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By : Pixelgoddess

From ANON - Crystal on March 16, 2004
Great chapter. I want Dende to shape up and make Vegeta better, lol. And Im hearin ya on the child molestors deserving to die. Sick bastards... Sorry, lol. Anyways, keep it up!
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From ANON - Getarian on March 16, 2004
Well, isn't Dende a vindictive little bugger? I wonder if Dende is still going to try to hold back in the next healing session? If he does then I hope that Piccolo tells Goku what is happening!

I really love the friendship that Piccolo and Vegeta have, I can really see this...I've never been able to get into P/V romances...they really squick me...but a good honest friendship is something I can easily picture :-)

Boy did Piccolo really tell Dende a thing or two...I really love the way this was portrayed and the things that Piccolo said to the judgmental litle snot was excellent stuff, I particularly loved the remarks about him (Dende) 'hiding in his room and watching things he has no business watching' and Dende being the real evil one, because Vegeta has been trying to change his ways, whilst Dende just sat back and let him suffer...good comment!

I really loved this line:

"Piccolo made a terrifying smile. "Funny how you are more afraid of someone who is supposed be good�""

Piccolo's smile and the implication that Dende is truly being nothing more than vindictive is good stuff - well done!

Love Piccolo's remarks regarding how Goku feels about Vegeta and how he would react if he found out. Yeah! Want to see some enraged Goku :-)

I could go on...let's just say I loved the whole scene :-)

Personally, I don't mind a little sap...I loved the whole Goku and Vegeta scene and I particularly loved it when Piccolo came in. I loved the friendly bantering between P&V and the whole 'boyfriend' comment, Vegeta's sleepy eyed response and Goku's happy grin, it just totally warmed my heart...I want more :-)

Regarding Dende...you don't have to kill him - but I would really let Goku know what he did.

Sorry, can't help with the art - I'm still at the stickmen stage, myself :-) I hope someone can do it though.

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From ANON - suisheu on March 15, 2004
YES! I KNEW it!! *points accusingly at Dende* same old story between them, eh? Wonderfully done. god, Vegeta was in so much pain, though. and I just love the relationship that teh Ouji and Piccolo have. It's too damn funny! Goku si happy. YAY! ^_^ Gonna make us be sad and cry next? But why? Ah, n/m. Good authors gotta keep their readers interested, right? *but in your case, I wouldn't care if the rest of the fic was a total flop, just so long as there was more*
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 15, 2004
I love the names of your chapter titles.
Dende is sooo mean *shakes fist at him* I hope Goku destroys him!
I also love the relationship between Piccolo and Vegeta that is so cute and funny how they interact w/ each other.
Goku is adorable as always especially when Piccolo says Sic your boyfriend on me... how cute! and how Vegeta said he can kick your ass green boy (rofl)!!! I loved it. The relationship you built between them is wonderful!
^.*
-MB-
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From ANON - Hecate18 on March 15, 2004
Sorry for the lateness. ^-^

I really did enjoy this chap, I love the way Piccolo and Vegeta communicate, its hilarius!
o I o I really hate Dende, I wasn't much of a fan with him even in the show. I really like what you've done with his character cause it fits in a way, Dende has never really trusted Vegeta, I think he's always held some resentfulness towards him from when he killed all those Nameks. U_U

Anyways I will be looking forward to the next chap!!! ^_^
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From ANON - jaygoose on March 14, 2004
I wake up and what do I find? An update of my most favoritest story! I loved it of course.

Now...Dende is a total ass...I am glad that Piccolo didn't blow him into the next dimension though, I think Goku deserves that pleasure. But sadly, that would be the end of the Dragonballs though. Wierd, I kinda tolerated Dende on the show, but you are making me question things a little more. How could he think that Vegeta is evil after all the Prince has done? *Sigh*

I am sure that you will think of a suitable punishment for the little green bastard...I have faith in you.

In closing, great chap, death to Dende and always remember...crying is gfor for the soul...so go with your gut...make me weep. ;)
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From ANON - macha on March 14, 2004
Yeah! I applaude your take (or is it just Piccolo's) on the Kias.

