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By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Getarian on April 23, 2004
Thank-you Card for thads-ads-up at the end. I went there first, to see if I should stay away or not. But because you told me what I needed to hear, then yes, I went ahead and read it.

Finally a chance to review without me being all weepy and whiny. :-)

I liked this. I thought that your Bulma (by the way, didn't pick up that she wasn't human last time, but then again, I didn't pick up that Krillin was a prince either) handled everything very well. She was business like, but without the cold detachment exhibited by Krillin.

Felt totally upset for Goku that they were taken to the very room that he was rescued from, the memory stabs must have been horrific. Thought he was amazing with Vegeta. Loved how he asked Bulma if she had a sleeping gas before they attempted to remove Vegeta's tooth. It's little things like that, which endear me to the man.

Hate that it was too dangerous to use any gas and that Vegeta had to be awake for the removal, but at least she was quick.

"�Let me go,� Vegeta said."

Sounds so calm, yet he was obviously sensing something was up, as I imagine that bondage wasn't new in this place. I could almost sense his desire to stay calm, in an increasingly worrying situation.

"�It hurts,� Goku said, quietly. Knew how it felt. Knew what it felt like to have that taken away..."

Really like this. Goku's show of solidarity. He and Vegeta share a common bond, and he is letting Vegeta know that he understands. None of this can be easy for him, but he soldiers on anyway.

"Vegeta nodded. Kept yanking his arms."

This too, is very well done. Vegeta is no doubt very much confused at this point, but he understands the pain, his silent, nodded response to Goku's words, speaks of his pain so much more than a yell ever could.

The end bit where Goku distracted Vegeta from his pain by seeing to his needs was very emotional. Very well written.

A very good chapter. Definitely looking forward to the escape. I know that it's going to be almost unbearable at times, for both the Prince, and Goku, but I think that these two can pull through it with each other, and am interested in seeing how it all unfolds. I'm just glad that Vegeta is free of that damn place, at least on a physical level, and that Goku no longer has to return there either.

"Vegeta: I am less than pleased with this fic."

LOL! Okay, this was very well placed. Needed this :-)

Sorry that you're having trouble with your computer. Bloody things can be a nuisance, and they are missed more than you realise when you no longer have regular access to one. I sincerely hope that you can sort out whatever the problem is.

Thanks once again for the heads up. It was much appreciated :-)

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From ANON - setharo07 on April 23, 2004
Bulma as a cat-girl?! I've gotta see a picture of that! I think that it's good that Vegeta is finally going to get out of the 'house', but the next weeks are going to be hell for him, and Goku as well. I like how the past is repeating itself, so Vegeta has more to relate to Goku with than just being Saiyan and enslaved by Freeza.
It must be torture for Goku to be in the same he was 'rescued' in by his father, but unlike himself, Vegeta has Goku with him to help him through.
What can it be that Goku, this 'it' as Vegeta sees him, want from him? I can't wait to find out, and see what happens. Ergh, how can Freeza be so cold? Never mind, he's evil, and a bastard to boot. Poor 'Geta, if only he could survive without having to deal with all this pain, but it would kill him. Very evil, having the pleasure devices send out toxins if he was trying to 'escape' Freeza by being knocked out when the device was removed, but its almost as evil to have them 'fight freedom' when they're awake when it's removed. In the end they may wish that they were dead instead of having to go through so much pain to obtain freedom, and yet not truly be free, as they will still have memories.

Ah, the angst returns. Poor Getarian, I hope you feel differently and continue reading, but either way, here's a whole bunch of 'Geta and Goku plushies. *Hands plushies to Getarian, and to Card as well.* You deserve more than this for all of your great stories, Card. Hope your computer is fixed soon.
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From ANON - kodachi on April 23, 2004
Yeah, it�s getting even better the more you write... one more story I look forward to read (almost) every day... I�m glad, nobody else gets to see Vegeta like that as I don�t like him being "someone else" and so "utterly helpess"... that�s... uh... just not HIM ;) But you do write them really good...I liow yow you portray Vegeta and Kakarott (but I said that already ^-^) Friendly Greetings, ~kodachi~
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From Spacefille on April 23, 2004
Hiiii!

