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From ANON - MoonGoddess06 on May 11, 2004
Hey whats up this story is really tight!!! i just cantp rep reading, but i do get mad when there are no more chapters to read, i have an idea of what the voice might be, i think since when vegeta was with freiza that they must have put something in his head to bond him and freiza, but i dont know if thats right it seems logical to me, oh and i think u should put vegeta and goku through some more just toe the the story more interesting, well g2g hope i helped, oh and please hurry with the next chapter cause im itching to find out whappenppens next.
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From ANON - Sarkywoman on May 11, 2004
"That would have given Krillin a heart attack". I fail to see the problem with that, personally.
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From ANON - Getarian on May 09, 2004
Wow! Quick update. Nice. :-)

I truly loved the beginning, where Goku was seeing to Vegeta's needs... so tender and loving. I'm a sucker for this sort of thing. :-)

This was upsetting:

"You didn't do this, Kakarott. It is an old injury - Zarbon did it�I've had it since I was a child."

So Vegeta has been experiencing all sorts of God knows what since he was a child? No wonder his mind is so messed I' I'm glad that he's finally beginning to open up to Goku, this can only help with the healing process, although I do worry that he may have moments of regret about sharing.

I like how Vegeta tried to gloss over the need to go to Dende to see if he could help, trying not to cause any trouble, and then telling Goku to let it go, when Goku realised that there was more than Vegeta was telling. I love how Vegeta cares enough about Goku to not want him to do something that he would, no doubt, eventually regret doing. Love this:

"Goku would have been the one trying to calm him down. Now their roles were reversed - and he wanted to rip the little Namek into tiny shreds."
""NO," Vegeta commanded."
"But�"
"...I don't want you to know the guilt of having his blood on your hands."

I really like the way that the two Saiyans seem to be 'bleeding' into each other, Goku is experiencing more of his Saiyan instincts, and Vegeta is appreciating those non-Saiyan aspects of Goku that make up who he is. I really like how both men are pondering on their recent thoughts, their slight surprise at themselves, and their desire to please their mate. Liked this:

"...not changing who he was�Kakarott would not want him to do that - but considering how his actions would affect his companion."

I love that Vegeta is recognising this side of a relationship. No more acting purely on impulse, giving himself time to consider things before he reacts. I imagine that Vegeta's relationship with Goku would be something that Dende should be very grateful for.

"...It wasn't logical, he knew, but maybe if he didn't let them know how much he treasured them they would be safe."

This is so sad. It probably explains much of why Vegeta can't be sure what love truly is at this point. I long for the day when he discovers that what he feels for Goku is indeed, love.

"...but he wasn't going to let the idiot voice shove him where he wasn't prepared to go yet. He was content now just having Kakarott as his companion."

Good! I'm glad that Vegeta understands at least this about the voice, it's out to cause trouble for him. I'm wondering why the voice is now insisting that what Vegeta feels for Goku is , an, and that he should acknowledge it, if only to himself? Sound to me very much like the voice is aware of just how much Vegeta can handle or acknowlege to himself, and it's trying to cause a rift in his relationship with Goku. This has me wondering just how effective the voice is with Goku (and Piccolo) in Vegeta's life. I know that I'm still going around in circles, when it comes to pinpointing whehe vhe voice is coming from, but I'm starting to suspect that it actually runs a little deeper than Freiza.

Loved the little talk betweeku aku and Vegeta about Radditz and his hair. Made me smile. :-)

Loved the insight into some of Radditz's personality, totally loved how Vegeta thought quick on his feet, when he saw that Radditz had killed two of the guards, and he covered for him knowing that it would not mean death for him, as it would for Radditz, although the pain of the punishment was a definite sign of his love for Goku's brother. I love the way you describe these moments between Radditz and Vegeta, they're so very moving.

Still trying to decide how I feel about this:

"...Who knows? Maybe his soul is in your youngest. He is close to Trunks. Bardock's spawn always seem to have extreme loyalty to their prince.""

In some ways, I really like the idea of Radditz being re-born as Goten as this allows him to remain a Saiyan, and in close contact with his Prince, but in other ways, I just feel so sad that ultimately Radditz is 'lost' to the Prince. Either way, I found this to be very moving... just wasn't sure what I was more choked up over.

"...Apparently it was decided they deserved punishment just because they made the mistake of being born Saiyan."

I hate this sort of judgement, it's the same as when Vegeta was sent to hell... alright, maybe he still had things to answer for, but considering that he sacrificed himself for those that he loved, in an attempt to save the planet they lived on, warrants more than a 'go straight to hell' card... Looks like Dende is not the only judgemental 'higher being' around.

"Vegeta chuckled and threaded his fingers through Kakarott's hair. "Get me off that damned pedestal, Kakarott."

LOL! Love that Kakarot thinks so highly of his Prince, and love that although Vegeta seems pleased by this, he's not going to have Goku suddenly thinking of him as a saint, he still has a side to him that is not so nice, things he does have to answer for, but hopefully, that particular side to him is a thing of the past.

