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By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 25, 2004
YAY!!!!

The last cylinder was put in place, and there was a filmy layer of energy that expanded in a dome around them.--Very cool...keeping the power in there so no one can feel it. Did the twins create that? They are so clever! ^.~

He felt a strange sense of diminished gravity, his hair hurt and stood up straighter. --that sounds pretty damn powerful.

�And how easy were you to be rid of?! How weak are you to scream the name of a 3rd class?! ---@_O!!!!! Wow, that is pretty low...but I understand why he is doing this..hehe but still...I smell ass beating coming on! If you can even smell a ass beating...-_-

Screamed as it crossed the sky and went straight through the stupid twin that had stopped yelling at him.--Oh my he killed his own son. *sobs* but he turned into a super saiyajin I am so proud *sobs more* Goten and Vegeta are brave young men, b/c even if I knew I could be brought back to life I still would not want to die. They sure do give up a lot of their life and time to do a lot of other things...helping out the alternate timelines and stuff. Gosh, I love the twins so much... *hugs them* They rule!

Looked at Vegeta. �So it worked then.� And collapsed back to the ground--rofl! Well you can tell things like this happen to them alot. They deal with things so well.

And he should have realized only their king would be so stupid as to team up with them. --yeah what a jerk! I can't believe him! Well I can, I am just highly...dissapointed? No...I knew he was always this way so I just hate the guy! *shakes fist at him*

Pointed at his shirt that looked hand-written.--rofl..he just had to do that! I missed his shirts...^.^

He looked like someone had told him he was adopted. --hehe thats a good way to describe a facial expression!

�Oh, whatever. I�m sixteen. whatwhat I do. Sleep. Eat. Fight. Fuck. What did you do?�
�Avoided gettingled led by my father.� --very funny light-hearted answer from Kakarott...but Vegeta's...wow and its true that is exactly what he did, and they are both so young having to go through all of this. I feel so badly for Vegeta...being a young man and having your father want you dead...when your father should be the person who is there for you comforts you someone you look up too...that must be a horrible feeling.

�here I am, aren�t I cute, and yes I think you should fuck me yig sig strong man you� thing.--LoL That is soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo cute!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *dies*

reminded him in that instant that it had been a good year since he had last done this.--ar *ar *gasp* Vegeta be careful!!!! j/k ^.~

Very lovely chapter!
Loving this story so much and I am so anxious to read it everyday! To see what will happen with Vegeta and the King. I love the twins!!!!! They are so cool! Red and Bardock are also pretty cool. I was rofl about the spank the monkey shirt and she was like what's so funnee??? That was such a great laugh....

End notes were very hilarious...
Hm..whatsup with the mommy thing? hehe cute....
Sorry for the short response. I�m tired too.--Don't be sorry...you work hard!!!!!

^.*

-MB-
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 24, 2004

Hell�the 3rd class wasn�t even informed of Freiza�s existence until after he was dead.--sheesh, they are really left out of the loop aren't they?

Because, honestly, who gave a damn what you did in the bedroom (or tent, as it were) just so long as you were having fun doing it? --*nods* That is so very right....and I lovs what is happening in that tent!

Superb lemon...very yummy!

Which left Saima with the older twin. So she shifted, didn�t feel as comfortable around him�because everyone knew that older twins were the ones that would cut your fucking head off and yank your innards out of your bleeding neck�rofl...oh yes everyone knows that....*is now scared of her twin brother*...

Another wonderful chappie...please excuse short review...I am so tired..sleep deprieved, please blame my university, they are trying to suck the very life out of me!

In your response to Getarian-
Rad, and good job Getarian for figuring out. She is a brave soul. I am always too afraid to post what I think for fear of being wrong...I hate being wrong. Spoilers are fun and I liked this spoiler...Yeah Frieza did have a brother named Cooler. I have only seen him in the DBZ movies though and proud to say I own all of theler ler movies. YAY ME!! But you have a very cool idea connecting all of that stuff from the ice caves to this. You are super rad!

