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By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - EleneK on May 08, 2004
I always save this fic for last. Things are finally beginning to make sense. Well, maybe not making sense per se but definately less confusing. I don't like the idea of Vegeta being helpless though. He doesn't pull it off well.
Krillin just needs to get over himself, embrace his dark side, and deal. There are still no lemons. Then again this fic really doesn't need them. The plot line is plenty complex enough to hold its own; which is probably why its my favorite. Are the zoo creatures going to be allies? If so, they're slowly forming thier own little army.

-El-
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From ANON - hudine on May 07, 2004
Thanks.

Poor Bulma, think I'd rather be dead too. Can't wait to see Bardock die.

-Hudine-

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From ANON - macha on May 07, 2004
A mind reader with no training in how to block out others' thoughts (Goten) I am surprised he isn't crazy (to the point of no help). I did notice in the other chapter that the Juro Gods seem to have a VERY personal interest in Goten. Makes me wonder.

Yes! Chi Chi is still interested in Trunks, not that this would ever be my favorit couple, it just seems okay for this fic. (this is a really cool A/U)

So, Bulma being a cat, does she really have nine lives? That could get interesting.

dialog at end, "Yeah Trunks, what are your going to do about Goten's ablilities, Hmmm?"

Can't wait for next chapter, *wrings hands in worry, "Please save Bulma gang, Please!"

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From ANON - Elysium on May 07, 2004
Grr, so I'll have to fight for you then, eh? I'm willing to, this one update a day just makes me so happy I could explode.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 07, 2004
Wonderful,

and the way she had told herself over and over that she would never end up in his house, would never give into that�would die first.--That is horrid!!! To want to die and wake up and realize you hadn't trapped by the very thing you swore you would never become a victom of.

She remembered the way he had looked at her, remembered how she had been flattered that he was looking. Remembered she felt sorry that he was a cross-breed had had been ridiculed his whole life. --That is so sad. I felt the same for Gohan and even thought that him and Bulma would end up as a couple. I really love hearing all of this from her pov. To see that she was actually flattered by him, and he turned out to be such a bastard!

Anything, any death but the one that faced her.--Like how she thinks of her life with Frieza as death. I feel so badly for her, and I hope the others can rescue her.

In fact, he cared so much about it he was just going to run right up to Bardock and cut his head off. --LoL, he is very enthusiasctic.

Juro were contradictory like that, but it wasn�t their fault. Their Gods were like that too.--LoL, loved that line.

Oh gods, the spider-Princess was attracted to Trunks.--I kinda thought she might be, I caught hints in earlier chapters...well stuff that seemed like hints. I think that is cute!

(Remember what Freiza�s like. If he can�t kill you with a sword, he�ll kill you with a word.)--True, and I do hope they are all prepared and 'sg' g' enough to withstand the attacks of Frieza. I love how united this group is. How they are all willing to go and get Bulma. Especially Vegeta and Goku b/c they don't want her going through what they did... This fic reminds me of a rpg final fantasy type game or something. All these people from different walks of life thrown together and having the same goal in bringing down Frieza and Bardock. *sighs* I wish it was a game...that would be so rad.

Goten: I could just sneak into your mind and watch anyway. --rofl, yeah Trunks go screw the spider lady!!!!

^.*
-MB-

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From jaygoose on May 07, 2004
Oh great now I'm even more giddy. *sigh and then goes back to beaming insanely* There's going to be fight! I love fights! I'm so violent...the the tension has been building for a while.
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From cueball2 on May 07, 2004
Excellent!

I wonder who Goten likes, if anyone.

And with th'in'interesting limitations,' why can't anyone touch him? Will they bonded?

Explode? Heal his wounds?

Alright. Enough about Goten. I hope Freeza gets what he deserves.

Keep it coming.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 07, 2004
(Oh, she�s not dead.) That was Goten�s mental voice in his mind. (But she should be. They put their blood back into her. Freiza wants her.)--O_O, I figured something was up when they took her body. But sheesh they give you a choice to die you kill yourself and they bring you right back...that is hell.

Trunks is worried about where Goten is going to sleep he must have a soft spot for him...

I loved when Goten was talking to Trunks through his mind. ^_^

I feel badly that Goten has bled as much as he breathed and has so many scars on his body. Even if he can turn off the pain, it is still horrible toe toe to go through the pain and have scars as reminders even if you cant feel it.

(Oh, shit, Trunks, you should see his mind. Its so full of scars its impossible to understand how he�s still standing. Tell him she�s fine. No, I�ll tell him.)--that is horrible, that makes me so sad. It must be pretty bad...I love how Goten seems so caring and concerned about everyone's well being.

Whose flesh was marked with the crimes of their past. --wow, so is that what happened to Goten then? That is a very interesting idea, I thought it was very cool.

