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Reviews for The History of Kalika

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From ANON - Ginia on May 02, 2004
Since I am useless when it comes to critiques and practical feedback I'll stick with what I'm good at; simply telling you that this is an entertaining ficcy and I'm looking forward to more - SOON!
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From ANON - Ginia on May 02, 2004
Since I am useless when it comes to critiques and practical feedback I'll stick with what I'm good at; simply telling you that this is an entertaining ficcy and I'm looking forward to more - SOON!
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From ANON - CrazyGurl on May 01, 2004
Oh my gosh,
I didn'tiew iew the chapter b4 this one. I am so sorry. I must have been busy. I have been gone for a while.
I am very glad that you did update though. This is really getting very good, not that it wasn't before. But it looks as if my dream for Gohan and Kalika to be a couple just might come true. Videl made me so angry, but I guess that was the point. I think Kalika can treat him better anyway. And poor Goku he is being tortured by his dreams although he seems to like the torture a lot. I see torture is a running theme for this fic, because I have been wondering, well me and MB have been wondering when the torture of Goku and Vegeta not having sex will be over. When that happens I know we will all breathe (since we are holding are breaths now) and fa Tha That is going to be so good. I can't wait to see more of Radditz. ve hve him. And even Gohan, it's true this Gohan is very likeable and loveable.And Chichi lGokuGoku. I wonder what he said to her or did. I can't wait to find that out.
The spiky head of the Saiyan Prince peeped out into the hall and he sniffed the air experimentally. --aww thats so cute...I can just picture his gorgeous head popping...er...I'm not going to finish that sentence...it was begining to sorathrather strange. I'll just end it by saying Vegeta is very hot!==I laughed very hard when I read that review, she is such a hentai.
This ficcie is so good and you write such long chapters, thank you for doing that!
You better update soon or else I will send you 1000 e-mails! And let me tell you your inbox will not like that one bit!

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From ANON - macha on May 01, 2004
Yah, you'd better update sooner. How could you make us wait soooooooooooo long?

Okay, seriously, these chapters are just as good regaurdless of the time frame invovled. I still love this story. When I saw that you had updated, I was like, YEAH!

Are Kakarott and Vegeta going to get together soon? I have a feeling that Chi Chi packing her bags is heading the story in that general direction.

I am glad both Kalika and Vegeta know that it is 'just fucking'.

I feel sorry for Gohan, but there is always a reason for these kinds of things to happen, isn't there? Well, okay, as far as fan fictions ths there is, I do believe it's called 'plot'.

I don't know which I want to see more first, more of the plot with the androids and Radditz, or a Goku x Vegeta lemon. Either way, this is a great story.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 01, 2004
YAY!!! UPDATE!!!!! *does flips*

The Prince would be standing there just radiating enough heat to be his own sun.--^.^ Oh wow, I like that..alot.

�Hey!� The taller Saiyan pouted. �What about me!�--aww poor Goku...and damn that dream!!! -_- damn it to seven hells and back!!!!! Goku needs the real thing!!!!

That man could be a fucking annoying little shit sometimes.--O_O what! How dare she!?!?! He is never annoying! EVER! ^__^

She�d even worn one of her favorites in celebration of the rare occasion: �PARENTAL ADVISORY: EXPLICT CONTENT�. --lmao, ok she is forgiven for wearing this shirt, I likes it very much!

�Uh�� She sounded so retarded purring and talking at the same time. �Thanks.� --rofl, oh gods that does sound highly strange.

The spiky head of the Saiyan Prince peeped out into the hall and he sniffed the air experimentally. --aww thats so cute...I can just picture his gorgeous head popping...er...I'm not going to finish that sentence...it was begining to sound rather strange. I'll just end it bying ing Vegeta is very hot!

Well�maybe it wasn�t all that romantic but she didn�t look like she was planning a fundraiser to him.--LoL, ok I have to admit. I really like your Gohan. I like how you write him and ...*gulps* I actually feel sorry for the dude. That is a first.

His hair was flickering from black to gold and eye eyes had already changed to a more menacing teal color. --o_O oh *gasp* all the ppl around there must think he is crazy!?!? hehe..a guy with flickering haiI woI would run away, unless it was Vegeta of course...I would gladly die if it meant Vegeta would touch me.

�This is why! This is exactly why I turned to someone else. You�re nothing but an animal Gohan! You�re disgusting! All you ever want to do is fight. You never think to solve anything with something other than your fists. And you�ve turned my daughter into a monster just like you!� --*is blown away beyond reason* I really hater her now.*shakes fist atel* el* what a bitch!!! How could she even say things like that?! How stupid of her..so is he animal for wanting to save the world..is he disgusting for killing Cell! AH! She made me so mad!!!!

But�He had given up everything for her and this is how she repaid him. --I am now even more disgusted with Videl..he gave up everything. Wh. Wh. What more did she want? Was she actually not expec him him to get angry..he is saiyajin..and even if he wasn't he would still have every right to be angry!

