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By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Noel on May 03, 2004
So can Krillin tell they are upstahavihaving sex with his little mind reading ability?.........If I were him I would be abusing it right now, he already said he couldn't go back home :)
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From ANON - setharo07 on May 02, 2004
at first, I was going to ask who the sectond level was originally made for, but then I read your response to Jaygoose, and realized, 'Duh! You can't have Trunks in a story without Goten being there.' Can't wait to see him. At least they got out of the ship in time, even if Krillen had to put Bulma and Gohan asleep. At least he isn't suffering anymore. And slowly Vegeta is regaining more of himself, thanks especially to Goku. Can't wait for more!!!
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From ANON - macha on May 01, 2004
I find it interesting that Chi Chi would want Trunks to embrace his second heritage when she was ostrisized from her own culture. This could be an interesting developement in the fic.

Very touching moment before the lemon with V and G. I also liked the discription of the nest.

Was it Goku's own thought ( your discusting) Or was it still the something on the ship?

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From ANON - jaygoose on May 01, 2004
I am wondering about that room upstairs myself. Does it have something to do with Goten...oh please say it does. You got me hooked on all these characters with cool powers and I need to know what Goten can do...Okay so I don't need, but I would like very much...

Going to go write now. I love free time.
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From ANON - kodachi on May 01, 2004
Wow, great chapter!! I like the atmosphere between Trunks and Vegeta- really nice! Moreover it�s a good thing that Goku shows respect and consideration towards Vegeta, that Vegeta seems very rational in this one, but not overly arrogant- makes him more...uh... "human". And the way he has to struggle with himself is very well-portayed and realistic because when you�ve had to suffer like he has than I believe it�s NOT as easy (if possible at all) to go back to what you�ve once been. The statements about prejudice are especially fitting since they give off the conflicting opinions about Trunks so well and it�s great you don�t write the characters so stereotyped, but give them each their individual personality and good reasons(!) to act the way they do... It gives your story more depth and has me sympathize with the characters. And even if I�m not a regular reviewer, be assured I read each and everyone of your chapters with great interest!!! Friendly greetings, ~kodachi~
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 01, 2004
Another very wonderful chapter,

He felt the bond on his hands snapping as a sort of deep irony that would kill him with laughter later on. Because they broke away, and he was free�bloody wrists and all�I am happy that he is free. Sad b/c they still have so much to go through...and Vegeas tas to deal with all of this. Just really loved that line and the symbolism of it.

�If that time comes,� Trunks red. -d. --he doesn't play around. I can understand the worries that Bulma has.

�I know that Bardock is evil. That Vegeta is the Prince. What else is relevant?�--sheesh this guy is cold...I like him..a lot! ^.~ But to say what else is relevent that carries a lot of weight. He is very determined...but I saw that a long time ago.

�You don�t just waltz in here say say you�re going to help us out and expect that we�re going to believe a murderer like you.�--I would believe just about anythif itf it was going to get me out of a wrecked ship.

�It�s the engine room,� Gohan said again, �It�s going to melt. I told you that. And now were fucked.�--Oh Gohan, get a grip! I mean it's not like it's going to blow up...or maybe it is! *scs* ss* someone save Vegeta!!!!! Why are they all even standing there talking to Trunks I would have been trying to figure a way to get myself off of that ship before it is too late.

Then he crossed the room�every single step a fight with himself to keep from grabbing the nearest warmth and giving into that urge to do as the drugs commanded. --*feels very bad for Geta* That would be so horrible and that is a struggle. That is a insanely hard struggle to deal with, and I would probago cgo crazy. Vegeta seems to be doing pretty good. I hope he continues to get better.

Raz�hez�he thought that was his name�*sobs for a few seconds* He killed Radditz!!!!

Shifting just a little, and his hand was near his mouth, hovering there. (Nervous reaction, Goku still stroked that scar on his leg when he didn�t pay attention.) --that was so sad. This is hard to deal with...freedom... I wonder if Vegeta realizes he is even doing that, or is he just concentrating on trying to be in control of himself and his mind. To know that it even effects you years lats its it has Goku who still rubs his leg is troubling, yet interesting. To know you never quite get over it...never forget really.