^.*
-MB-
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 23, 2004
I say again that I love this fic. The Geta/Kaki lemon was soo good. I'm gonna get that good one day.

Poor Lil'Geta and Radditz, no action for them. :(
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From ANON - chibi no oujo on April 23, 2004
woohoo!...i'm finally reviewing a chapter!...i just had to say i fucking love all of your stories and unfortunately i have to download the chapters because i only get on the internet about once a week so you've always posted more chapters and i never get a chance to review but since i have this opportunity i thought i'd take it...i love the way you write...with actions instead of the 'he did' 'she did' thing...and i fucking _love_ the twins...though i think goten's shirts need to make an appearance...heh...anyhoo...just wanted to proclaim your fabulousness...can't wait for the next one!
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From ANON - Getarian on April 23, 2004
Things are heating up now. Good to see Radditz in think mode, haven't seen much of him that I've liked so far, this was good. Curious to know if he's going to inform his father about the readout though. It's pretty important stuff, especially as they're making plans to head back home shortly and face off with the King.

Loved Vegeta's vengeful thoughts as he hoped that news of his activities with Kakarot gets back to his father. :-D

"Because it was really unfucbelibelievable."

Couldn't have said better myself. That was one very steamy lemon. sizzling. Loved it. :-)

Always love it when the twins rock up. Loved this:

"Which left Saima with the older twin. So she shifted, didn�t feel as comfortable around him"

LOL! It went awfully quiet there, once Goten left. :-)

�If you wanted to see the dispatches I could get them for you.�

Could almost see her itching to get away. :-D

"He gave her a brief smile. �Its not me that needs to see them.�"

Hmm, who? Bardock? Prince Vegeta? I know that this is probably the world's dumbest moment of pondering, considering that there's a time machine in this story, but I was wondering how Vegeta knew that there was something that needed to be seen in the dispatches? Have they been flitting all around this universe in different time frames?

"Then Goten burst out of the tent, hauling the Prince by his hair�said Prince was fighting to get his clothes adjust properly�and he was saying in a rather annoyed voice that he had �Given you two hours! What the hell did you do with all your time exactly?!� And he dragged him right out of the camp."

There was no way to cut this highlight short without ruining it. But I justnd tnd this so damn hilarious. The imagery was brilliant. I could even imagine what happened inside the tent. Goten breaking it up, Vegeta frantically putting on his clothes and Kakarot being mighty indignant at it all...followed by what you wrote...so funny. LOL! I know that the Prince and Kakarot are only teenagers and that Goten lderlder than them, so they're just seeing an adult coming down on their teenage fun, but I wouldn't mind betting that Goten and 'Geta have been getting a private kick out of coming down on the parents...it would make a happy change for them. Still laughing, this was so funny! :-D

Really enjoyed this. :-D

So looking forward to nex next chapter :-)

LOL! Loved the end dialogue. Poor 'Geta. Poor Radditz :-D
nt tnt to respond to your reponse but I can't because of the spoiler warning.

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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 23, 2004
Awesome chappie!!!!

The ship had landed�if you call that crash that shoved them half the way through the crust of the planet, landing� rofl! Oh my...that doesn't sound too safe. I hope that everyone is ok, but seeing that they are all saiyajin I am sure they are.

Which made hindernder just how little of the 3rd class activities were reported to the royal house. He was a fucking Prince and he had never even heard of her.)--LoL, yeah that is strange...

Every single hour of every single day. (So it had only been one day, but damn, waking up in this thing seven times in the same day was enough to make him a bit snippety.)--ROFL!!! That is just too funny. Ah...*grabs sides and continues to laugh* Poor Vegeta, but it will all pay off when he is finished with his training..well at least I hope it all pays off. :)

Ate quickly to cover up this fact and stayed very still, grimaced and frowned and thought that he should not have to feel awkward around anyone. --aww that's cute and strange all at the same time. But I think it is adorable that Goten is combing Vegeta's hair...

