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By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Agent 182 on April 11, 2004
*sobs* you're gonna be gone! *falls to knees crying* NOOO!! Now i have to wait for an update! That's insane! *suspicious* i think this is a cruel way to torture all your readers... so cruel...
Anyway, rad chapter. As always. There was some spellling errors but you had a good reason, so busy with packing, but i could tell what you were trying to say. I hope you have fun on your trip and come back with lots of chapters so we can all read them! ^_~
tifutifully written as always!

Agent -182-
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From ANON - PrismaKakkerra on April 11, 2004
That is so good. I this soo insaitiable Goku! I'd love to wake him up every morning!!
Please continue!!!!! ~_~
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From ANON - PrismaKakkerra on April 10, 2004
I simply love this. No. I love everything you write. EVERYTHING!! Please write more!! *dying from anticipation* ~_~

PrismaKakkerra
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 10, 2004
That was the meanest thing that any one has ever done to me. AHHHHHHHHH!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 10, 2004
*sighs* That was really good....
I can't believe your going to be gone for a week...I can't live...well I can, but you know...I won't be able to live all that great without the luxury of your fics...

Had been attempting to figure out why the hell he was on planet 554whatever.--that sounds just like Vegeta...

Do you have any idea how long it takes to un-piss her off?�--rofl, reminds me of many woman.

Caradoc--I really like that name a lot!

Announcing that poor Prince Vegeta had mysteriously died when there was an explosion in his wing of the Palace. Would you believe that the same day he got that message there was a new entry in the log by the name of Vegeta?--*shakes fist at King Vegeta* That is just plain cruel. I feel so badly for Vegeta. He really, seems out of place.

Nobody offended the royalty or they would strike back at you with the fist of a world full of ignorant morons--rofl, thats a wonderful description.

I did love the part where Kakarott started to rub Vegeta's chest...*drools* That was great and Vegeta's tail went between them...very nice...
I love this fic!

^.*
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From ANON - Agent 182 on April 09, 2004
X.X I love this fic!
I saw it here earlier but i didn't feel up to reading much, but i finally sat down and read it. I love your writing style. Reminds me of Stephen King and that's a compliment! The characterization is excellent and the plot it too! I loved it when Kakkarot flipped off Radditz... i found it very funny... @.@ From what i've seen you update everday.. so- no waiting! That's so very rad! I'll be reading it tomorrow and i know it'll be great!
You're a very talented writer and i'm gonna get around to reading your other fics too! Might take a while... but i'm gono ito it!

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From ANON - Getarian on April 09, 2004
A really good chapter. I like the way you are portraying the characters in this. Pitting the arrogant Prince against the seedier element of Saiyan society, when all he has known is court intrigue and elite type squabbles. This is proving to be very interesting. I can't help but feel so sorry for the snobby Prince who is exceedingly out of his depth and is only just beginning to see the surface of this fact:

"...Had said it more than once that all of these smelly barbarians hated the Prince. Him. He was hated�which was something he had never considered, since everyone he had ever come in contact with besides his father just gushed about his utter perfection."

Quite an eye-opener for the Prince, and it just makes me want to hug him to bits and tell him that everything will be okay.

"And he was helpless as long as these things were holding him down."

This would be very frightening for anyone, I can imagine how terrifying it must be for someone who is used to being very much in control and able to fully take care of himself.

"Arrogant little pimple..."

LOL!

"Hated him and his stupid little face."

Quick, a pair of thick lens, prescription glasses for Saima :-D

Can understand Saima's angry thoughts towards Vegeta. In fact it's pretty natural considering the lifestyle of your third class warriors, up against the way you have portrayed life within the snug walls of the palace.

Can't help but feel sorry for the Prince though, he doesn't know any different, and also, he has been going through some rough crap himself, not to mention his time with Freiza, and it appears that the third class are just as ignorant of this fact, as Vegeta is, of their treatment by the upper echelons of Saiyan society.

Well, Bardock is certainly nobody's fool. He picked up on the coincidence of Prince Vegeta's 'death' and the new recruit immediately :-)

I haven't even met him yet, but I hate Caradoc. He is not the Prince! Vegeta is! I want King Vegeta dead!

