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By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 06, 2004
Goten's here!!!!!

Saw the six dots on the strange things forehead first�the mark of the Juro�and then the black tail, the spiky black hair and the dark eyes--oo so he can read mind to. Alright very interesting indeed.

�No,� Krillin said, struggled tt bat back to his feet, �He�s going to kill him!�
�Good,� Vegeta said. Crossed his arms over his chest.--LoL. love the contrasting personalties. Although I am with Vegeta on this one...who cares if he dies.

and Gohan�s whole body burst.
Exploded.--eww that is so gross...

And when Goku looked up again, Gohan was right there, on his knees and shaking�but he wasn�t dead. He was whimpering and sobbing, but he wasn�t dead. --LMAO!!!! That is horrible, how could he do that...hehe he is c.

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First: Nobody knows about me because I never told anyone about me. --hehe, I like his story that he told very cool. He is just as cool as Trunks well maybe not as cool looking because Trunks is looking hot in this fic, but pwer wise he is very cool. He seems to have killed everyone he was around well not everyone but his mother and etc...

�And while I am very fucking powerful, Prince Vegeta, I will admit that I have limits. Interesting limits.� --what are the limits I wonder...

That he was powerful, and that nobody would remember him when he had gone. How the fuck was that useful?--rofl! I love that

Vegeta didn�t really care. Wasn�t interested in the kid�s life story, in his nifty ability to make someone think they had just blown up--lol, Vegeta's not impressed eh? I do wonder what Goten depends on though...

�Some things even we cannot see.�--I am very glad that this was pointed out to Krillen.

�Who does these washes?� Goku asked.--these washes are very interesting, just shows me that in a world of ppl with different powers how far wone will go to , attain their own power or control...you have to be very creative to livein a world such as this one I suppose.

*gasp* Goten can't touch anyone? *is very interested to know all about his powers*

The end notes had me lmao!
ooo so Krillen is going to have a tough time in this ficcie...I kinda figured that b/c he is dead set on not going agt ant any of his teachings. I cant wait for next chap this ficcie is sooo good!!!
^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - macha on May 05, 2004
Goten is awesome. It's a toss up between him and Trunks now. So is it Goten Can't touch, or Won't touch anybody? It's going to be very difficult to write lemons with him in them if he Can't touch.

Ah, the exploding Gohan. That was a shocker, and then to find out that it hadn't really happened was even more of a shocker.

I liked the 'Washing' technich. Interesting.
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From ANON - Ginia on May 05, 2004
Things that have been tickling my thoughts...

Back when Bardock 'rescued' Goku from Frieza - he was humming. After the fire started in the engine room and we see Goku - he is alone, seemingly out of it and humming.

While on the ship (and even earlier) those 'thoughts' were present, at least in Goku and Vegeta's mind before anyone else felt them. I had thought that perhaps something within Goku was what was 'ing ing and ticking' - until they left the ship and seemingly left those thoughts behind as well.

The something that is giving off the thoughts also seems to be responsible for the intensity of what Vegeta was experiencing.

...so many odd things....

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From ANON - jaygoose on May 05, 2004
Yeah, Goten is here and he kicks so much ass. *Sigh* I suppose I'll have to deliver 'something' now. Next, chapter...wI exI explain the ChiChi/Goku incident. And I have a big surprise in store...I can't wait to shock you all...you know how I love it!

Hey, you didn't say what Gohan was mixed with and now he dead...well of course that is a good thing...but hey...they took Bulma's body! Bastards!

Oh and Trunks is still kick ass. Chichi? Hmm...interesting couple
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From ANON - angry monkey on May 05, 2004
*(in very high pitched, hyperactive voice) YAY- GOHAN WENT BOOOOOOOOOOOM Organ explody!
Goten equivilent is very cool (as was Bulma, almost, but she's dead), but can Krillin die soon (he's slightly annoying, though nowhere near as bad in the show- why is he there, he does nuffing at all, except die) Will anyones organs (like brains or lungs) be yanked out and used as bag pipes? >:)
won't the 'ploding hurt?!
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From ANON - Anon on May 05, 2004
*(in very high pitched, hyperactive voice) YAY- GOHAN WENT BOOOOOOOM OOM Organ explody!
Goten equivilent is very cool (as was Bulma, almost, but she's dead), but can Krillin die soon (he's slightly annoying, though nowhere near as bad in the show- why is he there, he does nuffing at all, except die) Will anyones organs (like brains or lungs) be yanked out and used as bag pipes? >:)
won't the 'ploding hurt?!
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From ANON - pinkteddy on May 05, 2004
*falls off the chair* You have started yet ANOTHER story?!?! When?!? Why didn't I notice?! ............wow......O_o
I know this is my first review but I've been peeking on your stories for a quite some time. They all are amaizing and even more so considering the speed I've seen you type them. I also love the way you descripe things and those funny notes....they aren't just funny....they are hilarious. :) 'Will reviewe again when I'm finished catching up on this one, so keep it up and thank you for all these stories.
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From ANON - hudine on May 05, 2004
love this story. Very original. God that sounds like a very lame review :D

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From ANON - macha on May 04, 2004
Well, I am sad now. Bulma's dead. No, really, I am. I liked her as a very vain cat, the personality suited her well. At least she didn't go back on her promise to herself.