�You�re horny!� he said. --O_O ewwww...I am finding that it is not so cute anymore..lol

He was craving (Kakarot) sex.--^.^ that's cute...

like she was someone�s pimp or something. --rofl...oh gods...I can picture her 'heidi fleiss' business now...marketing only the finest species of saiyajins to the highest bidder...

Then that moment broke and she hugged him. --Wow you know...I really like Saima, liked everything she said and thought it was very rad of her to consider just how 'normal' Vegeta is. A Prince yes, but still a man with feelings and emotions just as her. Thought it was very sweet of her to hug him.

�And I�m just supposed to be that easy?�--*falls over in shock* hehe...uh is he kidding!!! I loved that line!

hat hat you would remember how it was done.�--awwww that is so sweet of Vegeta!!! Not to mention terribly hot!!!!!

Loved the end notes too!

They�re not really dissing Kakarot. I wanted to see a ficcie where Vegeta got to be the Super Saiyan first.--Thanks for the explanation and that is such an awesome idea! Vegeta ssj 1st. I don't think I have ever read a fic that did that! YAY! *hugs you*

o.O. I don�t think Nappa would make a very good spy. He�s sort of large and obvious and if he just randomly showed up it would definitely raise some suspicions. --ROFL!!! Oh gosh that would be so hilarious to see a Nappa Spy...not that I want to, but the thought is very funny...

Wonderful chap I cant wait to see what happens next...

^.*

-MB-

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From ANON - Anon on April 22, 2004
A smirk. A sense of confidence that was just plain shocking for someone who had only had sex once (Kakarot did not count any women the Prince might have been with in this figure) and was completely separated from anything that was familiar. �You.� He said. - ROFL

Wonderful story!! I've read all of your work. Great stuff.

Keep it up!
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From ANON - Getarian on April 22, 2004
"OH COME ON, you have GOT to tell me who you think it is. *sobs * Just�just� Put it in a little extra review and I�ll take it off as soon as I get up in the morning. PUHLEEEEEZE! *begs and whimpers and gets Goku to do the same * *Vegeta stubbornly refused. *"

LOL! That's my Vegeta :-D

Okay, I'll tell you what I think, but you have to promise not to laugh hysterically, point a finger at me and start addressing me as 'loser' in your future responses, if I'm way off the mark...okay? Okay. (doesn't notice Card's and Goku's fingers crossed behind their backs as they nod t hea heads, chuckle at each other and agree. Is somewhat suspicious of Vegeta's knowing smirk though) :-)

Don't know exactly whether you just want my guess or a detailed reason why I think so, so I'll just give you my guess, if it's wrong...so be it...it won't be the first time :-) If it's right and you want to know my reasons just ask and I'll tell you in the next review.

I think that the culprits are King Vegeta and King Cold.

The reason why I said that you used cunning word play is because I just realised a little while ago that the 'Ice-creatures' as mentioned in 'Cross-eyed' could indeed be the Ice-jins, instead of the 'doctor who' type creatures I was actually visualising at the time :-)

Terribly sorry if my little theory is disappointing, I only held out, because I really hate looking like a fool, but unfortunately, I think I'm beginning to pull that look off quite well, :-D
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From ANON - Getarian on April 22, 2004
Hmm, that regeneration fluid sounds uncomfortable, but I suppose it's necessary if Goten wants the Prince to power up in four days.

Loved this:
"The ship had landed�if you call that crash that shoved them half the way through the crust of the planet, landing�"

LOL! Hope everyone was wearing their seat-belts. Sounds like the piloeds eds a few pointers.

"...Which made him wonder just how little of the 3rd class activities were reported to the royal house. He was a fucking Prince and he had never even heard of her.)"

Liked . V. Vegeta is beginning to sit up and take notice. :-)

"He wasn�t about to ask the twin just why he was getting the crap beat out of him so regularly."

LOL! Ah poor Vegeta, he obviously has no idea about the 'Super Saiyan plan' but still he shows up for his daily beating. I love his 'almost innocent' inner thoughts.

"He was �sparring� with the twin,"

Like how he mentally uses quotation marks in his thoughts about his spars with Goten.

