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Reviews for The Meaning of Pride

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Hecate18 on March 31, 2004
Yay reviewing on time and on the same day!!! I am now back from the 'movies' ^_~ It was good, I laughed, I jumped out of my seat, but mostly I laughed O_o

I really liked that chap, I still feel a little sorry for Bulma though, but someone was bound to get hurt. And Gohan, he is really annoying me, *shake my fist at him then run away* (I'll leave Goku or Vegeta to deal with him.) Really enjoying this! It's good now that they've got a house, hopefully things will get better for them. ^_^
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From ANON - jaygoose on March 31, 2004
I am so glad Goku finally told Gohan off. But I do feel bad about how things ended with Vegeta and Bulma. I can't say that I blame the girl. If I had just lost Vegeta to my best friend I don't think that there would be any consoling me either. I am pleased that Vegeta has a soft spot for Goten though, it will make things so much easier. All and all a great chapter.
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From ANON - Getarian on March 31, 2004
Really loved the way Vegeta was responding to Goku's caresses. Loved the thoughts flitting across his mind, the way his body rocked back against Goku's fingers...the imagery was impressive :-)

Really loved the way Goku was looking at Vegeta :-)

"...and if he didn�t pick up on the rest from there than Vegeta was not going to waste his time trying to explain it."

Liked this! Very Vegeta :-)

"The fingers were moving, slicked with the oily lubricant. He caught Kakarot�s eyes, stared back at him. Panted and pushed back."

Oh swoon! Very erotic!

"he wiped his fingers on the blanket"

Way to kill the mood. LOL!

"Vegeta picked the stupid tube up again, squeezed it out on his palm,.... Used the hand he wrapped around Kakarot to guide him to where he was needed."

Ah, Vegeta, Vegeta, Vegeta...what happened to your resolve...LOL!

Oh f***! That was one incredible lemon!

Loved Goku's afterthoughts...really loved this:

"Apparently the Saiyans didn�t have words for things like this either. Because Vegeta was just looking back."

Nicely described...could feel the stunned after-effects of their lovemaking. I imagine that neither of them expected it to be that explosive. :-)

"Thought that: �Shower?� would suffice for now."
LOL!

Loved this:
"Thought of how strong the shorter Saiyan had to be to hold onto that part of himself through all the shit his life had given him."

"There was a snort and Vegeta said, rather dryly: �Very few people ever get to have sex that good, Kakarot."

Got that right! That's 'cause these two were made for each other... the they're both hot. :-)

"�Oh.� Thought with a bit of blush that this was not the first time he had thought about other guys."

Oh, I wonder who? Please, not Yamcha...although, he is a more realistic choice than say, Krillin or Tien :-)

"...Because there was nothing to be ashamed of. Vegeta was perfect. He was Saiyan.
And Goku liked him. That was all that mattered."

Yeah! You te'em 'em Goku!

Loved the end dialogue...and I'm with Goku...I don't wonder why either...just grateful, very grateful...I love when Vegeta writhes and growls too :-)

"Yep. I�m cruel. But I try to make up for my cruelness. *mostly, anyway.*"
You do...very nicely too :-)

"And writing this fic is making me like the Prince more and more. Every time I write about him I start to understand him a little more and ERG because I like Goku. *sheeeeesh *"

LOL! Yeah, I know what you mean though, I sort of had an "eh" attitude towards Yamcha, until I started to give him the (hopefully)funny lines in one of my fics, they seemed to suit his character, and I ended up likthe the character better than before :-)

...And Yeah! More Saiyan Goku! Love his Kakarot side gently mixed with his Goku side.

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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 30, 2004
*wipes away tears of joy* That was a awesome lemon...
It will be forever imprinted on my mind, mainly because I will go and read it again...^.^

wanted to grab the hair and drag Kakarot�s mouth to where it would be most useful. --hehe I loved that.

Wrapped his hands in thankeankets. Moaned. Felt that the first noise freed him to express the others.--gosh Vegeta is so sexy! Just yum!

Stared at him like he was something precious.---oh he is...he is very precious. That was a beautiful line

Vegeta looked at him. That was the only reflection that made it past the fuzz that his brain had become.--rofl awww

There was a snort and Vegeta said, rather dryly: �Very few people ever get to have sex that good, Kakarot. --well isn't that very nice of the Ouji to say...aww a lovely compliment! I love the relationship between these two. I love how you write it. I love how everything was described and I do mean everything! That lemon was hot, it was on fire!

I also agree with Goku in hoping this wasn't a one day insanity thing. *crosses fingers and hopes*
I love this fic....

