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Reviews for Much Like Suffocating

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 26, 2004
Beautfiul opening paragraphs...
I really, really feel for the saiyajin Prince.
It's almost alarming...like how he feels wants to rip his skin off and such.
Yes this is a very dark fic, disturbing, and scary...not in the sense that I am jumping) but scary...
and I love it...

Goku firmly believed that there was no greater crime in the universe than the loss of freedom.---to think that there is no greater crime than that is to really understand what it is like to have freedom taken away...

I can't help but be suspicious of so many things...Bardock mostly...and everything....
I had suspicions about Bardock ever since Vegeta had thought of what else Bardock didn't tell his son. Or maybe more ppl were in on it than knew...bleh I have a brain ache now...

I find this fic very intricate...with many people I feel like should/shouldn't trust. The elaborate plan was exactly that...so much...and for so long. It's almost so hard to believe it was 10 yrs...so sad too.

Freedom was the curse.--The paragraphs before this were very emtional and I must say the saddest definition of freedom that I have ever heard. To know the extent of the effect this is having on the both of them is amazingly sad. But I wasn't expecting them to jump for joy of their freedom either. Because the side effects are just horrid.

and I feel a bit like I�ve done a stupid thing by having him �think� tbefobefore I gave a glimpse into that inner plot. --eh, you shouldn't feel stupand and of course I believe that you think Vegeta wouldn't choose life. Like I said I do not question you...I trust you as a writer and you have never let me down...but from the other side of it realreally dont have to explain to us. Because I know an author likes to make his/her fans happy but at the same time they have to be able to write what he/she wants. That is how one is distinguished from the crowd...not conformed by thoughts or opinions of another...but it is also understandble to want to explain oneself. Anyway...
I am just happy that you write all of thse stories. Very greatful...that you take time out to do all of it.

and I am glad you and Getarian are fine...and also glad you think of us as a fic family! *does a dance*

(and impatiently drumming my fingers against the table top whilst I wait for some ficcies to get new chapters�) --hehe, I have been trying to write as those who read my live journal know...but I have no motivation. And it's a complicated thing because writing is what I desire most. A passion I have always had...but like I told Dragonheart287 I am working on The Way it Wan't Written...but I promise nothing..b/c I don't want to lackth oth or emotion in my fic.(since lacking the passion I usually feel when I write, I fear it will turn out blah) but I am now (today) writing a little, seeing what will happen b/c I found a little inpsiration a bit ago...

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From Spacefille on April 26, 2004
Did something happen around here yesterday? *feins innocence... badly... hopes she hasn't shot herself in the foot so to speak* ANYway...

The drugged scene in the shower in Chapter 7 brought back memories of a DBZ fic I ra loa long time ago by an author named little Saru, only in that Vegeta was drugged in a Shower with Goku. Heh.

I'm kinda glad you added Chapter 8's explination, because I was getting a bit confused. *scratches head* It stoppers the flow of the fic a bit in the first part, I felt, thatthat's okay because as I said I was beginning to loose my way. I look forwards to the next part and where this all may be leading to, hope that Vegeta will be okay, Kakarrot will have hot monkey sex with him, etc. And ohh... you made Bardock a villian. Interesting...

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From ANON - Noel on April 26, 2004
OH man that chappie was soo awsome!!! I swear if you keep writting I will never get anything done!!!
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From ANON - Ginia on April 26, 2004
First off I read 8 before 7... seems a certain chapter challenged individual simply jumped straight to the last available chapter without looking at the beautifully correct chapter numbers. I like the plot within a plot you have going on. This is certainly dark but is no less wonderful for it. I hope Krillin can come to terms with what Bardock's dishonesty did to his moral standing. I kinda like the little fella in this fic (as opposed to wanting to filet him in another fic) and he could be a 'powerful' ally to Vegeta and Goku when/if they stand against Bardock and King Vegeta.
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From ANON - macha on April 25, 2004
One more thing. Does Bardock still have the ability to see into the future? If he does, that may explain part of his decision making, or seeming lack there of.
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From ANON - macha on April 25, 2004
It seems as though the group all had the plan very well thought out. Was it really that easy for them to get away? I can't imagine Frieze letting the Prince go that easily, and the icejin had his eyes on Bulma. I believe that he would see that as a double kick in the ass, and wouldn't be very happy about it.

