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Reviews for The Meaning of Pride

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - macha on April 28, 2004
Noooooooooo. *cries like a baby cuz there is nothing I can do about it* They took my ice cream, ate the steak from the barbeque fork, and didn't even stick around to have public sex. Dammit. *Kicks grill, then hops around on one foot until toes stop hurting.* Ah well, I guess the fanfiction forum is going to be the closest thing they have to public sex.

I like this chapter, and the depth it went into about Vegeta's Pride.

Sorry this is short, but I have to go to work.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 28, 2004
^__^ YEAH!!! NO MORE ASS CLOWN!!!!

Goten had always considered Tien to be one of those things that had gone out of style just about the time he got killed by Vegeta and Nappa the first time, and privately always wondered why the bastard thought he was still important. ---That is something I actually think for real!!! I hate Tien so much! hate him more than anyone on DBZ him and Chiatzu...

The fight that gave you �fuck the world� rights and made you the real ruler of the universe because nothing and nobody could defeat you.*cheers* YEAH!!! That's the kinda fight I 'm talking about! *grabs popcorn*

�I don�t think Tien�s done yet.� --LoL, nice sentence from a long paragraph of words...but I guess it ended up being the same basic thought he was having anyway. But I am glad he didnt say mor as not to worry Trunks...

Life was beautiful and fragile, and he could destroy it all in a moment if he wanted to. --You know as true as that is, that is just damn sexy to know that he could do that! And just wonderful to know that he can control and always could.

And all that fight he had found, wrapped up in Vegeta, embodied in him. --^.^ aww! That's so sweet. I love their relationship...it kills me everyday, but it's death in a good way! ^.~

�Its not Goku that�s getting fucked�� A smirk on his face that would be the last.--- -_- Oh gods....I want him to die. How I want that to be his last smirk...his last everything! I can't believe he said that. I can't believe how ignorant he is..well I can, but it still makes me so mad.

Another smirk. Then the sentence that sealed the deal, and signed the death certificate: �Where�s youide?ide?�--- O_O!!!!!!!!!! HATE HIM!!! Didn't think that was possible, but I do I hate him even more...I really do. Ia m sooooo mad!!!!! AH! I want Vegeta to rip his head off...just worse anything..just kill him! Oh and that line was very cool....

Power doubled. Burst and crackled and Vegeta was burning alive insif itf it. --Well when you say like that...he just sounds unbleievably sexy...and very very very dangerous...and sexy...!!!

Didn�t want to even so much as pretend to be a threat to Vegeta.---So this must be some serious stuff!?!? but I knew that. I am happy that Goku is doing this..and supporting his mate, which I had no doubt in my mind that he wouldn't. But wow I love this aspect that a saiyajin becoming so angry could feel threatened by any 'readably high' power levarouaround them.

at lat life did not last very long. Vegeta rose his hand, cracked a sadistic grin. �Good bye.� --*dies for a very long time* hehe..loved that so much. Loved the sadistic grin and could totally picture it...and loved when he said goodbye.
and especially glad that the wonderful beam of power destroyed the stupid 'ass clown'!!!! YEAH!!!! *dances to really rad music* HE is dead!!! FINALLY!!!!!

Turned again, dented the earth under him, stood in the midst of the debris that churned and cycloned around him. Stared at him. ---*is scared* ooohh but he is just so sexy! *tries not to diethouthough for a second he was goinggo pgo psycho or something...hehe. glad he didn't.
ROFL to Goku swearing to wash his clothes and loved how that made Vegeta drop his power level.

Tien�s gravestone marker: �Here Lies a Truly Stupid Ass Clown.�--ROFL!!!!!!

Oh gods...if I even dared to set limits or boundaries for my brothers they would lau laugh in my face. My younger brother who is 16 can be quite an ass clown himself sometimes but what can I do? Absolutely nothing...*sobs* hehe it's actually not that bad...unless he comes into my room when I am gone..or he drinks my Pepsi..because he has died many times for doing that.

I accept that I�ve transformed him into the idea of �baseless prejudice� and �meaningless hate� and both of those things I have no problem with getting rid of.)--I agree and I am truly glad he is dead...*finds dragonballs to cause some trouble* or is he??? j/k seriously I am glad he is dead I hate that dude!

^.*

-MB-

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From ANON - macha on April 27, 2004
:)))) Ice cream and steak. I think that they could still go out for those now. (Well, after the sex of course.*winks at Goku*)

I truely hope that Goten's 'feeling' was wrong. I don't really care for the idea of the full bloods duking it out for real. (Of course, I don't think you've put 'bonding' into this story, so although they may feel bad afterward, it wouldn't be suicidal to kill the other mate. If you have, then I need to do some rereading, because I missed that part.) Either way, is there something to Goten we haven't seen yet, why he would think such things. I've noticed people pass those kind of judgements based on 'what they would do if'.

So Tein is dead. (I would do a happy dance if it wasn't so immature) I am glad that you gave an explination to MB about the why, i.e. Tein is the embodiment of....
Goku's responce was he would do laundry? Hmmmm, is this all he really wanted to say?