Oh Ewww, Vegeta is getting horny around Goten, and Goten is so not impressed. LOL!

Poor Vegeta, I both laughed and sympathised when he was getting 'sort of told off' by Goten...it's not my poor baby's fault, he's terribly young, and he's been recently corrupted, and Goten has been so k..an..and Vegeta has no idea who Goten is, except being his impressive saviour. :-)
I was laughing my head off as I wrote this, whilst simultaneously feeling embarrassed for our teenaged Prince. I really am, I can feel my face heating up with embarrassment for him. One of those, 'Oh God, I can't look' moments. :-D

Yup. It's official. I do like Saima. She was able to see that there was more to the Prince than meets the eye, I like that..and she hugged him. So sweet. :
Ok
Okay, amazingly enough, I really didn't want Vegeta to pick Radditz, (still annoyed with him) so was very glad when he chose Kakarot. Totally loved how Kakarot tried to be all 'virginally indignant' when Vegeta admitted to wanting him...his attempt to throw Vegeta, produced some pretty swift results:

�And I�m just supposed to be that easy?�
�Well, if you�re not, I heard your brother��
"Oh, that little bastard didn�t even get the rest of the sentence out. He grabbed him by the hips and dragged him over to him,..."

LOL! Kakarot sure got shot of his coy attitude instantly...I thought this was hilarious :-D

Love how Vegeta misinterpreted Kakarot's question at the end, and how Kakarot was pretty happy not to inform him of his error. LOL! Still, pretty impressed that he had least considered giving Vegeta the choice this time. Glad that Vegeta got it wrong, uke Vegeta always works for me ;-)

Definitely looking forward to next chapter. :-)

Loved the end dialogue :-D

Love the image of Goten strutting around like a *cough* cock, wearing a T-shirt that says resident stud...it's so him :-D

"...(No really, it�s not necessarily a bad thing, but if I don�t ignore you than I�ll explain it and I was going to put it in the story (somewhere).)"

Understood :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 22, 2004
Well, alright, more m/m action. I really needed that after reading Never Before. Now...Kaki is so cute pouting. I can just imagine. This chapter was cute. Geez, I am really going to have to find a better adjective than cute. Ooow...how bout adorable? ;)
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From ANON - Getarian on April 22, 2004
Humour, straight off the bat...

"�Explain it to me again,� Bardock said, felt like a idiot child. (Of course, he had the sneaking suspicion that everyone felt like an idiot child when twerewere in the general vicinity of this smirking little imp-twin.)"

LOL! "smirking little imp-twin" such a good description of Goten. :-D

Loved the banter between Bardock and his grandsons...Paused at this:

"...The resemblance was there, but there was also the similarities of their personalities."

Ya know, I never actually picked up on this (don't know why...probably a mind-set thing), but now that you've mentioned it, yeah...Kakarot is more 'Early Vegeh' h' in this fic, in a self obsessed kind of way, than Vegeta is, whereas Vegeta is still arrogant, but more of the 'clueless' variety...I kinda like this, makes a nice change. :-)

Love that Goten is going to train Vegeta...really love this counter to Bardock's protests:

�I�ll teach him how to fight for real,� Goten said,e wae way he taught us.�

Damn, I love those twins. :-)

Loved Goten's response to Bardock's incredulous question about how he's going to power up the Prince in four days...

"Goten grinned. �Trade secret.�"

*chuckle* That is so Goku. :-)

Thought that the twins reasons for concentrating on the Prince made perfect sense...and knowing Kakarot, this will only speed up his own ascension. ;-)

�Why power up a tyrant?� Red asked, �What makes you so sure that the Prince won�t follow in his father�s s?�
s?�

"Andeta eta gave her a lazy smile. �What makes you so sure he won�t?� Looked at them, �The two of you plan to take him back to the palace yourselves, so don�t preach at me about shit.�"

Yeah, you tell her 'Geta. She is talking about their mother here, and although he is an alternate version, he is still basically their mother, they know him.

"This made Red step back a bit. She gave him a reluctant nod of approval."

