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Reviews for Frosting Chronicles

By : CardDragonBall

From Jayn on July 24, 2008
^_^

Awesome. Loved the happy ending. AND the saiyan race lives on!! I did not read the story(-ies?) that come before this because I am more of a Goten/Trunks fan then a Goku/Vegeta fan. That is mostly because I get used to the idea of them being married and happy with their mates Chichi and Bulma. I'm a sucker for that almost fantasy one guy or girl love forever type thing and if they get together then something must have happened with their first marriage/mating thing. So I tend to like pairs that were single in the series. Yet I enjoyed reading about Goku and Vegeta's relationship as well in this story. So kudos to you! I hope you continue to write great stories! Especially about Goten and Trunks because, like I said, I love reading about them AND there is a severe shortage of those types of fics!! ^_~
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From Lici on August 03, 2007
I LOVED IT!

....Okay, so, because a few chapters were missing parts or all of it, I got a little lost...Chapters: 4.4,5.5,7.7,9.9, and 15.16 (I'm not sure how you got chapter 16 in chapter 15 slot, but eh *shrugs*)
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From ANON - Anon on October 11, 2006
I CAN'T READ YOUR STORY!! =*( There are holes everywhere and chapter five is comletely missing. Please can you fix it or tell me where else you have it posted. I REALLY want to know what happens with Goten and the babies, and Trunks getting the alt. timeline memories back. I only had the paitence to muddle through to chapter seven. please Please PLEASE! fix.
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From ANON - Bulmachan17 on November 13, 2005
Something's wrong with chapter 9 and i can't read part of it. ;_; are u going to update it in the site or do u have this story somewhere else?

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From ANON - Mikai on November 01, 2005
eheheh...i found that to be quite funny...but sometimes depressing. especially with that one girl...i believe her name was Nuala?...yea. she was treated quite badly, and i can't believe she dared to take Goku from out Saiyian Prince!! but i don't hate her...not especially. And all the other saiyians...that Bitch Tanna...good thing she died...and that death scene of her's was great! it was gory and a perfect fitting to her end!(i just loved the way Bardock and Vegeta took charge...OH! and Goku...they're were pretrayed exceptionally well in this fic!)

oh and Takashi!! he has a mate! i was a bit worried he'd end up...lonely..ehehe...but you've done it again!

and i was especially happy and satisfied with the was you characterized Goten. he's officially me favorite now!!! oh and the others!! i just loved them. Bardock was so much like his father...he was like a minature Vegeta...and Bulla...she slightly reminded me of Bra...just a bit more....kick-ass-y. i like that! and then there was the littles...heheh...how could i forget them?! what to say...they littles!!!*squeals in excitment*

but sadly that's the end...i guess i'll end up reading all your DBZ fic...hehehe..yea...no worries...im not obsessive, just...i have a LOT of free time...dispite my life...

but yet another wonderful fic....i enjoyed it immensely!!

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From ANON - Athenais on May 16, 2005
I really enjoyed this triology and hope that is going to be a quadralogy. Meaning I would love to read a third sequel to Even more of us. If Goten is a princess is Goku than a queen ;). I hope he will know that they have there own planet get his abilitie back to carry 'getas children... maybe with the namek dragonballs if shenlong not willing to do it.
please write more of this. thank you for shareing your fantasy with us.
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From ANON - Rc on April 11, 2004
I feel *sligtly* cheated. I want more Goku and Vegeta going on. It was a great story. So is all your others. Only you can make Goku and Vegeta so abnormally cute that I feel like hell has completely been taken over by the flying monkeys from the wizard of OZ. (No pun intented about Saiyans equaling stupid flying monkeys....*winks and get whacked upside the head by Goku* Ow.)
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From ANON - PrismaKakkerra on April 10, 2004
Gomen! I must be the last person to review. *smacks self in face* I had no idea that it was update!!! Anyways love this story!!! I love Trunks and Gotens little girls(especially the adopted one)and Vegeta taking his royal place!

