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Reviews for The Meaning of Pride

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Ladylupin on April 16, 2004
I like your story, even if there is no mpreg. (fooey)
I reviewed yours, Review mine!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 15, 2004
Wonderful...

That stupid green thing had always seemedlikelike the pimple pest. --hehe that is so gross!

Thought back to Radditz and Nappa and smirked in satisfaction that if they had tried to tell him that he shouldn�t be with Kakarot that he would have beat their heads in until they apologized for their stupidity and swore on the blood spewing from their wounds that they would never say such a thing again.---ROFL!!! I totally loved that. I wish I could have witnessed a display like that from Vegeta...hilarious, yet so true to who he is. Perfect.

Oh. Joy. He was so very thrilled to hear that. Watch him dance a little jig.--GAH!!! ROFL!!! I love when he thinks things like this. Inside of Vegeta's head, what a wonderful place to be... wouldn't mind watching him dance a jig either.

Now partpart in this plan was complete.--hehe oh yes...he did so much. Said one little sentence...*pats Vegeta's back*

It was sending the very person he was trying to protect into face the very thing he wanted to bash the head in of.--LoL, love that! especially the part where Vegeta calls him a thing...

You knew and you spent all that time with that stupid, stuck-up bitch.--*gasp* stupid stuck up bitch?!?!?! No one disrespects my Vegeta!!! Gohan better get his act together or else I am gonna have to jump in this fic and hurt him...although I doubt I would do much harm...but my words can be cruel!!!! *throws harsh words at Gohan* TAKE TH!

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�Oh,� Chichi said, rolled her eyes, �That�s nothing. I always knew you�d end up with that snob eventually. Can�t help but be who you are.�--h I l I love this side of ChiChi. And I am so happy she didn't freak out in her screaming bitch mode. I'm glad things are starting to and hopefully looking up for this couple. Loved that ChiChi asked Gohan how school was...hehe very good!

I loved the little end notes.
Wonderful chap as always I luv this fic!
^.*
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From ANON - Getarian on April 12, 2004
Totally understood Vegeta's thoughts at the start. It all must be very difficult for the Saiyan Prince to hold his natural instincts in where all this is concerned, after all, this is all interfering in his bonding process with his mate.

Really enjoyed this:
"�Yamcha has decided to stop fighting,� Piccolo said."
"Oh. Joy. He was so very thrilled to hear that..."

LOL! Well that must be a load off Vegeta's mind :-D

�Bulma said that someone needs to �talk� to the fucking moron.�

LOL! I'm pretty sure that those weren't exactly her words...but good enough :-D

Really liked the end bit between Vegeta, Goku and Piccolo, just before Goku was to take off to see hin. n. I thought that the moment between Goku and Vegeta, followed by the kiss was really nicely done. Very touching. Loved the fact that Vegeta had every intention of making sure he would be near enough to Goku, should he need him. Very loving :-)

Hmm, what to say about Gohan? Looks like he's been bottling up his true feelings all along. I thought that ChiChi not informing her family of her illness would have repercussions, but when none happened (or so I thought) guregured that I was wrong. Guess I couldn't see the wood for the trees.

I undertand his general sense of anger, totally sympathise with it, and guess I can even see why he directed this anger at his father and Vegeta, but I still think that he overreacted and caused huge problems when none were necessary. He should have pulled his father aside and told him what was in his heart, and yes, Goku should have sat down with his boys after ChiChi's death and tried to see how they were handling it. Shame that Vegeta had to bear the brunt of everyone's wrath.

I'm glad thaku fku finally came up with the idea to take Gohan to otherworld to see his mother. Good idea, by the way, I love it :-)

Whilst I understand Gohan's actions a bit more now, I still think he's a complete snot, as are the others.

Good chapter.

Looking forward to the next one...Hurry back! :-)

"Vegeta: YOU FREAKING DISAPPEARED! Think of what I must be thinking!"

Never even thought of this. Poor Vegeta must be freaking out :-(

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From ANON - Hecate18 on April 10, 2004
Sorry for reviewing so late, had work yesterday got a little bit drunk after (we were supposed to be doing college work) then went to work today... so glad I've got the day off tomorrow. ^-^

Chapter 20...

