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By : Pixelgoddess

From ANON - suisheu on April 11, 2004
NOOOO!!! no nono nonononon!!!! How could you end it there?! NEED-MORE!!!!! AHH!!!! *cires* going crazy with the suspense!!! NO!!!! *huffs* why did I ever get mehself hooked on the cliffies?! **sits down and meditates** meh... waiting..... ^_______^
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From ANON - Crystal on April 09, 2004
*sigh* I havent reviewed in awhile... My comp has been screwed up and it still is. I have to do everything with my keyboard cuz my mouse wont show up on screen. Dumb... Well anyways, story's goin good. Keep it up, k?
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 07, 2004
This fic is excellent and I really enjoyed this chap
I love how concerned Goku is for Vegeta, how much he is willing to make the Ouji believe in himself. I just love how he soothes him.
I especially love the relationship between Vegeta and Piccolo that is great! They are hilarious, yet they can get very serious.
You write very well, and I love everyone's personalities. You have defined them well!
I thought it was sad and wonderful when Vegeta said don't say that *fuck* buddies, because Kakarott doesn't like it.
Aww, it was just great to see how he got about that term, all b/c Goku doesn't like it.

Great fic I love it!
^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - Hecate18 on April 03, 2004
Sorry I didn't review chapter 23, by the time I found time to review there was another chapter and I was like yay I guess I'll review this one! ^_^

First, I thought chap 23 was yummy, I haven't read many yuri lemons, but most of the time I do, I just skim over the lemon; this must be the first one I read properly and enjoyed. So really what I wanted to say was great chap! ^_^
Oh yeah and about your note after the chapter I totally agree with that, kinda takes me back to my days in school in my religious studiessonsson, and the heated debates I used to have with my teacher. Those were the good ole days. O_o

Ah yea and this chap brilliant too, it's good that Vegeta is better, even though he hasn't fully regained his ki. Stupid Dende!
At least Goku is there for him. And I hate Frieza too, even though he's dead, but he's still tormenting Vegeta.
Hopefully Piccolo can help Vegeta and Goku to find out how a Saiyan mating bond works, Goku and Vegeta deserve to be mated after what they've been through, who cares what those stupid damned kais think! (Sorry got a bit carried away there. ^_^)
I don't think Vegeta's a monster, it was quite sad when he said that... well I thought it was anyways.

I should really stop babling now (BTW really liked your fic egg ^_^) Looking forward to the next chap!!! ^-^
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From ANON - Kurai on April 03, 2004
Gotta love all the yaoi-ness :) :) Keep it up
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From ANON - macha on April 03, 2004
Hip Hip Hurray. Another update. I like the depth of this chapter. And I also liked the way that Goku discovered Furiza's *voice* and how he reacted to it.
So you scared people away with the yuri huh? Well, I like the whole story. Keep writing, I think that I am waiting for the day that Vegeta is healthy again! (Bonding is cool, but which way would it be wiser? To bond after Vegeta has gotten rid of Furiza's taunting, or is it going to take a bond with Kakarott to get the Prince over that hill?) *Hums happily thinking about both senarios*
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From ANON - Getarian on April 03, 2004
Enjoyed this chapter. Really worried that Goku can now hear Vegeta's tormented thoughts and he naturally thinks that they are Vegeta's thoughts...can't help but worry that he's going to hear something to make him back away from Vegeta.

Still trying to figure out exactly what these thoughts are myself. Are they from Vegeta's subconscious mind? Is he tormenting himself with his own fears? Or is Freiza able to infiltrate his mind in some way...even from hell? Just some thoughts I have wondering about in my head...but yeah, I am worrior Vor Vegeta's mental health if he doesn't find a way to get rid of these 'thoughts.'

"~~You just lay there because you enjoyed it.~~"

Things like this really terrify me for Vegeta. Regardless of how untrue it is or of where these thoughts are coming from, he is still living with the constant struggle to come to terms with his past (damned understandable) however; with these constant reminders, he's never going to be able to accept that it was out of his hands and not his fault...I just want Goku to hold him so much when I read this stuff...I love the emotions you express and evoke in your writing!

"Vegeta? You're not worthless." Kakarott crawcrawled up until they were face to face. "Do you think that is all this is?" he asked with pain obvious in his voice. "I thought we were making love - not just...," he hesitated at the word, before saying it with a strange mix of sorrow and disgust. "Not just *fucking*."

I really loved this. The whole scene was well done but this response from Goku as he heard Vegeta's 'thoughts' was beautifully done, I could definitely feel his hurt.

"Kakarott," he whispered. He hated that voice, how it kept chipping away at his pride and sanity, always trying to keep him away from what he needed. "It's not true. I don't think that this is just-" He bit off. "I know this means something-to both of us. I *need* you."

I got completely choked up at this.

Like I said, I love that whole scene...beautiful...but those two passages really touched a spot in me. So very well written.

Really loved the spar with Goku and the kids :-) Particularly loved Vegeta's amusement when Gohan took Goku unawares, especially this:

"Owww," he complained, sitting up. "That wasn't fair. I wasn't ready."

"Oh, I'll remember that the next battle we are in. 'Excuse me, could you un-kill me? I wasn't ready'," Vegeta said, relishing Kakarott's obvious embarrassment."

LOL! Poor Goku, beaten up by his son in front of his boyfriend [btw...really love how Piccolo calls Goku, Vegeta's boyfriend] :-)

I have to say this again...but I love the friendship between Piccolo and Vegeta :-)

"Vegeta turned to look at the Namek, grinning. "Are you ever going to stop whining about that? It dn'dn't have been as bad as you say."

