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From ANON - Mikai on November 01, 2005
AHHHH!! i especially loved the ending to this one!! ya know, when Goten tells a VERY sleepy Trunks how they're going to have 'a lot' of kids... i laughed and giggled and jumped with joy!!

ah...well...i was quite sad to see that end...but since they're is a sequel to it....bye! im gonna go read it!!!
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From ANON - jaygoose on March 23, 2004
Awww! That was a great ending! Especially that damned tasty lemon.

Goten was adorable at the end too. "We�re going to have tons of babies." Ha! I hope so.
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From ANON - Aarika on March 23, 2004
MAD APPLAUSE FOR ONE OF THE BEST FICS ON THIS SITE!!!!! so sad that its over but Frosting Chronicles is getting good! loved how you ended the story, with sex..:) a y eny ending...or atleast we hope
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From ANON - Ginia on March 23, 2004
*sniff* I know this continues in Frosting - but its always so sad when a fic offically ends...
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 23, 2004
Gods...NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The...End... why????
Well I know why, it can't last forever...or can it??? LoL
Great !!! That was an awesome story!!!!!

The remaining Z fighters (except Yamcha who never, ever came around)--looks like he may have been traumatized for life. rofl

Goku grumbled something about nursing and how he abhorred it�which was just grumbling because everyone knew that he actually liked it.--aww thats so motherly!

Watched her best friend as he picked up both his littlest sons and Goten pulled open his shirt so he could let the littles eat.--omg! if my kid did that to me, I would be like GAH!!! what are you doing get away!!!, but I understand they are saiyajins, and in this instance I found it very adorable...Goten will be such a good mommy in the future, but poor Bulla, I hope she becomes fertile.

Goku tucked in baby Vegita and Bardock took care of Kakarot�of course he had to fly into the crib and stand in it in order to tuck in his little brother, but that did not deter him.--rofl that is so cute!

He had never seen Vegeta tear off his own pants before.--woo hoo! me neither, but it sure sounds heavenly!

Grinned, because he knew that his mate always brushed his teeth when Bulla did so she wasn�t alone.--aww that is so nice, I love that. I love this family, they are awesome!!!!!!

I am sad it's over, but glad I got to read such an excellent story!
Thank you!
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From ANON - Luna on March 23, 2004
o.o; Continue!
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From ANON - Getarian on March 23, 2004
Additional. Thought I'd respond to your statement about my story in a separate review as my answer is a bit long-winded...what a surprise ;-)

"And I didn�t know you had a story or I would have been bugging you to let me read it."
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I actually have a few in the works...some are B/V's but I hit a brick wall on them when I became bored with fics on the couple - due to too many "mystery three years" storylines - I still love the coug thg though and hope to finish the stories one day.
I also have three humour fics...one each with Vegeta & Bulma. Vegeta & Kakarot. Vegeta & Yamcha...but I'm not that sure that I'm that funny... I laugh hysterically at the stuff, but my humour rarely seems to amuse others quite the way it does me :-)
However; for the moment I am concentrating on yaoi...and although I am full of enthusiasm for the stories - I'm attempting three at the moment - I'm having a hard time with certain areas - lemons being a big one. (wish I had your skill)

I don't really have the gift for writing and so I'm probably approaching it all wrong, but I tend to think of the story as I write, I rarely sit back and reflect - although I do sometimes. So I daren't post until I've actually finished...I would hate to leave people hanging [ assuming anyone actually becomes interested :-) ]

I have started and scrapped a few ideas already, and I shudder to think of thet tht that had I posted, then I would feel obligated to finish something I was no longer interested in.

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From ANON - Getarian on March 23, 2004
Bit squicked by the Bulla and Bardock business - gotta agree with Gohan on this one...can't believe I'm agreeing with Gohan...against Vegeta. Oh God, the world is ending!

"Goku would have rolled his eyes, but it took too much work."

LOL! God, I loved this!

"And Gohan smiled like a dork, scratched the back of his neck, and took off without so much as an answer."