So Vegeta chose to live another day. Had to wait for that day to be Ten years later, but he is still alive. I also see that he really isn't through the woods yet. Addiction is a bitch. Being addicted to a drug that has similariaties to sex has got to be worse.

I am very interested in seeing how far the war goes. Is there going to be some sort of mirical win, or is it going to get gory?

Any way, on with the adventure please.
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 25, 2004
I am soo liking this ficcy. Oh yeah! That was a Chevelle song! I love that song too actually...I should have caught that. Anyway, I love how everyone is in the fic but are aliens...more chances to be creative...and very well done I might add. I can't wait for more. Oh...and I wasn't that smug was I? I was just so happy I finally caught something...I never catch anything. :(
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 25, 2004
Amazing as always....

Kakarot had been here when Vegeta was brought here, he had been younger then, much younger, and he had just accepted Vegeta, had been the only one of the slaves that Freiza let near him, the only one allowed to clean him up when the day was done.---so they had spent time with each other in the past... and I can't believe that was 10 years of Vegeta's life he had to live like ...t...that is so long...now wonder he has to believe certain things....

Wanted to rip away this disguise and reveal what he knew was inside. -- Aww, really loved that line. I take that as physically and mentally...

Her part was done. Finished. Finito. --LoL, well I get the strange feeling that she is done...

�Hey, Chi,� she said--*falls over*...hehe wasn't expecting her...but then again I have no idea what to expect.

Vegeta�s name in front of the bitch-princess. --lmao, bitch princess? ^.^

I could be wrong though. He could be going to make popcorn and watch porn.--rofl!!!!

I wonder just how much Bardock didn�t tell his son.--I wonder too. Why didn't he tell his son..too horrible? I get the feeling we have just scratched the surfice with this fic. I love it....
Hm...I really wasn't sure how I expected Vegeta to react, but I Can say that he seems to be taking it very well, or maybe not...I don't want to speak to soon.

Beautifully written as always with much emotion...I love how Goku takes care of the Prince, and I can't help but feel sorry for them both. Seeing that they both have been through the same things and now it is like Goku has to relive much of it all over. I always love when someone puts themselves in anothers shoes...in this cas I am talking about Bulma as she thought to herself would she be able to survive under Frieza and she ended up saying she would have slit her wrists...Always gives me some sort of respect for a person when they take time out to look at it from another persons pov.

I do await the day Frieza gets what s coming to him...
Oh and that part of the fic that said she's blind...who were you talking about? Bulma? Gosh, I know I am an idiot but I was so confused on that part.

Anyway...lovely chappie....

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From ANON - Ginia on April 24, 2004
hmm... Vegeta chose slavery as a whore over death... he knows his people need him alive and 'eventually' (gee thanks dad) he would be rescued... A hard decision but one that a pri prince - who is thinking of his people - would make. He survived "years" of Freiza's torture without being broken - he will recover quickly from this addiction to Frieza's implant. Plus he has the assistance of someone who has been through it...
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From ANON - Rc on April 24, 2004
This is a great fic. I love it. I've never read anything like this! Fantastic!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 24, 2004
Super just wonderful...

Felt a strange tingling sense that he should have been offended by this. --I love this fic! That makes me sad though...Vegeta feeling that way but it is so real. It's kind of like deja vu or trying not to remember something repressed...just love how you have written this.

(We are lying again, aren�t we?)--love the truthful thoughts. So he just pushes these thought away eh? Or just pushes that device in the back of his mouth...

an honest jewel from the dead monarch of Juro, the midgets of the universe�is that Krillen's planet..hehe

and Freiza took it, purred and giggled his approval.--I just want to smack him when he does that.