Does this mean Bulma is really out of danger? I seem to recall earlier in the fic. Gohan made a statement to the fact Vegeta was leaving her all alone with no protection. Just seems to be reoccurring.

*licks ice cream cone while grilling steaks.* Thanks for the idea.
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From on April 27, 2004
Wew, what a good story, i really hope things turn out alright for Goku and Vegeta. They are the perfect couple, ^_^ Anyway whatever happens i just hope that they stay together. Can't wait till the next chap, Ja ne!
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 27, 2004
Don't feel bad about not updating when I thought you should...what do I know anyway. :) Besides I missed class anyway. I sat down and really thought about it and a I said...Self do you really want to be bored out of you sulk so very early in the morning when you have chapters that you could be finishing...and of course we all know waht the answer to that was. He He :)

Yes, the ass clown die dieded. I know that it is not r to to celebrate a character's death, even Tien's. But you are right he was a prejudice bastard and deserved to get smoked. Besides he didn't REALLY die anyway and somewhere someone is writing a fan fic were he is loved and charished and is not an ass clown. No really...I believe that. ;)
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 27, 2004
Awesomeness!

Knew that Kakarot would give him only to a level of that violence he craved, knew that when the insanity passed he would be thankful for that restraint his mate had.-- Love how he knows Goku will only allow so much and how he knows he would be thankful for the boundaries. Just love how he feels about Goku and this whole relationship. Vegeta, the saiyajin we think can not be kept so speak, contained or controlled is thankful for boundaries...

he knows he needs them...and Kakarott is brave enogh to set them.

�I like to watch you fight,� was the answer, �Its so�� --Well I am going to have to say...I loved that. I swear I stared at the comp screen for like 5 minutes reading that over and over...ahh your lemons are so great and this one is especially nice. I really really loved that part. Love their relationship. I love how he did watch him when they were fighting and how he felt proud of him...and it it to carry into this conversation just adds to the reality of this fic.

The way they talk during sex is insanely delicious.
And I am glad to know they both wanted Tien dead...wish he actually was dead.

Dende got up and walked away�thankfully�and didn�t even mumble something about them making out right there on the floor of the look out where everyone could clearly see them. --ROFL!!! Poor Dende (not!) He is probably going to go watch from around a corner or something.hehe...

Wished now that he had a time machine so he could go back and defeat Tien. --me too Trunks...me too. But some things are worse than death...oh wait he said defeat Tien...man I am really obsessed with killing Tien...

�STUPID TELEMARKETER BASTARDS! I PUT A PHONE IN THE CAPSULE HOUSE FOR A�oh, Trunks. There you are.� --ROFL! I could just see her doing that...

Then she turned and waddled�oh, he would never tell her that she waddled, but she did�away from them. -- LoLThats good that he would never tell her...b/c telling that to a pregnant woman may result in a sever injury on that persons behalf...

Removing his clothes took a record-breaking second. --LoL wow that is very fast. That is a super power within itself.

Loved the end notes!

honestly couldn�t see Goku killing anyone like that, or sitting back and letting it be done. --I agree with u totally and 100% and yeah I do remember that speech with Frieza i inf infamous in this household...don't know why but my brother repeats phrases from it a lot... and as for the ass clown...lmao never hear of that before but saw you and JayGoose exchanging the said name. Everytime I saw it I laughed. Well anywho yeah he deserved to die...but I wouldn't have killed him either...so I can understand and it makes sense. I just can't help,you know, to hate him and want him to accidently poke his eye out on a tree branch and then stumble over the side of a cliff breaking all of his bones and die a slow and agonizingly painful death...

^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - Pandora on April 27, 2004
Yeah, I like your fic so far. Glad you decided to take up my challenge. ^_^ I'm hooked. ^_^
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From ANON - macha on April 26, 2004
I like the fact you went into further detail about how the full bloods felt about the battle. I also liked the fact Vegeta didn't abuse Kakarrot for something he was angry with Tein about. Shows a maturing attitude on the Prince's part. Not that he isn't mature, but I see it as one of his character 'flaws' he is finally out growing/changing. This is good.

I am glad Trunks is okay, but I could have gone for the public sex thing. I think Goten could almost agree. *Looks in Dende's direction* "Don't like it? Then don't watch." (Although I really do think this would be way out of character for both of them)

So, Is Tein going to have a change of heart? Or is he still going to be a bastard? I really hope that he doesn't go after Bulma. I can see it happening, but it wouldn't be nice, and I think that there would have to be a paper, scissors, rock contest (probably all four/five sayians) as to who got to kill him then.

