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Reviews for The Meaning of Pride

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - tigeress on May 30, 2004
well let just say I REALLY REALLY LIKE this story and hope to read more by you soon .....keep up the good work
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From VChan on May 26, 2004
OH SHIT! *clamps hand over her mouth, realizing she'd just yelled that aloud, possibly waking the other occupants of the house* oh my god.. Gohan just found out! holy crap.. *goes the chapter 10, trying to decide whether she should laugh or feel sorry for goku and vegeta*
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From ANON - Michael Mercer (AKA Nyuushin) on May 16, 2004
WOW......quite the awesome chapter! *runs to find and bookmark "Saiyan Enlightenment"* XD Can't wait to R&R THAT one. ^_^
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From ANON - The Authoress L & cO. on May 09, 2004
Sarcmaster, TAL's muse of all things citrus: NOOOOOOOOO! Where.... next chapter?! Need... Lemon... angsty... lemons!
T.: 0o: 0o... Sorry. He's got a bit of a one track mind. Sorry I/we havn't reveiwed sooner, but Sarcmaster wouldn't let me stop reading.
sarcmaster: Hey! I happen to be a MUSE of, as it's so elegantly 'b 'bumping uglies' fics. I have a certan quoa to fill!
TAL.... riiiiight. Don't listen. He's just addicted to your fic. *sigh* now I'm gonna halfta read ALL of yer fics.
Sarcmaster: YOU'D BETTER! *glares omniously*
Romio: Muse of all things fluffy (and yaoi, for that matter ^.^;;YeahYeah!
Shadow: (muse of all things Angsty (and sudden violence): Yeeeeaaaaaahhh. NOW! *has whip*
TAL: Eeeeeeek! Save me from my muses! Write more of you're fabulous, in character, fic! Otherwise I'll have to read for sooo long...
Shadow: We'll make her too. We'll send the plot bunnies!
TAL: NOOOOOOO! Not the plot bunnies of doom!
All formentioned muses: YES! BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
TAL: For the love of lube, save me!
PS: *Hands goku a Bike Gang Vegeta Plushie (TM)* and there's more where that came from if you get her to write more... *wink*
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From ANON - Hecate18 on May 08, 2004
Nooooooooooooooooo! (Please excuse the overdramaticness... I couldn't resist.) ^_^

That was HOT!!!
And so sweet at the end brought tears to my eyes... what a beautiful ending.
*Sobs uncontrollably*

Well looking forward to reading 'Saiyan Enlightenment'!

Sorry for the shortness, I have to catch my bus cause I am so not walking in the rain. ^-^
And you know what... I am your 200th reviewer! *Cheers and dances then realises she's gonna miss her bus*
Wish I knew IT U_U
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From ANON - Getarian on May 07, 2004
That was a truly amazing lemon. I loved the bit with the false tears, it highlighted the intensity of Vegeta's feelings extremely well.

"Saw the dark eyes glittering in amusement as he was watched and sneered at Kakarot. Tried very hard to stop wriggling and failed, decided there were other ways to get what he wante."
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Goku's control over Vegeta was very masterful, and he certainly seemed to know what he was doing, and seemed to be enjoying that fact very much... evil Kakarot :-) Loved how Vegeta did indeed get Goku to do what he wanted, very skilled... these two are bloody hot together. :-)

"His wrists were bruising now too. Which made Goku want to grin with pride and go around and show everyone what he had done."

Sounds very Saiya:-) :-) Glad that he has that possessive streak though, 'cause the only ones to show (apart from Bulma and the boys) aren't worth showing it too, nor would they understand the nature of it... not sure that I do to be honest... but I figure that it's along the same lines as marking a mate, such as a claim bite. :-)

"Him, because only he should see the Prince at his most vulnerable, at his most desirable, and Vegeta because he should look at them and remember what had just happened."

I really love this... it's almost poetic. :-)

"It was nice to have people that you could hang out with and not have to worry about defending your every move."

Yeah, this is nice. I am a bit surprised that Vegeta is okay with the bruising, but if it's a Saiyan type thing, then yeah, he's probably secretly proud of his mate, and he knows that Bulma and the boys don't judge them, so yeah... as I said, this is nice. :-)

Lothe the end dialogue. :-)

"...They will be explained as the �Saiyan enlightenment� goes on"

Ah... okay. :-)

"*grin * Yeah, Goku was teasing."

(smiles) Good. I thought he was... it was so funny. :-)

"Let the monkeys out to play I say. (Without dancing.)"

ROTFL!

Very pleased to see that this fic is only ending as far as the title is concerned... looking forward to "Saiyan Enlightenment" very much. :-)

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From ANON - macha on May 07, 2004
Hey, thanks for the heads up that I could IT also, but I also just read your responce to jaygoose, where toldtold her that stalking sayians wasn't the best idea. Are you trying to set me up?!