LOL! I'm surprised that he still visits. :-)

"Thought that these two babies were his last two. Found a great irony that they would be named after both their parents."

True! I never thought of this, but yeah, very true :-)

�Yeah, well, have someone suck on your chest all day long and see how it makes you feel.�

*chuckle* If they hopped into the time machine and went to the "Hormone Therapy" universe, then they'd come across a Vegeta that knows what it's like to have someone suck on his chest all day. LOL!

Ewww, I don't even want to go into Takashi's artistry skills. LOL!

I loved the birthing scene. I really love how Vegeta is with Goku and the babies. :-)

Ah Goten is such a little sweetie :-)

�A long, long, long, long, long, long time from now,� was Goku�s ar, �r, �You should be able to have babies too.�

LOL! Yeah, when you're around 50 son :-) Yet Goku is okay with Bulla and Bardock...I don't get it.

Yay! Goku kept his 'extra parts' :-)

I simply loved the end scenes and Vegeta's thoughts, cialcially the bit about the dragon PMSing. LOL! But most of all I love the contentment that Vegeta seemed to be feeling with his mate and his children. Wonderful!

"Gk: That sounded like the freaking end."
"Vegeta: No, there�s always the �sex after pregnancy� chapter."

*Big grin* looking forward to next chapter :-)

Thanks for answering my question about Bardock and Trunks.

"(But if you remember the depressing-ass future," LOL! Not laughing at the depressing-ass future, just the expression 'depressing-ass' :-)

"Bardock killed Goten because it was his privelage as Oldest. But he didn�t kill Trunks because Trunks was not his to kill."

Ahh, okay, that makes sense actually, in a weird Saiyan way :-)

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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 23, 2004
WOO HOO! Loved this chapter!

�He�s a Saiyan,� Vegeta said, �And he�s the oldest. He doesn�t have to be nice.�--Well excuuuusssse me! *shakes head* Poor Gohan he has to deal with a lot, not that I care. he he, I was never really that fond of him anyway, but I did really like this line.

�Fortunately,� Vegeta said in reply to Gohan�s remark, �I will not lose sleep over your opinion.�--rofl!!!!

Goku would have rolled his eyes, but it took too much work.--rofl aww poor thin

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That is a very interesting idea that the brood and other would mate w/ each other to keep their race going. ^.^ *looks over at your other ficcy Mental Therapy and shakes fist at lil Geta and Goten* Why couldn't they do this! why!?!!? *sobs*

But Goten looked so very much like Goku that he was more often than not, able to get himself out of trouble with just a little pouting.--aww you go boy! work those looks!

Climbed onto his rounded stomach and leaned forward tispeisper to him: �Are you sure I�m a boy?�--rofl how cute!

�Your private parts.� (As if that was the most obvious answer to all questions.) ---GAH! *falls over laug*

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Bardock was the one to inform his parents that the babies would be making their grand entrance into this world very soon. --I love Bardock, love his leadership, his toughness, how he just assumes authority and everyone listens. reminds me of my daughter. ^.^

�Yeah, well, have someone suck on your chest all day long and see how it makes you feel.� He curled back up as he said this, and gritted his teeth.
�I leave that privilege to you.�--hehe of course he would leave such a privelge to him..LoL loved that line.

Vegeta handed Kakarot to his mommy because the newborn was starting to get that look on his face like he had enough of this staring shit and was going to start screaming should he not be shown the way to the food. --rofl! That little kakarott already has an attitude, watch out Bardock! Oh and I love that "the littles" are named after their parents.

And though he would not admit it to a living soul, he very much liked to be a father. --aww *hugs Vegeta* he's so cute! What an AWESOME father he is!

