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By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 02, 2004
Oh I forgot to say of course a sequel!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I would love to see Goten and Trunks have a family....^.^
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 02, 2004
Yeah!!! Very good chappie!

Tried to imagine just where the hell his mate was if he wasn�t trying to molest him for his morning sex.--rofl. If I was Trunks I would wonder than too, and i would also wonder if the world had ended.

�I don�t know. Just wanted to see if I could do it. Why? Don�t want to carry my babies?�--awww he is trying to get his mate preggy...that's so sweet.

�Are you ever going to take anything out of your pockets?�--LoL I would like to see that happen...

No. Didn�t think he�d make it through his hentai mate�s descriptions.--LoL I love Trunks, he is so cute!

�Making out with �Geta,� Gina said, �When they were like twelve.�--*dies* I need to know more!!!!

�I would be interested in seeing it.�--Of course that would be interesting to see, well in my case read,but you know what I mean...

That stopped Goku dead in his tracks, and Vegeta had to press a hand to his mouth to keep from bursting out in laughter at the way his mate when completely still, --rofl poor Goku. I love how Vegeta seems to take everything so easily and Goku is the one who is always flipping out and stuff.

loved those little end notes...and Joe too...LoL

You know I think I can keep being mean to him.---hehe I thought you could.

I love this ficcie, why must all good things come to an end? Why? *sobs*
Thank you for the wonderful and yummy Goten and Trunks lemon and the excellent chapter!

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From ANON - Webtester01 on April 02, 2004
I reallly like your stories a lot! A sequel would be great. Goten finally made a sound enven if it was only a mutter, and his tail was atully touched (gasp!).
I look forward to seeing Trunks tail grow back in sequel. "Twisted Tails" Anyone? :-)
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 02, 2004
A Goten and Trunks lemon! Bless you!

I love how you got what happened with the Truth or dare game. A loverly thing for your parents to hear at breakfast. I like that Gina calls Vegeta "Mum", very cute. And yes, there must be a sequel...did you even have to ask?
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From ANON - Emma on April 02, 2004
Definately another sequal. Just think of Goten as a parent....hahahaha!!!!!!
Plez keep writing...more...more.ore!ore!!!!! c'',)
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 02, 2004
Lovely....

Vegeta smirked. It was the work of his two stupid sons.---LoL he is proud of them. I love this fic it is so great.
otenoten�s idea, doubtlessly because there was chaotic lust in it.-- LoL LoL, of course who else wouave ave chaotic lust...I mean really that phrase alone could describe his personality.

Which meant that if this Kane jerk continued to bother their son, Kakarot was going to step in. (That is, if Vegeta didn�t get there first.)--hehe yeah kick that dude's butt!

Knew they would not come back until tomorrow. But he wanted to see them. Felt as if a part of them had been taken away from him and did not like it at all.--That's so sad. He wants his sons. I love that, love how that was written. poor Geta...

�Split up and have sex,� Goten replied--rofl of course I should have known that would have been the plan.

Soft and hard, tinged with a sort of sadness when they realized that their twins were not babies anymore.--gosh, there it is again...the sadness that the twins are growing up with mates of their own. Poor Geta and Goku, at least they still have little Bardock. But gosh that makes me so sad that they are both thinking this stuff...

Thank you for the delicious lemon!!!!! Your lemons are always superb!

I think that when anybody messes with our precious saiyajins they instantly become the enemy, in this case it was Mr. Kane. So the crueler you are to him the better. I just love how Goku reacts everytime he hears about Mr. Kane and how he always has to mention his age. Awww poor Goku...he knows he is sexy! he is right up there with Vegeta, but I guess it's nicehearhear it sometimes.
I am totally with you about ppl and their phobias and I too try my hardest to not be prejudiced. Although yesterday with my interenet...I was losing faith in technology...not really just patience but all is well now, and my comp is normal. *cheers*
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-MB-

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From ANON - Getarian on April 01, 2004
Deeply loved the opening to this chapter. Mental picture of Vegeta and Goku sitting on the couch watching T.V. Baby Bardock sat on Goku's lap as Goku rubbed his little back...so amazingly cosy :-)

Loved Vegeta's thoughts as he watched the news, and loved Goku's 'mumbling about 30yr old assholes' :-)

"Felt as if a part of them had been taken away from him and did not likeat aat all."