Ah, I think that your idea to create the sequel because of a shift in the story is a good idea. Vegeta's meaning of Pride has been revealed, and now...On to the sayian Enlightenm *s *stands up and pulls pom poms off of ground.* Hey just in case, there may be a possiblility that I could use them, without distracting Goku.

I like that Goku was concerned about Vegeta's bruises, and the possiblily that anybody else might see them, but that was certainly a human responce.

I get the feeling from Vegeta's sayian point of view, they may be something to be proud of.
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From ANON - suisheu on May 07, 2004
a sequel?! I'd say that's wonderful news, but i'm still trying catch my breath with the tempo of this one alone! I don't recall reading anything of yours before this... gotta start. Took me four days just to get this far on this one. I couldn't tear my eyes away from the computer screen. God! I'm astounded that anyone could write so... amazing? 'Well' just doesn't cut it. I'm in awe here. Geeze. Please forgive me, I'm truly at a loss for intelligent words. I would've reviewed every chappie before this, but... I kinda forgot with all the excitement and violence. Let me start off by saying that you gave Goku a very interesting personality. Unique, even. It suits him quite well. The relationship between he and Vegeta is agressive, but no complaints here. It's not everyday you run into a great work like this. It seems like they're constantly thinking of one another, touching, or doing something together. And the way Vegeta referrs to Piccolo is downright hilarious. I love the little nicknames he's given him, 'it' and 'green thing'. You've really put some depth into their personalities and their relationship. This fic is one of those where you to to begin at chapter one and end at chapter, whatever the last one is. There's so much that it's mind blowing. That whole gohan fiasco just keeps the temper up. The potential for violence is pretty much always there. Adds to the thrill of the experience. I'm so relieved that Tien died. I hated him. I hope goku can handle his son, though. This is a very inadeq pra praising of your story, but I really can't put much into word at the moment. Let's hope that Goku learns to control his saiyajin side better before another explosion takes place. I just got sucked right into the fic. you've got quite a bit of talent.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 07, 2004
^_^

Panted and felt false tears in his eyes, felt them fall down the side of his face, and this brought the baka�s attention back to him, as he licked the trail of the stupid false tears and then murmured something nonsensical and slowed back down. --*looks for oxygen mask as I feel death approaching* I love that...that is beautiful. This is all so sensual and loving.

Said his name louder.--evil evil saiyajin Prince...
This apparently knocked the breath right out of Kakarot, because he was suddenly struggling to breathe.--*dies, then undies remembering I have oxygen mask* Looks like the Prince's little plan worked not that I ever thought it wouldn't.

His wrists were bruising now too. Which made Goku want to grin with pride and go around and show everyone what he had done.--Why do I love that? Why does reading that drive me insane? I am a HENTAI!!!!! *says this like I never knew I was one*

Him, because only he should see the Prince at his most vulnerable, at his most desirable, and Vegeta because he should look at them and remember what had just happened.--Aww I loved that. That is so true. That is so sweet, I love this couple *sobs*

Which meant what? That they wouldn�t care or that Vegeta didn�t care if they saw him all bruised?--I totally loved this and the whole ending. I am so glad that Vegeta doesn't mind going around his family, with a bruise on his neck. That says a lot to me about Vegeta.

lmao at end notes...poor Geta

*shudders * If you ever come across a Nappa & Vegeta fic NEVER tell me about. *shudders more *--rofl!!!!! Don't worry I will~

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WoOt a sequel yeah!!!!!!!!!
Well I thought this story ennded very very nicely!
^.*
-MB-

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From jaygoose on May 07, 2004
I my goodness...that lemon or continuance of lemon, had me on the edge of my set. I knew it...your Goku and Geta lemons are the most intense compared to the other ones. I gosh, now I'm giddy. Dammit...my roommate is going to think that I am crazy for the rest of the day.
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From ANON - ~more continued!~ on May 07, 2004
*looks to the left (since the stupid $@(*@^$(^(*!@ computer won't let me make a kirby looking LEFT!!!!*

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*kidnaps Goku and Vegeta and take them to prom w/ her*

MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAA! U can have 'em back when I'm done... ^^

PS- ...XD Because name changing is fun!
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From ANON - ~continued~ on May 07, 2004

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From ANON - Dancing Sardines on May 07, 2004
Cap? CAP?! What the **** is a cap!?!??! Continuation?! @_@ Possibly no story tomorrow!?!?

Damn... u r SOOOOOOOOO lucky my senior prom is tomorrow and I probably won't have the time to go near a computer all weekend... -_-0 Gr, I tell u, gr....

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(>' ')> *looks to the right*
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From on May 07, 2004
Nice finish off, like Goku's fixation with the bruse,lol. I'll take a look at the site i'm always up for anything with the word saiyan in it. Haha. Well am off, Ja ne! ^_^
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From cueball2 on May 07, 2004
One more thing...

I have been buried in work. That's why I didn't update.

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