Something rare, I'm beginning to imagine...only twintwins... :-)

"�Geta here,� he smacked his brother on the back, �Is going to teach our dear Kaki that he has a brain as well as a dick and the brain is the better to think with.�"

LOL! Goten has such a way with words :-D Not sure that 'Kaki' is going to agree with him though :-)

"But there was no pain...
...Didn�t hurt. Didn�t burn. Tingled, were a bit chilly, and he liked it actually. Liked having one-upped his father."

Ah shit, my poor Vegeta. I knew that the nipple rings irritated him, but I never got that he was in pain, don't know how I missed that...I'm really hating King Vegeta now, not content with reducing his first born's ki, he had to leave him in constant pain...that's so bloody cruel.

"You put me out here, he wanted to say to the smelly old bastard, but you forgot I always come back."

(smiles) That's the Vegeta I know and love. :-)

Loved Goten's 'first lesson' :-D

"�I hardly need lessons from youe sne snapped."

Yeah sweetheart, I think you do. :-)

"Waking up wasn�t fun anymore."

LOL! Better than not waking up though. Almost feel sorry for the poor bastard, not quite, but almost. :-)

"...and then if Kakarot so much as touched him, he would get a knee to the groin or gut and a disgusted snort and sneer."
"That was not fun."

LOL! I can almost see the shocked look on his face, followed by the pout. Something tells me that the twins are not going to be his favourite people. :-D
...And possibly not Saima as well. She is really enjoying this :-D

"...So this whole situation was not just Kakarot�s fault."
"But was Vegeta getting punished for it? No. Just him."

Gods, I love a frustrated Kakarot, his logic is *almost* credible, in a 'he/she responded, so the 'how's' don't matter' kind of way. :-D

"Just because he did something less than �honorable� with the Prince didn�t mean all the lovely women should have to suffer.)"

LOL! Gotta love his ego...maybe Saima would agree to waking him up again...yeah right. :-D

"HOLY COW. (He�d seen a holy cow once, they were not that interesting.)"
ROTFL!

�Uh� It�s Goten�s. But� He only�I mean, we only did it the one time.�
"Snobby little show-off asshole."

LOL! Uh-oh, looks like his boy is usurping Kakarot's place as the resident stud...Kaki's not gonna like that :-)

Damn, I enjoyed this chapter. Looking forward to the next.

"Vegeta: You know, why the hell do I have to be the prudish one all the time?"
"Goten: Because Trunks isn�t in this story."

LOL! Snappy retort! Love it. :-)

Responding to your response to MB...

"*Card ignores the question about the twin�s life expectancy *"

Deeply hoping that you're ignoring it for another reason, (as yet unknown to us)...Shudders at any other reason. Love those twins.

"...Having Goten deal with his father and let Vegeta deal with their Mother. But then I was like� Naw. Because (personally) I thought it was more realistic this way."

Yeah, spot on! I loved it your way, it made more sense. :-)

"Sorry bout the crappy responses!"

Not crappy at all...loved the 'Doujinshi scene' in your reply to MB. :-)

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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 22, 2004
Lovely....

because elites were just fancy titles for fancy fuck-ups that could beat up one another but didn�t stand a chance against anything.--I won't believe it!!!!! Vegeta is the strongest!!!! Stronger than Goku! *sobs* My world is crashing! hehe, what the hell am I talking about? I just wanted to sob about something...

And a bored Red was nobody�s friend.--hehe, sounds a little scary.

But the Prince is behind on the powerlevel he should have. His father wants him dead and he had friends on his side that think it�s a great game to torture Saiyans.�--I can't help but feel that they are dissing Kakarott somehow. Even though I love what they are doing for Vegeta I think it is incredibly sweet.

�First lesson; pay attention. You should be aware of everything around you at all times.�--- ROFL! The irony of it all! Especially since he was meditating!

Then he patted him on the head and walked away. Just as simple as that. As if that little jerk was the Prince and Vegeta was not.--LoL Oh gods...I actually think I like this Goten more than the real Goten on DBZ...he is just to..ah there is no word to describe him! I love him! *grabs a to do list and jots down: kidnap the twins* Yeah so what was I saying.... *smiles and hides list* Why are you looking at me like that? It's not like I am committing a kidnapping...yet...