Except, did you know that Anne Rice didn�t want Tom to play Lestat? --yeah I did know that. I remember when he was interviewed on Oprah they talked about that and they kept asking him if him and Louis were supposed to be gay. It was funny...and yes Anne Rice wery ery wrong abdout Tom Cruise b/c when I read any of the Vampire Chronicle books is is exactly how I picture Lestat...

played FF10. (Almost, not finished with it.)--rofl...well I played that one and 10-2 but my fave would be 7 then 8 (love Zell) and I wasn't to fond of 9. I am actually not to fond of 10 or 10-2 either but they are pretty good. I alway sthought 7 had the best storyline. *sighs* I wish they would remake that one...have you ever played Kingdom Hearts? Squall is in that...but he changes his name to Leon.

^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - macha on May 01, 2004
Yep, Ind bnd by my first reaction, Trunks is cool. I seem not to have the same prejudices as the people on the ship. Maybe if he had killed my own father in front of me I would feel like Gohan does, but that hasn't happened.

Yeah, a planet where they can all be 'okay'. "Hurry up people, get off of the f*****g ship." *thinks for a moment* Well, it may would be a good idea to find out what is in the engine room first or it may follow.

Well, DON'T tell Bardock this, but overconfidence is one good way to end up dead. *Smirks* I'm glad he feels the way he does.

As for the dialog afterward, looks at Goku, "Hey, why IS he holding nothing?" *hands him a tube of lube, points discretely at Vegeta* "Well? Don't wait for the story. I am certain that at some point the story will catch up to you!"

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From ANON - setharo07 on April 30, 2004
Thanks, that really helped me. I feel sorry for Vegeta, trying to cope with his new 'freedom' without being chained, but he's having a struggle between taking the lead of the pack and needing the warm touches that the drugs tell him he needs. Poor Vegeta. Obviously Trunks knows that he's kick ass, and most people agree with him, by the way he looks, and his powers, except for a certain few. Can't wait for more!!
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 30, 2004
Trunks is sooo cool! *Sighs dreamily* I am glad that Vegeta is taking authority because it looks like everyone else is falling apart. Which is strange being that he is the traumatized one. Hmm...Anyway, I am waiting for Goten...You have to have Goten in this ficcy.

Oh and yes the running around thing is a good thing. I am finished with my paper too. Yes! Will be undating in an hour or two, hopefully.
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 30, 2004
*runs around in circles screaming "Oh My God....Oh My God!" then hits a wall but is still conscious enough to say..

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Hmm...I still think that Trunks looks pretty cool. I have always had a thing for pale boys...even blindingly pale boys. Strange that. Anyway...this story is soo supenseful...I don't think I'm going to bee toe to sleep tonight thinking about it. Good cause a still got ass loads of paper to write. 'Preciate it.
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From ANON - setharo07 on April 29, 2004
I feel sorry for Freiza. NOT!! I love the way you make Trunks out, being angry at his father, and especially at Bardock, for trying to kill him. I'm guessing that Bardock was probably talking about himself when he said that there was 'only one heir to the throne.' If not him, then one of the icejins. 'Those that kidnapped and enslaved and giggled and squirmed.' Damn icejins are freakin' creepy. You just have to love to hate them in any story, especially this one.
"Let the murderer come..." Chichi's statement seems to be foreshadowing of evil to come, whether it be to those on the ship, or to Bardock and the ones who really deserve it. So, if Trunks is more than a murderer, as Gohan claims, what els hes he, besides spider-Saiyan mix? Oh, I have a question, Card. Do you think you can send me, or just tell me, some detailed descriptions of the alien races, like Trunks, Bulma, and Chi? I want to draw them, but I wan be be sure I can get them mostly right. Especially since except for Trunks, details of the others looks havecome sparingly over several chapters, if at all. Thanks if you can, and don't worry if you can't.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 29, 2004
I love this fic!!!

Ten years he had looked for this kid�hardly a kid, he had to be at least nine maybe tears ars older than him� LoL, it is very good to know that someone was looking for him this whole time. Or at least trying to. Trunks seems pretty amazing...and very cool. He seems very scary when it comes to Bardock..how he could hardly be in his prescence w/out his vision blinking out...

Caught him by the tail and pulled out a knife, told him that there was only one heir to the throne. Trunks was not that heir. --Ugh! Bardock really makes me sick! He is REALLY bold, and rentrently must think he is unstoppable. He is not getting anywhere near that throne!!! At least he better not!