�No,� Bardock said, �Caradoc is the Prince. But that doesn�t mean Vegeta couldn�t have been the former heir.�

Does Bardock really acknowledge Caradoc as the Prince, even though King Vegeta's firstborn is standing right in front of him? Or is he just being smart and keeping his Prince at a low profile for the time being?

�Former my ass!� the little thing yelled, bristled with energy and yelled: �I am the Prince of Saiyans! That fucking inbred moron is not going to take my place on the throne!�

You tell 'em Vegeta!

�Oh, man!� Kakarot said, �Why me?�

LOL!

"�I demand that you take me back to the Palace!� Vegeta said."

Not a wise move, with those ki restraints, sweetheart. :-(

Oooo, Kakarot is starting to get touchy, feely. Things are looking up :-)

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Loved the end dialogue :-)

"...You know how he doesn�t like to be mothered. *Vegeta is pouting in a corner somewhere. * Poor dear."

LOL! Probably almost as much as I don't want to mother him...I've got much better fantasies with him in mind :-D

"GAH1 I don�t think I could even think of Nappa having sex much less write about it. *shudder *"

ROTFL!

"...It�s okay. I didn�t really notice about the review. (I say this, but I�m a perfectionist sometimes.)"

I was convinced that you would notice and just stare at it and wonder what the hell I had been drinking :-D

I know that you are going on your vacation this weekend, so I wish you a safe journey, and lots of fun and relaxation. Will look forward to your return, as I will be salivating for the next chapters well and truly, by then :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 09, 2004
I really do love this fic. I must comment on you response to Getarian about Nappa and sex....EWWWW!

Now, on to the fic. Is Saima and Raditz gonna start something soon or do I have to step in? Hmmm? And the end notes were hilarious. Bardock does strike me and and old pervert too. I glad he's around though. He seems to be the smartest out of the bunch so far.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 09, 2004
Awesome!!!!!

Handsome in a bitchy sort of way.--LoL never heard of that b4, but very funny.

Figuring out why the hell his brother wanted the twerpy midget to join them was the mystery.---*gasp* VEGETA IS NOT A TWERPY MIDGET!!!...I read that line and was like I didn't know Krillen was in this fic...hehe

A glitter of light caught his eye and he pulled the tail up, looked at the underside of it, saw the barbell straight through the base of it and winced in pain.---aww, oh no, thats so sad...Poor Geta

�Oi, couldn�t you be more original?� Radditz rolled his eyes.--LoL

There were twelve Vegeta�s in the division, as if naming your kid after royalty (or the planet) was all the rage for those parents that realized their children were never going to make it past the third-class division. --GAH! ROFL!!!!

I would avoid saying you�re the Prince. Nobody out here really likes him.--*sobs* I do!, even though I'm not there...I feel badly for Vegeta. Having to wear smelly clothes in a smelly place, with ki suppressors, not knowing how any of that happened to him. *shakes fist* My poor Ouji!

Hell, if this guy was the Prince he was in for a hell of a shock.--hehe, I know. If I was Vegeta I would suggest a lake party so everyone can get clean. maybe wash their clothes or something...Just reading the way you described everything made me feel grimy. When that guy ran his finger across Vegeta's face...I was like ewwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!

�Alright, asshole, Dad said I have to go kick your ass.� --ROFL!!!! Radditz and his brotherly love! He is just too sweet.

(Vulgarity meant something entirely different to the upper class where saying �damn� in front of a lady was condemnable to social death.)--Aww , Vegeta's virgin ears have been cruelly violated! O_O

She moved up next to Vegeta, licked her fingers and wiped his face clean of the dirt with her SALIVA. (He felt so much cleaner.)--rofl! That is really gross. I would have rather just kept the dirt on my face.
getageta: Huh? And for that matter, could we please change me out of the bondage clothes? Did you really have to wrap me up in black straps?--BONDAGE VEGETA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *faints then dies* I think Goku..err Kakarott did have to tie him up in black straps! That is YUM!

I loved this chapter, I thought it was excellent and I can't wait for the update...well I can since it will be tomorrow, but you know what I mean. I love this story and I can't wait to see what is going to happen. The personalitys are great also!

^.*
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 09, 2004
Oooo I loved this chapter!

I totally love how you write Kakarott, very interesting sex crazed saiyajin...
And poor Radditz...ahh no sex for him.

