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Reviews for The History of Kalika

By : jaygoose

From ANON - Agent 182 on April 11, 2004
GAH! Finally it let me review! I kept trying to review well... today i did and it wouldn't let me for some odd reason -_- and now. Here's my review:
I love it! It's very original and *grins* you did write the yaoi lemon scenes very well! Congrats!
You're writing is excellent!
I love the word usage and i love the characters names (the ones you made up)
It's a very good fic and i'm sure no one minds it being long. (at least i don't)
Very rad fic and i hope you update soon... took me awhile to get around to reading this... sorry bout that- But here i am reading.. so... i think- and most likely my buddy Mechanical Butterfly- that you should update as soon as possible... ^ ^ great fic! Update soon!

Agent -182-
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From ANON - Pixelgoddess on April 11, 2004
That was great - I'm glad Kalika is not really in 'love' love with Vegeta - 'cos then I'd have to hurt her. Go ahead and give her to someone else, but hands off Vegeta!

�Oh, Good Kami, its worse that I thought!� Goten said placing his head in his hands briefly before breaking into a grin. �You have reverted to �Getaisms!�

I loved that line! - 'Getaims' - *snicker*

Goku's squeaky shock was funny - and Vegeta's lecherous smirk. So where did the girl come from - can males have kids?

�You might want me to take my pants off first, Trunks.� The younger boy said, huge smile still in tact. �It�s a lot easier that way.�

Goten and Trunks were lots of fun here - a fun, friendly sex scene, and I really liked it. It was cute how Goten had to tell a confused Trunks what to do.

�Tru-nks!� Goten whined rather loudly.
�Whaa-t!� Trunks whined in reply.

Great dialog - made me chuckle.

I'm glad this chapter started pointing things in a more yaoi-ly direction. And I just know Goku had to go take care of a 'little problem' when he left Vegeta.
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From ANON - CrazyGurl on March 31, 2004
Lemonade huh? Well that was an appropriate title. And that lemon was very good. Vegeta was well, very Vegeta and that is damn sexy! Oh man so I was right that thing is Cell, or something like Cell. What is going to happen? And Radditz, love him! So the saiyajins destroyed Noma's planet. this is all very intricate and well built! YIPPEE!!!! Can't wait for more!!!!!!
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From ANON - Hecate18 on March 31, 2004
*faints*

OMG! what just happened??? I'm still in shock from this chapter, But I loved it!
Sorry I've taken so long to review, I saw this chap last nite but it was 3.30am so I decided to read it later, when I was awake.
I love all of you characters personalitys, you've descibed them so well. Kalika's parents + city can't be brought back!!! I feel really sorry for her *growls* but she had sex with Vegeta!
And Raditz is back! What When How Why? *drools* I like Raditz.
Poor poor Goku, he must feel really bad. U_U

Looking forward to the next chap, Its so exciting! (I have no life *sigh* u_u) Thankyou for the review! *hugs*
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From ANON - Card on March 31, 2004
Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooo! Say it ain't so!
*couching Goku from off to the side: * Now grab the naked Prince, toss him to the ground and give Kalika some real incentive to learn IT.

Liked Kalika's T-shirt. You're right, her and Goten would have fun shopping for new snarky sayings. Liked the whole 'false advertising' thought that the Prince had.

Ahh! Radditz?!

The lemon was good. I liked it and normally I would have just skipped the whole thing because there was no Goku in it. *sigh *

Waiting for the next chapter.
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From ANON - mali on March 31, 2004
Yaaaay! Raddiz is here! (though I am a bit worried about this green, saya-jin version of cell).... and by god girl, all the tention and vegeta's flirting was worth it! *fans herself*
Will Nappa be joining the world of the living as well? I hope so.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 30, 2004
YEAHHHHHH!!!! Update!!!!!!!
*cries* het sex.....my poor poor Goku...

The wild haired Saiyan never broke his gaze at the Gravity Room when saying this.--I feel so bad for Goku...*hugs the big baka*

But the sable haired man in question had already sprung to his feet and disappeared into thin air.--yeah Goku you go find YOUR Prince and that bitch...errr I mean that o nic nice saiyajin girl Vegeta is with *smiles* i really do like Kalika's character, she is very cute. Do I sense a slight tinge of jealousy from Gohan, that he hasn't gotten to talk to Kalika in awhile. Or is he just concerned for her?

Nomi knew in her black little heart --lovely little description

�What do you want, Raditz?� She spit the name venomously. ---OMG *runs in circles* RADDITZ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! He is in this fic???? I love Radditz! This so kewl!!!!! *does a dance*

�Well, you�ll be happy to know that Nappa�s not having the best time in Hell, but he does miss Vegeta terribly.� He added with a hint of sarcasm. --hehe I bet...

This damned planet was making him soft. ---surrrreeeee blame it on the planet...

She felt her lips brush against his lightly; sighed in delight when he didn�t pull away. She had secretly wanted to do this ever since their little discussion in the woods.---*sobs* Oh gawd....why me??? J/K That was actually a very beauftul lemon, and I loved how you made Vegeta. You write Vegeta very, very well.