There is no such thing as watching too much Moulin Rouge, dear.--Yeah that's true, how I love that movie.
(Gohan�s not my favorite anyway.)--he isn't mine either.
Hope you liked the lemon.---I think you know I loved it with every fiber in my being. ^.^

Oh and as for what you wrote in one of your res fos for my ficcie...(thanks for the reviews by the way)
I still have him locked in my closet, so 't t't try to kill him again.--*laughs evilly* Now why would I want to kill my Prince...again...? hehe do you think I would really try and kill him in Malicious? I suppose anything is possible...anything except that...*shifty eyes*or is it?*brainstorms for a way to get Vegeta out of your closet*

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From ANON - jaygoose on March 29, 2004
Gohan is such an ass. Oww...but now Goku gets to have Vegeta's ass. And all will soon be right with the world. He. He.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 29, 2004
When I read this a joy explodes inside of me and I want to run to a mountain top and sing "The hills are alive...." (Maybe I have been watching a little bit too much Moulin Rouge) Well you get the general idea.

(Wanted to slap that boy until he was blind and deaf and dumb and had no chance to interrupt him again.)--rofl! Yeah I personally agree, and think Vegeta should have done that.
We rWe realize you can�t talk, Vegeta thought vindictively.--rofl! That is great...

All those idiots, the bald one (yeah, technically he had hair, but he would always be referred to the as the �bald one�) and the green one and those other ones that showed up sometimes; --rofl, I love how Vegeta describles these people. I also loved how Vegeta felt about Gohan and how much it disturbed him to see/hear Gohan treat his father the way he did. I felt sad when he said no one has respect for Kakarott... The essence of the ppl in this fic is captured so well. I hated Gohan so much and what he said, I wished someone would have ripped his head off or at least his lips. Like when he said at least you waited until mom died...I wanted to hurt him badly...

Kakarot either needed to overcome his house phobia or he needed to find a new home to live in that was not a hole in the ground filled with grass and leaves. ---oh gawd...rofl Yeah, I think he should overcome the house phobia. Living in a hole is never fun, at least not to me.

Stopped dead in his tracks when he realized that he was planning his life around what the baka wanted.---aww *hugs Vegeta* That is so cute! I love that Vegeta wants to make him happy, its so sweet.

Watched Vegeta give him a look, watched him set his gloves to one side. Look back. Lick his own lips and have his own thoughts. ---ok Vegeta is too cute for his own good! I think if I was Goku I probably would have melted then died.

Watched the Prince drag a pillow from the pile of them at the head of the bed to put it under his hips.---AH! *dies* oh...Vegeta is just yum!!!! Sexy!!!!! Now you see here is a time that joyous feeling explodes through me and I wanna sing...I LOVE THIS FIC!!!!!

And felt a spasm as Vegeta bit down on his own knuckle and arched his back, pushed against his finger and moaned something that might have been a scream if not for the hand he pressed to his mouth.
This was absolutely going to kill him, Goku decided, because he wasn�t even inside of Vegeta yet and he felt like he would explode.---poor Goku...yeah right, that lucky duck...This is so freaking yum!!!!!...only that was the last sentence...*dies* you torture me...on purpose!!!!! T

Vegeta: Now I�m stuck like that for a whole day.--rofl...awww poor Ouji...but thats a nice way to be stuck.

You're probably right...I wouldn't get much sleep with this fic in my bed...
Thanks for another amazing chapter!!!!!
^.*
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From ANON - Getarian on March 29, 2004
Oh wow! I am really liking the way this is going...

...Although, the pace of the lemon is killing me. Very realistic though...love that! :-)

Loved Vegeta's thoughts as he listened to Gohan berate his father. Particularly liked this sarcastic thought:

"How could Kakarot do what? Act like a Saiyan? Take a shower? Have sex with the Prince?"

LOL! Really liked the "Take a shower" line :-)

Really liked Vegeta's annoyance over the fact that Kakarot would just stand there and absorb his son's anger and not defend himself at all...that is a definite Goku trait, and I could feel Vegeta's own anger on behalf of Goku.

Really loved Vegeta's thoughts as far as the Z senshi were concerned...I have always been partial to his "screw you" attitude :-)

�Don�t apologize,� Vegeta said, �You have no reason to apologize to me.�

I loved this line! Felt so bad for Goku at that point. All he wants is to be himself. Couldn't really be that with ChChi, but once she passed on, he was able to start being himself, found that he had an attachment to his Prince, found that it was reciprocated, and went with it, only to be made to feel like it was something to be utterly ashamed of. I hate how Gohan brought ChiChi up, making it seem like Goku couldn't wait to move on from her...so unfair. That's why I loved that line. Vegeta's right, Goku has nothing to apologize for, and neither does Vegeta, although Vegeta does have to at least sort things with Bulma...that could be tricky, but it's not like they were commited or anything, but still, I feel a little bad for Bulma.