You reviewed my fic. I'm glad lik liked it. *blushes*

I like this fic of yours a lot. I must know what happens and how and if they are going to be able to get Vegeta out of there. As for insanity... I could never write so much in so little time. I admire your mad writing skillz. *nods*

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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 23, 2004
Ah so the endurance of the Prince has proved to be true...

In this case I wish it hadn't. I feel so badly for Vegeta. I feel badly for them all. I do want him to remember, but as you said will that be better? But I do want him to be out of the crappy prescence of the icejin in which I so hate!

Felt a bit more than foolish about the whole �speak not the action you have just committed� thing. --LoL

Yes, his friend was probably the best one for this particular job, but that did not mean that he was exceptionally pleased that he was stuck with him in this situation when his outlook was �that�s inventive.�--Yeah I am going to have to agree with Goku on this one. I mean that seems like a pretty casual remark. I would have been thinking how the hell are we going to get that out of his mouth. Sheesh...I can't believe they pulled his tooth to put that device there.

so very kindly asked: �You are going to help me.� --LoL, that does not sound like a question to me.

�I�m sure that�s aou wou were getting to lie flat.� --rofl...*shakes head* what a hentai!

Loved when Goku looks in the mirror at himself and says its amazing how much his hair and eyes define him. It was very symbolic to me...

Something that depressed me is when Goku thinks of his past in never for too long though but long enough to make me wish he had never had to endure all of that...

I have a question are Bulma and Krillen from differnt planets? If so why do they even care to help Vegeta? What kind of species is Bulma? Or does it even matter? Hehe, I am truly a nosy person by nature...I usually try to hold it back. That part of me I find slightly annoying.

It just fascinates me the depths to which someone can �lose� themselves and the process they have to go through to get themselves back. --ah so very true and I am more than addicted and intrigued.

Anywho very wonderful chapter. I can't wait to read more.

Oh and yeah I was more than slightly amused it was a very funny chapter. And I can definately say you did have the angst/humor thung going on. Which I love.

^.*

-MB-

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From ANON - punker on April 23, 2004
Ummmm... good idea what w/ sticking the device in Vegeta's mouth, but... I don't see how taking his hand out of his mouth would test his endurance at all. I don't even understand why Vegeta needs to use his finger at all! Couldn't he just use his tongue...?

I don't know... everything else is good, honest! That one little concept was just... irking me. Plothole...? Or you just haven't gotten around to explaining yet...?
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From ANON - setharo07 on April 22, 2004
The song is "Send the Pain Below" by Chevelle. The thought popped into my mind in the middle of reading a chapter, and now, every time I see the title, the song pops into my head, especially that specific line. I'm kinda confused about the 'dorky Prince', but I understand about Goku being nearly identical to Bardock. Is Krillin a prince?, or did I just totally missed reading that in the earlier chapters? * bac back to check chapters.* Hm, nope, no mention of Krillin being a prince, but he's definitely not a servant. Oh well, car cares? Or should I care? Bulma, with a TAIL??!! Interesting turn of events, or at least a different idea on looks. Do we really want to know where her tools are? Maybe, maybe not, but Krillin will never know. 'Nowhere your ever going to see.' Like the attitude, keep up the great work Card!
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From ANON - macha on April 22, 2004
This just keeps getting more and more interesting! Keep up the good fic. writting.
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From ANON - Noel on April 22, 2004
OMG I love this story. It is very different from your others. I like the way this is going. and I can't wait until you up date again.
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 22, 2004
I had some problems with my computer in the library earlier. The power went out and then the internet connection went out. I got a chance to read the chapter but I didn't get a chance to review.