In response, Vegeta�s eyebrows were scrunched in bewilderment.--*hugs Veggie* That was sooooooo cute!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

He was the fucking Prince of all Saiyans.---I know that wasn't supposed to be taking literally but...considering what he is about to do...*coughs* Yeah he is definatley the *fucking* Prince of all Saiyajins...hehe and I bet there will be even more f*cking... of saiyajins...^.^

It was it as if some sort of light bulb went off in Goku�s head, Kalika noticed as she finished redressing (a new record), because the big pervert�s eyes went wind hnd his tail suddenly stilled.--As if, Kalika he was not looking at you...he was sooooo looking at Vegeta!

It was also at this point that Kalika had wished that she knew Instant Transmission. ---rofl I bet

Ok I really loved this chapter and I really missed this fic.m som so glad you updated. I love this story and I hope you update soon! I really re wan want to know what is going to happen next. I mean since something was screaming No! in the back of Vegeta's head for him not to bite Kalika...I was holding my breath on that part. I was like please...no...don't bite her. So now I am gonna be like @_@ until you update again....

^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - macha on March 30, 2004
I was about to panic with a very loud 'Oh no, don't bond with her!' running through my head. I am glad of the reassurance(?) in the author's notes. Of course, now i am hoping that you are going to write really really fast (but as well as usual) so you can update soon. PLEASE.

Okay, all emotions aside, the lemon that you wrote was very good.

Uh, one more thing, what's up with Radditz? (Just thought that I would let you know that you have my curiosity there.)
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From ANON - CrazyGurl on March 19, 2004
Aww poor Goku is jealous of Kalika! Hey cool chappie! It seems like more things will start unfolding now that they are reading that journal. I can't wait for the next chapter!
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From Pixelgoddess on March 18, 2004
I love how Goku and Vegeta squabble - with Goku seemingly oblivious to how he drives Vegeta insane. I have to confess I waited until just now to read this - I'm still kind of leery of Kalika - kind of worried she will turn into a Mary Sue. So far she is handled well, but I really, really don't want to see her with Vegeta - even a little. (Yes, I know, I am a yaoi fan - and Saiyans should stick together.) But...I am reading and waiting to see what will happen.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 17, 2004
Alright!!!! You fast updater you!

Loved this chapter very very interesting.

Sgt. Kilik of the 23rd Infantry was called upon to accompany the little twerp on a trip to a �Nerd� convention.--I love Nerd conventions, seeing that I am a very big nerd...*pouts then sobs*

well at least he thought that it was a cleaning woman, you could hardly tell the difference with these ugly bastards,--oh gods...ROFL

under its breath. --still unsure about the gender, eh? LoL

�That�s Prince Vegeta.� Kilik said. �I�d know that annoyingly raspy squeak anywhere.�--*shakes fist at Kilik* My Prince does not squeak!!!

Kalika could not tell for sure but she could have sworn she had heard a hitch in the Prince�s voice. She sighed lightly. Of course, this had to be a sentitive subject for him�losing his entire planet and all. ---*sobs* poor Ouji Sama...That reall sad sad that he had to lose his planet...his ppl.

then where war mor mother? --indeed...I am coming to a strange conclusion about the answer to that very question.

Kalika Palo was on the verge of running awayfearfear. Vegeta had totally zonked out on her and his face had begun to contort in something akin to seething outrage. --oooookkkkk I really died when I read that, great visionary! ROFL, I could just picture Vegeta's face...hee hee

�If you ever do that again.� The Prince growled. �I will kill you�wish you back and kill you again!� --my my violent isn't he. He would really go through all of that just to kill his baka again..how sweet, he really does care. LoL

For some reason seeing the two of them so chummy brought on a weird sense of �jealousy. Now why would he be jealous�of �Kalika?-- THATS RIGHT GOKU!!! HE IS S!!!S!!! NOW GO GET HIM!

You know what I loved? I loved the scene where Sgt. Kalik and the little scientist were listening in when their planet was destroyed. That was really well described, and I love how you put depth into your characters...you know I feel like they are real ppl. They are fully developed. I loved when Ezco fights back after Kalik tells him to stop crying like a bitch onna...something like that...that was very funny. It always makes me sad when I read about, or watch the Bardock movie and see planet Vegeta destroyed...and poor little Vegeta *sobs* I just want to kill Frieza for that!!!! I totally loved how the journal scene was, it was nothing like someone reading out of a book, but like a real snippet from their life, that was excellent way to write it!

I know that the last chapter might have surprised some people, but rememberchanchanical Butterfly in particular--Hope ya feeling better by the way) this story looks like it�s going to be hella long. Anything could happen. He�He�Besides, anything that is worth having is worth fighting for, don�t you agree. --Yes I do agree, and I know anything could happen. The suspense of the whole situation makes it that much better. I just love to be ovedramdramatic...Oh and I do feel better! *drinks Pepsi* it's healing.