Freiza giggled--*grates teeth then smacks Frieza* He was driving me crazy!!!!! I feel better now...

That maggot bastard had brought them to the same room Goku had been �saved� in.--Oh..wow..that must be emotional. I feel so awful for him.

�You�re going to need to tie him up somehow.�--Vegeta must be very uniterested, unamused, etc...he never even questions them. Not that he is really supposed to because he 'works' there..but still I just love how you have written this...and how truly void he really seems to be. I can't help but wonder what will happen when he does remember. The change from how is he is now to when he remembers should be an ineresting one.

You have to be awake to fight it or its triggered to release toxins.� --very clever...they don't make it easy at all.

She flipped her cat ears back,--how kawaii..Bulma with cat ears, me likey...

�Let me go,� Vegeta said. ---So he speaks...why is that? Is he finally 'interested' suspicious and wondering what exactly they are doing? Or what they want from him...

Knew what it felt like to have that taken away. The sense of pleasure, the ability to not think, not remember but just feel. ---Amazing...the ability not to think just feel...how a sentence can affect a person. How truly sad that is not to remember..not to even think...but just go with the flow...just go through life feeling not applying any thought to it...how utterly depressing that sounds...

Oh, look at that, back to the angst.--you know what? I love angst...I am a sucker for it and I love it more than anything else...Strange b/c I want everyone to be happy. But I just love when the characters have to go through such life altering situations they dont know if they will overcome or maybe they will but everything will be different. I just love the emotion that is poured into this story..I love to be sad with the characters..try to understand how they are feeling...have hope that they will feel better..cry and wonder with them
Also wonder will Vegeta bear the scars and wonder if it is worth it????

Love the end notes...
Bulma: Cool! I�ve got ears!--cool me too! *sarcastically..don't we all...j/k I know cat ears...

Alright, please don�t think I�m playing favs here or anything *sobs* you are playing favs!!! j/k I would never think that about you! You are rad!

Excellently written...
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From ANON - Getarian on April 23, 2004
To Setharo07.

I've only just now had a chance to come back and see if my review went through okay, and I just noticed your post. I just want to say thank-you for the kind thoughts and plushies (grins). It was very sweet of you. :-)

As you can see, I did keep readiing, because Card mentioned that no one else would be seeing Vegeta in the 'house' and yeah, that's what was truly bothering me. I have this huge hang-up about dignity, and so yeah, I thi thinking that Vegeta is going to have a hell of a hard time coming to terms with what happened to him as it is, but if he's contlyntly bumping into people who saw him like that, then he'll never be able to move on, regain his dignity (in terms of how he feels) and yeah, it was breaking my heart.

I know there'll be more angst, but hopefully I should be okay with that. Vegeta's free from Freiza's vile ches,hes,t wat was the biggie for me. But yeah, it's going to be shattering at times, but as you will no doubt agree, Card's stories are too amazing to walk away from, and I would only have done so if I couldn't handle anymore of the plotline, I think I can handle the angst, I couldn't handle what was happening to Vegeta when he wasn't even aware of what he was doing.

Thankfully, that part is now over, so yeah, I think I will be okay with it now, but I do thank you for your crn. rn. Much appreciated :-)
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From ANON - macha on April 23, 2004
I made a huge typing error in my last review. The word 'bork' is suppose to be 'work'. Sorry. These kinds of things happen when I try to type and watch TV at the same time.
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From ANON - macha on April 23, 2004
I liked this chapter. I do have to say this though, after having read your responces to reviews. I had been thinking that after Goku had been freed by Bardock that Frieza may have come up with a 'better' device, one that may have had to of had two triggers for the effect to take place, i.e. one in the mouth, and one in the tip of his finger. Of course, how they would bork if they were indepented of one another, well, I guess that won't be answered.

Seems like the next chapter is going to be somewhat harsh. I can't imagine that it would be too pleasent for anyone. Still anxious to read it though.
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 23, 2004
So I was right. I am pleased...now write more. :) Oh...Cool Bulma has cat ears...She's even cooler now.
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