Oh, I love it when Vegeta gets all maternal. Really loved it when he reached out to feel where his sons where...so touching.

�Solving the problem,� Vegeta replied. �Demi, get over here.�

Love that Vegeta still calls Trunks, 'Demi' (chuckle)

"Trunks gave Vegeta a sour look,"

...and love that Trunks is still not a fan of Vegeta. LOL!

�Well, that chore�s done.�

LOL! Chore? Little bass grs griping and there's no actual sweat involved in their 'punishment' LOL! Wonder if Vegeta and Goku realise this? :-)

�I didn�t have �escapades� Goten. I just had sex.�

LOL!

�Its funny because you had no fucking clue what you were doing. You left out that part of the story.�

(chuckle) Not surprising, can't see Goten willingly admitting to being a 'true novice' in the field of sexual activities :-) At least Trunks now has ammunition everytime that Goten calls him a virgin :-)

"Vegeta could have heard his own child crying if he was in a maze of screaming babies,"

Oh man, I love this! :-)

"Kissed him until he was sure that Vegeta was still his, still the same, wondered where this feeling of distorted reality came from."

Ah, Goku is also missing his boys...I guess it's even harder for them because moments before they had two rowdy teenagers living at home, driving them crazy, and in the blink of an eye they're faced with two rowdy adults who are ready to leave the nest, yet still managing to drive them crazy :-)

...I'm glad they have Baby Bardock and each other.

"Tasted himself because he and Vegeta were just like the same person."

Loved this! Beautiful description of the couple :-)

"Soft and hard, tinged with a sort of sadness when they realized that their twins were not babies anymore. Had flown the coop and left them without them even realizing it."

Damn...Iso cso close to tears here :-(

"Let that take him away, rip away the melancholy thoughts and remind him of what he had right here, of this sweat-slicked beauty that was all muscle and shadows, with dark eyes and dark hair and heat."

Really loveis mis moment in a somewhat wistful coupling between our two favourite Saiyas ths they offered comfort to one another

"Goku: I think I should have more exciting sex."
"Vegeta: Oi."

LOL! Hey, you're with VegeGokuGoku...that's exciting enough by itself :-)

"Goten just realized his brother was pissed and immediately took action to divert that anger at himself rather than Trunks."

Oh, that's so completely loving and protective...I love this! Thanks for explaining :-)

"Yeah, we (me and my friends) used to tease the guy about his boob-watching thing. He was pretty nice."

LOL! Poor guy :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 01, 2004
That by far was probably the most interesting way to lose one's virginity that I have ever read in fan fiction. You should be proud. Of course Goten's first time w be be filled with pure unadulterated perversion. I love that guy. Trunks is damned lucky as is Goku cause he gets ang ang the Prince. *Sigh* Now if lil' Vegeta doesn't spill it about the a game of Truth or Dare I will be sorely disappointed.

Oh and I got the idea for Kalika's shirt from this dude in my Journalism Ethics class. It's like his favorite shirt. He wears it all the time. I thought it was pretty cool myself. I would have never come up with it on my own either. I probably should have pretended I did though...be all creative and stuff...oh well.
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From ANON - Getarian on April 01, 2004
Kane is even a bigger fool than he first appeared. He should have dropped the lawsuit :-)

"and she flipped her long dark hair (one of Vegeta�s favorite things about her)"

Must work different for fellers...one of my friends once told me that she hated that thing about me and I wasn't even aware that I was doing it.

"Besides, if he had let Goten and Trunks do the PA, they would be having sex for real and there would bly tly the demi�s screams because his brother didn�t make a fucking sound during sex."

LOL!

Not fully understanding what was up with Vegeta. Why did he start laying into Goten once they IT'd it away from the store?

"That was when the parents descended."

LOL! Love the way this is worded :-)

�It�s okay,� is what he said, �It�s just left over shit from being gone for so long.�

Okay...Is this the reason? If so, I still don't get why he laid into Goten...or is this the way they are? Making each other available so as to take their shit out on the other, thereby avoiding taking it out elsewhere?