Loved the easy atmosphere of the fireside meal between the two Saiyans :-)

Loved this:

"Eventually he was going to get older and die. (For real.)" LOL!

"But they trusted Goku. Just as long as he didn�t act too much like a Saiyan and make them all nervous."

Yeah, now there's the rub. So long as he acts like a human, he's the hero...but let anything Saiyan show and watch out.

I'm glad that Goku is not letting his son's words keep him from being with Vegeta. :-)

Loved the whole sitting and then kissing on the log scene. The atmosphere, created by Goku's thoughts, the way Vegeta ate and then looked at Goku, Goku's uncertainty about what happens tomorrow, and Goku's mind wandering back to the steamy shower scene, followed by Goku moving closer to Vegeta, which ultimately, lead up to the kissing, was palpable.

"And then realized just what he was supposed to be doing with those fingers when he watched the Prince part his legs."

Hot! Very Hot!

"Felt all the blood in his body bottom out in his toes somewhere, because he was suddenly as unsure about this as a child."

Loved this! This, expressed well, a very natural reaction for first timers in any sexual situation. :-)

"This was absolutely going to kill him, Goku decided, because he wasn�t even inside of Vegeta yet and he felt like he would explode."

He's not the only one...except for the exploding part...damn, you write erotic lemons and partial lemons...this is hot!

Definitely can't wait for the next chapter :-)

"Vegeta: Now I�m stuck like that for a whole day.
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LOL! Poor Vegeta...you're a cruel woman, Card. :-)

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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 29, 2004
Ok so let me tell you what happened...

I am sitting here reading this fic and I am all into it you know drooling and pulling my hair out because I love it so much..and then I get to the end... and I'm like @_@!!!!! Gohan!!! What is he doing there!?!?! That was soooo good!!!

I was sooo not expecting that. I was like yeah sex is about to happen...then here comes Gohan pulling open the curtain. Even though I was dissapointed about no sex, that definately made up for it!

The emotional awkwardness and just plain emotion of this fic is awesome. I love how Vegeta didn't want to take Goku back to CC b/c of how he felt for Bulma and his son and just thought that would be disrespectful. And how Goku felt slightly guilty for bringing the Prince back to his house. I love this fic!!!!! It is soooo beyond supercalafragalisticexpealadocious!!!!!! (ok, I am more tired than I thought I was)

I love how you seem to pour yourself into the characters...making their emotions very real, very beleievable, and I just can't wait until tomorrow! I am sad and happy because they are together sort of...but so many things keep happening and Vegeta is still fighting with how he feels or how he will feel the next day about everything.

Beautfiul just beautiful....
*takes story to bed and goes to sleep with it*
^.*

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From ANON - Getarian on March 28, 2004
Really liked the peek inside Vegeta's head. I think that constantly living up to his heritage, the expectations of him and his pride has taken it's toll on him, and this is probably why he so easily is able to lay back, and give in wholly to how Goku makes him feel. It's a shame that he already feels that part of him that may regret the way he is behaving, but I am glad that he is at least able to let go for now.

I liked that Vegeta had too much respect for Bulma to go back to CC with Kakarot...but it must have been a bit hard for Goku, heading back to his place instead...where's a handy capsule house when you need one?

Really loved the atmosphere that you created once they entered Goku's house, both men wanting this to continue, yet Goku is being held back slightly by ghosts...the feel in the bathroom was well done. Vegeta was all business, but in a gentle way, whereas Goku seemed to be battling with varying le of of need, uncertainty and guilt...which rapidly changed into desire once they entered the shower. I really liked this scene :-)

Damn! What the hell is Gohan doing there? Little bastard is always popping up when you don't want him! Gods, way to ruin a moment kid!

Looks like the two full bloods have some explaining to do, as well as trying to overcome being caught in an extremely embarrassing situation.

Looking forward to seeing how this situation gets resolved. A Gallick Gun in Gohan's direction might help. LOL!

Loved the end dialogue. :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on March 27, 2004
Kami Damned Gohan. He always seemed to me to be a total kill joy. Now it has been proven. *Sighs* Aww, well I just know that the boys won't let this intrusion stop the banging from occurring. I hope.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 27, 2004
How did I like how that chapter ended???? Hm..... well I loved it despite the evil cliffy!!!!!
*appears in your room and shakes you* Um...I know you're really tired and all...but really how could you do that to me? How could you LEAVE SUCH A CLIFFHANGER!!!!! j/k I will live....I hope.... *waits for you to post next chapter*

I can�t believe I just wrote that on two hours of sleep.---me either that was fantastic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

He tasted every bit as good as he Vegeta did not want him to. --hehe, I bet he did.

Felt fingers on him. On his waist. Like he was a woman.--awww I like that line.