Those damn twins were just damn annoying and he really wished they would just jump out into space without a suit on and implode or something.--rofl! That is so mean! but very funny.

(He�d seen a holy cow once, they were not that interesting.)---rofl! he saw a holy cow, eh?

Krt: No, you should spend your time trying to figure out a way to get into my pants.--rofl. I agree.

*Hugs MB and then drags Geta off to nearest available closet to make lemonade.*---*dies*

I am very very excited to see what is going to happen when they get back to Planet Vegeta. King Vegeta deserves to die for treating his son like that. I wonder who the spy is..is it someone we know like Nappa...or just a nobody? Guess I have to wait and see... Anyway I love it!

^.*

-MB-

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From ANON - Ginia on April 21, 2004
You are a very bad influence on my school work... but in such a goooooood way! So the boys aren't going to give Kakarot any help to reach SS... probably just as well since he is currently a bit of an asshole. What are you going to do to Vegeta to make him change in only four days? Eagerly awaiting tomorrow - and whatever time I can steal to read your fics!
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 21, 2004
I'm glad that you got it. Usually people never get it when I'm trying to be humourous...at least in writing anyway. Poor Kaki, no ass for him. So sad! I can fully understand him not liking the twins they are soo taking his spotlight.
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From ANON - Getarian on April 21, 2004
Oh, I loved this chapter. Goten was so wonderful with his mum, and I loved how 'Geta was reading his father the 'riot act' The reversal of all roles was so wonderful, caring and funny.

Vegeta seemed a little out of it, and Goten was so soothing. I loved this:

�Its alright,� he said, �I�ll have you fixed up soon, I swear.�

Really love this side of Goten :-)

Really loved the scene between Goten and Vegeta by the river bank. Vegeta was so sweet, feeling insanely happy, but seeming to be not quite sure why, and using his attention to simply remain standing, so vulnerable, but with Goten there, he was completely safe, and the atmosphere you created here was wonderfully touching. :-)

Loved how Goten warned his mum what he was intending, so as to not freak him out. Really loved this scene. Even though Goten was completely disturbed by needing to do this, his attitude was very soothing. Still his reaction to Vegeta raising his tail, was very amusing:

"�Can�t believe this shit,� he said, and moved behind him. Licked his fingers and then fiddled with the barbell on his tail."

Vegeta was so cuddle worthy in this entire scene, he was being helped and he so very much appreciated it, and was glad to lay back and let the young man see to removing the ki repressants, not knowing that this is his son from an alternate universe, who is feeling quite squicked by all of this. The imagery was touchingly wonderful, whilst Goten's thoughts created a humorously sympathetic counter to it all.

Loved Vegeta's swift change of mood, once the repressors were gone. Loved how he was planning his revenge, but most of all loved this:

"But, before he did that� He was going to go back to camp and kick Kakarot in the balls."

LOL! True love never runs smooth :-)

Hmm, smart Goten. I wonder who the King's watchdog is?

"...Just like that. Punched him�Radditz, the second in command."

Yeah, you go 'Geta! Still not entirely happy with Radditz.

Loved 'Geta's 'little talk' with his old man. :-) It certainly made Kakarot think, definitely gave Saima some amusement, and hopefully is the turning point in his (hopefully) relationship with Vegeta. :-)

Yeah, gotta agree, that the Prince definitely needed to see this side of his people, see the way the third class were treated...although I'm imagining that his time with Freiza has made his ability to see the nastier aspects of life only too well.

Really looking forward to how things develop between the Prince and Bardock and his family [particularly Kakarot :-)] at this point. I hope he doesn't go back to being all snooty, now that he has his power back.

Loved the end dialogue: Particularly Vegeta's *sigh* LOL!

"Oh! I�m hoping I have outrageously cunning wordplay. *bounces up and down* Oh, I hope I hope I hope!"

LOL!

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