"These people were fucking bizarre, Trunks thought."

LOL! Love Trunks in this :-)

An enjoyable chapter. Looking forward to the next :-)

About the guy in high school...that's pretty healthy for a teenager and kind of funny...I love that you used this for young Vegeta and I loved Gina's inner thoughts :-) It's the ones that go beyond that, that need a huge arse kicking...I got grabbed in a stairwell once and it shook me more than I thought it would, mainly because afterwards it occurred to me that this person must have been following me for a while (as no one was near the stairwell area) and I was oblivious to this fact. I now pay much more attention to my surroundings.

"And of course Gina & (big) �Geta�s fight will be funny."

Good :-) Bring it on :-)

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From ANON - Webtester01 on April 01, 2004
VERY GOOD!! I wonder what would happen if Trunks tail grew back. Also it seems Goten's tail is being neglected during "play time."
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 31, 2004
Lovely chapter!!!!
AHHH!!! -_- my internet keeps disconnecting it is really begining to piss me off....I have tried toreview this story 5 times now!!!! I have no idea what is wrong with it! My comp hates me...
Anyway...

I loved how Gina just went with the flow and took off her shirt too! hehe how fun would that be to hang out with those 3 guys...lucky girl!

�Virgin?� Trunks asked as he looked at the shirt he had been handed, shook his head but didn�t dispute it.--haha *falls on floor laughing* I soooo lovhat!hat! Trunks is soooo adorable in this fic and I love how he is always blushing, and out of the 4 of them I think the virgin shirt suits him best.

All that stood between them and Goten�s plan was the pimply nerd that was guarding the precious mike with his perverted little life. --LoL gross, but funny

Revealed the nerd within--rofl sounds like a book or movie, I totally loved that line!

�Bastard,� Vegeta snapped. Slammed the door. Grabbed Gina and kissed her.--aww possessive and cute. I love Vegeta...but then again I love all the charecters in this ficcie...well except for Mr. Kane I hate him and he dese eve everything he gets!!!!

Goten turned to look at him. And then started skipping, singing at the top of his lungs about sugar pops and lollipops.---OMG!!! *can't breathe* GAH!!! That is soooo freaking hilarious, when I read that I had to yell for my brother and b/f to come over here and they both laughed w/ me ahhh...that was a great laugh!

(which he had had sex with her and she had never said a single one of those things.)--aww well he should have a little talk with her about that.

�You want to fight?!� he yelled. Raised his hand, gathered up power.--Mother Vegeta don't hurt him too much...The Ouji is so sexy!!!!

I love this ficcie and I love Goten, Trunks, Gina, and Vegeta, it is such a delight to read about them. And yeah Gina kinda reminds me of one of the saiyajins also! It's aery ery RAD!

I have many friends who think homosexuality is bad, and I'm just like blah to them. I don't even want to discuss it, the conversation will turn too ugly. I was once watching Will & Grace and my friend (Nicole) came over and she was like how can you watch this?!?!? I was like *shrugs* I dunno, open my eyes, stare at the t.v., listen to the words that are coming out of their mouths....yeah that's how. She was just mad...hehe oh well.
As I write this my interenet is disconnecting and connecting over and over very fastly....although I can still continue to type it is highly annoying and I will have to restart my computer...*shakes fist at internet* Why I told you I have no idea....I just had to vent my anger.
^.*

-MB-

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From ANON - jaygoose on March 31, 2004
The revenge was hilarious. And I loved the T-shirts. I'll have to be more creative with Kalika's next time. And thanks for reviewing. It was much apprieciated.
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From ANON - Getarian on March 31, 2004
Loved the whole kitchen scene. Vegeta's reaction to Gina's trip down memory lane was great as seen from Trunks' POV

"�Fourteen?� Vegeta (the adult one that looked like he was about to rip out his oldest�s spleen and drown said son in the fluid) said." LOL!

