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Reviews for Frosting Chronicles

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - jaygoose on March 27, 2004
Yes! Girls...This is going to be soo cool. Sorry, I don't have much to say today...but this was a great chapter.
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From ANON - Luna on March 27, 2004
o.o violent, poessive sex....I LIKE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Awww poor Naula.......Mate her to someone nice k?Continue.
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From ANON - Getarian on March 27, 2004
The beginning with Goku and Nuala was very nicely done, t was was definitely a sense of melancholy coming from the world's strongest:

�I can�t,� he whispered to her, �I couldn�t ever hurt Vegeta.�

Thank-you. These two have a very deep bond, and have been together for at least 17 years, it would have been a tragedy, had Goku decided to mate with Nuala.

"Walked back up to the bedroom. Stood outside the door and pressed his hand to it, knew that Vegeta was standing right there on the other side."

I loved this. It expressed such deep love wrapped ar a c a coil of uncertainty.

"And Vegeta was growling, shaking and growling and he moved his mouth from Goku�s lips to his shoulder, dug his teeth straight down to the muscle, sucked on the wound, and growled louder. �Mine!� he screamed into the shoulder."

Ah Gods, I could feel the panicked relief radiating from Vegeta...I am so glad that he didn't lose his mate, he has lost much in his past...his freedom, his father, his people, his planet, and until he found what he now shares with Goku, he was having mini battles with the last of what he had...his pride. Losing Goku, I think, would have shattered the Prince.

I love the fact that Goku kept purring a mate's purr for Vegeta, trying to reassure him that he hadn't lost him and particularly loved this:

�Mine!�
�Yours,� he agreed.

Vegeta's emotions were so ragged and Goku was doing everything necessary to be the soothing force...there is such love between these two, and it's almost painful that it was put to the test in such a shattering way.

"At the thought of what he had given up when he told Nuala no, and what he would have lost if he had told her yes."

I like this! There is a world of difference between giving something up and losing something...you expressed this beautifully :-)

Loved the fact that Vegeta finally trilled for Goku...a purr and a trill is worth a thousand words.

Totally agreed with Vegeta's inner thoughts as he and Bardock waited for Kakarot. His reaction is what I would have expected from him and is totally understandable...love the way he dealt with Bardock's demanding questions :-)

Curious to see how Bardock deals with his father's demand that he claim Bulla. Can understand the reason behind it, still a bit uncomfortable with it...can't help feeling a little sorry for Bardock & Bulla...having these strong emotifor for each other and being brother and sister...it must be...God I don't know...sigh...I like these two...I wish them well and hope that they find a happy solution.

Okay, hermes mes the bit where I stand completely isolated from everybody else's opinion...I hope you don't hate me for this, but...

I don't like Nuala. Don't get me wrong, my heart goes out to her for what she has suffered. Nobody should have to go through what she has gone through. But the simple fact is, she was rescued from those beasts, given a safe place to stay and an opportunity to mate with Takashi...okay, she's not interested in him that way and that's fine, her choice, but to turn around and attempt to bite the hand that feeds her, by knowingly trying to claim an already mated Saiyan (even one that she felt she had a right to) was unforgivable. It wasn't her right to claim Kakarot, it was his right to claim her and he chose not too. She should have accepted that, but she threw herself at him and then had the gall to feel hatred for Kakarot's long time true mate.
She, better than anyone, knows what it's like to lose someone pres, ts, the only other who could even come close to understanding that fact is the very man she tried to steal from.

Personally, I think that Takashi is too good for her.

Good chapter...really stirred my emotions. Looking forward to the next chapter...something soothing I hope...still, this is why I read "Mental Therapy" after "Frosting Chronicles" Never know when I'm going to need a good pick-me-up and "Mental Therapy" always does that for me :-)

LOL! Loved the dialogue between Goten and Trunks.