'Because he was sick and tired of Trunks always staring at his ass like it was the most interesting thing in the whole universe�which it was, but occasionally his ass needed a break from the intense observation.' - I guess if you have a nice ass you should no it! ^O^

I'd have to say this was a very 'nice' interlude; it�s always nice to read some lemon after some heart aching angst. ^_^
'(memo to self, never eat food that has been prepared unless you have watched Goten wash his hands.)' - Yeah he might have been 'preparing' something else first. ^_~

It was sooooo cute how inexperienced Trunks was, it was a change cus you'pectpected Goten to be the shy one... since he's the chibi...'Goten giggled. The chibi, he giggled.' Sooooo cute awwww, I love this version of Goten though, cute nut naughty. ^-^
"Well I'm gonna go take a dip in take a dip in the lake over here. Wanna come?" - Who in their right mind would say no (I definitely don't think Trunks would! ^_~)

Chapter 21�

�just bristling with anger at the idiot thing that accidentally shared Kakarot�s genetics.� - I agree, it�s a disgrace tha hol holds the same genes, but I guess he�s human, more so then he should be�how disappointing. U_U

�He was going to try punching the kid.� � That�s another way of talking to Gohan, so he knows exactly what needed to be said and will remember it. ^-^

�Smiled as it took him, and thought that this was everything good.� � That was beautiful, that�s my review summed for this chap! ^_^

Chapter 23�

�pimple pest. � *laughs till she can�t breath* I know� I know I�m easily amused! U_U;

And whoa! I did not expect Gohan to have all that pent up tension, Gohan and his father needed to talk about this a long time ago, but its good that Goku knows now. All that hate and anger couldn�t have all been directed toward Vegeta,

And Chi-chi definitely has mellowed out since she died, but I guess you can relax when you die� unless your in hell� O_o

It�s cool that Chi-chi�s ok with this though, Gohan needed that, he needs his mother.
It�s kinda sweet. ^-^

Anyways I enjoyed all 3 chand nnd now I�m off to write my story� then go to bed, cus I is sleepy. ^_^

Your going!!! *sniff sniff* who else am I gonna review late?... You'll be back??? *grins* thats ok then! See ya soon, and have a good easter! ^_^

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 10, 2004
Well...that was...sweet and angsty. But I've decided that you are trying to kill me with these cliffies.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 10, 2004
Wonderful!

What kind of moron just SITS down when he could be getting revenge on the ingrates?--aww it's ok Vegeta...just count to 10 like me....

Oh, right, because he respected Kakarot --hehe LoL, yeah that's why, please don't ever forget that. We don't want you goon aon a killing spree...well I do...if its aimed at Gohan. But for Goku's sake I don't...See even Goku keeps me level headed! Wow! whata great guy affecting lives all around the world...

She sighed. �Yeah, you�re right, Vegeta. But I was just saying. Maybe someone should try talking to him.�
He was going to try punching the kid. That seemed to shut his fat mouth rather effectively.---rofl *falls over laughing*

She hugged him then,--- I really, really love Bulma in this fic. She has been through so much, and yet she is still standing by Vegeta and Goku's sides. Even encouraging the Prince to go get 'his man' You really gotta love her. It is quite amazing...

(Which Goku had the feeling he was only doing because Trunks was blushing from his toes to his hair.)--LoL Trunks is so adorable! *shakes head* even his hair is blushing...hehe

Took Goku�s hand in his and wound their fingers�with no glove in the way�and pressed their palms together---hm..ok *feels heartbeat* Ok good foromenoment I could have sworn I died....sheesh, how do you do it woman??? HOW??? The way you write, how you write it...I mean I am envious! It is superb! I loved that. I think Vegeta is awesome for going to find Goku and comforting him in this way. Not hesitating...I just love their relationship and how proud they are of one another. How much they love each other.

Goku snorted, �At least we have all our clothes on.�--LoL, not for long..I hope...

They were wrong. Goku knhat.hat. So very wrong about Vegeta.---AH! *pulls hair out* You are doing it again! Making me crazy...I love that line...Goku is so sweet and he is right. They are wrong about Vegeta...I hope they can see that, and if they can't I hope they all go to hell or at least someplace really really hot like..uh...the core of the earth... Nah, I just hope they get what they deserve! I just want Vegeta and Goku to be happy.

I like angst too. But I think it�s become my trademark to combine angst and humor.---yeah I think that is your trademark. You are super good at it! ^.~

Hope you don�t get sick again (not because you didn�t review but because being sick isn�t any fun.)---Eh, I will get sick again...I am sick right now, just not as sick as I was...so thats good!

Anyway thanks for the wonderful chapter.
I loved it as always...
and again have fun on your trip.
keep up the excellence
^.*
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From ANON - Getarian on April 09, 2004
I could be misinterpreting the beginning, but I get this feeling that the Prince is just a teensy bit annoyed :-D

"Squash them in his hands and fucking LAUGH as they were pounded into the ground."

