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From ANON - Crystal on April 16, 2004
Well, I see my friend has reviewed finally. She loves it more than I do, I think. Lol. Another good chapter. Very heartfeI liI like how Bulma's bf is totally p/w-ed. Ha! Keep i!Cr!
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From ANON - kinhoshi76 on April 15, 2004
very nice keep it up
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From ANON - ~Evil on April 15, 2004
Wow, perfect! I reeeeeeaaaaaaaallyy hope it'll stay this way:) I'm always checking twice a day if you updated my favorite story. And this very fast update really made my day. Thank you. And a very nice chappy at that. (Well, I secretly hoped Vegeta would be a little bit meaner. Esp. to Yamcha;).) More Piccolo Veggie soon?? I hope so. Well, keep it up, I'll be waiting.
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From ANON - suisheu on April 15, 2004
MWAHAHA! Now THAT is how the Saiyajin no ouji should act! I'm kind of relieved. Everything was so unsteady for a while. WOW! OMG, I so completely forgot about that incident with the dragon! O.O *and the pieces fall together* ^__________^ MOOOOOOOOORE!
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From ANON - Getarian on April 15, 2004
Hey, another update, so soon. Excelle Co Congratulations on getting over 100 reviews. :-)

I really liked this chapter. The scenes with Vegeta and Yamcha were fun. I enjoyed them, and although Vegeta's intent was not sinister, it was a joy to watch him messing with Yamcha. The guy needs a serious beating for being such an arsehole, but considering that Vegeta knows that this is something he won't be doing, then his own method of revenge is sweet enough. :-)

Pleased to see that Vegeta stood proud and showed true class when speaking to Bulma. Really love that he is determined to still play a part in his son's life, no matter how much this fact seemed to have surprised Bulma.

This chapter has shown Bulma in a more favourable light than when we last saw her, and although she showed signs of regret for the way she treated Vegeta, and even offered excuses as to why she had done so. I personally can't forgive her or Yamcha for their actions. She had many options in which to tell Veget sod sod off, and she chose one of the most despicable methods around. Still, I am glad that Vegeta is content enough in his life to be able to move on from it all, and remain on agreeable terms with her.

I was so hoping that Vegeta would tell them about him and Goku...sigh...oh well, another time maybe?

I really do love the way you have portrayed ChiChi in this story. I love it that she is actually Vegeta's 'champion' whether he wanted it or not. :-)

Here's something that I forgot when I got all emotionally analytical in my previous post:

"~~Pity he won't be staying with you. It would be interesting to see what it takes to make him scream.~~"
Arrrrgh! Forgot about the previous taunts of this nature. Blocked it I suppose. Scares the hell out of me.

I can't see Vegeta taunting himself with these thoughts. Yes, I can see him having fears of this nature, him being unsure just how warped his years with Freiza had made him. But no, I can't see him actually taunting himself with thoughts like this. So my whole theory from the previous review has just been flushed down the toilet.

Guess, I'll just have to wait and see. I'm pretty useless at clue gathering anyway, I get thrown off by red herrings, and I couldn't follow a trail if it had arrows. :-D

Really enjoyed this chapter and anxiously await more-)
-)

Responding to you:
"Vegeta is going to make an effort to show Kakarott he cares for him, but remember, he really doesn't know how."