Anyway, what I had wanted to say at the time is that I am completely fascinated by this fic. So are Krillin and Bulma humans in this one? You did say that Bulma had a tail didn't you? And did you thatthat Krillin was a prince? I am not too positive that is what I read. I only had time to read it really quickly before class. I'm liking this one, if all those things are true, but not only if those things are true as always. This will probably be one of the most original stories that I have every read. I love it.
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From ANON - Getarian on April 22, 2004
Oh, this is going to be too hard for the Prince. It's not right.

"He had kept his hand away from Vegeta�s mouth for a while, had watched him get closer and closer to that furious backlash of pain and denial, and just before that could happen, he had to relent. Allowed the Prince to punch the drug until he was murmuring in sleepy contentment from it."

I can completely understand Goku relenting like that. It must be killing him to watch the Prince go through this, knowing full well what he is experiencing.

�Sheesh, Goku, you look like it was such a hassle to have sex for the whole day.�

I don't believe this? Does Krillin even know what Goku iing ing through? Does he not care what is currently happening to the Prince?

Krillin annoys me (yet again), I know he's helping and all that, but he's not the right man to have at Goku's side in all of this. The fact that he found the idea of one of Vegeta's teeth being replaced by that, addictive mind-altering device, to be "inventive" just made me want to shove one in his damn mouth, send him over to Freiza to be oiled and displayed, and see how fucking inventive he thinks it is then.

I know that Bulma is needed for pulling the tooth, I also know that they're doing everything they can for the Prince, but this is getting to be too much for me. How many other people are going to see the Prince in his current state? I don't care about the customers, if Vegeta comes across them once he is free then he can just kill them and be done with it, but these others...Krillin and Bulma, they're obviously together with the Saiyans...it's going to be too much for the Prince to handle.

I just want his dignity to be able to be salvaged, and it's going to be so much harder on him if people from his world are seeing him like this. I was okay with it just being Goku. But was starting to get jittery when I realised that Krillin was seeing him like this, but now Bulma?

Please tell me that they're getting Vegeta out of there soon, because I don't think I can keep taking these visits of theirs.

I really don't want to be a downer for one of your fics, especially one that is so incredibly well written...believe it or not, I know that if I could handle this sort of stuff, then I would be raving about this fic.

It's just that I'm on the borderline of not being able to read anymore of this, so if Vegeta is going to end up being paraded in front of anymore people, please just tell me and I'll stay away from this story, so as not to be such a downer in the review sect

"I think when I was in third grade I got all whimpery sad about a book called �Bridge to Teribitha� and �Where the Red Fern Grows.� But that�s it."

Haven't tho those, might be best if I never do.

I always get deeply emotional by things involving, children and animals.

I'm still haunted by Ge Orw Orwell's "Animal Farm" saw it as a kid, thought it was a cartoon...probably explains why I was never a cartoon type of person. Only got into DBZ 'cause my son watchitching. First episode I ever saw was "Final Atonement" Became fixated on Vegeta, went to the video shop gathered up all the earlier stuff and the rest, as they say, is history...became a full blown Vegeta fan.

Lost track of all the stuff I've cried over, don't even want to sit and think of them. I hate cryng.

"You know, my favorite (I say favorite and I mean the line that moved me the most while I wrote it) line from that chapter was �Some things,� it said to him, �You never forget.�"

This affected me greatly, yeah, this was just as Goku was about to push down on Vegeta, the waterworks had started up at this very point, I think I mentioned that, just didn't highlight, was very weepy and not thinking too straight...but yeah, the one where Vegeta panics and shouts �WHAT ARE YOU DOING TO ME?!� is definitely the one that shattered me.

But the "Some things" "You never forget" broke my heart, because I felt that Goku was speaking to Vegeta, not just saying these words outloud. I felt that he was warning him of what he still had yet to face, whilst at the same time opening up to the one man who could truly understand what he meant, unfortunately, at this point Vegeta was in no state to understand. Also Goku was doing this for Vegeta, so that he did not betray the man he is on a mission to rescue, the man who is now going through what Goku once had. I thought it was very brave and extremely touching...very emotional.