LOL! Can picture this so well :-D

Completely agreed with all of Vegeta's thoughts. I am amazed that he held himself in check at all. He has really fallen hard for his Kakarot :-)

Poor Goku seems a bit shell-shocked at the moment. Can't believe what a little shit, Gohan turned out to be. >:-(

"Oh. He should never have told her about the uke thing..."

*chuckle* Sweet Vegeta. I love how he anlma lma are with each other :-) Loved his thoughts following the 'uke thing' Yeah, you betcha, Vegeta is all man. ;-)

LOL! Goku sprung Goten and Trunks...how embarrassing :-)

Oh, completely loved that kiss between Vegeta and Goku. It was pure magic :-)

Loved this:

"�Gross,� Trunks said."
"Goku snorted, �At least we have alr clr clothes on.�"

ROTFL!

Really enjoyed Vegeta's recognition of what he missed and his gentle teasing of Trunks :-)

Loved the lemon...always love the lemon :-)

Really enjoying the direction you have taken with this fic, added more angst, showing the conflicting reactions between Vegeta and Goku in this new situation, yet keeping them strong, and allowing growth between the two as they recognise each other's needs. Love this!

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Loved the end dialogue :-D

"See, I have this fear that everyone that�s like �Oh, I love your fanfics Card,� will be like �AH. This original crap is so crappy� and I�ll only sell books to my relatives. *sigh *"

LOL! Sorry, definitely not laughing at your fear, just the bit about selling to your relatives :-)

The fear is completely understandable, I bet every author goes through that, and it probably wouldn't help, if when you send it to publishers they return it saying 'no thanks' - I understand that happens alot. But should that happen, never let it stop you, keep trying, send your story to lots of different publishers (what one will turn their nose up at, another may snap up in an instant) also, try sending in different sto...t...try sending short stories to readers digest and the like, to see how that goes...

I don't know, I know I'm never going to be a true author, it's not in my blood, so I'm not sure if my words of encouragement is good advice or not, but I think a fair percentage of authors start off writing short stories for magazines and the like and work their way up...not all, some strike golettyetty much straight away, but I think the majority have to go about it the long, hard, and often, discouraging route...and sometimes, sadly, not everyone makes it. This doesn't mean that they're no good, just not writing the 'in' stuff. (always remember that, because you are not a crappy writer.)

But if it's your dream, and you have a shot at it, you should take it, (unfortunately, there is always the risk of not realising your dream.) but trying and not succeeding is better than spending the rest of your life wondering 'what if'

Pearls of wisdom from the completely unsuccessful, and of late, lethargic, chaser of dreams, but there they are for what it's worth anyway, but only you know what you are capable of handling, so it is really only up to you in the end...either way, hang in there :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 09, 2004
Just when I thought that Gohan could not become more of an ass...he goes and proves me wrong. *Sigh* I am glad that Bulma isn't so upset anymore. And of course that Goten and Trunks are banging regularly. And yet another Goku/Geta lemon. Wonderbar!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 08, 2004
Review for the LEMONY INTERLUDE

Because he was sick and tired of Trunks always staring at his ass like it was the most interesting thing in the whole universe�which it was,--LoL, he is very confident in himself!

Especially sense Trunks thought that he was the best at everything he ever did --hehe I sense this to be a forshadowing of the lemon to come...hehe poor Trunks.

Pulled back, licked his lips, held their hips together. �Are you ready?� Goten asked.---I loved that. Goten is so cute.

(Stolen from his father�s bathroom, but honestly, with all the lube they had who would notice one little tube missing?) --you never know as sex crazed as Goku is he just might notice it missing.

Now he was standing there with his ass hanging out in the wind,--rofl!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That is funny!

(Memo to self, never eat food that Goten has prepared unless you have watched him wash his hands.)--rofl! ewwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww that is so gross.

This was a great chappy and super funny, with a yummy lemon to boot.
Thanks for the break from the angst, even though I love angst, but I am glad you decided to lighten the mood a little with this cute chappie.
Trunks being so oblivious was too adorable.

^.*
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 08, 2004
YAH!!! Great chap!!!

A chuckle. The bastard chuckled at him. �You love him.�
Vegeta felt his mouth fall open.---aww that is soooo sweet! I love the turn around that Piccolo has made! That makes me happy. I love how Piccolo keeps grinning at Vegeta...cute!

And Vegeta was still in stunned silence, contemplating why he wasn�t causing extreme internal bleeding to the Namekian.--LoL, because it's true, he loves Goku! yeah!!!

