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Reviews for Frosting Chronicles

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Ginia on April 06, 2004
Just for Webtester01 - My doctor 'sweetly' told me that I could 'birth a calf' with my hips... and still my pubic bone seperated (right THERE beneath your thatch?) with my first son... before that happened I'd had no idea it was even possible! It's really not suprising to have residual discomfort from the bones spreading to let those heads and shoulders out... even if you are built for it!
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From ANON - Ginia on April 06, 2004
Well... the ban on sibling relationships is essentially because of the potential for birth defects... Now if Bulla is barren and the pair ARE bound... There is no reason to forbid a more physical relationship.

It doesn't seem that Bulla is actually opposed to it... Just Bardock's 'big brother' mental set interferring with things. Once he gets past that and sees that its his 'mate' that he's smelling - everything should go just peachy.
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From ANON - Getarian on April 06, 2004
Loved the opener :-)

"As if. Goku mostly ignored him, stayed and listened because he had to, but didn�t really hear anything."

LOL! Love this. Their wish was to have their home planet restored, not have their ears bent by the tedious dragon. Shenron should know better anyway, if they wanted to rule the universe, then they were standing on a good enough planet to begin their reign. Goku's response was perfect :-)

"Goku stepped up to him, closer, purred for him. Heard Goten doing the same, purring, and the others, they all joined. Even Bardock was trilling and he smiled, looked at his father with that pride that was passed to him."

Damn, I loved this...it was so nurturing, so loving, so supportive of Vegeta, who was feeling just a tad overwhelmed by having his home back. :-)

It's hard for Takashi and Ilona to be separated during the voyage home, I can understand thed fod for her to be with all the other expectant mothers, that ship is no doubt better equipped to handle the births, but I feel for those two having to go through the separation.

Loved the challenge between Goten and the other women. I loved the way Trunks zoned in on Goten's husky purr :-) Crafty Goten, hot sex and chore free for the rest of the voyage :-)
YeahYeah, well, Bardock�s a pain. Besides he probably doesn�t do chores anyway.�

LOL!

�Good,� she said as she scooted off her mother�s lap and moved away, �Then he won�t stink.�

Loved Nalani's reaction to Goten's scent

Yay, they're on their way...Looking forward to the next chapter :-)

"I got all �Aww, that�s so cute!� when I realized that Vegeta was king again. Made me all like �Finally, he deserves it.�"

Yeah, it gave me a good feeling to know that he was going home, that he would finally take his place on the throne, and that he finally gets a chance to show Kakarott his heritage. I'm so glad that you did this. :-)

"Mwhahaha! I want to put a cliffhanger ending on everything now! Just so people can tell me I�m evil. (Or not.)"

LOL! Oh my God...we've created a monster :-D

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From ANON - kitty on April 05, 2004
I love all your stories! Its amazing that you update so much and still are able to write so well. Thank you so much! Smut is such a wonderful thing.
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From ANON - Webtester01 on April 05, 2004
Great Story!!!!! I can pictue the look of utter shock on the dragon's face seeing so many saiyans at once. LOL
I thought Goten wouldn't have fractured/broken his hips during birth since they were wider. Did I miss something?
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 05, 2004
I thought that was great that the woman actually bet'd on sex. I love Saiyanls tls they are so much fun. And yet another Goten/Trunks lemon. Those things never get old.
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From ANON - Luna on April 05, 2004
o.o But Bardock has a mate right?And he's on the ship with her.I mean sure Bulla and him have never had sex but....O.O; and Gohan?Is he going with them or staying on Earth?o.o I didn't get that.^^ anyway continue.
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From ANON - macha on April 04, 2004
I just spent two days reading this fic, and this is where you leave me? (I know, sad story. Right, *thinks about all of the readers that haven ren reading this story update by update*)
is is a great story, and it has everything in it, lemons, yaoi, hentia, violence, a plot (only after so many chapters of chocolate frosting, yum.)

And the sayians' get to have a home planet either by wish, science or violence. Doesn't matter to me, I am just happy that they get one.

Keep up the good work, hope to read more soon.
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From ANON - Ginia on April 04, 2004
I don't exactly 'review' very well - as you've noticed - but something that was said after the chapter ended caused me to cough my coffee onto my monitor... "You�re a parent now. Its harder to have sex."
Girl, you nailed that one. I love the conversations between your characters at the close of each part - I actually look forward to them. They are the frosting for Frosting Chrons.
s.
*envisions a 30 layer dessert with frosting through out*
Keep those layers coming! (and our boys cuming)
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From ANON - Getarian on April 04, 2004
Really loved the opening scenes, with Bulla and Vegita returning back after gathering the dragonballs. The whole atmosphere was 'busy' in an organised fashion. Much to do and Bulla none the wiser as to what is happening at this point. Loved this:

"Gone for a month and everyone was speaking a different language."

! T! That 'settling back in feeling' is always a li awk awkward at first, but I get the feeling that Bulla just really hates being out of the loop :-)

Loved the way Ilona is fitting in. Love the fact that Vegeta is King...he's going home, reclaiming his birthright and better yet... will finally be able to show Kakarot his place of birth...his home.'m a'm all choked up.

