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Reviews for Frosting Chronicles

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Getarian on March 16, 2004
Well, having read the latest chapter of "Even More Of Us" I now understand what young Gogeta's problem is and why the others feel so uncomfortable around him.

I must say, that had to be the shortest, most uncomfortable visit in the history of the universe...I can almost see why Bardock flies into a rage when he visits. Makes me wonder why he still keeps in touch, if he hates who Gogeta is so much...Is it still part of his 'older sibling' protective instinct' that keeps him going back?

Even though Gogeta is not happy with his Sn hen heritage, he seems okay with the visits he receives, he smiled at Goten and Trunks...I have to wonder how he would react if his dad came to visit...and how Vegeta would be.

I wonder why Goku doesn't visit...does he also feel slightly uncomfortable around the boy or is it that he doesn't want to agitate Gogeta by reminding him of the past?

What's up wirunkrunks? He seems a little snotty to me?

I like how Goten is worrying that his kids might turn out like Gogeta...a realistic touch, pregnancy heightens many fears.

A good chapter...got a bit more insight into Gogeta and opened up a whole can of worms in the process...I'm now drowning in questions :-)

"No; Gogeta�s reaction isn�t due to the allergy;"

Just as well I didn't actually put any money down...this is why I don't bet that much...I rarely get it right :-)

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From ANON - tatoosh on March 15, 2004
Why do I get the feeling Gogeta died.I fiI find your fics and the DBZ world you have created addictive. Makes me want to learn more about their daily lives and how things are going.

I like that there is residual anger and distrust of Bardock and the other siblings on Trunks part. You don't experience hell and loss like you put him through without there being an impact.
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From ANON - Getarian on March 15, 2004
Review for Chapter 4

�Look, Trunks,� was what his mate said, �I made you some hyperbolas!�

LOL! Poor Trunks...he is so going to fail math :-)

Oh dear, things are starting to look very worrisome. Trunks is still feeling a bit uncomfortable around Bardock, and he's now starting to remember that Goten had died, although thankfully, he doesn't realise at this point that it's memories.

I'm very curious as to what's up with Gogeta, why none of his siblings seem to want to visit him...so strange when you consider how close they all were as cubs. I'm also wondering whergetageta is staying and why he is not at home with his family...I'd lay money on the fact that it's something to do with that allergic reaction...can't wait to find out what it's all about.

Hey, got to meet Vegeta and Goku's youngest. Vegita and Kakarot :-)

Looking forward to the next chapter :-)

"Thanks to Getarian for the Hyperbolas."

Pleasure! Got a kick out of seeing it mentioned :-)

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From ANON - Getarian on March 15, 2004
Review for Chapter 3

"Dad sighed. Looked at Vegeta. Gave him that look that Goten always classified away under �I want that.� And he felt suddenly very sad for his father."

Oh God, me too! Poor Goku, after all these years, he's still has moments of sadness...and I just loved the way he looked at Vegeta as he sighed, I could feel his heartbreak, sense of connection and need for support. God I love those two together!

"His Dad sighed heavily. �Not as much as I would miss your brothers,� was what he said. What he always said. And Goten wondered if it was a lie."

Poor Goku...how many times am I going to say that? But my heart goes out to him so...I don't think it was a lie, but it must be hard for him sometimes with Goten still benefitting frokuoku's original wish, whilst he (Goku) has suffered the loss. Must be hard on Vegeta too, knowing how his mate feels and not being able to do anything about it.

"�It�ll work,� Vegeta replied."
"Goku grinned and his tail flicked back and forth behind him. �It�ll work,� he confirmed."

LOL! Those two know better than anyone I guess :-)

Loved the 'discussion' about the delivery of the babies...I wonder why Trunks thought that Vegeta would deliver them though? Loved Gotens threat about Vegeta seeing more of his private area if Vegeta delivered their children instead of him...That should wake Trunks up :-)

Really liked the tie in with "Even more of us" re: the time machine...links like that always add to the sense of realism :-)

Bit worried about the scar thing on Trunks' bonding mark...that should have vanished when the timelime was altered.

"...but Goten would probably love to use the hyperbola thinainsainst him. Draw him dirty little pictures."

