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By : Pixelgoddess

From ANON - macha on May 05, 2004
You just upped the annie on lemons. If I had a top ten lemon list, this just made # 1. OMG, that was soooooo good. I mean, shower lemons are good, but I really loved the blending. The way they couldn't tell where one ended and the other began.

I hope that this won't cause problems for them in the future. I can see where such a strong bonding could come in handy, but I can also see potential problems.

Yah, remodleing you freaking peeping tom. (Oh wait, I'm reading this and smirking harder than Piccolo probably was.)

Um, why did Chi Chi show up, I didn't think that she could read ki signatures, did one of the boys tip her off?

So I guess this would make two chapters that didn't have that voice. Such a relief, but I am thinking that the relief will be short lived.

This was REALLY good.
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From ANON - DragonGod on April 29, 2004
Awesome fic!
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From Shan on April 29, 2004
This story is so fucking excellent I'm putting it on my recs. Incidentally, Krillin has to die, but you knew that already. I was lucky, my mum's in happy la-la-denial-land and thinks I'm confused. Whatever. It's nice to see Vegeta perking up a bit.
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From CardDragonBall on April 25, 2004
*didn't I say I wasn't going to review every chapter? * Anyway loved this line from chp 3:

"Fish. Now. Go. Food."

~Card
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From ANON - Card on April 22, 2004
*Pets Vegeta* It'll all be alright hunny.

Poor dear.

Seeing how you've got so many chapters finished I really ought to go back to reading them. But I figured I'd drop you this little note *drops boulder on foot and whimpers * Anyway... (Don't mind the insanity) I just wanted to say that I probably won't rw evw every single chapter. But I'll keep on reading. (And reviewing, I'm sure.)

Tootie-Fruitie,
Card~
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From ANON - Card on April 22, 2004
*shudders as she ctanctantly admits that:* I don't feel any particular scathing hate for Chichi thus far. *shudder * I really don't like that girl. When I watch the show she makes me laugh, but mostly I just don't particularily like her. Oh well, she appears to be a lesbian here. (Don't have a clue why this is a good thing for her, but I like it none the less.)

Off to figure out what's making 'Geta so pissed. (Actually I'm avoiding writing; but don't tell anyone.)

~Card
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From Kira on April 22, 2004
I finally caught up to everyone else who has been following your story. Whoo! I am pretty new to adult fan fic. Don't even have a story of my own up yet, which I do hope to remedy. Anywho, I came across your story and just couldn't stop reading. I love the way you portrayed Chichi. I also like your original character, Rezu. I am dying to see Krillin get what's coming to him or at least some sense get beaten into him. Reading about his reaction to Chichi and Rezu's wedding had me trying to punch holes in my wall (yeah, my hand hurts..and the wall is ok). A double team of Piccolo and Vegeta on Yamcha sounds like it would be hilarious *praying it will be in next chapter*. Okie Dokie, I should be on my way. I will be looking forward to future chapters.

~Kira~
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From ANON - suisheu on April 21, 2004
wee-hoo! *does a happy little skip* That was so beautiful! ^__^ I'm glad vegeta's coming to terms with everything that's happening. Hmmm... alright, I have concluded that frieza is well and whole somewhere, and he's screwing with the ouji's mind! It's becoming persistent and angry because hes not obeying it. But unlike 'Geta, I think that it's REAL, and not part of his imagination. But hey, it's just a theory. OMG!!!! *can no longer speak, is laughing too hard... conversation with piccolo.... hehehehehahaha!* Ah, we all knew Krillin was a bitch. If he wants to turn his back on the greatest friend he'll ever have. then so be it. *kicks stupid little baldy* mmm, as long as Goku's got HIS prince :dare not say otherwise: I hope he'll be able to get past his loss. It's just not worth it, to mourn over backstabbers. MOOORE!!!! This wait was too long!!! NEED!!!!
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From ANON - ~Evil on April 21, 2004
You make me happy girl:) Really good chappy by the way. I think you are one hell of an author. If you think of it, it's very OOC for Vegeta to admit he has friends or even a companion (beautiful word to describe it btw, very vegeta like) I think you did a marvelous job of writing this story it is totally realistic. Same goes for the Chi-Chi thing. My compliments. And thanks the the Vegeta Piccolo. They're very funny. Wow, this must be my longest review ever:) Well, I'm about finished. Oh, I hope you can follow everything I've said to you, I'm dutch. Well, I hope the next chapter will be out just as fast. I'll be waiting.
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From ANON - Getarian on April 21, 2004
Loved and shared in Vegeta's moment of joy as he flew home just after visiting Bulma. I can't wait to see Bulma's reaction when she finds out about Vegeta and Goku either, she can't honestly be happy with the toenail polisher, and she's going to realise at that point that she has no hope of changing her mind, because she is not even in the same league as Goku.

