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By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Mai on March 23, 2004
I know why Bardock can not, he is with Bula isn't he?

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From ANON - Aarika on March 23, 2004
oh my god! so much stuff in just one chapter! poor gogeta..hopefully you make the brood torture her for what she did to their brother..oh and please please please *crawls on hands and knees* please please please dont let goten and trunks kids die! please please please!
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From ANON - jaygoose on March 23, 2004
Well, yeah my assumtion was not the best one...huh? Oh well at least Bardock didn't kill his brother. You got to respect him for that.

Hmm...a girl that can have more babies for Goku and Vegeta...soundprompromising. B am am a pervert. He. He.
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From ANON - Luna on March 23, 2004
Continue,I like the new addition.Sorry I didn't read this story before----I usually don't look at anything other than Even More of Us so yeah........^^ Mate her to Takashi or Vegita or Kakarot!
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From ANON - Getarian on March 23, 2004
Interesting chapter. Something ending and something beginning.

I'm not sorry to see the end of Gogeta, but I am sorry that it had to end the way it did. Bardock is becoming a very interesting character.

Love this from Vegeta:

�If your warrior wins you may have my daughter. When my warrior wins I expect compensation.�

Not *if* my warrior wins, but *when*...love it!

�He�s found him,� Goten whispered to him, �I think Bardock is going to kill him this time.�

I liked the way that you interwove tain ain scene between both factions of Saiyans with the sub scene of Goten providing Trunks with information of what is happening between Bardock and Gogeta. It allowed us to know what was happening, without us having to be witness to the somewhat bloody event itself. Nice!

I'm looking forward to the fight between Vegeta and the three of the others Saiyans bes
Br
Bring it on :-)

"And thanks for the permission to take some of your ideas. I might just do that. Kidnapping is illegal, after all, but if you give me permission it�s okay."

My pleasure :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on March 22, 2004
Owwww! There's an actual plot now. Not that sex all the time was so bad. I love this. I am assuming that Bardock killed Gogeta. That's terribly sad, but can you blame h

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I am sorry I left for the weekend. But I hadn't seen my in ain a while so...You know how it is.

I love this story so much. The passive ones aren't so passive anymore huh? I really hope that Goten doesn't have the kids yet. They're not ready to be born yet.

Who is the untamed one going to mate? Hummm. Have I mentioned that I love this story...cause I do.
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From ANON - Getarian on March 22, 2004
Good chapter!

I couldn't have been more wrong in my guess if I'd tried. LOL!

A few moments to comment on:

�Then allow me to clear up your vision.� Loved this!

�Just what the fuck do you think you are doing with my daughter?�

God, I love protective Vegeta!

�That�s my mate, bitch! And you will bow before us!�

LOL! Spoken like the true son of Vegeta!

I'm assuming that Gogeta somehow managed to get in touch with his fellow 'pacifists' - Curious as to how he managed that, if so, and if so, then he's definitely messing with the wrong people - did he not remember his dad's reaction to Goku's death?
Silly boy.

�As decreed in the royal laws, when a older member of the family gives permission for his siblings to be recruited, the recruiting officer is not to be held responsible for the recruitment.�

I have a feeling that Gogeta is behind the permission. If so, what a little bastard! Well, so much for the passive Saiyans, looks like Gogeta couldn't leave his family ince tce the way that they left him in peace...err, with the exception of ock.ock...but as the oldest, Gogeta must have known that he was just following family duty.

Hmm, I once heard someone say (can't remember where, probably on T.V.) 'That a civilised man is only three meals away from being a savage' I guess this could apply to the 'peaceful Saiyans' - all very well for them to sniff their noses at their peoples ways whilst living amongst them, but send them somewhere where they have to fight for survival and watch their race begin to die and suddenly those good old fashion Saiyan instincts kick right in don't they? Hypocrites - I hope our crew blast them allhellhell.

Good chapter! Looking forward to more :-)

"Ya know; someday I�m going to kidnap all the good ideas you come up with and write a story out of them."