Thanks for answering my question about Bulma :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on March 26, 2004
*Sighs in relief* Heww, am I glad that that Nuala thing is settled. It was getting pretty awkward. Now things are get int interesting though with Bulla and Bardock. Can't wait for more.
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From ANON - Luna on March 26, 2004
Yeah sOULDOULD couldn't she?That sucks.....But her with Takashi....He's too different....The littles are to little and Goten and Trunks are mated and well yeah.....Still......Babies.Continue!And I hope it was Explosive Sex.
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From ANON - Aarika on March 25, 2004
Again i beseech you let the baby's live!!! can't wait for the fight and for bardock to tear her limb from limb! anyway i really like Nuala, she's been through alot but is strong anyway..I also love that Takashi has a little bit of a speaking part, sos ad that he's alone but kind of expected..cant wait for the next chapter!!!
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From ANON - Getarian on March 25, 2004
My heart really went out to Bulla.

"So� They tortured Gogeta to get to me and I wasn�en wen worth it.�"
�You�re worth it, Bulla.�

This was a touching little scene between Bardock and Bulla. I had to consciously divorce myself from my (naturally) human emotions, to see beyond what Bardock was saying to her to be able to appreciate that his outlook is probably the best thing for the Saiyan miss. There is no way that she's going to be falling into a well of self-pity with big brother at her side. :-)

I really liked the scene in the lab with Bulma, Bardock (and later) Trunks & Goten. Bulma is really quite wonderful at times. Bardock seems to appreciate this fact :-)

I love how Bardock still considers Goten his, but openly acknowledges that the bs ars are Trunks...I do love this territorial attitude to the Saiyans. I was wondering how Bulma fits into all of this...would Vegeta have a (non-sexual) territorial attitude where she is concerned? Would the others?

I hope Bulma's hormone injection works on the babies.

I like how you portray the fact that the new Saiyans have no knowledge of Earth's languages and therefore; Nuala is having a difficult time communicating with the others and vice versa...almost tragic that the only one she can communicate with is poor Vegeta, who must be finding being in her presence increasingly difficult.

Looks like poor ol' Takashi is starting to respond to her fertility cycle as well. Sort of feel sorry for him too, but I like how they tried hard to communicate with each other. I don't understand why she suddenly went all hangdog and subtly growling when Vegeta showed up...He hasn't done anything wrong.

Loved the little chat between Trunks and Goten...I really can't say why...I just really enjoyed the way they interacted with each other. :-)

"Sorry about making you unsettled, but I�m actually really proud of that. The chapter was supposed to be unsettling."

If that's the case, then yes, you should definitely be proud of it, because I was deeply unsettled, still am. Well done though! There is nothing more rewarding than having your work received as you intended it to be. :-)

I lGiniGinia's idea about mating Nuala with Gohan. Don't hold out too much hope for it though, as it has been mentioned in this chapter that he has someone, but just thought I'd add my voice to hers on this one...can't stand the thought of an com coming between Vegeta and Goku.

I am curious about this part of your response to Ginia though:

"Hmm. Plus he�s not one of Vegeta�s sons."

Is this an important factor in choosing a mate for Nuala? Is this why she rejected the possibility of Takashi? Intriguing...am now wondering if there is some connection between the rebel Saiyans and the Royal house.

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From ANON - jaygoose on March 25, 2004
I have been thinking about this whole Nuala thing and I have come to the conclusion of "No, she can't have Kakarot." Takashi needs a woman. So there. Anyway, after all of your stories I can not see Goku with anyone else but Vegeta. But, if you think that it is best then I'll go with it. You have a way of making me change my mind.