At the end of tast ast chapter, I had no idea what Piccolo was screaming a Dende about, you left it as a total surprise to me. I was thinking, 'What, Piccolo thinks that Dende made him Gay?' I was way off.

And I also like how you wrote Dende. I may not be in total agreement with it, but a young man suddenly given powers of a wit without any formal training, could certainly become an egotisical monster. What was that Piccolo said, Your job is to watch over earth, not judge.....sitting in that room watching things that are none of your business.

As far as your author's notes. I like the cuddley sayians. 'sigh'

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From Spacefille on March 14, 2004
It cut me off. Sorry. Okay more - I also enjoy greatly Piccolo and Vegeta's banter... you write it extremely well.

I'm addicted to the story... I really want to know what happens next. Promise me you won't go off and you know, pass away or something before you get it done like Alithiel... this fic is up there with hers in being good and angsty and I could bare to have another never to be finished epic floating around. O.o Also I might just take you up on that fanart thing... I like that pose. It may have to wait until after midterms though. -_-; Er... that's about it off hand... 'til next time! *waves cheerfully*
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From Spacefille on March 14, 2004
Aww. I like Dende, so I hope you don't kill him. Though I have to admit I liked the young Dende back on Namek more than his older self. *blinks*

Anyway, in to the real review... I like this fic. Obviously. I'm enjoying it emencely, even though I admit I skimmed over the yuri because it does nothing for me. :) Never fear, no protests from me about you having it, I know enough to skim over stuff I don't personally like but enjoy something overall. This fic made me cry! Back in chapter 14 or whatever I actually cried when Vegeta admitted to Kakarott what Radditz was too him. < als also enjoy greatly Piccolo and Vegeta's banter... you write it extremely well.

I'm addicted to the story... I really want to know what happens next. Promise me you won't go off and you know, pass away or something before you get it done like Alithiel... this fic is up there with hers in being good and angsty and I could bare to have another never to be finished epic floating around. O.o Also I might just take you up on that rt trt thing... I like that pose. It may have to wait until after midterms though. -_-; Er... that's about it off hand... 'til next time! *waves cheerfully*
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From ANON - Hecate18 on March 09, 2004
Ack! I'm reviewing late, I have only just read the latest chap. I have been looking forward to reading chap 20.

Another cliffhanger ::Grinds teeth:: Well if I could wait for chap 20, I'm sure I can wait for 21 ^_^
I truely love this fic... Once I start reading I can't stop!

I am looking forward to the next chap!!! ^-^
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From ANON - ~Evil on March 07, 2004
What did that nasty little namek do to my prince??? update soon please, I wanna know!!!

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From ANON - Crystal on March 06, 2004
o0o... A cliffhanger... Update soon!!!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 06, 2004
Great chappie!!!! *scared* Uh..why is Piccolo so mad at Dende??? What did he to to the Ouji??? Gosh, I need to know! I can't wait until the next update. Goku is so sweet and caring...making sure his Prince gets healed...*sighs* Awesome chapter, I'm sad it's over, and now I must wait again, but it's worth the wait.
p.s. now I am going to be thinking what could Dende have done to make Piccolo so upset...it's stuck in my brain! Great cliffy!
^.*
-MB-
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From ANON - jaygoose on March 06, 2004
Yaaaaaaaay! An update. Everytime I think things can't get any better (or worse in this case). They do. I did't know how the hell they were gonna get out of that last fiasco and now this. What the hell is Piccolo so pissed at Dende about? *Sigh* I guess I'll just have to wait til next time. I love this fic. You are great at building things up. I just know the finale (not to mention the next chapter)is going to be something. But I am getting ahead of myself. I'm not ready for the end yet anyway. Great fic. ;)
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From ANON - Getarian on March 06, 2004
oooh, this is getting good...no wait, it is already good...it just keeps on getting better and better. I am dying to know what all that was about with Dende. It seems to me that he's not putting the same effort into healing Vegeta as he is for Goku. If that's the case, then Piccolo's anger is going to be nothing compared to Goku's. What it it is though, you've got me completely and utterly hooked!

Please, please, don't let Vegeta's fear in regards to Trunks ever be realised...I couldn't handle that.

This is one very compelling story!

Looking forward to the next chapter :-)
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