You already have such wonderful ideas yourself :-) but please feel free to use any ideas my reviews suggest to you anytime you are so inclined...I still have a big grin on my face from your comment...thank-you for the compliment :-)

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From ANON - pixy on March 21, 2004
all i can say is KILL THE BITCH!!! yup, if she thinks Bulla's gonna bow down to her she's got another thing coming and if she's just a recruitoffiofficer, why she say she was gonna rule? these are the 'peaceful' ones? they seem very deranged to me. and she's insulted goten and in part goku too cuz they got the extra parts.....boy, not smart is she. hope bardock and the rest knock sence into gogeta and that they all get hurt trying to make the teenies follow their orders.
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From ANON - Getarian on March 20, 2004
Okay...here's my first attempt at a possible solution:

I believe...Colonel Mustard did it in the study with the candlestick.

Sorry, had to say this - felt compelled - a hangover from my Bill & Ted days :-)

I had a couple of theories floating around my head but couldn't resolve all the little clues into either of them...eventually, I came up with this:

Is it possible that Gogeta, feeling depressed with his existence, gathered up the dragonballs and made a badly worded wish in which he wished he had never been born? The end result being that the only way thiuld uld be made possible is to undo Goku's original wish, thereby blinking the young Saiyans out of existence in the order they came into being...and ultimately affecting Goten's pregnancy?

Although I'm not really happy with this solution, as Vegita & Kakarot could be felt by Goten long after Bulla couldn't, it's the best I can come up with at this point.
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From ANON - Getarian on March 20, 2004
Bloody hell...now this is definitely getting interesting!

Phew...I don't even know where to begin...everything just erupted all at once.

One minute Trunks is trying to work his woes out of his system via a spar with his sister, the next...she's gone, everyone is suddenly there...Goku is off at a raging pace towards Gogeta, Vegita and Kakarot are missing and Vegeta seems rooted to the spot with rage.

What the hell is happening?

You've got me sitting here trying to work it all out - I've read it through twice and I'm still none the wiser :-)

This is good stuff...and I shall take you up on your lemon cookie challenge and read it again and ponder some more...I will try to come up with a theory, before you post the next chapter.

Definitely keep this coming :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on March 18, 2004
I loved the little pictures that Goten draws. He's going to be a star.

I don't see why Goku and Vegeta didn't tell Trunks the truth. I don't think it would have made much of a difference if they had.

Anyway, I'm going out of town for a fews days. But I promise to review everything when I get back. :)
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From ANON - Getarian on March 18, 2004
I nearly cried when Trunks shoved Vegeta out of the way.

I really feel like kicking his superior little arse.

Sorry...I guess I'm a little tired of the "Trunks hates Vegeta" stories...I've seen it alot and I don't get it...Vegeta has always been there for his Trunks and they have such a close relationship in the show...I guess you'd have to have read some of the stuff that I've come across to understand my reaction...I know that this is different and that it's part of the plot, but it's hard to divorce myself from the gut reaction.

Other than my oversensitive response to this chapter...this is a very good story with an interesting plot and I don't get why more Trunks and Goten fans don't read and review.

Preparing for the next chapter...will be ready to stand in front of my Prince and take on Trunks if necessary :-)

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From ANON - Getarian on March 17, 2004
Hmm, interesting chapter. I can't help but wonder what's the matter with Trunks?

Things are looking a bit bleak at times as he has little flashes of 'memory' of the alternate future, but none of this actually happened to him as such, so I'm wondering why he is so snotty at times.

In "Even more of us" a young Trunks crawled on Vegeta's lap with Takashi, and Vegeta trilled to them and gave them tender looks...sweet :-) Yet Trunks acts like he now has no connection to his father. I'm a bit confused.

Well it looks like things are going to start heating up from this point now that Trunks has realised that there is something that Goku is not telling him.

Methinks there be angst ahead.

Interested in seeing what happens when Trunks confronts Goku.

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From ANON - jaygoose on March 17, 2004
I don't mind the plot. I just makes it better when the sex happens again.

So Goten remember somethings too. How interesting. I can't wait to see how this is going to turn out.
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From ANON - jaygoose on March 16, 2004
Drama, Drama, Drama! I love it! I do feel a sort of apathy towards Gogeta now. I don't really understand. I guess because from what I have been feed about Saiyans they are all so proud and happy to be what they are. It must be wierd to be him.

I do appreciate the sex that brought me back though. He. He. Loved it. I am glad that I am at home and not he library though. *smiles guility* I always get nervous and think that someone is going to notice whats on my monitor.
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