I got worried at first when I couldn't find this story. Its seems you moved it with out telling. *Pouts and looks rallrally sad* But its okay. This is where it belongs. --So sorry I did not inform you...I feel really bad. Because if you didn't review I would of been like @_@ wheres JayGoose??? She hates my story *sobs* I tend to get crazy like that...j/k but really I always look for reviews from you, Hecate18, CrazyGurl, and Getarian!!! You guys ROCK!!!!

Oh and I read you review and everyone else's for that matter. You guys...always jumping to conclusions. Of course Vegeta loves Goku and is just using Kalika to pass the time. Come to think of it she's probably doing the same thing. Love is funny that way isn't it. Don't you think stories are more interesting that way. I did tell you this but this by no means ruins the story. It still should hold quite a few more surprises

---No nothing will ruin your story, it's too good, but yes I jump to conclusions all the time (because I watch to much soap operas) It's sad but true, and I just like to mess with you. I really don't mind what happens in the story. It will be awesome no matter what. If Goku has to fight for his Geta then so be it. A fight, and the prize being the Ouji, would definately be worth the fight. But whatever happens, you hafta know I would love this fic regardless. Even if I do have to read about heterosexual love stuff *pukes in bag* LoL j/k
Anyway this story is brilliant and is one of my top 5 fics...it is a MUST READ!!!
So as always...
Keep up the excellence...
^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - macha on March 16, 2004
This is a very creative and exciting A/U. I am happy you updated, and I can't wait until you update again.

So....no VxG huh? (growl) Ah well, it's a GREAT story any way. Maybe you'll surprise us all later? (wishful thinking..........)

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From ANON - Hecate18 on March 15, 2004
Hi...::looks down ashamed:: I know I was suppost to have written MPS by now (I've only got about half a page left to do.) But I'm sooo busy, trying to make some sort of schedule with my life ::sigh:: Hopefully I can email it to you by Fri. ^-^

On to the fic...
Some comments in this chap were hilarious, 'Definitely not one as worthy as him.' - Vegeta, so full of himself! (Can't say I blame him ^_~)
And I'd be pretty disappointed if all Vegeta wanted to do was 'train' me. U_U
(But then again it might turn around for her ^_~)

And the Dragonballs, what happened to the dragonball? Who used them? Who found them in less then a month>
Your laeving me in suspense here!!!

Looking forward to the next chap! ^_^
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From ANON - CrazyGurl on March 15, 2004
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! All that is good and right in my perfect world of yaoi has been destroyed! ::cries:: I saw this coming did did! Gohan is staying w/ Videl...and Vegeta is going to mate with Kalika? But what about Goku? Won't he be upset if they mate! I am so distressed. But this story is still very good! jus just very surprised, shocked and traumatized...ok not that serious but you get the general idea. And I think Dr. Tyler is making Cell. Please update soon! PLEASE!!!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 15, 2004
ok you beat me at updating...but your at an advantage I am sick w/ the flu...and I have been slacking too! *shakes fist at self* I am working on my next chapter for The way it wasnt written...
but anyway...enough about me and now about you and your ficcie!
Great chapter!

He had pushed down his Ki level to barely anything in hopes of it staying his new private meditating spot.-- looks like it wont be his new spot since Kalika found him thanks to Goku ^.^ What a guy!

What did he have to do to get away from the jackass anyway?--rofl that was great!!!

Besides, before he would even consider taking her for his next mate ---*sobs* So Goku and Veggie aren't going to get together? WHY??? NO!!!! Well actually I am not that distrt b/t b/cI really like Kalika and the building relationship she has w/ her Prince. I just thought with the whole bond mind thing and since Goku has a crush on him and...etc, that they would get together...but I guess I just have to have patience and see what you're gonna do.

The poor girl had never been with another of her kind much less a male; definitely not one as worthy as him.---As self absorbed as Vegeta is...he is soooooo right! He is so worthy, worthy of *coughs* me...

�So,� The cunning Prince began, his voice low and husky. �If I were to translate this journal for you�what would I get in return?� --Just like our Prince...never something for nothing!

And now the Prince was near again, breathing his warm breath on to her, emanating the loveliest smell that she had ever experienced.--why can't that be me?

The blunette scientist --I have never heard that before, that was lovely!

The lavender haired Demi just stared at his mother in reply. Hell, if he knew. --rofl I love Trunks!

This was amazing and I love everyone's personalities...so defined and well written. As for guessing what The Dr. is going to do no way...I hate guessing I am always wrong...*shakes head* sheesh it's embarressing you should have seen me trying to guess at the killer in Get Psycho and I still don't know who it is!
But I want to guess, I want to guess so badly, I just HATE being wrong! I feel like you gave lots of clues in that openeing paragraph to the chapter before this one...but I will keep my guess to myself and see if I get it right or not...I know I am no fun. I will be so mad at myself if I had it right this whole time, but didn't want to guess for fear of being wrong.
Oh well I suppose I have rambled on long enough...
Keep up the excellence.
^.*
-MB-

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