Loved how Trunks was feeling uncomfortable about the whole thing. Being new to this family, and even newer to the laid-back atti of of the twins (and Gina) :-), this reaction was very understandable :-)

"Gina was grinning, and Vegeta (the mother) had gone from glaring twin 1 to twin 2 while Goku had stopped eating and was looking bacd fod forth between his twin sons."

LOL! No wonder ta ota only wanted the one kid this time :-)

"�The thirty-something guy,� Goku added (was much less than pleased about this turn of events.)"

I see that Goku is still pissed off over that...and rightly so. :-)

"Thus, he handed his youngest, cutest, nicest, �I don�t show off that I�m getting all the sex I want and you aren�t getting any� son off to the obstinate jerk ones..."

LOL! Ooooh, Goku gets a little touchy when he's not getting any...LOL! Love this guy! :-)

�Something wrong, Kakarot?�
"As if after seventeen damn years, Vegeta did not know. He didn�t even dignify the question with an answer."

LOL! Loved this!

Really enjoyed the beginnings of the bedroom scene, Kakarot's eagerness is contagious :-)

�Vegeta,� he said, �You can move on, really.�

LOL! Not really one for foreplay, when he's missed a couple of weeks is he-)
-)

Wonderful lemon :-)

Love the interaction between the twins and their mates. Love how well Gina and Trunks are getting on :-)

Curious as to what the hell Goten's first time was like that he doesn't want to talk about it.

Enjoyed this very much and am looking forward to the next chapter :-)

"Just wait until Gina and (big) Vegeta get in their first argument. ;)"

I hope it's funny. I so want these two to get along. If it's funny, I can't wait :-)

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From ANON - Getarian on March 31, 2004
Reviewing - Funny Interlude:

Loved this!

�Hello,� she snapped, �Eyes up here.�
"�I know that,� was what he said, didn�t move his eyes back up to where they belonged."

LOL! Only cute guys within a similar age group could get away with this...no wonder she fell for him...had to love the unabashed response :-)

"�Look,� he said. Pointed around the room at the various folks that were turning colors."

LOL! Okay what did they put in the drinks? Love those twins :-)

�Oh,� he added, �And my Mother is a man.�

LOL! Loved the way he just tacked this on as an afterthought, which I guess for him, it would be...but still, funny...'by the way, mum's a guy' :-)

"She shrugged. �Who cares if your mom�s a dude? If he found a way to pop out a kid, then that�s his choice. And I like the tail.�"

LOL! Real laid-back, no wonder she fits in so nicely with the Saiyans. :-)

Really enjoyed the look back at Vegeta and Gina's first meeting. Gina reacted to everything a whole lot different to how I imagined her first responses would be, but I must admit, her reactions fit her personality very well :-)

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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 30, 2004
I loved this chap!

But then, Goten wouldn�t care if a semi went through their house with forty naked dancing cheerleaders screaming his name in ecstasy. --rofl!!! That is so funny. Just imagining tha hil hilarious! *shakes head* you're so crazy!

And his mate actually CHOKED. Mr. I want to fuck you. Choked. Blushed.---awww how cute

Closed his eyes, because they were crossing and giving him double vision.--LoL, yeah if I was having sex with Vegeta that would happen to me too.

�He better not be talking about your asshole,� Goten said, �The only ass he needs to be concerned about is mine and his own.�--omg rofl...ths whole paragraph of conversation had me dying. I made my brother read it and he was cracking up! My poor brother, I always make him read fics with me....

Great chapter with a very yummy lemon. Goku cracks me up..he just wanted sex..plain ole sex no foreplay and didn't care whether he was on bottom or top... you just gotta love that guy. Oh and I love how he spared 2 seconds of brain power to think of how nice his life was.

You know I don't remember how I learned of fanfiction...I must have stumbled across it one day (when I was looking up DBZ stuff) and became obsessed or something. I do remember reading yaoi for the first time, and I was like ewww gross (but in the back of my head I was very curious about it)...then I read it the next day and I was like..hey this isn't so bad. And now I can dream of nothing else...but Vegeta and Goku...
Did your friend really decide fanfics are evil? My friend thinks Dragonball Z is evil...*sighs* Oh well what can I do...I love DBZ, and I ain't gonna stop!

^.*
-MB-

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