I think you already know this, so this will be the last time I write it. Update soon please. (I've also noticed that this doesn't seem to be a problem you have. I wish I could write as fast and as good as you do.)
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 26, 2004
I hate that Tien is still alive but if it leads to more Geta/Kaki banging then that is a good thing. And Trunks and Goten too...Hurray! Poor any-phone-in-Bulma's-general-area...:(

You probably won't believe this but I am actually working on my fic now. I am really. :)
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From ANON - Noel on April 26, 2004
I can't remember If I have reviewed this story yet (my mind is very small) but I have been reading from the very start :) Ewww I hate Tein for this grrrr the sad thing is I know someone who reacted that way to my one friend Bill who just happeneds to be gay. The man said he would kill Bill (hehe movie) if he ever saw him again. so this story is very close to home for me. Poor Bill used me as his freaking body gaurd (grrrrr....I am very mild mannered until you piss me off to bad hahaha no really im not which made that whole situation very amusing even though it wasn't) Sorry I digress (always)

I have to also say I LOVE the little comments with Geta and Goku and all the other characters at the end of the chapters they make me laugh soo hard I love them........well Like I have said before I can never get anything done if you keep writ (no (now I'm not complaining This just gives me an entertaining reason to procrastinate.)

Noel
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From ANON - Hecate18 on April 25, 2004
I wanted Tien to die, Vegeta pummling him to death would have suited me just fine. The nerve of that 3 eyed freak, attacking Goten and Trunks like that... he only succeeded in getting beaten to a pulp and making Goku and Vegeta horney. Somehow I don't think that was his primary objective.
At least Krillin has seen the error of his ways (though too little, too late.) But Tien... Arrrgg! He's a narrow-minded conceited, three-eyed bug that needs to be squished. ^-^ (Tien's not my favourite character as you can see. ^_^) *clears throat realising that she's ranting.* It's good to see Goku and Vegeta have made the best out of this situation. ^_~

*Grins sheepishly* You can blame the slowness of updates on two others fics I am currently working on (three as of today U_U) They're suchedy edy fics they are, demanding to be fed all the time. ^_^ But... this week 'hopefully' I will update 'MPS'
Scratch that, I'll try again... this week I'll *try* to update all of my fics. ^_^
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 25, 2004
*Sigh* what is there really to say...Tien is an ass clown...but we already know this...I guess they shouldn't have killed him...dammit! Oh, well, he got his ass "Royally" kicked...he he...I know you liked the pun. And it all ends with Trunks being alive and show adrenaline fueled banging...and everything is just about right with the world.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 25, 2004
I loved it!!!!!

And that was so unlike his lover that he actually felt a momentary fear--wow...even I am scared...but seriously if Vegeta had a moment of fear then things aren't too good....

His son had better be alive. His son had better be more than alive, he better be fine, he better be perfect. --hell yeah he better be perfect! I hope Trunks is ok....I am not liking this at all...*is very worried*

a blind sort of anger that meant something truly horrible had happened.---what is the horrible thing..the snse nse is killing me...I must read faster!!!!! Goku having a blind sort of anger.... I hope it's b/c he killed Tien...

This is my fight. That was my son. This asshole wants to die so damn badly I will gladly give it to him.--yeah! that's right Vegeta you tear him to bloody bits!!!!!!! How dare Tien hurt Trunks!!!! How could he do that. That is so freaking rude. He talks about Vegeta being bad..look at what he is doing..sneaking up on kids and beating them to near death.
I was shaking my fist at the computer screen when I was reading it....

Smirked�that was a proud smirk.--awww he is proud! That is so adorable....*sighs dreamily thens begins reading again* I want that freak of nature (Tien) to die!

Vegeta would kill him. Destroy him and ground his bones to dust.--YESSSSSS!!!!! DESTROY HIM!!!! grind those bones and turn them into glue!!!!!

Found himself watching this and wanting it. Wanting Vegeta.--hehe...aww. Love how he admires his mate.

moved with all the rage of anything that Goku had ever considered �evil� --well look at that... Tien believes Vegeta to be evil, and the one they trust most (Goku)...is looking at him the very same way...how ironic...

Goku moved forward, grabbed Vegeta.Stopped him from the murder. --ahh as much as I TRULY wanted the bastard to die, I am very happy Goku stopped him...

and thought that if Tien came after them again he would not spare his life.--rofl! I know he is very serious but that is why I laughed it is great to see Goku think like that and mean it!

Looked at Goku and demanded that he be given the release he needed so badly.--aww horny things! well I am glad Vegeta is going to get his release oone way or another just as long as he is happy!

Lovely end notes!!!
And another wonderful chap that I loved thank you!

^.*

-MB-

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From ANON - macha on April 24, 2004
My computer is screwing up, so I will try this again.

Noooooooooooooooooo! Don't do that. I would have fans head hunting me for centuries.

I wish that Vegeta could have maein ein dead. That's a very unexplored area, how would Goku react?

I think that they behaved very sayian like after the fight. I can imagine what a sayian victory party would be like after a battle. *Thinking Sayian orgy*

Update soon please, with sugar on top.

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From ANON - Ginia on April 24, 2004
Just so damn good. What else can I say? Sex does balance angst... even if there is no humor. *sigh* I think I'll survive.
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