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Reviews for The Arrangement

By : Maldoror

From ANON - Judy on September 12, 2004
My passion for Gundam Wing was long gone by the time I saw the link to 'The Ventalilation shaft', where I found this story. I was never really into Wufei or Heero, but I decided to take a chance and I'm so glad that I decided to read this! It refilled my soul with beautiful imagery and now I'm back into Gundam Wing, but now, instead of being into Quatre and 3x4, I'm into Wufei and 1x5! It's so unbelievable now that I think about it.

The Arrangement was realistic, wonderful, and If I could I would print every text in this story and make it into a book like I did with another long story before. You don't make the obvious uke and seme relationship, which is a great to me since I dislike the Uke/Seme idea. Do you know how many wonderful characters they've corrupted with that shit?
:D But enough about my ranting. I really love this. I'm dissapointed to find that it ends and it leaves a strange hole in the deep ends of my mind. Fanfiction like yours are more than extremely hard to come by.

If this was any shorter it would be strange and any longer it would be too dramatic, but as it is it's just PERFECT. At first the dreams that Wufei were dreaming threw me off, and I thought it was some stupid plot to dramaticize things, and it was, but it was a plot that I didn't expect! With most fanfiction I can already tell what's going to happen and all that dumb, unorginal ... stuff.
Down to the last wordings and the descriptions, everything is dto tto the last detail, EVERYTHING. This is perfection.
The ending didn't seem like an ending to me. The worst is over, but theres still so much unsaid and so much that hasn't been done yet..! I've cried, afterwards Heero had loving sex with Wufei when Chang woke up and thought it was a dream, I laughed at parts I thought were funny, but overall this made me experience emotions I normally don't feel in normal fanfiction. But then again this isn't normal, nothing about this is normal. ;D It's way past normal, and it's the best goddamn story I've ever read. EVER.
I especially love the way you put those quotes on top of the chapters. I've saved a couple, just to remind myself of your story. I hope to read your sequel and wish you the best of luck with it.

Oh yeah, this is hilarious. I just remembered, I have a friend that's Chinese with the name Susan Wu with hair that also reaches down to her shoulders. She's a little quiet, but when she's not, she acts JUST like that, minus the not cursing part.
XD PLZ CoNtInEU SoooOOOOSNNN! 1!11111oneoneelleven1
Really. I'll be waiting. x)
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From ANON - crystal on September 12, 2004
Wah, can't believe this fic is actually finished... I'll miss it.. >_< Somehow i imagine them getting more attached, hoping to see the sequel soon~! Keep writing more 1x5 ficcies please?? @___@ I love the developement!
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From ANON - Honeykissfire on September 12, 2004
Loved it! Great work! Your writing was excellent. The best one I've read in a long time! ^_^
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From ANON - Sarsa on September 11, 2004
OMG, its finally over, I just can't believe it was all in one story, you are such a good writer I am "completly" jealous. Not only did you write something orignal aka a non sap filled love story about to male characters acting like castrated drag queens, you kept my intrests for SIX months, I have never followed a story like I followed yours, and I absoultly loved the way you put little inspirational quotes at the begining of each chapter, I wrote some of them down for my own new fav's, also you are just so good at angst. At first I was so confused and I absolutly hated the chapters in which wufie is drugged b/c they didn't make sense, and then when you revealed he was being drugged everything made since and I loved it even more. So I guess I should have gotten off my ass and wrote you a review a lot sooner but I hope this makes up for it. And don't apologize for the grammer it really didn't hinder my reading or enjoying your story at all. Well hope to read more great works like this from you soon. And thank you for posting and writing such a wonderful piece of fiction.
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From ANON - tsuchi on September 11, 2004
NO!! Its over!! *begins crying* I love it!! Please hurry with the sequel!!
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From ANON - Rachel on September 03, 2004
YES!!! This was very good - excellent grasp of Heero's point of view, very believable. I just *love* that there is no "Yeah, *that* would happen" factor in this story! It all hangs together so well. :) I am *SO* anticipating the epilogue and, at the same time, sorry to see it end. What a great story!

What kind of bribe would it take to get you to write the seduction of Quatre? And maybe how Duo and Trowa hook up? Not to mention more Heero/Wufei stories (big sad puppy eyes pleading). I really, *REALLY* would love to see more stories in this universe (The Arrangementverse - yeah!). I have anelleellent recipe for fruit punch ... :)
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From ANON - Rachel on August 30, 2004
Oh, just a little more begging here ....