Hmm, true...but the fact that he is going to be making an effort, I think, is hopefully going to be fully appreciated by Kakarott, and I'm going to love seeing it all unfold...I hope. :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 15, 2004
That was really good. You actually made me not hate Bulma and Yamcha anymore. Cool. I am so glad that everything is starting to mend itself back toge. Th. The gang has to stay the gang. It just wouldn't be right.
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 14, 2004
Congrats on getting 100 reviews. I don't think that I'ver ser seen anyone get that many reviews. Cool! This is a great fic and you so deserve it!
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From ANON - Empress on April 14, 2004
Wonderful, Beautiful, and all around good ^_^
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From ANON - XxNeko_YoukaixX on April 14, 2004
hello 1st i would like to intoduce myself my name it cat & i love anime like Yu-Gi-Oh!, DBZ, Inu-Yasha, Dot Hack, Naruto & many others. ^^ i was intoduced to this fic but a friend a mine u know 'cause she reviews ur chaps her name is crystal....any way since march 19th my comp stopped workin me( me(still is *cries*) so i had no internet for almost a whole month & crystal felf bad so she showed me this fic she saved to a disk so that i can read at my house & all i have to say is that I LOVE THAT FIC!!!!!!(love sick school girl ^^) i'm not kidding i was goin' nuts for not havin' the net but i guess u & crystal saved my sanity so THANK U SO MUCH!!!!!! only 2 days ago did my dad get a different comp workin' in the house hence why i'm on this one not the one in my room. ^^ but i mean damn i love this fic to death i kept buggin' crystal almost everday for a week & a half to see if u updated ur fic (Bonding? & Awakenings)........aaaanyywaayysss now to review thw chap ^^ will the voices ever go away? will Vegeta beat the crap out of Bulma & Yamcha? will Goku kill Dende if he does find out about what he did to Vegeta? is Trunks & Goten gonna get together since in the chap "Fitting In" Gohan is really the only straight one in the family will they get together?ahhh damn will i ever stop typin' such long reviews? i'm not jokin' i try to write short ones but i just end up writin' long ones......be happy that i didn't put how anythin' about how big my family is or what chaos some of my friends are goin' not just to me but to others i know ;__; damn this has been a long review sorry again ^^ talk to ya later & keep up the great work ^^
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From ANON - Hecate18 on April 14, 2004
So sorry for the late review. ^-^
I glad to see that Vegeta has regained some of his ki, and I am also glad to see he is not giving in to those voices without a fight! ^_^
It is so easy to forget that Goku must also be suffering, I mean he must be going out of his way to try and make Vegeta happy... poor thing, Ina sna see him smile again too. (or (or read about him smiling O_o)
And is Vegeta finally gonna confront Bulma and Yamcha, I hope it will go well, Vegeta's got enough on his plate right now.

Looking forward to the next chap! ^_^
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From ANON - ~Evil on April 13, 2004
Really cool chapter, I can't wait till Vegeta get's to Bulma and Yamcha. Hope he makes him piss himself:) Hope to see some Vegeta Piccolo friendship too soon. I think they're very funny. Now as my last hope: Don't make me wait very long. I really can't wait for the Vegeta Bulma Yamcha interaction:)
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From Spacefille on April 13, 2004
Review #96...

AW!! Warm fuzzies! *huggles author happily with a Goku-ish grin on her face* That chapter made me happy.

Going back some, I'm glad that things got worked out somewhat... Vegeta's "frieza-voice" of doubt is nasty, but I'm glad he's conquered it, or at least appears to. Once again I skimmed over the lesbian sex scene, though I'm sure it was well written. ;) I congradulate you for being one of the only writers who actually paints Chi-Chi in a positive light, and yay! for the marriage!
Also I liked how at the end Vegeta was actually being nice, but he still spoke with a "Vegeta voice", which meant it didn't seem OOC to me. Vegeta is hard to write nice, so good job on that.
I look forwards to more as always. :)
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From ANON - Getarian on April 12, 2004
Very pleased to see anothhapthapter up so soon. You update beautifully :-)

I actually read this story yesterday, before I was due to go over to my brother's place, so I never got the chance to review then. Firstly, I would like to say a big thank-you for your lovely response to my reviews (haduge uge smile on my face)

I was deeply interested in the fact that the voice was supposed to be getting louder, and harder to ignore, and I can understand your frustration over not being able to show this fact, and I was surprised, but happy, to note that when I opened up the story again, you had somehow found a way to increase the print. It definitely makes a difference. :-)

I always imagined that the ce'ce' was simply there, quietly mocking him, torturing him with his oemoremories and fears, but now, it takes on a whole new light...

If the voice started off as I imagined, and has slowly but surely intensifie Veg Vegeta's mind, then I'm amazed that Vegeta is keeping it together so well. Whilst a disembodied, yet tauntingly calm voice, constantly inside his head, is surely more than enough to drive him to distraction, the idea of said voice, growing and demanding his attention, is extremely horrifying.