I don't know how you continue to make such great stories!! *eyes narrow* You must have a fiction machine!! *laughs and runs to get fiction machine* Loved it!!

~_~ Prisma Kakkerra
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From ANON - Aarika on April 08, 2004
hey! the ending was just absoulutly perfect! everybody happy and eating chocolate frosting..:) bravo! bravo!
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From ANON - Getarian on April 08, 2004
A truly wonderful chapter!

I loved the kiddies reaction after everyone had taken a moment to breath in the wonderful atmosphere of their newly revived home. I could hear the squeals of delight as I read. But this is what really got to me the most:

"...Stood, stared, breathed. Looked at the life all around them as if trying to memorize it because ouldould soon be taken from them."

I can only imagine what it must be like to be truly free after years of imprisonment and abuse, but I can definitely understand their fear that this euphoric moment may suddenly be taken from them, and can deeply appreciate their desire to bask in this moment. This was beautifully expressed :-)

�Yeah,� Bardock said, �And we�ll need to� Unload everything. Tomorrow.�

*smiles* Love how everyone is leaning towards leaving the work until tomorrow...taking this day to simply enjoy their world :-)

"Vegeta turned and looked at Trunks. �Go get a tent. So she can have them out here.�"

Love Vegeta. His understanding that these women will probably never want to see the inside of a ship again, let alone give birth in one again is heartwarming :-)

Goten is a wonderfully soothing character, and I'm not surprised that all the unmated women wanted him to be there when they birthed their young :-)

"�Look at what I did,� she whispered."

*deeply smiles* Loved this!

Ah, little Nalani was so sweet, worried about her mama. Goku bore the bite well :-)

Loved Goku's thoughts as he reflected on where his wish had ultimately led them...quite a journey :-)

Nice moment with Bardock and Bulla as they just sat together and enjoyed the peace of the night :-)

A wonderful ending to this equally wonderful fic!

Enjoyed it very much :-)

Loved the end dialogue :-)

"...Aw. Geta! *hugs Vegeta until he shoves Card off and retreats to the closet she keeps him in.*...
...Erg. Any"
"

ROTFL!

"Otherwise they would have been having sex all the time instead of making sure their ship didn�t run into someone elses"

Good point. :-)

"...so I�m going to leave a cliff hanger at the end of every single one of the stories! Hehe, and I�ll be gone for about five days or so.)"

Noooooo! Five days...no update...evil cliff hangers...you...you...you fiend! What sort of foul depraved mind is capable of such an unthinkable act...it's...it's...it's... Saiyan is what it is...Vegeta would be so proud :-D

"...(I love �Geta with all his kids.)"

Me too :-) Vegeta and Goku make great parents...I particularly love them with the twins...I know, different story, but they're my favourite :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 07, 2004
The ending didn't suck. I don't think that Bulla and Bardock little lovefest should have been in this story either. It didn't fit. But I am glad ygreegreed with me. He He.
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From ANON - Luna on April 07, 2004
Nice.I liked it. Good Ending.
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From ANON - Webtester01 on April 06, 2004
Great series! I thnk Bardock would be as agressive in bed as he is in fighting. But then again there is probably a side
of him that we have not seen (Yeah Right.)
I know for sure things would get very wild if frosting gets involved with the other saiyans if you know what I mean.
If all those that were under Tanna rule discover chocolate..... Watch out!

Keep it up!
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 06, 2004
I don't know about Bulla and Bardock...but I do find it hard to believe that they are going to go through the rest of their extremely long lives not having sex. I think that they will give in eventually...especially because they are young and we all know that Saiyans have insanely strong hormones...I think that it is inevitable.
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From ANON - Monita on April 06, 2004
I think that you should go with he Bardock and Bulla thing, shit everyone needs sex. So go for it Card! Go for it!
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