Well, he was fixing a rather large sandwich, but he did that all the time, definitely no reason for him to be prancing around her kitchen humming. --ROFL...@_@ oh gosh..my sides hurt.

I�ve finally done it�I finally left Goku!� --*turns on party music, pops popcorn, and throws streamers* ABOUT DAMN TIME...but why did she decide to leave him? *throws some confetti as I wait for the answer and hands a piece of cake to Goten and Trunks*

�So�� The raven-haired girl continued. �Why do we keep doing this when it is ridiculously obvious that you�care�for Kakarot?� --damn it...he again..managed to get out of not answering a question like this!!! He always finds a way to squirm out of it! *shakes fist really hard and very seriously at Vegeta* He better own up to the fact the he is in utter and complete love with Kakarott!

Anywho..ahh another wonderful chapter. And you know what it was worth the wait. All of your chaps are. And as always exceptionally written. I say that b/c I find that I enjoy every single one of your characters...they all make me feel different emotions and you write all of their personalities well. And I really like Gohan a lot in this fic! It's almost frightening... I really really can't wait for the update!

^.*

-MB-

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From ANON - Webtester01 on April 30, 2004
Excelent story!

Goku will be in for a surprise when he gets home. And why did Chichi leave him?

Goten will be slightly uncomfortable with his arouaround, since he has a relationship with Trunks.

Keep up the good work!

Also please check out my story, Ancient History: The Forgotten Past of the Saiyans, here on AFF.NET when you get the chance.
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From CardDragonBall on April 30, 2004
*clutches side, tries to breathe. Fails and promptly dies. * Oh, Goodness. When poor Goku's dream got interrupted by a...a...'girl!' and then he wakes up and says "Chi!" And then she shows up at Capsule corp with all those bags.

And then Trunks prancing around the kitchen. And Vegeta throwing Kalika over his shoulder. (Still depressed that he hasn't jumped Goku yet, but I'm patient. Really. Sort of. A little. Why hasn't he jumped Goku yet?!)

Poor Kalika. (Have no sympathy for the girl that is interrupting Goku's dream.)

*sighs * Now keep writing that next chapter, dear, and I won't have to cuss at you. Or nag you. Or any of those unpleasant things.

(Also, Aff.net thisthis chapter. I read 13 and reviewed it and when I tried to get to this chapter (which was THERE I swear it was) it was not there anymore. *pout * So I had to go write MLS (wherein, yes, there is Goten. And yes, he does have very cool powers.) And then wah-lah, when I came back, the chapter was here. Very good thing, too, because I really liked it.)
~Card!~

Oh!~ Almost forgot. Poor Gohan. *pets him *
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From CardDragonBall on April 30, 2004
AND THE CROWD GOES WILD! WHooooo-hooooo!!! Oh, so many things that I loved about this chapter. So many. *sighs * The fighting. Goku. Vegeta. 'Kaki'

Ah. Good stuff. Goooooooooooood stuff.

Gohan found himself wondering what exactly Kalika�s training entailed.~~It's best not to wonder, Gohan. It's jusst nst not to wonder. *pats Gohan on the head. *

However... If Vegeta took up training Goku in the same manner, I would be more than happy to read about it. *wink *

Anywho. Love it. (Chapter the first one that you put out today, is the one I'm reviewing. Heading off to the next one now!)
Card!~
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From ANON - Ginia on April 23, 2004
Well so far that was simply wonderful... Now that you have captured me completely, I hope you will update often!
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From ANON - Card on April 16, 2004
Alright, I know I already reviewed this. But I was reading it over again, and just *sigh* because it really is one of the best things I've read. I just like it. All of it. Even though I thought I wasn't going to like it when I started it, I do. So, (Realizes that she must seem completely insane and hopes that this does not cause the reviews to cease to come.) Wow. Because I'm just impressed. I really like this story. Goodness.

*sighs heavily* *dreamily dreaming of how nice it'll be when Goku & 'Geta finally get it on*

Oh, and let me know if you figure out how to pronounce Masuyo. Its one of the names that Getarian mentioned way back when and I liked it but I have no idea how to pronounce it. *wink*

Now that I've doled out the praise for the day; I'll think I'll just go away and hope that you update soon.
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From ANON - Card on April 16, 2004
�Violence might not be the answer to everything,� The dark haired boy said while trying to catch his breath. �But sex sure the hell is.�
Yes, Goten, you tell them buddy! YOu let the whole world know! *Quietly steals Goku to t him him in the art of being horny and getting Vegeta trapped under him for many hours of hot-steamy lemonade-making. *

I love Goten. I love this Goten. He was just so cute and lecherous. And I love 'Geta. *sighs * I just love this fic.