I did originally think that Freiza had somehow found a way to tap into Vegeta's mind, and therefore, be able to taunt him from hell, and now, with the knowlege that the voice is getting louder, it did have me thinking that maybe Freiza is slowly taking control of the Prince's thoughts, and therefore, is becoming more promt int in his mind...but having read through this chapter, I'm now of the opinion that the voice inside Vegeta's head, is truly coming from his own tortured mind...

...Of course, I could so easily be way off track (and it wouldn't be the first time) :-)

At times, I figured, yeah, it's Freiza alright...but then, the extremely emotional scene with Vegeta having an argument with the voice, had me changing my mind...yet again :-)

"...He didn't want to lose Kakarott - he needed him."

"~~Yes, you need so yso you will have someone else to use.~~" (I see what you mean about not being able to do bold - very frustrating, when you want to illustrate a point)

"--I don't use Kakarott.-"

This and the following argument between Vegeta and his voice was veell ell done. I could picture it so well, hear the harsh taunting of the voice, the uncertain, almost scared, denial in Vegeta's more subdued responses, and could feel him slowly conceding defeat.

Until this:

"...since you were a child you have belonged to the Ice-jin.~~"

Somehow, I get the feeling that this is the root of all of Vegeta's problems, the voice, the dreams, the fact that he couldn't acknowledge, even to himself, that he had been raped. All of it tied up to the fact that he probably felt that he had lost himself, the moment he was first taken by Freiza.

- God, how my heart breaks at this thought -

I know I could be sprouting a whole load of doggy doo here, but so far this is what I see and I believe that although Vegeta still has a long road ahead of him, he has finally crossed that first, and most important, hurdle.

Just some things I also wanted to highlight:

"...finishing up with the crudest words that Radditz had taught him."

Love this :-) The idea that Radditz taught his Prince some 'healthy' Saiyan expressions, really makes me chuckle. I can just picture it so well :-)

"And he suddenly realized - he wanted Kakarott to be happy. He wanted to see him smiling again."

Really loved this! The fact that Goku is also being drained by all of this, yet remains supportive and strong for Vegeta, the fact that it nonetheless shows in his face, and Vegeta has noted this, and wanted to bring that smile back to Goku's face, inspite of the fact that, Vegetasuffsuffering through enough crap to make a person scream...it's all very touching. :-)

"He wasn't wearing his normal spandex - instead he had chosen blue jeans and a black t-shirt. Goku grinned - the prince looked much more relaxed - his tail was even swaying behind him."

Just loved the picture this presented :-)

Really loved the entire kitchen scene between Vegeta anku :ku :-)

"No Kakar I w I will leave you to deal with the perverted old man and the rest of your friends."

LOL!

Oooo, cliffhanger:

""I am going to deliver this one myself," he said, holding up one addressed to Bulma and Yamcha."

I hope that he holds his head up high when he faces them. He's way too good for Bulma in this, and this time around, Ild lld love to see him leave them knowing; that the right person can bring out that wonderfully loving, and happy side, which he possesses, and...that she can't hurt him anymore.

Truly dramatic and wonderful chapter. Loved it! Can't wait for more :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 11, 2004
I am glad to see that Vegeta is getting better, or so it seems. Wedding invitations? Are ChiChi and Renu getting hitched? I really hope so.

But back to my prince...those dreams of his are extremely distrubing...I think that fact that he has survived so long dealing with them just proves how strong he really is and I am please that he decided not leave Goku. They are so cute together. I love this fic. Glad you reviewed mine and I can't wait for the next chappie.
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From ANON - macha on April 11, 2004
*sighs happily* At least it 'seems' as though Vegeta is on the right track to healing his past. I say 'seems' because this chapter didn't make it feel as though Vegeta went through all that he needs to go through to deal with his past.

At least he didn't sucome (spelling?) to the voice telling him to leave Kakarott. And if the voice continues on that path, I hope that he continues to ignore it.

I am also impressed with how you showed Vegeta's obvious dislike for the "R" word.

As usual, can't wait for your next up date.
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