humanity, she became a lovely character and is really worth to be Goten's better half. He's just the right guy to carry her on his hands! :D He used to be the kind, gorgeous, naive boy, who I loved so much... I love that you continued this aspect of him and made his dating attitude vanish. :') I hated his cellphone xD

    This was also very well written and at the end of the current chapter I was like... what? Where is the "Next Chapter" button? What? This is in progress!? Noooooo... xDD

    I love you writing style. I love the free space around a much weighing sentence. I love that. Did I mention that I love that? xD Sorry for the lack of words and eloquence...

    I would appreciate it if you would continue! :D Maybe the end is predictable but i LOOOOVEEE the fact that NOONE knows HOW we'll get there and this is a huuuuge point for you as an author!

    xoxo Mona
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  • From ANON - Justice on November 15, 2014
    This story is heartwarming and frustrating at the same time. Relatable, and you make everyone stay in character so well! I usually read short fics but this story its very and charming. Only halfway through all the chapters thank goodness!
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  • From ANON - ZeoUnit on September 19, 2014
    Well so far it looks nice a bit kinda strange since she could one shot kill him I think but fine. That also gives good feel to the story flow. Not sure how will you make her be with him maybe there comes that drug use you mention but still don't forget that capsule corp is not that pool and I'm pretty sure her "pocket money" could cover that without raising any suspicion from parent. She was not small spender in series afterall. What I really is interesting for me is to see how will you take care stuff with Goten, his looks really beat down right now. Will he be in right set of mind to want to help Bulla or not.

    In any cease story look ok for now a bit short in chapters and could use more plot twist but for start look good. I just hope you will keep trying to have nice balance between story plot and xxx scene's and not just go with second option

    Best wishes and good writing by ZeoUnit
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