Gk: Sequel?! How is there a sequel if this isn�t even over yet?--rofl! YEAH SEQUEL! *throws a party*
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From ANON - Aarika on March 22, 2004
Interesting that goten wa the first one te the the littles...okay enough of the birthing onto to sex chapter :) ps frosting chronicles RULES!
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From ANON - jaygoose on March 22, 2004
Yay, I'm back and I had all sorts of wonderful chapters to read. I love how Goten went and asked Goku if he was a boy. It was only a matter of time before the boys would have some questions. And this thing with Bulla and Bardock, are they really going to end up together? Strangely, I 't r't really find that all that distrubing. Saiyans should be with Saiyans, it just makes since.

I like how you did the birthing chapter. All births are so different aren't they. Goten was so adorable yet again. He should have lots of babies. If I had a hunk of a mate like Trunks I would be popping them out like crazy.
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From ANON - Getarian on March 22, 2004
A very enjoyable chapter!

"The horny Saiyans were rutting."

LOL. Ah, nothing like a good old fashioned rut :-)

What a wonderful way for Goku to greet the morning! I actually like Vegeta as seme in this story...it suits him :-) [ Still prefer him as uke though :-) ]

"and thought that if everyone in the world got to greet the day like this there would be much less crime in the universe."

Never has a truer word been spoken! If I got to greet the day with Vegeta sucking on my chest and pushing into me, I would face shopping and standing in queues, with a silly s on on my face and spending the time re-enacting the scenes in my mind...'course if everyone did that...the fucking queue would never move...scratch that idea. :-)

"the stupid ass dragon"

LOL Loved this! I agree, he is a stupid ass dragon :-) Unless he allows Goku to keep his extra parts...then I might reconsider my verdict :-)

�It doesn�t matter why we got together. Just that we are together now.�

Damn, I loved this answer! :-)

The scene with Vegeta and Goku, lazing in the river, their conversation as they mellowed out, enjoying the sunshine and buoyant environment was very peaceful and relaxing, I really liked it.

Loved Vegeta's 'earplugs' comment. LOL!

Oh man...What are you doing to me n!? n!? That scene with Vegeta on Goku's lap, lazing back and looking up at the stars...and the whole time, Goku is *in* Vegeta...God! Your aty tty to write erotic scenes far exceeds my pitiful efforts...I'm still struggling terribly with my story...You have a gift! :-)

Is the reason that Bardock doesn't consider Trunks as part of his responsibility because of the way Trunks behaved around him earlier on...or is it because Trunks is also Vegeta's first born...juf a diffdifferent mother?

You make me feel a little sorry for poor ol' Gohan at times, which amazes me, cause I really didn't like young Gohan in the show...really loved teenage Gohan though. (after the Saiyaman saga that is...) LOL!

"But who was going to watch out for Bardock?"

I can't see Bardock appreciating these thoughts...if he's anything like his father...which I believe he is, then he would consider it a weakness to need support...It's the Sayain way. Gohan's thoughts serve well to highlight the drencrence between the full bloods and the half-breeds. I like this!

Hmmm, Bardock with the twins...I would really love to see that! His interaction with young Vegeta would either be explosive or sympathetic (regards Goten) LOL!
But what I would really love to see is his reaction to witnessing his parents in their role reversal. :-)

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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 21, 2004
Very nice chappie! I loved it.
It was very nice to read those yummy lemons...and to know they will still have sex after the little ones are born. Aww Goku worries to much, Geta loves him! ^.^
Sorry took -eve-ever to review...sheesh I have been like @_@ busy, but I needed to take a break so I decided to do so by reading your wonderful stories, which always bring a smile on my face!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 21, 2004
Very nice chappie! I loved it.
It was very nice to read those yummy lemons...and to know they will still have sex after the little ones are born. Aww Goku worries to much, Geta loves him! ^.^
Sorry took me 4-ever to review...sheesh I have been like @_@ busy, but I needed to take a break so I decided to do so by reading your wonderful stories, which always bring a smile on my face!
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From Spacefille on March 20, 2004
*is done now* Aw... it's still sad... in a kind of mellow bittersweet way. I like it, and I will be reading more. :) By the way your writing ability and speed of turning out fanfic is incredible. I'm impressed!
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