Interested in the end bit, where Vegeta was talking about how Goku's side of the bond was affecting him. This bit is somewhat intriguing:

""I'll bet I find it easier than you do learning to resist the urge to kill everything that pisses you off," Vegeta said with a smirk."

I'm woing ing if this is Vegeta's way of saying that Goku's Saiyan nature is going to increase due to the bond.

I really liked this chapter, and am looking forward to the next. :-)

In response to your response to me:

"...What do you think? Should I have their behaviors/values stay mixed up? Or should they slowly revert to normal? (I have my own ideas, but I'd like to know what people think.)"

Alot would depend on where you plan on taking the characters within the plot of the story. However; just as a general opinion, I definitely like ide idea of small aspects of each others personality/character traits, slowly blending with their own established personalities, things that would not seem so alien to them upon closer inspection.

"Radditz is/was a bit of a hentai "

Yes! I knew it. :-)

Thanks for explaining about that bond thing with Goku and Vegeta. I guessed that he must have been able to still feel him, otherwise it wouldn't have been that great a moment for him, but yeah, I wasn't all that sure nonetheless, so thanks for the confirmation. :-)

"I always see Goku as very protective of his prince, and if Piccolo had come one step closer at that moment there would have been trouble."

*evil grin* Just the way I like him. :-)

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From ANON - suisheu on May 09, 2004
I've never pictured Vegeta as one who would take the fall for someone else's error. It's an interesting concept. I feel bad for all those poor saiyajin children, going to hell just because they were born. the gods should be fired! Goku and the ouji are melding together. It's almost like parts of their personalities have switched places. There's something I want to say about the voice, but it doesn't quite sound right when I try to put it into word, so perhaps I'll figure out a way to ask next time. *sits down and waits for next chappie*
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From ANON - ~Evil on May 09, 2004
Indeed very quick! NiI caI can totally imagine his face when you told him that you wanted to finish the kiss:D! Anyway, I like the way they switched personality, think it's kinda cute. I think it's nice to suprise a few of their 'friends' and than change back to their own. Well, Ie Goe Goku stays a little possesive, it fits him and I think Veggie really needs it to feel Goku really loves him and is prepared to go all the way for him. I am also very intrested in why Vegeta is always uke, I saw in a reply to somebody's review there was a reason. I hope the reason comes out soon. I really really want to know why. No complaints by the way 'couse I like Vegeta best as uke. I'm going to shut up now. One more thing, I really like you replying to your reviewers, makes me feel wanted (kinda pathetic, I know) so I keep reviewing when mostly I review once to let the author know I apriciate the story and than only read. But it's also because this is one of the best fic's I've ever read. Now I am going to shut up! *zips mouth*
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From ANON - macha on May 09, 2004
You write so well! I liked the little bit of hisotry Vegeta shared about Radditz and himself.

I am also happy he stopped Goku from doing anything the Dende. Not that Dende is my favorit character, but I think Goku would have been upset after all was said and done. (Not to mention the dragonball thing)

I think a bathroom mout out of the material in the GR is a great idea!

Thanks for the warning for upcoming chapters. I still can't wait to read them.
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From ANON - suisheu on May 06, 2004
OMG, I so can't stop laught my ass off! Yeesh! That's so damn perfect! *sorry it too a bit longer to review... no excuse for that* ^____^ Piccolo always has to be there to ruin a moment or join in on something he shouldn't. Heh. and, how did chichi get there so fast? I'm a little confused. That mind bond causes more trouble than it should! Will Vegeta teach Goku how to control his side? And if Vegeta keeps thinking about raditz, especially during their little, er, "sessions" do you think it might cause a bit of trouble between the two 'companions'? aw, darn. **stubborly seats herself again and waits for next chappie** if the plot can't be revealed, the I shall keep waiting for it to come out of hiding! *I just know Frieza's gonna ruin everything! But it's nice to have a period that's not so focused on the voice. It seems to be lessening some of its command.*
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From Shan on May 06, 2004
Just an odd thought - if Goku and Vegeta had sex like that near Krillins house, they could probably knock his house down. How funny would that be?
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From ANON - Getarian on May 06, 2004
Ah, interesting how the voice has been affecting Goku. So, Goku has been worried that Vegeta is not necessarily with him for all the right reasons. His fear that maybe Vegeta is with him only to prove the voice wrong, or because he eveseves that he's a substitute for Radditz is really sad. These two have come such a long way in a short time, and it's a shame that every time they seem to cross one hurdle, they're immediately faced with another.

I do like how the roles have been reversed in this chapter though, with Goku being the one who is feeling insecure and unsure, and it's Vegeta who is being the strong one, assuring his companion, that it is he whom he chose and loves.

I am pleased that Goku's worries were resolved quickly with Vegeta's help, and I loved how they continued on with their foreplay without missing a beat...smooth. :-)

Goku's touch of anger and possessiveness was a real treat, when he picked up Piccolo's scent on Vegeta from their sparring. I loved this:

"*Now* you act Saiyan?" he said with a smirk. "Alright Kakarott, we will fix this."