LOL! Got a point there :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on March 15, 2004
Owww, you're teasing! What up with Gogeta. I am glad to see that he is still breathing but why isn't he there with the rest of the brood?

Hmm. I love how Trunks has flashes of the future that used to be. Very good. They are there but not screaming for attention. I like that.
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From ANON - Anolea on March 15, 2004
hey! i'm not a yaoi fan but i have to say this is a good story! thanks for being you and can't wait to see the next chap

Anolea
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From ANON - jaygoose on March 14, 2004
Now why in the hell would Trunks think that Vegeta would deliver the babies? I do love make up sex though, steamy. *grools slightly*

I thought that I wouldn't like this story because of the lackage of Goku and Vegeta but I do like it. It is so sweet. You are good at all those emotions. I have such a problem with doing more than one at a time in my stories. I'll have to work on that. I want to be like you when I grow up. ;)
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From ANON - Getarian on March 14, 2004
Enjoyed the opening paragraphs. Trunks' little round of self-pitying thoughts were extremely amusing. I loved his semi-vindictive thought re: his hungry mate:

"Oh, how he wanted to just tell the chibi to go feed his fucking self." LOL!

Yes! Vegeta is here! Sexy, shirtless Vegeta...Pure joy :-)

"He looked at Trunks, gave him that smile that meant Vegeta had absolutely no sympathy for him,"

Oh, I can so picture this scene :-)

"�Shut up,� he said. Not that his father said anything."

LOL! Pouty Trunks is fun...I like this new aspect to his personality :-)

Really enjoyed the kitchen scene between father and son. A regular conversation about school, a slightly mocking Vegeta and a distantly, defensive Trunks all wrapped up in an early morning atmosphere which hinted at a regular family closeness.

Really loved this:
"(Oh no. He was a sixteen year old male that had to have sex all the time!)"LOL!LOL! Oh, the hardship ;-)

A bit worrying that Trunks still has the remnants of memory regarding the altered timeline. To feel what he feels in certain situations around his father and to be less close to his oldest brother than he is to his other siblings, the existence of the time machine, the sense that Goku knows something that he's not telling...Trunks is no fool and if he continues to ponder on these feelings that he has, I fear that he may trigger a recall...I sincerely hope not...Tension is set...well written!

...And on a lighter note:

"and how annoyed he was that he was going to have to balance calculus and fucking."

LOL! Just think hyperbola Trunks...rising, peaking and descending...could help :-)

Yay...more Vegeta...although, I'm a bit worried about your response to Jaygoose...definitely fearing for Ga noa now :-(

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From ANON - jaygoose on March 13, 2004
It's wierd how traveling through time can ma per person for life, huh? Not that I have ever done it before but I can imagine that it is a lasting experience. I am glad that you addressed that. I like this story. It looks to be a lot different from the others, even though this one also contains pregnant Saiyan males. He. He.
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From ANON - Getarian on March 13, 2004
This is the second fic without Vegeta that I am reading...I can't believe it! I guess it's due to the fact that I love your writing style and this story is all part and parcel of the "More of us" universe.

Any likelyhood of a Vegeta cameo? Can't hurt to ask :-)

Loved Gotens attitude to school...sort of reflected my own, way back when...although, I grew to regret it and went back and completed my education :-)

ometometry could not possibly be more boring."

Oh dear God, I couldn't agree more! Poor Goten, how on earth could he concentrate on that shit when he's in the middle of his lust cycle. LOL!

Gohan had gone. Learned shit, turned into an egghead. LOL!

Love how Trunks turned up...I love that sense of connection the mated Saiyans share :-)

�Hard to concentrate on centripetal force when you�ve got a stiffy, Goten.�

LOL! Very witty :-)

As usual your lemons are 1st class, but, but, but...no Vegeta...I could cry.

Okay, this is another wonderful little story you have written, and a real treat for the Trunks/Goten fans! I can't believe that you're writing four stories at once...amazing!

Keep up the good work :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on March 12, 2004
Yes, another great fic. Are we gonna get to see more of the other kids too? I hope so. I am a bit curious about how they turned out.
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From Ladylupin on March 12, 2004
That was SO cute!
I did wonder about those two.
Update, this is getting good!
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