I wanted to see Gohan dead after what he did. Stupid f*@?er, thinking he could come back and no one would know what he had done? I guess they really do need what ever kind of information he might have, so best no to kill him right away.

I liked it when Chi Chi said, "He killed our kitten." That's mos most affectionate she's been yet. Did I really read what I thought I read when it looked as though Chi Chi might be interested in Trunks?

You did a very good job of discribing what Trunks did to Gohan's hand. It was very graphic and detailed, and I liked it.

Can't wait for the blood letting. That is what you said wasn't it, that there was going to be blood next chapter? Blood is a very poor substitue for lemons, but this story is good enough to read for a couple of chapters without lemons.
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From ANON - EleneK on May 04, 2004
And we're back to the evil Gohan. His mom wasn't an Ice-jin was she? It would explaine the things; especially why he was helping kidnap Bulma. (I can�t believe you killed her. *pout*) He was actually trying to protect that thing on the ship wasn�t he? Are they gonna torture him? They�re gonna torture him aren�t they? You know how I like my dark Saiyans and they don�t get much darker than when they�re torturing somebody. *zones off with stars in her eyes*

�Perhaps we should placate her with some lemonade?� Where are you going to manage to squeeze lemons during this fic. I realize it�s set up, and I wouldn�t mind, but� *cursing your plot monster*

Sorry I wasn't able to review yesterday. I had to write a paper then go to sleep when it was done.

-El-

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From ANON - jaygoose on May 04, 2004
WHAAAAAAAAAAA....No, no, no! Bulma's dead! Why! I loved her...she was so cool. I got a little teary eyed there and my roommate was looking at me like I was crazy. *Sigh* I really don't know what to make of it. Anyway...I'm a bit depressed now...

Now on to the matter of Trunks' coolness (he is amazingly cool, *Sighs*) ...Gohan's betrayal (I really hate him in this fic now, he killed Bulma...well not really, but he did...sort of...) and where the hell is Goten!

I suppose I deserve to wait, I'm making you guys wait with THOK. Hmm...How many more chapter should I write with Goku and Vegeta not getting together...MUHAHAHAHAAAA!
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From ANON - setharo07 on May 03, 2004
YAY!! No more addiction for Vegeta!! No more thoughts!, or are there? The beginning with Bulma was funny, and also the part with her kicking Gohan. Well, duh, of course it's a cave, what'd she expect, a palace full of servants. I loved the little trick Trunks did with the meat. Just makes him even cooler, and it makes me want to steal him all for myself even more. I wonder who's coming(there), who's lying? Of course, Bulma's gonna try and blame the spiders, and since they don't trust one another, everyone's going to blame the other for the most part. Oh, evil cliffies!! Love 'em, and hate 'em.
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From ANON - macha on May 03, 2004
What, no finishing of the lemon you left us with? Ah well.

You are doing a great job in keeping everyone in the personality you have given them, Chi Chi's bitchiness, Bulma's vanity, so on and so forth.

Rubs hands in eagerness, "who is it?" (pertaining to the someone coming)

I guess I will just have to keep reading to find out who the liar is. Does the liar even know they are the liar?

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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 03, 2004
Very awesome chapter!

Bulma woke up the next morning to the smell of fire and meat and had to blink and grab her boobs�had the feeling that they were uncovered, and upon looking, found that she was correct in this thought--@_@ lmao!!!! Uh...that is an interesting start to a new day.

(yes, she had paws for feet, after all she was a fucking cat)--o.O rofl....I was wondering if she had any other cat-like body parts.

She stared down at Gohan who was smiling in his sleep and she kicked him in the stomach. He laughed then--*dies of laughter* Gohan is sooo bad!!!!!! Pretending to be sleep!!!!

It was gone. Vegeta didn�t want ell ell Goku that�not right away anyway�but the feeling that he had to touch something or someone or die was gone.

because Juro did not �outcast� its people, but he could never return home because he believed himself to have committed crimes.--oh so he is choosing himself not to go back then...b/c he believes he committed crimes.

He had no ability, no special power level or half-breed abilities. No tail. No fucking muscles anymore. --oh no he is feeling inferior to these ppl and all of their different abilties. That is so sad. Now that he doesn't have the itching feeling propelling most of his thoughts he has really seeto cto come down on himself and how 'useless' he thinks he is...oh but he isn't useless! *sobs* that is so sad.

And how the fuck did his father�the King�miss that Bardock was a psychotic bastard that was torturing his youngest son? --yes wouldnt we all like to know the answer to this and so many other questions like why doesn't Vegeta want to tell Goku the the feeling had subsided...what is the deal with that...?

�Do we have a plan or are we just supposed to sit here and wait for Bardock to try and kill us again?� Gohan asked. --lmao..smartass..hehe, I like Gohan in this fic.

�Yes,� Chichi said, curled her long fingers up and smirked just a little. �One of us lies.�--oh *gasp* oh no!!!!!! Someone is lying!!! Lying leads to very bad things!!!! That is why Trunks unsheathed his sword! Oh I know I said I love Chi in this fic..but I must say it again...she is so cool! I love how she talks...This fic rox so much!!!!!!

Lmao at end notes
^.*
-MB-
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From jaygoose on May 03, 2004
Ahhh...you're teasing me...no fair! I am sort of sad that Vegeta's feeling is gone. Does this mean no more Goku/Geta intimacy. I think not. It will just be a lot better without the mindlessness anyway...Hmm...
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