Alright, I know that was a bit harsh, but then again, so was she. ;-)

Love that Vegeta is going to ask for a house for him and Goku, one with a huge bathroom and lots of steamy hot water...can't wait for them to get this, looking forward to a lemony bathroom scene. (fingers crossed) :-)

Damn that voice. I definitely don't want it to come between Vegeta's newfound friendship with Piccolo. I'eplyeply interested in why Piccolo said that Vegeta's wavering ki 'felt familiar' and that 'he almost recognized it'. Definitely has me pondering on a new possibility, but not everything ties in with it, so I think I'll just sit on this idea for a while and see how it all goes. :-)

So the voice fears Piccolo as much as Kakarot...interesting. Am wondering if this is because of their emotional strength or if it has something to do with their deep regard for Vegeta, or possibly Vegeta's deep regard for them...or both...hmm.

Loved that Vegeta was feeling exhilarated and strong as he sparred with Piccolo, and it's great for him to be free of the tang vng voice, at least for a while. :-)

Love the way Vegeta and Piccolo give each other shit from time to time, in regards to Gotenks, and Vegeta's 'boyfriend' LOL!

"So? What do you call him then? Got any cutesy names for him? Little Carrot-kins?"

LOL! 'Carrot-kins' That's so not them, that it's hysterical :-D

Definitely loved the deeper element to their conversation, when they were talking about friends, and I'm really pleased that Vegeta easily acknowledged that Piccolo was his friend, ChiChi too. :-)

Loved Piccolo's evil little mind as he joked about Vegeta sleeping with him and ChiChi, 'cause they were his friends, and as Kakarot was also his friend... shit stirring bastard... I love him :-D

Love the names they have for each other...'Elf-boy' 'Greenie' and 'Matchstick' - matchstick indeed, he's gorgeous...Still, it was funny. :-D

Really enjoyed this:
"He relaxed again and smirked at the Namek.erveervert. I wouldn't screw you if you paid me.""
"Sorry Shorty, you missed your chance. Once in a lifetime opportunity."
""Oh yeah, you out in the woods fucking any lizard that got in range. Great opportunity. Sorry I missed it," he replied sarcastically."

This is great stuff! This shows a genuine friendship that they can banter this way, and I love the way that, although Piccolo has deep concern for Vegeta, their friendship never gets mushy. Beautifully done.

"Companion" Nice. Glad that Vegeta has found a word that he feels comfortable with, which describes what he has with Goku. True companionship...not to mention, incredible sex...but he can't go around referring to him as his incredibly sexy lover...well he could...and vice versa ;-) But companion encompasses so much more.

Deeply glad that Piccolo is still going to refer to Goku as 'the boyfriend' whenever Goku is around, just so he can see that grin...I want to 'see' it too. :-)

Truly love this:
""Play nice, or I'll get my boyfriend to beat you up," he said, grinning back."

Really pleased to see Vegeta getting into the spirit of this little 'Piccolo game' it's fun :-)

Really hating that voice. Vegeta was so happy, he was enjoying the memory of that morning with Goku, and the way Goku 'beamed' with pleasure, and then that damned voice had to stick it's beak in and ruin it all.

"...And it sounded pissed at - wh- which was ridiculous, because he wasn't angry with himself - he was rather pleased with the way the day had gone.
Hm
Hmm, so does this mean that on some level, Vegeta believes thae voe voice is actually coming from his own dark thoughts...it would be an understandable assumption, but then this would mean that on some level, he must also be convinced that he is going insane. I know that he has felt these moments, but he has also denied that voice as being his own thoughts...yup, I'm definitely going around in circles here :-D

There is something though, that has occurred to me, and so yet again I shall ponder. I love the mystery element in this story. :-)

"Radditz had looked at him as if he knew and had shaken his head. 'Don't say it my prince. I know.' And then Radditz had bent over him, kissing him, rumbling deep in his chest."

"::The voice was wrong. Radditz did know.::"

Damn, this is so touching.

Gods, I hate Freiza so much. I hate whatever he did to the Prince. The scenes you wrote of Vegeta's time with Freiza's doctors, and of when Radditz returned was amazingly done. I felt Vegeta's fear, his apprehension, it was palpable. I was particularly saddened by this scene between Vegeta and the newly returned Radditz:

"He still needed him, wanted him - but something had changed. He was suddenly afraid - was this what they had done?"

So desperately sad. :-(

Well, Krillin has certainly proved to be a grade A bastard hasn't he? Not that I'm surprised, his initial appearance, had me hating him already. But I'll say this for the little twit, he inadvertently gave a helping hand to Goku and Vegeta's relationship. Vegeta seeing Kakarot's pain, gave him the opportunity to be able to be there for his companion/boyfriend (sorry, had to keep it there, I love it too much) ;-) This is very important to Vegeta, and I know that he was angsting about not giving anything back to the relationship, and this gave him the opportunity iscoiscover the emotional strength to do just that...oh, the irony...if only the bigoted one could realise this. :-D

Loved the way Goku defended ChiChi and Rezu's relationship, annoyed that he felt that he had to, but Krillin was saying such hateful things, that he probably felt that he had no choice. Krillin gives me the shits.