Loved this, from Takashi:

"Because the only other female they had encountered had tried to worm her way between hisentsents and his father was exceptionally good at keep a grudge for many years."

LOL! I can see this :-)

"...Because after this news was received, she was suddenly treated with a much warmer welcome."

I can definitely understand Vegeta's reaction, but I am glad that as soon as Nuala found a mate, he was able to let go of his fears and accept that Ilona was not like :-) :-)

"�Hey,� this was Takashi�s little sister, who carried her children in a sling-type device on her chest,"

LOL! Got me for a moment there...I was wondering when Bulla suddenly got kids, until I remembered that Ilona considered Goten to be female...kind of sweet :-)

Bulla and Bardock are good together...he seems much more approachable with her around. I really liked the scene where she rested her head on his shoulder...(trying desperately to not remember that they are brother and sister)

"Vegeta swore that if this stupid ass dragon pulled a stunt like he did when Goku asked for the lives of their sons back he was going to smash in the idiot�s head."

LOL! 'stupid ass dragon' :-) Go get him Vegeta!

"...stood still while the sky went black and the huge ass serpent made his grand entrance with all the uppity drama of a high-school jock."

ROTFL!

"He was not in the mood to deal with this idiot. Repeated his statement, in both languages, just so the idiot wouldn�t get confused."

LOL! Love it when Vegeta gets pissed off :-)

"Finally the moron opened his mouth. �This I��"

Noooo! An evil cliffhanger. Got to wait until Monday...you fiend!

"To think, if Goku hadn�t had made his wish to the dragon to have children, Vegeta never would have loved him and thus when Goku died he never would have gone suicidal,..."

Good point! I never went back far enough, but you're right. An even longer chain reaction...cool! :-)

"...So �wrap up� probably won�t happen in like a chapter or two."

Great! Fine with me :-)

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From ANON - Aarika on April 03, 2004
oh you are so cruel!! a cliffhanger AND we have to wait till monday..!!!! darn it...cant wait to see if the dragon will be stuck up or grant the wish..
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From ANON - Luna on April 03, 2004
O.O I LOVE IT!TAKASHI'S MATED!!!!!!!^^ Happiness!
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From ANON - jase��se on April 03, 2004
A Ciffy?! How could you?! *Sigh* Anyway, I am glad that this story has some life still left in it. It is one of the best ones actually dealing with the Saiyan race that I have read. I think most people are scared to touch the subject because they fear the hardcore fans won't expect their interperatations. I excpept your interperatations obviously and wait patiently for more. Oh and...damned Dragon...are you sure they can't kill the bastard?
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From ANON - Getarian on April 03, 2004
Trunks and Goten are so cute together...love the opening scenes with Goten and the little girl. I guess Goku's new batch of children will be one less...or possibly two:

"allowed the boy to crawl onto his chest and wrap his arms around Trunks� neck. �And apparently I�ll be taking him with me.�"
(chuckle) So cute :-)

"�Go before you end up being mobbed,� Goten said to his mate."
�Thanks.�

LOL! Ah, Goten rescuing his mate and getting stern with the young uns...sort of...love this :-)

Yeah! Takashi is going to be a daddy.

�My stupid brother shouldn�t have given in. Are you okay
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Hey! Back off Bulla...Takashi finally got some...leave him alone. LOL!

Looks like Bulla and Ilona could be good friends :-)

Ya know, I was so busy worrying over Goku getting the orphaned babies (and I still want that of course) but I was wondering, with Bulla being infertile and all...is there any chance that she can have one? Assuming of course that she wants one...

"The little boy pouted, petted him where he had just punched his head."

LOL! Ahh, such an adorable scene :-)

Yeah...I was hoping that Vegeta would wish back their home planet :-)

�I haven�t had a shower in two days.�
�It was nice of you to wait. Some of us have not had showers in months.�

Ewww, that lust cycle of theirs must have a pretty potent smell to override months on non bathing... No showers for months...shit, on top of everything else, not even allowed the luxury of being clean :-(

All that android business, with Goku dying of the heart virus, Vegeta turning dark because of it, and Goku being brought back by Trunks and Bulma... Goku turniSJ 3SJ 3 as he felt Vegeta's rage, which in turn signalled to the others out in deep space, which brought them to Earth... where the majority was rescued from a harsh slavery by our lot...it's quite a chain reaction from the one single event.

So pleased that Takashi has a mate...and yes, confirmation (not that it was really needed...but) Vegeta and Goku were fated to be together :-)

Sigh...Yeah I figured that this will be drawing to a close soon...it's your longest running fic so far...and yes... definitely want one more V/G scene before we bid farewell to this story :-)

"No. Ilona has not hidden agenda. I like her much better than Nuala."

I'm so glad :-) and yeah...me too!

"No, no! The plot can�t thicken anymore!"

LOL! Yeah I know...wishful thinking on my part :-)

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From ANON - Aarika on April 02, 2004
sorry i havent reviewed in a long time but i've been really sick. but anyway YAHHAA! takashi found somebody:) *face splits into a huge and creepy grin* love love love absoulutly love how this fic is turning out!
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