"Some things you never forget" Some things become a part of who you are, and you are no longer who you once were.

Regardless of me not being able to handle this story very well. It is without a doubt, an amazing piece of writing.
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From ANON - K-GT on April 22, 2004
I was just wondering, what happened to 'Even more of us' ? Oh and I love all your stories!
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From ANON - Getarian on April 22, 2004
Oh, I am so not good with deep angst...My heart actually picks up when I approach this fic...get so scared for Vegeta. I know that Goku has had just as horrible a run as Vegeta, and I imagine he, like Vegeta was in this way of life for such a terribly long time (actually finding out that Vegeta was here for 10 years, was even worse than thinking he was still 17, he was still a young man when he was kidnapped and now when his memory returns, he's going to be a mature man of 27, who's just spent ten years of his life, in a shatteringly mind-altered reality, that is too horrible to contemplate.

Both Goku and Vegeta are going to have to draw on all of their emotional strength just to be able to live with this. At least Vegeta will have Goku, who will completely understand what he is facing. Poor ol' Goku had no-one.

I feel for them both so very much. At this point though, my greatest worry is Vegeta, as he still has his reality to face up to, and being the Prince and future King of the Saiyans, is just added weight to his already heavy load.

What a mess!

Loved how Goku used his own memories of his time with Freiza to put one over on the disgusting freak. Really admiring the way he is handling all of this, cannot be easy.

"It was the look that the Prince had been famous for before he was kidnapped off his transport."

Pleased to see that some of the old Vegeta is still there, but heartbroken about it showing up whilst he is still unaware of what he is doing...can't really explain myself...it just really disturbed me for some reason.

�Do whatever you want,� he said, �Leave me be for a few moments.�
"The Prince actually looked offended."

That's the second show of emotion so far, first curiosity and now offence...it certainly looks like he is wavering between, drug-induced, complete disinterest, and his more genuine emotions...hope Goku can get him out of there soon.

The following scenes as Vegeta 'did as he pleased' and let his mind wander over to the 'faceless thing' whilst his subconscious did battle with his conscious, was deeply depressing. My heart leapt at this:

"(Don�t you remember? Your highness?)"

Gods, I really feel so utterly sad at this.

I don't mean to write such a depressing review, but unfortunately that's my mood. I don't mean this as a gripe, if I hated this, I simply wouldn't read it. No, this is compelling stuff...but utterly depressing at the same time. Does that make sense?

Oh Gods, let him have use of his hand Goku...I don't want him to remember...can't he just rescue him, and let him live in oblivious harmony? No, I know, he's needed on the throne...but the flashes of knowledge are so heart-wrenching.

Tears...couldn't control them at the point where Goku, pushed himself down on Vegeta's erection. Both mens reaction was heartbreaking.

"Vegeta jerked his arm again, and panted, clenched his teeth and growled it out again. �WHAT ARE YOU DOING TO ME?!�"

Vegeta was so confused, and then panicked over the (no doubt in this world), 'sense of wrongness' in Goku's actions...it probably seems perverse to the mind-controlled Vegeta.

What Goku did was a wonderful gesture, but unfortunately, Vegeta could not know this at this moment, and Goku himself, started to slip back into stroking his thigh, so bloody sad.

The whole scene was shattering.

Good, looks like Goku has found out where the implant is...but it's going to be a horror to remove.

Need that humorous chapter, cracked a smile at the end dialogue, but way too teary-eyed to fully appreciate it.

