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Reviews for A Prince Among Men

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - VGlover on April 29, 2004
This is realy good!
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From ANON - VGlover on April 29, 2004
This is realy good!
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From ANON - Ginia on April 29, 2004
O-over? *sniffle* So soon? Even with the epilogue still to come, I feel sorta sad. This was such a wonderful fic! Maybe a sequel? Please?
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From ANON - Webtester01 on April 29, 2004
Yes! Great Stoy!!

Interesting role reversal beteween Kakarott and Vegeta, realative to the twins' timeline.

I wonder if they will make a final appearance, as in give Kakarott the hormoe therapy.

I can see that now. Living in that time period, as a hermaphrodite. ROFL
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From ANON - kodachi on April 29, 2004
Nah, it�s okay the way it is now! Not too rushed... I do not like those drawn out fighting scenes aynway (well okay, sometimes they ARE damn good! ^-^)... Anyway, I�m not quite sure if there is real love between our two cuties... to me it almost looks like Vegeta only wants to fuck to get that lust-thingy out of his system and Kakarott ...well, the same reason, but the bond seems quite forced at the moment and in chapter...uh... 15(?) it looked like Kaky did NOT really like Vegeta...? (Was jealous and angry in fact) The question now is: Is there love going to blossom between those two? Alright, but- as always- I like your writing style and LOVE this chapter! It�s too bad it ghas to end, but we�ll still have all those other great stories ;) Am going to read TMOP now... Friendly greetings, ~kodachi~
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 29, 2004
I must say that Ishocshocked. I have never seen anything happen that fast in DBZ...But I will let you off the hook. This is a A/U and all. I loved your version of bonding by the way. It sounds sooo fun. Well, if your the dominate one anyway.

"Echos" huh? A chapter with an actual title. I find it hard not to title my chapters. Believe me, I have tried. I guess it is because it takes me so long to write them. He He.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 29, 2004
Woo hoo !

Vegeta�s mission was simple. Kill the King. Break him open and spread his blood everywhere, call out the challenge and initiate the fight. Ascend and defeat. Not exactly rocket science.---He seems to be very detailed about this... and knowing exactly what and how he is going to do it. ooo and I can't wait!

and spit on his father�s mangled corpse as he took the crown and declared himself the rightful ruler.--how barbaric, but they are saiyajins, and I am loving every minute of it. Hope this is how it all gets to play out too. Oh wow...King Vegeta...*dreamy eyes*

He had this vision of himself trying to fight his father and tripping on the beard he had accidentally grown in all the time it took for them to inch their way to the fight.--LoL, awww no patience, eh? Well partially patient if he is imagining all of this.

�So?� Kakarot replied, �Right now, you�re just one of us.� -- *gasp and choke* One of them ... no never that... j/k I like how Kakarott talks to Vegeta, and that line made me wonder if he will converse with him any differently once the Prince is King...?

He just treated him the same. Like an equal. (That sof tof treatment was both humbling and fucking annoying.) --ok nevermind above statement was just answered...I review very weird...I read copy and paste the line and then I write my response so I don't forget and then go back to reading the fic...strange...I know...

Of course, before Kakarot, he hadn�t even been attracted to anyone.--of course not, and I can see why..Kakatott is goregeous...oh and it just seems like elites are never bothered with that stuff unless someone if forcing them to mate or something...

ooo what a wonderful explantion of classes you gave.

*is still wearing oxygen mask* and good thing too, because that lemon damn near killed me! especially this part: Kakarot moved harder�not faster, but harder� that line has been proven to steal the breath from mechanical butterflys ...but since I have this trusty mask on, I am alive!!!!!

And Kakarot closed his eyes, curled his hands into tight fists, his body shook a little and he grated the words out the they were causing him pain. �That you�d claim me.�--O.O Oh no...what is wrong with Kakarot? He? He doesn't wan to be claimed or he would rather be the once doing the claiming...? Awww...hehe this really does feel like role reversal.

I love GnR too!!!!! *dances at a microphone like Axl* hehe *shrugs* Why did I do that?
(The younger him, not the �I tried to come back at the MTV thing and I was too chubby, had plastic surgery and braids version.) OFL OFL I totally agree...that was very horrible when he came back and I was very sad. Axl looked very horrible. I wr whr why he chose that hair choice???ugh....

^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 28, 2004
Hmm...what should I say. Well, will say that I didn't see the bonding coming...when it did. I also loved the way you did it. I don't know, did Kakarot seem a little sad.

Kakarot just stared at him, still. And then sighed heavily. �I should have known.� -----My first piece of evidence...
�The salve�s still on the counter,� was what he said. With some strange sort of effort, as if it took a great deal of will to remind him where the salve was. ----Yet more evidence in my favor.
And Kakarot closed his eyes, curled his hands into tight fists, his body shook a little and he grated the words out like they were causing him pain. �That you�d claim me.�---- I think that about sums it up.