Wondered�just briefly�why it was that two former �killers� were the only ones on this planet that stood behind the man that everyone else was supposed to �love� and �trust� so dearly. ---I wonder that too, but then again there is that old saying. Keep your friends close but your enemies closer! Even though they are former enemies now. But Vegeta is as close as anyone can get to Goku. ^.^

�That thing,� Tien said this whilst pointing at Vegeta, --You know, I hate Tien, but I think I told you that b4. I have always hated him! He is always rude to Vegeta! *shakes fist at Tien* How dare he call Vegeta a thing, he's the one with 3 freaking eyes!

Goku moved forward, grabbed Vegeta, wrapped his arms around the shoulders and weaved his hands together behind Vegeta�s neck to immoblize his arms, pulled him back, felt him kicking and held on as Vegeta continued to yell at his son.---aww I am always so impressed with Goku and the wonderful choices he makes. Going to his Prince like that. I am so dissapointed in the others...I wish Vegeta did kill them all! It makes me so sad how they are treating them. Especially Goku, after being his friend all those years!!! How heart breaking this all is.

But he looked at Goku, told him without having to speak that he was willing to give him this because he cared about Goku and was willing to stand by his decision.--This ficcie makes me so sad. I am glad they didn't give into the the anger and fight, as much as I want those idiots to die. But I am also impressed with Vegeta, doing what he knows what his mate wants by just walking away. I think you wrote this very well.

I wonder where they IT'd to?

Anyway thanks for another awesome chapter!
^.*
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 08, 2004
Hiya!!!!
*sobs* I didn't review yesterday...I was sick...I didn't even get on the comp! -_-

Anyway enough of my sickly life and onto your wonderful chappie that I loved!!!!

�Ever since you asked about Goten I�ve been thinking about it. Do you know how hard it is to spar with someone that you�re visualizing naked?�--rofl, hmm.no Trunks I don't know how HARD it is...why don't you tell us...hm...

This was a great conversation. All he had to do was look at his child, and his son just continued on without even waiting for a response.--LoL That sounds like a conversation Vegeta would love.

�I fail to see how this is a big problem,� Vegeta said, �Do you not know what you�re doing?�--rofl...poor Trunks. Vegeta is funny!

�Dad,� he said, �Why the hell is Trunks trying to molest me every time we fight?�--rofl!!!!!!!!! Poor Goten....not really. Just have sex with the guy and get it over with

If he had been flying at the time he probably would have fallen straight down through the planet.--oh gosh LoL hehe through the planet...that a great way to describe his reaction. I loved it!

Gk: Oi. �Geta, what did we say about reading the thesaurus?--LoL

Great chappie, as always!

^.*
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 08, 2004
He...he...Goten is the super freak in this one. Good, Trunks always gets that wrap because he's Vegeta's son. Why does everyone think that Vegeta is a perv? Anyway, very creative Truten lemon. I liked it alot.
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From ANON - Getarian on April 08, 2004
Review for 'Lemony Interlude' Tr/Gt

"...but occasionally his ass needed a break from the intense observation. After all, even rear-ends got shy."

LOL!

"Just so they could go back to being the way they were before Trunks realized that he had hormones and thought about sex and that he was attracted to his best friend."

Ah, dear, sweet, innocent Goten. There's no going back. Gotta love his naivet� :-D

Oh poor Trunks, so flustered, so horny and so very, unsure. Goten really surprised me :-)

"(Who put screw tops on lube? Sheesh, horny people did not want to waste time opening the damn thing.)"

LOL!

�Alright, now you need to get your hand off my dick and put your fingers to good use.�

LOL! And they say romance is dead :-D

"(Memo to self, never eat food that Goten has prepared unless you hwatcwatched him wash his hands.)"

ROTFL!

Okay. I'm amazed I made it as far as I did, but once it started to get into the nitty gritty, I got to skimming again...honestly don't know why...I love it when Goku and Vegeta do it, you'd think I'd be able to fully make it through a non-Vegeta one...oh well. Nonetheless, I really enjoyed the beginning of it all.ry ary amusing :-D

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From ANON - Getarian on April 08, 2004
Review was getting a tad long, so I thought I'd post responses here.

Loved your response to Jaygoose...LOL!

"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! You�re reviewing right as I am writing the responses!"

Uh, yeah...sorry about that. I sorta noticed that myself, when I posted the second review. Got caught up in a million things today and didn't get home until late. When I saw that you were posting, I was frantically trying to keep ahead...kinda funny when you think about it...:-D

"Yeah, your thoughts were my thoughts on Vegeta�s thoughts about Bulma."

