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Reviews for My Suru Lover 2: Never Ending

By : silveryaoi

From ANON - MAjin Bulma on April 22, 2004
o.o -stares- >.> U CANT TAKE DOWN A FIC JUST CAUSE OF IDIOT ASS POEPLE THAT FLAME U >__< SCREW THEM! ITS UR FIC AND OTHER APPRECIATE IT AND LIKE TO READ IT CAUSE ITS INTERSTING AND ENJOYABLE. AND IF THOSE FUCKHEADS DONT LIKE IT, THEN THEY CANN JUST PISS OFF AND SHUT THE HELL UP CAUSE NO ONE IS FORCING THEM TO READ IT, SO THEY HAVE NO RIGHT TO GO FLMAFLMAE U CAUSE THEY ARE JUST STUPID AND RETARDED AND HAVE NOTHIGN ELSE BETTER TO DO THAN HARASS GOOD AUTHORS. >_< stupid idiot poeple. O_O; WHY I OUGHTA,, -SHAKES A FIST >_< - O_o; man. Cmon if they are saying shit to u then just say shit abck to them =) MWHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAH o_o >.> O_O;

-reads this on FF.net- o.o;

^______^; pats her head- O_o; o_O; BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
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From ANON - Getarian on April 04, 2004
First of all, I'd like to respond to this:

"I finally got the two names that I searched for! Thanks SaiyanPrincess and Getarian!"

Sorry, that I didn't answer your request to contact you about the girls names in the previous chapter, but I honestly thought that you were talking about people who had personally e-mailed you, and so I didn't realise that you meant me, otherwise I would have definitely responded.

I was also pleased to see that you used the name, Takara, for one of the Suru's...big smiles. :-)
In response to your thanks...you're very welcome :-)

On to the review:

Ah Gods...the opening passage was so heartwrenching...for Goku to see his mate and cubs being taken away and not be able to stop it, must have been horrifying for him, and I can almost picture how baffling and frightening this must all be for Vegeta :-(

�Look at me, pet.�

I really loathe Freiza and I hate it when he calls people "pet" I can't wait for Goku to break free and destroy his maniacal arse.

"Not one, not twice but three times had this white lizard separated him from his lover. Maybe not now, but soon the ice Lord would lie dead in front of him."

Yes! Keep strong Goku.

Okay, definitely creeped out by Radditz and BrollHateHate the fact that they seem to be Freiza's playthings...and I don't like the idea that they consider Goku a toy, and they need to prepare for him and vice versa...definitely getting a bad feeling about this.

Yes! Very happy that Bulma is the 'doctor' ...I was a bit concerned over the fact that the word had quotation marks...you had me worried for a moment :-)

I don't know if Bulma is going to be able to help Goku, but I feel a whole lot better knowing that she is there. I was so happy that she was able to contact Piccolo and thereby allow Goku to talk with Vegeta...

"The little Suru looked so tired and broken, but that all vanished when he saw Goku. �Kakarott!� he asked. The light in the Suru�s eyes got brighter as he looked at his mate..."

Really loved this! Very happy that Goku was able to reassure his mate...I hope that Bulma's plan is a good one.

Really love this story...you are a very creative writer :-)

Lng fng forward to the next chapter.
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From ANON - Hecate18 on April 02, 2004
Yay! update.
It's really horrible that Goku and Vegeta have separated but it's ok now that Piccolo has bought Vegeta. But now I'm really worried for Goku, I wonder what Frieza's gonna do to him, at least he's got Bulma to help. ^_^

Looking forward to the next chap! ^-^
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From ANON - Getarian on March 13, 2004
I love how Vegeta and Goku are with each other. Even stuck in that cell, where everything seems so grim, they are relaxed in each others company...so loving and tender.

You have expressed the near hopelessness of their situation beautifully in the quiet conversation, the snuggling close, the naming of their young and Vegeta's heartfelt words:

"I just want to go back,"

His fear is obvious, but I love how he has total faith in his mate :-)

Vegeta and Goku's reactions to being in the market place and also to seeing Frieza again were very well written... I could feel their fear, their horror, a mingling sense of uncertainty touched against a sense of unreality.

I was pleased to see Goku stand up to Frieza, appreciated his fear for his mate, but was worried that his attack didn't seem to phase Frieza...ki restraints?

Poor Vegeta...to be so close to his cubs, but to be unable to hold them and comfort them and then to be taunted by Radditz in regards to his mate...I must confess, I was pleased to see that Radditz and Brolli are back but I can't help but wonder what Radditz plans to do with Goku though, I am starting to get very worried for his well being.

I hate to think of Goku and Vegeta being separated, but at least their cubs are still with Vegeta.

I hope the green guy is who I think it is, and if it is, I hope that they can rescue Goku.

Looking forward to the next chapter :-)
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From ANON - Getarian on March 01, 2004
Okay, like I said, I'm useless with thinking up names so I finally got the idea to look up names and meanings on the net - I have no idea if these are 100% accurate, I just have to trust what they say. I found a site with Japanese names & their meanings - http://www.babychatter.com/japaneseboysnames.html - Anyway, feel free to check it out yourself if you don't like my offerings :-)

I came across the names: Saburo and Shiro, meaning, 'Third born son' and 'Fourth born son' respectively. I know that technically they are the 4th and 5th born son, but well, living, they are 3rd and 4th.

For the little lady, I like: Takara, meaning, 'Treasure' Considering females are rare, it seemed appropriate.