I rest my case. Oh and I really liked this chapter.
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From ANON - chibi_no_oujo on April 28, 2004
well hell fucking yeah!...there was claimage!...three cheers for the claimage!...can't wait for the bloodiness that hte next couple of chapters promise to be...until then!
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From ANON - hudine on April 28, 2004
I just first of all whant to say that you are my absolute favourite yaio writer. I love your stuff they are very creative, and unique. I love the conversations you add at the end.

I think this is the best fic you have wrote yet. love it so far and can't wait to read the next part.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 28, 2004
It was unnerving to feel that tight grip of anger, and the twinge of jealousy that burned right through him. --This is so strange to me...almost like the roles have been reversed. I like it.

And he hated him, felt fury growing in him that this little idiot had just shown up arrogant and beaten and wounded and now look at him. Less than a month and he was gloriously powerful. --wow, he is jealous and sounded a lot like Vegeta. It's almost impossible for me to picture Kakarott's face staring at him thinking these things...almost...hehe

Kakarot had been waiting for years for his father�s little prediction to come true. Nothing yet. --ok again like Vegeta. Like when he father told him when he was young that one day he would become a super saiyajin. Which really drove Vegeta...obsessing that it was his birthright...I really am loving the simalarities. I don't know if you meant for it to happen that way or not...but either way it is very cool.

�The twins are gone.� --*sobs*
for that matter�twin�s life expectancy wasn�t that great anyway.--*sobs more* NO! I want the twins to live forever...but I guess nothing lasts forever only cold november rain...

and he felt as if he should have bowed to them. Should have acknowledged the power they held. But he didn�t. Hadn�t even thanked them.--Vegeta's thoughts always amaze me...and his actions make me laugh. It's wonderful he can think considerate things or acknowledge something of someone...but they will never know...

Nobody fucked with the Prince of Saiyans. --- except Goku...^.^ hehe couldn't resist.

Must be some sort of mental disorder that prevents me from making the word count.--LoL I am having that disorder too, only mine prevents me from writing chapterhehehehe

Krt: WHAT GOOD IS THIS GOING TO DO ME? We don�t even have TVS!--ROFL!!!! Freaking died when I read that...oh gosh...what is he going to do with that without a t.v....?

*sucks thumb and rocks back and forth in the fetal position *--LoL uh...I'm sorry, I meant my computer screen melted b/c the lemon was so hot!

I already miss the twins...*sobs all over again*

Lovely chap and glad that Radditz is getting some action!!! Can't wait for the showdown between Vegeta the the King!!! And Caradoc, I am interested in what he will do...even if it's nothing. I just really like that name! But serioulsy I am very anxious for Vegeta and the King @_@!!!!

^.*

-MB-

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 27, 2004
Awww...That was so special! Did I tell you that I like Radditz, cause I do. I have this wierd thing for the bad guys not that he's a bad guy in this fic...okay I will shut up be the this even gets out of hand.

I'm gonnas ths the twins...Whaaaaa!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 27, 2004
Wonderful chap

felt Kakarot�s tail wrap around the hand that was inside of him, and murmured in appreciation of this.--ok, that is just overload for my brain. This lemon was already on fire...but you just melted my brain...!

Kakarot started to breath with a bit more effort. Shook his head. �No� You�re� Perfect.�---aww that is so sweet! and sooo right.
�I know.�--LoL, I love Vegeta!!!!

That loyalty would keep them at their mother�s side until he was King.--LoL this line just struck me as funny because you know...not all of us can fight along our mothers side and wait for her to be a...King...hehe

(THE DAISIES! He kept yelling. What a freak.) --Rofl...@_@ yeah I am going to have to agree that guy is definately a freak!

�You�re so cute you make me want to puke.� And it had been a great thing to say. --ROFL. I think I will say that to someone I love.

�Well, then, I guess you�ll just have to.�--aww Radditz and Saima they are cute. You know it is so strange reading about her alive, when I know she is going to die...and it is very sad.

If you feel like you�ve been cheated out of a lemon, raise your hand.
*raises hand*

Krt: Hey! Look! I�m silly now!--O_O ROFL!!!
End notes hilarious as always

Poor dear. I�ll be so glad when he reclaims his throne.--yeah me too...
I knew Vegeta was afraid of dying so when the Prince killed him I was like O_O. I couldn't believe it but seeing as how protective and concerned he is for his mother then yeah he must like him an awful lot.
*is very sad* I am sad that the twins are getting ready to go back to their own time...*pouts* Ah...I know they have mates and such waiting for them...

^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 26, 2004
Hmm...I did just get cheated out of a lemon didn't I? I feel so violated. Just kidding...A wonderful chapter dispite all that. Hmm...so Raditz and Saima huh? I knew it! I am ever so clever.

I find that I have an exceptionally foul mouth...which is why all of my stories are rated R by default. I was surprised at first though because there weren't as many four letter words at the beginning of THOK but I soon found a way to slide them in there. It just seems to me that Saiyans curse...a lot.
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 25, 2004
The spank the monkey shirt was hilarious...it works on more than one level...clever. And Vegeta finally gets to be the dominate one...always good. I loved the last lines at the end...always very funny. Mommy...he he...
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