Oh, and the joke was funny. (And sadly true.) *Pictures Vegeta floating near the ceiling and slowcrewcrewing lightbulb in while the crowd of Z-fighters each gets their 15 minutes of reflection of this. * Yep, four-episodes worth of action there.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 13, 2004
*does a dance* Yay I read it!!!!

Lovely chappie....

I couldn�t do it�I just couldn�t do it. Vegeta could not mate Kalika�I have other plans for her. He-- Y-- YAY!!!! *hugs you* thank you!!!!!! I would feel so badly for Goku if they mated, knowing how much he loves the Prince.

She also knew that the Prince didn�t love her. He just loved the idea of her, the last female Saiyan in existence.--hehe, thats my Geta...*shakes head* The Prince wants, he gets...

because at night she dreams of Gohan.--that's right you just keep dreaming of Gohan. Poor Videl..hehe not really...I never really like her...well its more like she just comes across as annoying to me...and I love the idea of Gohan and Kailika...^.~

She�ll just continue to serve her Prince until he gets his shit together.---hehe I bet she will, just as long as she pictures Gohan...j/k

Goku, who had joined her and the Ouji�s evening readings, not long after the Gravity Room incident, was even curious.--LoL awe, what he doesn't trust them to be alone? That is so cute!

�You have reverted to �Getaisms!� --rofl! I love that, I think I am going to have to steal that from you...

Yep, Goten had always known that ol� Ollie was a ho.--rofl! That is so mean Goten let his best friend date a ho?!?!?! Mean, but very funny!

Goku was stunned. His mouth was even hanging open.--I saw this as a great oppurtunity for Vegeta and he didn't even take it. it could have gone something like this Goku was stunned. His mouth was even hanging open. Vegeta noticing this closed the distance between them capturing the hot mouth below him, running his tongue along the other saiyajins. Makin the bigger man below him moan fore more...err...excuse that I got Veggie and Goku on the brain....Ooooo that made me think of something when Vegeta and Goku finally do get together who will be uke? Since Vegeta seems like he wouldn't be uke in this fic, but then again who knows what he would do for his Goku...

His grin had finally returned to his normal smirk, much to Kalika�s relief.--LoL I love how this was written and I can picture Vegeta...so cute.

Vegeta didn�t answer, he just shock his head with an amused grin. --hehe, what if Vegeta didn't know what the hell was going and he was just as clueless as everyone else...that would hilarious... ah but I know he knows what is up...^.~

�You might want me to take my pants off first, Trunks.� --GAH!!!!!ROFL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That was freaking hilarious!!!!!!!

�Okay, so you were careful.� He growled. �Now come on!� --hehe impatient are we?

�Tru-nks!� Goten whined rather loudly.
�Whaa-t!� Trunks whined in reply. --rofl!!!!!!!!!!!! oh gosh I love this lemon! That is soooo cute!

Although, I hate song fics with a passion�--oh no...*sobs* you hate song fics...??? But I wrote one...Delusions of a Prince...and you reviewed it. Does that mean you secretly hated it? *laughs* Actually I am quite glad you reviewed it , that makes me feel special!!!!!! Go me! So hopefully that means I wrote it well enough to keep your attention...*.* I actually loathe sonfics myself...

How many Dragonball Z characters does it take to screw in a light bulb?
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One, but it takes four episodes. Ha! (I Know)---LoL lovely joke, I have never heard that before. I will have to tell someone...hehe

Axcelxcellent lemons!!!!! They were very enticing, but there was one problem...there was no Goku x Vegeta action...@_@
Awe it's ok I know there can't be any just yet, and you know that's what makes it even better! Wow your story has come so far. It's amazing to think of how wonderfully this is all coming along...

^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 13, 2004
*gasp* I haven't revd!
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Gosh I am so sorry I have been out of town ever since Easter and I am still gone in North Carolina...
wellfinally go access to a comp! and its late. So I just read over the story quickly! I am so ashamed. I do love what I read so far I saw some hilarious stuff!
But I just wanted to let ya know that I wasn't dead, and I will read your fic fully tomorrow and give you the lengthy review you deserve!
Ok! Until tomorrow then!
^.*
-MB-
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From ANON - Webtester01 on April 12, 2004
Excelent Fic! Poor clueless Goku. Subconsciously he wants Vegta, yet consciously isn't aware of it. LOL.
It was interesting to see the lemon in the journal lined up with the lemon with Goten an Trunks.
The title of the chapter was very apt.

Keep up the good work!!
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From ANON - macha on April 11, 2004
My sentements exactly. Yay! Yaoi! I really liked the way the journal ran 'parallel' to the plot. And Goku got a wake up call. So, I'm curious, Kalika and Gohan huh?

Well, update soon please. I can't say that I am waiting to get back to Cell and Radditz. No, personally I would like to see a Goku and Vegeta lemon, but if your story didn't have a plot (and a good one I might add) then you may as well have been writting a PWP.

Keep up the good work.

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