*Chuckle* Really love this side of Goku, and totally loved Vegeta's remedy. :-)

That bonding thing, where the two almost became one sounded pretty intense. I'm not surprised that Radditz figured out a way to use the pack bond for sex :-) and the idea of Vegeta using it for Kakarot was really something special, but I'm curious as to how Kakarot managed to do whatever it was he did, to make the whole experience so amazing for them. Although, judging by his reaction...

""Vegeta? What�?" Kakarott panted."

... I don't thnk he know's what he did either... but it was definitely intense. :-)

Oh wow, I just loved this:
"There was a moment when he was staring into midnight eyes, and he knew he would never doubt his prince again."

Ah, this just choked me up. Beautiful. Such love. :-)

This is what I have been waiting for...
"Vegeta smirked. He sensed the change in Kakarott, and felt the last link in this strange bond of theirs solidify. They belonged to each other."

...I mean, I knew that thelonglonged together, everyone knew... but they had their little doubts, and now, no more doubts... I love this. :-)

I loved how Vegeta showed Kakarot that his power was back. It was a wonderful moment, and I could feel his pleasure and pride in this achievement as he showed off for his companion, the very one who had helped him regain himself. :-)

Amazing lemon... I loved it, but there was one area that pulled me back briefly, and that was the way that Goku felt so immersed in Vegeta and vice versa, that he felt that he was thrusting into himself... that sounded a little strange to me... I'm wondering if the effect was still such that he could still feel that he was with Vegeta? But other than that uncertainty, I loved the lemon, I just love the way they are with each other, it's always very good between these two. :-)

Loved this:
""Hey Vegeta," came Kakarott's tired voice."
""Hn," he mumbled, nuzzling the heat of Kakarott's neck."
"I think we killed the bathroom."

LOL! Loved the humour, and I really loved the image. :-)

Cracked up at Piccolo's interruption:
""Remodeling?" came a voice from the hole they had blasted in the wall."

Loved Goku's reaction to his presence. :-)

Actually loved the whole scene, it's impossible to highlight bits. It was all hilarious, although I don't think Goku and Vegeta would agree with this, but it's Piccolo and ChiChi and they're good friends, so any teasing would be done in good fun. Loved the image of Vegeta sitting on Goku's lap (I'm imagining his arms around Goku's neck and pressed close) loved also the way you described Goku's tail as thrashing about, whilst his growls get louder... I got the whole picture playing out nicely in my head... and I'm seeing a very protective Goku here, and I love it. :-)

Totally loved this:

"Vegeta moaned as Kakarott chose that moment to grin and ascend again, stretching him."
"Bastard," he groaned. "Bedroom. Now."

Very hot! :-)

Loved this chapter and looking forward to the next one. :-)

In response to your responses to me:

"Hope you like this chapter"

Oh I did. Very much. :-)

"...I seriously considered giving Chichi a camera when she showed up, but Goku would have known how much it bothered Vegeta and blown it up - and then things would have skewed off in too many weird directions."

LOL! Yeah definitely. :-) I can't see Vegeta enjoying that becoming a 'Kodak moment' :-D ...and I really love that you have Goku so protective of Vegeta's feelings. :-)

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From ANON - Crystal on May 05, 2004
Guess whos comp is broken now? Mine! yes! Im reading this at my friends house. ironic, eh? lol. well, it was a great chapter, keep it up!
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From ANON - Kurai on May 05, 2004
Once agian greaqt. I do not think this story can get any better. Just don't take so long next time, so getting any comments are devart for the story?????
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From ANON - jaygoose on May 05, 2004
Oh my goodness...that had to be extremely embarassing. Poor Piccolo...I think he took it well though. ChiChi...hum... I wonder what question that was...I have some ideas though...Vegeta and Goku shouldn't feel too bad though, in most fics Saiyan bathrooms don't fair to well anyway.
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From Kira on May 05, 2004
Oh geez *fits of laughter* can't breathe...*more involuntary laughter* help me..need oxygen...
I love it. Not one, but two people to walk in on Vegeta and Goku. *takes moment to attempt to regain composure* Poor Vegeta...
Never a dull moment is there? You have such an awesome sense of humor. Keep it coming!

I still like the idea of a Piccolo and Vegeta double team...hey if not on Yamcha then how about Krillin?

Ok that all nighter I pulled s taking it's toll on me. I go sleepy bye now.

~Kira~
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From ANON - ~Evil on May 05, 2004
Well, it was worth waiting for is all I can say. Really cool that mind sex. Hope the next chappy will be there sooner, but if its gonna be as good as this, i'll be prepaired to wait:).
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From ANON - XxNeko_YoukaixX on May 05, 2004
instead of wet as ur chap ya ahould have just named in sex ^^ but yeah love the chap it was nice to have at least one chap where Vegeta was havin' *fun* & didn't have the voice buggin' him. but yeah i like the enddin' to this chap u had me laughin' for a good 15 minutes about how the two walked in on Goku & Vegeta. hehe can't wai see see what happans in the next chap & is Krillian gonna die or is he gonna be just laughed out of the fic? whatever it is make him in tears i 'cause he should be for bein' such an ass to them ^^ hehe krillian gonna die! ^^ or whatever but yeah thats really the only question i have right but never fear i will be back for more!! MUHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!! (note i'm hyper right now)
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