Appreciate you explaining about the sigh. I'm glad it wasn't about my review :-)

"...So this isn�t an original concept for me. I like it, it�s one of those strange psychological horror things that I find fascinating�"

Yes, 'psychological horror' that fits it perfectly. Doesn't matter if it's not an original concept, precious few things are these days, it's how well your version of thncepncept, (even if it's a re-working of one of your earlier fics), that is all that matters, and believe me, you do this very, very well. Not sure how many of these I could take, but yeah, no faulting your ability. :-)

"...but everyone needs a breather from it eventually."

Please... 'cause I'm such a wimp in the emotions department.

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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 22, 2004
Hmm...
So very sad it all is. Well more like depressing/repressing (on Vegeta's part)...

I totally enjoy this fic. I luvs it!!!!! I just love to see how this fic unravels, before me very eyes.
You know why I loves it so much? B/c it reminds me of like Metal Gear or something (my fave game have a serious obsession) but you know b/c Goku is undercover its like stealth mode or something. He can't screw up. There is a mystery that I would like to figure out. It's just cool!

Then there's Frieza a definate slimeball that just creeps me out. And Vegeta who seems void of a lot of things, things which he needs to remember...but it's not like Goku was forcing him to remember but gently prodding. Like on the 1st day he said he would come back and he did.

He has to do these things, that he doesn't want to feels like he is taking advantage of Vegeta and feels disgusted...it's emotional. And it's is great to read what Vegeta thinks of him the way he calls Goku it and thing...but he never understands why Goku makes these faces at him, faces if disgust...etc..

*sighs* It's superb....

Only a tiny part that remembered the days where he didn�t care about anything but the feeling of a fingertip on that spot on his thigh�that too was a scar.--That is just so depressing, but at the same time it is a symbol of his freedom. He will always have those scars as a reminder.

Narrowed his stupid eyes and stared like if he looked long enough he could place the resemblance.--You know, that is almost scary. Alarming, I mean what if he did recognize him? I really love how smooth Goku is, how he acts around Frieza.

and Krillin (who was definitely not a servant but was willing to play his part for the greater good)--hehe suuurrreee, I think he makes a pretty good servant! I don't hate Krillen but I don't like him either I am neutral, but that's on the show. In this fic I happen to like him because he is not being a stupid ass and hehelphelping to save the Prince.

Knew theordsords would please the white waste of molecules.

Joy. But I�ve already been employed by you.--Loved that line. I can't imagine how Goku feels having to go back into this place where he was held captive. Staring into the face of that cruel icejin. I hate when Frieza giggles or does anything really it creeps me out.

But as for Goku it's like almost reliving the past experience that happened to him...and having to see Vegeta the Prince of his ppl going through the same thing. I admire Goku for going through with this...saving Vegeta...

He had never been told to �do whatever you want� before, had never really considered what he would do if he was allowed to do as he pleased.--This broke my lil heart. My mind is screaming and waiting for the day Vegeta remembers and gets that device out of his mouth!

Gk: Suuure, that�s what you always say.--rofl! I luved the end notes! Especially the part about Goku being a dentist....

Anyway, I love this fic and I know you said the humor will be in tomorrows chappie, but I just want to let you know even w/out the humor this is an outstanding fic.

THERE YOU ARE! I was like *meep meep* when you didn�t review. *sobs broken-heartedly* Alright, it�s not that bad. But I was wondering if you�d read it.--You know, the day before yesterday, thats when you posted this fic and I was going to read it after I read all of the other ones you wrote and then I ced oed on it and AFF.NET kept saying too many connections! I was so pissed...and that has happened to me b4 but it just kept saying it even when I closed the window and opened it again. So I reviewed the next day....

I write the very same way, listening to music and that is also how I read and I very rarely do not listen to music while I do these things...

Yeah, I like Bardock.--I likes Bardock too! He is very rad!

^.*

-MB-

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 21, 2004
Cool, I listen to music when I write too. Ahh...great minds think a like. I'm thinking that I'm gonna like Krillin in this one too. Thank goodness...it's about time. Oh and don't hurt Pixelgoddess, she has to finish 'Maintaining' first! Oh and Bardock rules! There...
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