Wanted to be closer to him and farther away and the conflicting desires were going to drive him absolutely insane.---so nicely written, it's like reading poetry.

Didn�t want to fight. Wanted to be part of this man again. Didn�t want to have to shout and argue and protest.---I really loved this and the lines that came after it....he jhe just wanted to give in to something once...you just write this so well, really its more amazing everytime I read it.

Holding Vegeta captive and sucking on his collarbone had to be right up there with having a tea party with Cell, Freiza and kid Buu while he wore a dress and sang the soundtrack to Cats. ---ROFL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Now wouldn't that be a sight to see...hehe

Felt Vegeta taking his gloves off, and then (for one of the very first ti fel felt strong hands touch his skin. ---gods, I frng lng love that line...I swear that drove me over the edge....so, wonderful! Really freaking fantastic! You deserve and award you really do!

Well thank you for another beautiful chapter that I loved.
you are an excellent writer, with tons of creativeness...it really seems like writing just comes naturally for you...
I am kinda glad you are updating at noon because I am so tired I probably wont wake up until after 2 p.m.
I am soooooo going to bed now.
goodnight!
^.*
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From ANON - jaygoose on March 26, 2004
You wrote that on two hours of sleep?! I am in awe. You rock! That was beautifu.! *whipes away tears of happiness* You just reaffirmed my love of Goku and Geta fics. I am extemely sleepy so now I will go an take a nap and probably come back a give you a proper view. Bye Bye.
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From ANON - Getarian on March 25, 2004
ADDITIONAL: In response to your response to me :-)

"Poor Vegeta trying to get seduce sil silly non-seductive people like Nappa and Radditz."

LOL! Hey...wait a minute...I love R/V...ah, who cares, this was damn funny :-)

"I think Goku should just grab him from behind and have his way with him. Save everyone the trouble of listening to Radditz try to woo someone."

LOL! Scene: Vegeta slumped over railing of balcony bored shitless...Goku creeps up behind him. Radditz is arguing with a large mound behind a bush.

Radditz - "...Got that Nappa? Arse in, head down and for Gods sake try to come up with something a bit more romantic than "Hark, but what bulge through yonder Spandex makes.""

Nappa - (muffled) "Radditz, can't you just fly up to the balcony and boink him? I'm getting a strange head rush and my nose is way too close to my feet..."

Radditz growls his annoyance and turns back to face his Prince. Can't see him straight away, but hears a lot of strange moaning sounds.

Nappa - "Hey, what are those strange moaning sounds Radditz?"

Radditz spots his brother with his Prince, both are sweaty and naked, and the Prince is writhing in ecstacy.

Radditz - (Going red with rage - shakes fist in the air) "Fuck you Kakarot!"

Nappa - "I don't think that's going to win the Prince's heart for you Radditz...Just as well you did bring me along after all"

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From ANON - jaygoose on March 25, 2004
Ahhh...I love getting up in the morning and reading a good fic. I loved this chapter. I had no idea that Goku could be so complicated. You are reaffirming my theory,though. I believe that there is just some thing in Saiyan DNA that draws them to each other no matter what the gender. Vegeta was fightinforcforce of nature, there was no way he was going to win. Now, when's the banging going to start?
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 24, 2004
It's building!!!! The tension...

Bulma is very upset about all this, well actually so is everyone else for that matter. I really love how you build things up in this fic....very nice.

Scowled when he realized that he was disappointed the overgrown idiot had left without saying good-bye.--aww he scowled about it...lol thats so cute.

Oh. Kami. Here it came. He crossed his arms over his chest and stayed in the doorway.--yeah just stand there and be very quiet and maybe she will just dissappear.

And while he could fight with her just as well with words as he could fight with fists--love that line...and I bet he could.

I didn�t know you two were going to get all� Touchy-feely.--@_@ hehe that was definately a shocker, for Vegeta!!!!

She probably could not have stunned him more if she had somehow managed to toss a surf-boarding elephant on his head.--OMG wha??? rofl, that is hilarious...

Touchy-feely? With Kakarot?---aww Vegeta you know you want to...there's nothing better than getting all touchy feely with the only other full blooded saiyajin around.

Of course Kakarot got more attention, he was iyaniyan.--I knew he loved that big baka!

Maybe Vegeta was possessed again.
Maybe everyone was possessed.
Yep. Must be a possessing ghost or something. --rofl poor Kakarott, he thinks everyone is possessed! Although...Majin Vegeta is very delicious...

Oh no...Kakarott don't apologize for unknowingly flirting with Vegeta....I want you to flirt with Vegeta!!!!!

I love the little end notes...poor bagged Vegeta...but as long as Goku's saving him that's fine with me.

Another amazing chapter in which I was enthralled!
I love it!!!! and I know I say that everyday, but I do!

^.*
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