"If he cannot accept you for who you are, then he is not your friend, Kakarott."

Truer words were never spoken. :-)

"...It is the foolish ningen that say it is a sign of weakness.""

Exactly. To cry is a show of emotion, it's genuine...nothing weak about that. The weakness comes from believing that you are less than you are if you allow your emotions to show...of course, I'm not talking about crying at the drop of a hat...but sometimes, a person needs to shed some tears...it's that simple. Love the way you think. :-)

"Shorty has always been an idiot. You just noticed it."

LOL! ...And Vegeta got a smile from Goku. :-)

Totally loved the end scene with Vegeta and Goku. I could feel each other gaining strength in the presence of the other. Such love, I envy them...sigh.

In response to your response to me.

"I have some ideas for Bulma finding out about Vegeta and Goku - should be entertaining."

Great! Looking forward to this. :-)

"I've become pleased with Chichi, too. I hate her in the show - but I think I gave her a valid reason to be a happier person."

Yes, I think so too. She is so calm with Rezu. :-) Agree that she is dead annoying in the show, but ya gotta feel sorry for her...I mean Goku was never there, bless his absent-minded little heart :-) On the other hand, a man's not gonna feel the need to rush home to a frying pan...LOL!

"When I'm done with the story, maybe I should add a chapter with all the clues pointed out. *g*"

Yes! I would like to see that. Don't know if you were joking, and if you were...it's funny, because I am definitely clueless at times, but if you weren't, I for one would definitely read it. :-)

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From ANON - Hecate18 on April 21, 2004
Seeing Vegeta smile and be happy makes me smile. It was good to see him in such a good mood, that was until that voice came back.
Why must it torment him... Why!!! (Please excuse the over dramaticness. U_U)
And Krillin! I'm ashamed, how can he be such a narrow minded jerk! Guess it shows who your real friend are.

If Krillin were Goku's or Chi-chi's true friend he would have accepted this, his reaction was horrible, and he's completely inconsolable... Those horrible things he said about Chi-chi and Rezu. Goku should have beat him up.
... At least Chi-chi has a nose! Ha.

What was really cute was Vegeta's discription of thier relationship... 'Companions' awwww don don't blame Goku for crying, I would have flooded the house! ^-^

As always, I am looking forward to the next chap! ^_^
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From ANON - macha on April 21, 2004
You went over a lot if emotional stuff with great writting. I think that this was one of the best chapters so far. (even without lemons) Still trying to figure out The Voice situation.

I really, really liked the Piccolo and Vegeta exchange. Also the part where the voice is going to be quiet around Piccolo. Two sactuaries(spelling?), that's good.

As usual, anticipating the next update.

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 21, 2004
This story just keeps getting ridiculously better and better. I love it.

But as we all already knew, noseless freak asshole sucks soooooo much ass. I have always hated Krillin. ver ver really knew why. It wasn't so much that he didn't have a nose. But now I know...he a homophobic ass clown. I knew it! I've always been a good judge of character.

I'm so happy that Goku and Vegeta are soooo in love. Ikes kes me smile. :) See!
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From ANON - XxNeko_YoukaixX on April 17, 2004
damn i was kinda hopin' that Yamcha would piss himself for be so so scared of Vegeta *sigh* ....oh well ^^ but i liked how it chap turned out in the end its wasn't what i expected but it was great all the same. ^^ but yeah ur fic really did help me stay sane for those 3 weeks so thanks again, but i tell Crystal almost every time i see her i tell her i hate her not litterly only jokin' 'cause from readin' the fic i've become obseesed with readin' this fic & i blame her for showin' me this great fic. ^^ so whats goin' to happen to the voices Vegeta keeps hearin'? will they ever go away? does he have to do somethin' in order to get rid of them? is Trunks & Goten gonna get together in future chaps or fic? if u r gonna write a sequel don't do it yet i'm still hooked on this one ^^ hehe. god i'm not jokin' when i first read the fic i juct couldn't stop rereadin'^^ c^^ crystal thinks its funny how i'm obsessed with this fic no thanks to u & ur writin' skills grrrrr look what u've done u've gottin' me readin' Vegeta/Goku fics now like crazy not that its a bad thin' ^^ but update soon i can't wait for the next chap ^^ talk to ya soon.
*~Cat
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From ANON - Hecate18 on April 16, 2004
I'm glad to see that Bulma and Vegeta have made there peace (although I am still a little pissed with her!)
It was really funny the way Vegeta was intimidating Yamcha, Yamcha is so wipped. ^_~
Ans los loved this chapter as always, Vegeta can now see more of his son. Maybe that will help with his inner turmoil, it's good that he has gained another friend. ^_^

Looking forward to the next chap. ^-^
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