I am very interested about what is on Vegeta's tail...
and I am equally as interested in about reading Saima's death for touch Vegeta...*fake laughs* just kidding...*smiles*
I don't want anyone to die. ^.~

I like the idea that Goten and Geta created this universe with their mischief, that is so cool!
^.*
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 08, 2004
Another great chappie. I don't even feel bad about not getting the lemon cookie anymore. I like the lewd language by the way...my family are royalty when ites tes to offensive language...I am sure that's were I get it from. Every other word that comes out of my mouth is vulgar or at least that's what everyone says.
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From ANON - Getarian on April 08, 2004
Oh good God! What a day I'm having. Please ignore this idiotic bit at the end of my review:

"but I'm assuming that they are responsible for the lowered ki?"I juI just cut it fry pry previous review, when I noticed the error, and plonked it in the review space, before cutting and pasting my actual review...(I always review on wordpad, since I once reviewed in the early days and the damn review didn't go through and I had to rewrite the whole thing, which really annoyed me...it's now a safeguard sort of thing) Anyhoo...where was I?

Oh yeah, I cut the silly thing again. because I'm incredibly lazy, pasted it in the right place and then conveniently ft tht the stupid thing was still sitting at the bottom of the review page.

I've just noticed that this explanation is waaay longer than if I had just typed out the stupid sentence instead of cutting and pasting.

Maybe I should have just said. Please ignore. I fucked up :-D
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From ANON - Getarian on April 08, 2004
I like the way you have the third class soldiers as pretty much feral outcasts, Bardock and his boys, and so far, Saima, as a class above them, but still able to muck in with them, and the Prince as all refined and dead out of his depths amongst the rabble...with the added burden of ki restraints...a recipe for disaster and hopefully, ultimately, a protective Kakarot... I think I'm going to enjoy this.

"...saw the barbell straight through the base of it and winced in pain."

Oh, painful. My poor Vegeta :-(

My poor Vegeta is so, in over his head, at the moment, that all my mothering instincts are kicking in...that's not a good thing...I much prefer it when my hormones kick in where Vegeta is concerned. :-)

�What is that fucking horrendous smell?�

LOL! Poor baby. How is it possible to feel sofor for him and crack up at the same time? :-)

�I am not his boyfriend!� Vegeta snapped, �How dare you say that about me.�

deardear, and he has still yet to meet the actual scum of the troops...I've got a bad feeling about all of this...in a, this is a great idea, sort of way :-)

Poor Vegeta (I have a feeling, I'm going to be saying this alot) Those nipple ring things must be driving him crazy...sounds so uncomfortable.

"�I am fully capable of taking care of myself,� Vegeta said."

Arrrgh! I hate it when he does this! Ki restraints Vegeta...remember? Keep close to Kakarot at all times ;-)

I am so glad that Kakarot asked Saima to watch over Vegeta, and pleased that Saima actually did so. Vegeta really doesn't seem to know what sort of people he's dealing with and I'm a little scared for him.

Loved his thoughts when the others got all vulgar around him :-)

"She moved up next to Vegeta, licked her fingers and wiped his face clean of the dirt with her SALIVA. (He felt so much cleaner.)"

LOL! Gods, I loved this :-D

"�Are you all barbarians?� he asked."

*chuckle* Silly Vegeta, don't be pushing away the few people who are willing to help you through this mess.

This is a very interesting story and I am definitely looking forward to the next chapter :-)

"Darn! Everyone thinks the Twins had something to do with where Vegeta is."

Yeah, When I read my review...I not tha that I made a mistake, where I wrote:

"but I'm assuming that they are responsible for the lowered ki? "

I actually meant to write 'aren't' *sigh* That's what comes of rushing...didn't proof-read.

Although, it did seem to be the logical first choice, which is why I thought so, but yeah, as I , by, by the end of the chapter, no...definitely not. They wouldn't do that to their 'mum'. Still trying to figure out who the hell could have done it...

"Yes! Now that we see what Goku would have been we all understand why Goten is. Isn�t that great?!"

*chuckle* It is actually :-)

"(I have decided about Radditz sex life. Depends on how he well he behaves.)"