LOL! Yes! Yes it was! I must confess though, Piccolo and Gotenks in the time chamber were hysterical...loved Piccolo's reactions to Gotenks antics :-)

Totally loved the whole scene between Vegeta and Piccolo...really love how Piccolo has said that he'd find out about the mating bond from the Kai's, if that is what Vegeta wants...

"I'll get the information for you - even if I have to beat the shit ou eve every kai there is," Piccolo said, stubbornly."
"Oh yeah, I'd pay money to see that," Vegeta smirked."
Me too! :-)

Damn, I can't keep highlighting stuff or this review will go on forever...but I absolutely loved it all!

Definitely looking forward to more :-)

"Looks like e sce scared most of the reviewers away with the yuri. *waves* It's safe now! You can come back! Feed the author!"

LOL! Sorry...one of the guilty I'm afraid...don't get me wrong...I have absolutely no problem with yuri...I just can't read it, is all...heck, the only Yaoi or het lemon I can truly enjoy is the Vegeta stuff...sexy little bastard :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 02, 2004
I always love your chapters, even the ones without lemons. Amazing huh? I am glad that this is turning out to be an epic. I don't know what I will do when it's over. *Sigh* But anyway...I love the personalities of everyone. Piccolo and Vegeta's relationship is the greatest. Can't wait for more and by the way, you can't scare me away with a little Yuri. I love all of your lemons.
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From ANON - suisheu on April 02, 2004
**peeks out from between her fingers a tad** over? YAY! ^__________^ So, Goku can hear the demented voices plaguing Vegeta now, huh? Hmm... how is this going to affect them? And why was Piccolo asking Vegeta about mating and different bonds? He seems a bit interested in making sure him and Goku are together. Meh. I hope the Ouji's power comes back soon. At least improve, a little. Nicely done.
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From ANON - suisheu on March 26, 2004
ISH! *clamps hands over her eyes* uh, n-nice chappies... next, please! O.O!
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From ANON - Christina G. on March 26, 2004
Yeah! Chichi should marry Rezu! I'm not into yuri (yaoi is so myng) ng) but their relatiip iip is so right... it just seems more natural than Chichi with Goku.

And go Gay marriage! I so hope every single gay couple out there that wants to get married or have a civil ceramony are able to! And I just love how it pisses off the conservitives and tight ass republicans! Especially that guy that's ahead of the Chrin Con Coillition. He is evil! And can't forget ole' Bush! He hates it too! BOOOO! Go away you idiot!

Sorry, got off on a rant there! Love the fic! Sorry haven't reviewed until now.
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From ANON - Crystal on March 20, 2004
You gotta love a little immature humor between adults that horrifies their children, lol. Good chapter. Update soon!
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From ANON - Hecate18 on March 18, 2004
I really liked that chap, loads of bits in it made me laugh.
I really like what you've done with the characters, especially Chichi's you've portrayed a side of her I've never seen before... but it's good and convincing.^_^
I am looking foward to the next chap!!! (I'm sure it will be very 'interesting' ^_~)

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From ANON - Getarian on March 18, 2004
Hey another chapter! Nice quick updates :-)

I enjoyed seeing things from Gohan's POV, as well as the interactions between himself, ChiChi and Rezu. Gohan's struggle to come to terms with the relationship between his father and Vegeta is believable and kind of sweet :-)

I particularly loved this:

"Mom, I wouldn't have believed it if I hadn't seen it. They were in bed - sleeping together. They were�cuddling. Their tails were�" he tried to figure out how to describe it, and gave up, making twisting motions with his hand. "And Mom�they were�*purring*."

So damned adorable...I loved the picture these words created in my head...definitely want to see more of this :-)

The scene which Gohan found disturbing enough to not want to talk about, (of Goku reacting negatively to Dende, and being protective towards his slumbering (and still) unwell mate) was well done...The exploring emotions of Gohan are almost played against that of the reader, showing a completely different perspective from Gohan's POV, in that he, not knowing all the details, simply saw a part of his father which he never believed existed, one that horrified him and possibly has him questioning just how well he knows his beloved father...whilst for me (who as the reader knows all the details thus far disclosed) the scene was not only heartwarmingly wonderful but everything I would expect from Goku. :-)

The mother & son moments shared between ChiChi and Gohan was good to see, and I enjoyed Rezu's participation very much in the later stages, culminating in this:

"You know," he shouted at the kitchen, "For someone who doesn't like men, you have an unhealthy obsession with penises!"

LOL! Good stuff!

Looking forward to more G/V action :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on March 18, 2004
It's 2:30 in the morning and here I am. I just got in and what do I find...another chapter. That was a quick one. What's going on? I updated twice this week myself. I loved the family fluff. I guess I can sympathize with Gohan...He is the only straight one now huh? Poor kid. I ain't too fond of Videl myself. He should join the party...kick her to the crub. I can wait patiently for Dende to get his...I know that if you're writing it it's going to be good.

I can't believe it you reviewed my fic. I am soo honored. I know...OC's soo hard to swallow. I have a big problem with them myself...but Kalika...I couldn't escape her. I don't even know for sure what a Mary Sue is...She was just a character in my head that wouldn't leave. I love yaoi too but I also like this to be complicated and difficult...they are just so fun that way. Thanks for your review it really made my night.
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