LOL! Cool :-)

"Yeah, if they were on Vegeta-sei, Vegeta would be a big ole softy full of Shakespearean-type romance. �You smell much better now.� (Sadly, in my version of the Saiyan world, that�s probably true.)"

LOL! And I think your version of the Saiyan world is probably more realistic, they're warriors...not namby pamby rose sniffers :-) A good strong clean scent is probably a big deal amongst the horny ones...LOL!

"...So you�ll be abo loo look forward to me gushing about your fics. *nods like this makes all the difference in the world. *"

ckleckles* And, thank-you. :-) It actually does make all the difference. Naturally, I would love for many people to like my stories, but if just one person does, then that's enough to keep me going...unless I was doing this for a living, then it would really suck...LOL!

"I don�t like Tien either. Hopefully I won�t be tooooooo mean to him."

Tempting...very tempting. :-)

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From ANON - Getarian on April 08, 2004
Loved Vegeta's thoughts as he watched the way Piccolo kept grinning at him. Loved the way Piccolo kept grinning at him and absolutely loved this:

"He swore that if it laughed at him he was going to rip its antennas off and fry them in butter like frog legs. Then he would feed them back to the Namekian. While he GRINNED in AMUSEMENT."

LOL! My, the Prince seems to be a shade testy, doesn't he? :-D Very Vegeta...I loved it.

Completely enjoyed Vegeta's reaction when Piccolo stated, that Vegeta loved Goku. He certainly didn't seem to expect this and I love the way it totally threw him. Also thought it was sweet that ultimately, he was okay with Piccolo knowing this...just so long as he didn't spread it around. :-)

Loved the initial scenes when Goku finally turned up. Loved it when Vegeta had regained his composure and got into a fighting stance, talking about sparring, just after Goku made a point of getting a response from him and calling him 'Geta...loved how Piccolo saw right through this...LOL!

...And this is where the fun stopped, and the idiot brigade showed up.

Gutless bastards...they were playing on the fact that Goku wouldn't fight his own son, probably hoping that Vegeta would, and there would end the relationship. I'm so proud of Vegeta for being able to turn the other cheek...it would not have been easy...I was ready to beat the shit out of them all, myself.

None of this can have been easy on Goku either...he tried to keep it civil, but they wouldn't comply. I love this bit:

"Turs bas back on them like they had done to him and tell them that should they need someone to save their planet they needed to remember that the four of them were so muchter ter than he was. Filth like him didn�t deserve to save their world."

I know that he would never do this, not just for their sake, but for the planet itself and the billions of people he shared the Earth with, but just for once, it would be nice if he just gave them the finger and took off into space with Vegeta, leaving them to their 'holier than thou' lives.

Gods I hate Tien! Really loved the way Piccolo was unfazed by Gohan's attempt at emotional blackmail...yay Piccolo!

Don't blame Vegeta for his outburst at all. Thought that Goku handled him wonderfully, simply restraining him, without hurting him, showing no anger at his actions, silently, yet obviously, supporting him, whilst not actually allowing him to further hurt his son...beautifully handled.

Totally loved his answer to the dweeb team:

�Maybe I think he�s better than the alternative.�

Well said Goku! :-)

Truly, seriously and deeply annoyed with Tien. Very pleased that Goku told them nothing. He shouldn't have tstifstify their status for them to approve of the relationship. Goku doesn't need their approval, what he needs is to go out and get some new friends. He's already got the best anyway, with Vegeta and Piccolo :-)

"But he looked at Goku, told him without having to speak that he was willing to give him this because he cared about Goku and was willing to stand by his decision."

Got all misty eyed at this.

I love how Piccolo stepped up to bat for them. Although, for me, a le Mle Masenko, would go down well just about here :-)

Felt bad for Goku, because this hurt him, but I personally think that he's better off without them.

"Reached out and touched Vegeta, felt strong, gloved fingers on his wrist, and closed his eyes, concentrated on where he wanted to go and instant transmissioned them out."

Really loved the scene which culminated in the above sentence ...A whole wealth of emotion in this. Very well done!

"ASSHOLES! * Goku calmly h bac back author-ess as she attempts to get close enough to keyboard to accidentally kill Gohan & Tien. *"

Damn that instant tansmission, isn't he supposed to be with Vegeta? LOL!

Hmm, I'm sort of curious as to where Goku is taking Vegeta as well.

Definitely looking forward to the next chapter :-)

LOL! Totally loved the end dialogue :-D

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