So if you�re going to stand there and pity anyone, pity your self. I never asked you to like me.)--That's right! You tell him...and the Juro do seem to live a pretty sheltered life. Seem to be weary of everything, but at the same time that is their life. But it would be nice to see if Krillen coulep oep out of his box...if he does I wonder if he would just drive himself mad for breaking the laws of the Juro. And at a time like this when everything is falling apart you would think he wouldn't care any longer to uphold these rules but he does and some part of me respects him for that, because that is a very hard thing to do. But the other part of me says will he ever think what's the big deal...and do somng wng without thinking if it is upholding the Juro, if he will just act sponatenously.

But really, he shouldn�t have been surprised that this creature could control his mind while his body slept. --that is freaky.

Goten's end yell at Krillen very good...Krillen needs to hear these things maybe one day he will understand...

The end notes were hilarious!!!!

If you think the �exploding� trick was awful, wait to see what Goten does next� *says this like a cheesy commercial *--LMAO!!!!!

^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - Elysium on May 07, 2004
I love your writings, and I love how fast you post new chapters. Marry me and be my ficcy 'ore!
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From ANON - macha on May 06, 2004
Yeah, Bulma's alive! Is this part of Bardock's plan, or is Frieza working on his own? Hmmm, if Chi Chi can't have Trunks is she going after the kitten?

This chapter certainly explained a lot of things, but it also left me with so many questions.
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From ANON - setharo07 on May 06, 2004
I'M BACK!!! Sorry, been busy past few days. (Try reading five stories at one time, and not getting confused.) I'm glad that Bulma's alive, but I don't want her to be in the Ice-jin's hands, but I'll deal. I don't know who's cooler, Trunks or Goten. It's a shame that he can't touch anyone, though. So, does a lash appear everytime he uses his powers? Definitely glad that Gohan's dead, and he was the liar. But, it was for the better, believing that he was an OK guy, and then having this happen. He shoulda listened when Trunks told him not to piss him off, but then we wouldn't've seore ore of his cool powers. Still am anxious for more, and no, I wasn't making fun of Bulma the other day, I just thought that it was funny. Later, Card.
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From ANON - jaygoose on May 06, 2004
I love this story. It is the highlight of my day. I love mobid, depressingly dark stuff. I am a tad excited though, Bulma is alive...with the Icejins...which is bad, but she is alive. I love Bulma, she's a cool cat...please say she will be okay. I'm glad everyone is going off to save her. Good people.

Anyway, glad for that little tidbit on Gohan.

And yes...I will make sure to tell you about updates in the future. And I am writing...fast...but I must warn that the next stuff will have the beginnings of a Goku/Geta 'thing' but there's so much stuff it will probably be two (or three depending on my mood) chapters. *hides behind couch* Sorry, I told everyone this fic would be ridiculously long...me and my overactive imagination.
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From ANON - hudine on May 06, 2004
If you would it would be a big help to me cause it's litterly only a couple days old. I'll even give you a darksaiyan e-mail address if you whant (I'm kinda unlimited on the number of those I have he he) The website is going to be a dragonball site, and fic archive. I needed to learn how to do everything for my boyfriend's hosting company ukhs.com cause someone left recently. So I had to regester the website, set up all the hosting side (litteraly from name server records to hosting space, all the stuff you take for granted to be done for you). As a result I'm very proud of my little mess... er.. website.

Na would need to be a VERY big fish to eat em, and if there was one that big in my tank what would stop it from eating me? :D Think I like these spiders anyway.

-Hudine-

www.darksaiyan.com

www.darksaiyan.com/eFiction/index.php - no link up on actual mainpage yet
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From ANON - Ginia on May 06, 2004
I'm glad Bulma is alive - Really I am! I like kitty folks and I'm sure that the the strange team you have built will retrieve her before anything too terrible happens...*trying hard not to remember all the years YOU left Vegeta there* Goten is a neat character. Are you going to go into Gohan's background in the fic or just keep it as a thought?
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From ANON - Hudine on May 06, 2004
Chi-Chi and Trunks are spiders... I HATE SPIDERS! I catch em and feed them to my fish for some extra nuterants *laughs evily and watches little spider swim for cover as a big fish swims toward surface*

Ok serously though I do love this, was wondering when Goten was going to show up, can't have one without the other. Poor Bulma though, and evil Gohan didn't see that comming :D

It's good to read and take a break, been working on my new website. Just got an archive script working for it. Anyone that reads this feel free to test it for me, it's at www.darksaiyan.com/eFiction/index.php Ok I'll stop advertising now before I get hit with something large andvey.vey.

Can't wait to read the next part.

-Hudine-

www.darksaiyan.com
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