Could smell his filth and deceit on every thing that the mother-fucker threw at him. --Yes, and it's too bad that for this whole time he was the only one who knew the truth. How horrible that must have been. To actually feel the vile towards the man...that he could smell the deceit...*sighs* and to know that, it is Goku's father...

Ugh...and it makes me even more mad Bardock kept sending ppl after Trunks to kill him, yet Trunks killed every person that came to claim his life. How annoying to have to always be on guard like that.

And mixed races of any kind are looked down upon, I see... I'm guessing that is just b/c most of these different races/species think they are better than one another. I think Trunks sounds pretty cool. Being half spider half saiyajin.

No one that served that man.--hm...what about the ppl on that ship with Goku and Vegeta...some of them served Bardock...does he want them to die?

In fact won wondered if Bardock had fucking mix-breeds running around the icejin world. --umm ewww, I hope you don't mean mixed with saiyajin...*pukes* hehe

�He�s a murderer,� Bulma hissed.--Oh no, with this misunderstanding, ...I sense a lot of unfun things happening in the near future when Trunks comes...

Those that kidnapped and enslaved and giggled and squirmed. --LoL, yes and that is very annoying..especially the giggling. please destroy them. ^.^

�You should be a cheerleader, Chi,� Bulma snapped, rounded on her and bared her sharp teeth, �You�re just so full of HELPFUL ADVICE!�--ROFL!!! hehe...but that's why chi is so cool she is always saying wise and sensible things.

Oh yeah Vegeta's wrist are not bound! And he has an attitude!!!!!

�Let the murderer come��--O_O AH!!! Oh..gosh...thanks for the evil cliffy...and what a cool line that was!

End notes wre hilarious especially the un vegetalike dance...

I say this and mean that in the movie, Interview with the Vampire, he was hot when Tom Cruise played him, but when they made that horrible movie Queen of the Damned I thought that guy wasn�t really Lestat-like at all.)--Oh god I hated the Queen of the Damned movie. and that guy was VERY un-lestat like. Why in the hell did he have black hair!? Lestat's tradmarks are his icy blue eyes and his pale blonde locks! How could they do that!!! UGH! I can't even talk about it, that whole movie just pisses me off! But yes Tom Cruise Lestat was VERY hot!

(Sorry, I just feel the need to confuse more people --hehe, thats ok...now you have me thinking many more things...and ooo I do hope we get to hear Bardocks side...

the way the spiders �teleport� it supposed to look like the spell �Demi.--ooo rad, I always liked how demi looked. Is ff8 your fave final fantasy? And have you played ff10 or 10-2 at all...

*Trunks blinks a few times. Then just growls out something and disappears. * --*shurgs and laughs* what's his problem...?

^.*
-MB-
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From ANON - macha on April 29, 2004
Trunks is cool. It would seem as though the spider peoples ability to move from one place to the other is almost as instantaniuos as I.T. And, if Trunks got kicked out when he was little, it would appear it is an instinctual trait. So, why wasn't Chi Chi justed moved them all from the ship. Oh yeah, because no one would agree on what planet they were going to go to.

Could you pass this message along for me? "Bardock, you don't stand a F@*?%g chance." Now, if one of the gang could possilby figure out a way to make the future take on many possiblities, his ability would be dead in the water, wouldn't it?

So many possiblities, how do you find the time?

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From ANON - Elenek on April 29, 2004
ARRRRRRGGGGG!!!!! What the frick is going on? Why do I get the funny feeling that Trunks is the only one that knows? Will the others trust him enough to believe him? How did Trunks find out? Why did Bardock try to kill Trunks and when was this again? The really hard question though was why go through all of that rigmarole and sacrificing the prince to rescue Goku only to try to kill him? This fic is bringing out an inner saiyan. Well at least you have finally assembled the Heroes and maybe we can finally get some answers. Heaven forbid, though, you're not gonna make it this easy are you?
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From DietDirtyPop on April 29, 2004
Hehehe spider monkey HAHAHAHAHA thats great. Eww I like Trunks in this story he's usally such a pussy. And Gohan I fully believe he alone is responcible for the whole Buu thing so I just don't like him EVER, but he really isn't bothering me in this story. Ya done good. I was so happy to see Vegeta get hella pissy it was nice he is finally waking up..Grrrr Me Don't like Bardock....oh well I could keep going but i have to cut the Bloody grass.

***Noel***
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