Anyway, there are plenty of choices if mine don't sit well - and as they're your kiddies, you have to enjoy the feel of the names, so if my ideas don't sit well, I promise you that I will not be offended :-)

Here's hoping that your story continues - I love it :-)
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From ANON - Kirikou-chan on February 25, 2004
Hiya,
me can't believe it!!

Me loved this story ^__^
*squeels* me so happy with sequel ^^

And Saya may not be orriginal, but it is correct, in japanese jin means something like 'people of' meaning saiyajin means people of saiya.

And you need names?
Ummm you could use Yasai for the girl (it means vegetable, since vegeta is one of the parents).
And Okome, it's something like gohan, only gohan means 'boiled' rice and okome means 'non-boiled rice'.

Dunno, if I've been much help with the names and all, but if ya need more help feel free to ask ^^

greetz k-chan
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From ANON - Getarian on February 24, 2004
Oh Pooh, I just read my review to you and realise that I didn't do a very good job of proof-reading. Where I wrote:

"maybe, people just aren't reviewing as much because there is nothing wrong with this story."

I realise I should have placed a comma just after the word 'much' because it now reads in a different manner. I didn't mean to imply that people only review if there are problems with a story. I just meant to say that: (a) Maybe people aren't reviewing. and (b) T is is nothing wrong with this story.

I'll take better care in future reviews.
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From ANON - Getarian on February 24, 2004
I'm sorry if this fic doesn't seem to be as popular as the original, I wasn't around for the unfolding of the original, I only looked it up when I came across this one and realised that this was a sequel. I loved it and I love the way that this one is coming along as well...maybe, people just aren't reviewing as much because there is nothing wrong with this story. Anyway, thank-you for continuing, I for one, really appreciate it. :-)

Well Goku, certainly is going to have his work cut out now...what a mess. I hope he doesn't lose face with his people for, seemingly, giving up.

I have my fingers crossed for who the two familiar faces are...I'm hoping for Radditz and Brolli...but, whoever they are...this is definitely getting interesting.
mmm,mmm, cubs names: Yeah, I'm not very good at picking names either...I don't even have a naming book, which would have meanings and everything. I'll give it some thought though, and see if I can come up with some, but hopefully, others will have some ideas...fingers crossed :-)

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From ANON - Getarian on February 17, 2004
...And to think that I almost didn't read this because of the summary, I was annoyed that Goku somehow got to be the leader of the Saiya-jins, but having read your story...I love it! I am so glad that my curiosity got the better of me :-)

I love the idea of the Saiya-jin males and the Saiya-jin male suru's, for me though, it actually would have been br ifr if females weren't a part of the equation...the suru's would make more sense.

I'm a HUGE Vegeta fan, and initially was not thrilled with the idea of Yaoi, but having read "Chains of Affection" by Syldana - I became besotted with the idea...although, ironically enough, my preference is for Vegeta to be Uke...I love him having a super protective and possessive mate...so, I absolutely love this story :-)

I think what I love most of all, is the idea that Goku sort of raised Vegeta from a cub and Vegeta grew up seeing Goku as his mate...so bloody adorable. I have absolutely no problem with the OOC aspect of these fics, they are AU after all.

I was sorry about the Radditz scenes...My favourite yaoi pairing is V&R, but I also love Vegeta and Kakarot/Goku.

I hope that Kakarot can get to Vegeta before he is hauled away by Cooler...I hate the idea of the ice-jins touching the Prince.
...although, I have no problem with a little V&R action or even V&Br...Yup, I definitely have a Saiya-jinxSaiya-jin thing. ;-)

Can't wait for your next chapter...sorry for not reviewing before, but I am still pretty new to the yaoi fics...I use to only search for V&B stories...but they got so damn booooring...'the mystery three years' and the f***ing Cell games.

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From ANON - Hecate18 on February 13, 2004
Oh that was an evil cliffhanger!!!!
I was hanging on the edge of my seat reading that, can't wait till nextnext chap! ^_^
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From ANON - Deb >^..^< . on February 02, 0000
Chapter 18... I am sitting here trying not to cry:( I am feeling so badly for Hermione & Severus!!! I want so much for Severus to be happy & I want Hermione to find out the truth so she can know who she really has fallen for!!! (I know she can't find out yet, it's just so sad for them!!!)

I hope that Hermione will think about the cryptic message from Minerva!!! If nothing else, I hope that she will talk to her about how she feels so that Minerva will be able to reassure Severus that what he feels is returned to a degree!!!

Will Severus be taking Ron's advice & write the letter to Hermione? I hope he does & soon!!!

Til chapter 19, Deb >^..^
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From ANON - suisheu on January 20, 2004
Phew! That was exciting! More lil' cubs for Vegeta! ^_^ I really hope Goku keeps them from taking his mate again. God knows what frieza'll do to him. But why didn't he come himself? I mean, why send his brother instead of coming in person?
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From Hecate on January 19, 2004
OMG!!! i hope Goku turns up quick!
Cooler had to show up just when Vegeta was going into labour, and Vegeta said he wanted to take care of these cubs better.
Pleasssssse update soon ^_^
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From Pixelgoddess on January 11, 2004
Not a bad start, although I have to admit I am not a big fan of super-passive Vegeta. I keep visualizing your Saiyans as advanced monkeys. That said, you do have some interesting typos. I actually liked when you used squeal instead of sequel, becaus sor sort of made sense either way (if you had said *wheee* after, then squeal would have been right). The other one that really stood out is using borrow instead of burrow.
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From ANON - Hecate18 on January 10, 2004
Yey!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm soooooooooooooo glad there's a SEQUEL ^_^
I really enjoyed the first one and i just can't wait to see whapphappens in this one (you'veeadyeady got me hooked)
Looking forward to the next chap!
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