Oooo, interesting...If he behaves, please tell me it's with Vegeta and not Nappa...LOL!

but I'm assuming that they are responsible for the lowered ki?
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From ANON - Hecate18 on April 08, 2004
I love the way Vegeta keeps rubbing his chest when he gets angry, I�m guessing its because of the ki suppressers. ^_^

And who would dare touch Vegeta�s tail, blasphemy I tell you! (Trying to get back into Vegeta�s good books� I still love you!!!) ^-^

�wiped his face clean of the dirt with her SALIVA. (He felt so much cleaner.)� � I think I�ll stick to showers. O_o

Looking forward to the next chap!�

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From ANON - Getarian on April 08, 2004
Loved this chapter.

"...and made lewd comments about their father�s predilection for having sex with his sons. As if."

LOL! I am fully aware that this is absolutely no laughing matter, but it's your fault (stated humorously) for putting in the "As if." :-D Cracked up at the image of Kakarot, (in my mind anyway) sneering, and expelling a pfft! as he thought this...LOL!

Liked Kakarot's attituden itn it came to dealing with those bastards who taunted him :-)

Ah, Radditz is a good brother :-)

"But he was good, he didn�t turn around and blast them all to hell,"

Probably shouldn't I guess ...but he should kick their pathetic arses all around the campsite :-)

Ah, poor Bardock, I'm assuming because of his visions?

�Yeah,� the tall idiot said, �And he looks like the asshole Prince.�

LOL! Now, now Vegeta and Kakarot, is that any way for either of you to be thinking and talking about the love of your life. :-D

"�Maybe we should strip search him,� the woman�Saima?�said."

Hentai! Hands off my...err, Kakarot's Prince :-)

"�Oh, found it,� the tall man said. He was holding Vegeta�s shirt up in the front and looking at his chest."

Ooh, very sensual...how could he not jump him at this point? :-)

"Toyed with his nipple like he was some trollop."

LOL! I love outraged, indignant, Vegeta :-)

"�Wondf thf there are more,� she said, ran her hands down his sides,..."

*chuckle* Yeah, I bet you do. I'm not sure if I could have stopped where she did though, which is why she gets to live and I would be a pile of ash :-)

"�Whoever made these was really adept. I haven�t seen anything like this before.� Sounded impressed."

Hmm, deeply mystified as to who would have done this to Vegeta. My immediate thought was that the twins had dropped 'mum' off in the general vicinit dad dad, but then I figured that they wouldn't do something like that to their mum (who was obviously out of it at the time) and then I really brushed them off my list when it was mentioned that Vegeta's power was low (although I wouldn't put it past Goten to come up with the nipple piercing...LOL!) but I'm assuming that they are responsible for the lowered ki? Then, I thought that maybe it was all part of the King's plot to get rid of his son, but then figured, why didn't they just kill him? So, at this point...the plot thickens and I'm completely clueless :-)

�Can�t leave me unsupervised with a new ass. Never know what I�ll do to it.�

LOL! This is a side that his alternate self, definitely passed on to Goten :-)

�Yeah,� she said, �Ow. Couldn�t you just you know� Cut it off?�

Yowsers! Is this woman crazy? You don't cut off a Saiyans tail! I wonder what it is that they were looking at, it sounds nasty.

This is really starting to heat up...can't wait for the next chapter!

LOL! Loved all of the end dialogue, but really cracked up at this:

"Radditz: Hey, do I get sex?"
"Card: Hush, you."

Poor Radditz...so near, yet so far...it's a cruel, cruel world. Hey, if Kakarot gets another round with Saima, then can Radditz and Vegeta just have a quickie? No? Okay, sorry Radditz...I tried...Sigh... :-D

"*has no idea how this information is helpful but shares it anyway. *"

*chuckle* This bit made me laugh...that's helpful :-)

"*Radditz pouts because he won�t get any sex with Vegeta. *"

Ahh...Gently takes Radditz by the hand, and shows him my world of fanfiction...coughing, as I quickly lead him past a couple of G/V fics and places him next to his Prince in my R/V fic...He is suitably unimpressed as he notices that I haven't even got to the sex scenes yet...Sheesh, there's no pleasing some people...you've hugged, what more do you want man?...he's only 16 at this point.

Radditsu: I want you to get past the boring shit, hurry up and age the boy, and get me some sex!

Getarian: *sigh* Me too!

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