Now on to this chapter. Bulla was being a bit whinny. I didn't think she wanted to have kids really. I hope the Goten's will be okay though, I would become so depressed if something terrible happened.
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From ANON - Luna on March 25, 2004
Well I'd like to kill the Bitch but other than that so what?And if Goku and Vegeta got pregnant there WOULD need to be Original Characters and slight changes to the stroy's characters.I like Naula's(sp?) name.And I like her.She can give more babies.From both Vegeta and Goku's side.(IF you are planning on mating her to both Goku and Vegeta.If not I'll still like her.)
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From ANON - Ginia on March 25, 2004
More hits than expected? Card - you just ended 'Even More of Us' and I refuse to believe I'm the only one who wanted to finish the original before I read the sequel...lol... This is simply a wonderful series of fics! Is Gohan seeing anyone? He's older than the brood boys AND he is Goku's eldest son so he could be a reasonable choice for the newly named young lady... I really hope we don't have a G/V/N threesome.
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From ANON - jaygoose on March 24, 2004
This story is getting very good. I can't help it I just have to remind you of that. I am glad the untamed one got a name. I couldn't just keep typing the untamned one all the time. I think that she should mate with Kakarot. It would be cool. But you have to do what is best for my favorite Saiyans. I trust your decision. I can't wait for more.
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From ANON - Getarian on March 24, 2004
I'm speechless. This was a very draining chapter, I actually started tel uel unsettled in my stomach. The emotional content of this chapter was very raw and I almost feel like crying for Vegeta. His decision cannave ave been easy.

I have to admit that I am not liking the way it's looking, I feel sorry for Nuala and if Saiyan customs states that she's Goku's because he won her then I guess I understand the reason behind what she asked...but if she's citing Saiyan laws and customs, then surely she must know how deeply two Saiyans whom have bonded, feel about each other. I care about Nuala, but not THAT much.

Also starting to feel very worried about Goten's babies...Bulma's concern has bled over into me. I think that Trunks has made the right decision.

"Closed his eyes and didn�t wait for her answer, felt Goku turn to look at herved ved back, turned his back, didn�t want to see."

Okay, now I have tears. Very poignant chapter.

Responding to your response to Jaygoose.

"I think you�re the only one that mentioned the girl wanting to mate herself to Gk & Veg."

I honestly thought I said something, because my initial reaction was No Fucking Way! But I also didn't really think that they would seriously consider it either...sigh

"Originally, Goku didn�t get picked because Vegeta, Bardock & Trunks are the rightful Prince & heirs."

Ah, okay. Makes sense :-)

"Goodness, I�ve got you confused and you like being confused."

No...I hate it...but I like when an author keeps me on my toes :-)

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From ANON - Luna on March 24, 2004
I like the namelene..ne...Tho of of a name for her?Cuz, if she'll be mated or something she'll need a name.^^.I like her. She's nice.Continue
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From ANON - Christina G. on March 24, 2004
i really do hope Goten's babies live. And what will be the female's name?
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From ANON - Getarian on March 24, 2004
Good chapter...we rarely hear from Takashi, he's a quiet little soul isn't he?

"�Myself, Bardock and Trunks,� Vegeta said."

Why didn't Goku get picked? Wouldn't they have a better chance with Vegeta, Goku and Bardock? Not that the others should be that much of a threat...but still...

"Everyone turned to look at Vegeta, except Goku who stood behind his mate, tairledrled around his wrist."

I love this! The loyalty is so wonderful :-) Was Goku's tail curled around Vegeta's wrist? I hope so, because that's just too sweet for words :-)

Still a bit unsure as to what happened when Goku went to Gogeta. Also, how did the other Saiyans learn about our lot in the first place? I assumed that Gogeta somehow got in touch with them, but now it sounds like he wasn't really 'in with them' so to speak...I'm wondering why he gave permission for his sigs tgs to be taken?

Whew, lots happening and I'm not as sure as to what has been happening as I thought I was...I'm not sure whether I should be feeling sorry for Gogeta or not. You've got me all nice and confused now...good work :-)

Feel very sorry for the unnamed one. Hope she gets a name soon as well.

Loved how Vegeta was with her and loved the interaction between Her, Vegeta and Goku. Getting her POV as Vegeta spoke and listened to her and then watching as he translated and listened to Goku...good scene :-)

"Well. That was completely un-fucking-heard of."

LOL! Loved her reaction to the news that Goku was Vegeta's mate :-)

Keep it coming :-)

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