Could we have one moreon hon here where Wufei returns the favor to Heero? That last lemon was HOT!! And it would be very interesting (among other adjectives) to have a similar session where Wufei experiments with foreplay on Heero .... Who knows? Maybe Heero might change his mind on the "inefficiency" of foreplay ...

Great work!
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From ANON - Rachel on August 30, 2004
WOW!! Nice wrap-up - very believable, since both Wufei and Heero *are* capable of facing and resolving problems. I found it very believable that Heero wants Wufei's *trust*. To be such a stone cold killer and have someone trust you enough to sleep around you would be a big pleasure for someone like Heero, someone who literally *can't* adapt to peacetime without someone like Wufei. Brilliant stuff.

Now for the begging part - please, please, please, please, PLEASE tell me that you're going to write more stories in this universe you've created. There are so many possibilities - not the least of which is the seduction of Quatre. *That* whole sequence with Duo and Wufei was superb! Angsty, yet humorous, with Duo on a roll! I'll drag out the tropical drinks with cute little umbrellas, and many, many footrubs by gorgeous, oiled cabana boys who will also feed you chocolate if you write this story (hopeful look).

Did I mention the fruit punch? :)

Looking forward to more of your writing ...
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From ANON - Rei Schneider on August 28, 2004
OMG!!! *O* you updated!!! I'm so happy!!! I really liked this two chapters. ^__^
Duo, Quatre and Trowa *together* ...well that was VERY shocking.... Heero's confession was shocking too.... Wufei found out stuff he ignored about Heero, like: while Wufei was trying so hard to be like Heero, Heero wanted to be more like Wufei. oh, the irony!!! XDDD He also found out what Heero - really - wanted from him... that was sweet 'cause even though Heero couldn't put into words what he really wanted he did stuff to show what he wanted (sleeping in the same bedroom, moving Wufei's stuff...)
You are an awesome writer, I really enjoyed this story, in fact i LOVE it... too bad it's reaching its end ToT
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From ANON - PhoenixMageFire on August 28, 2004
Oh I just want to cry; it's so complicatedly beautiful. It's hard sometimes to think of Heero as having wants and weaknesses. But you've done so well in translating his thoughts. Congradulations!
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From ANON - PhoenixMageFire on August 28, 2004
Heero doesn't like chocolate!? That poor sick bastard...can't even appreciate soul food.
sti still, if Wufei is going to actually have a *discusion*, maybe I can stop practicing Kendo on his head.
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From ANON - bluepixie13 on August 26, 2004
oh my goodness you made me cry and lough at the same. cool. that was strangly fuzzy near the end. cant wait to read heeros part sounds good.
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From ANON - Honeykissfire on August 25, 2004
I'm lovin' it! Especially the threesome, that's a nice touch. And more Wufei humor! Great! ^_^
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From ANON - PhoenixMageFire on August 23, 2004
Whew! (cranks up air conditioner) I guess for two 17 year olds, two months really adds up.
They just threw a monkey wrench in their communication problem, though. Those bakas deserve eachother, I think.
But now I want to send Heero cookies, and smack Wufei a couple times. Does Heero like chocolate?
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From ANON - amaryllis on August 21, 2004
amaryllis
21/8/04

REACTION TO:
Chapter 37 [Chinese Poles, Part III] of
The Arrangement, by Maldoror

Lines 1-79: Okay, uh...exposition. Good, good, Wufei is thinking again... Ooh. Good 5th paragraph.

Lines 79-136: HEERO'S HOME! And that 'painted beige' thing was really great. The use of that epithet while they were talking about Uncle Wai is good, too...great portrayal of Wufei's pent-up frustration or confusion...

Lines 136-153: *eyes widen*

Lines 153-170: I thought Wufei made perfect sense in being angry until I thought it over a bnd rnd realized that Heero worrying about his safety could count too...although that's the same as 'mobility for the mission.' So I'm just going to consider that part ambiguous.

Lines 170-180: *holds breath*

Line 181: *perverted hentai thought*

Lines 181-196: ...nevermind.

This part was so sweet, though. T_T *feels sappy*

Lines 196-359:Sex. Lurve.

*sighs*

*...eyes become big thumping pink hearts*

Line 360:"LOVER."

*sobs in manic fangirl fashion*

Lines 360-397: Whoa. That was hot. x_X

Poor Wufei; thinks he's going to get left alone again...

Lines 397-426:I really loved this part. It was one of the most touching things in GW fanfiction I've ever read; no lemon in the world could measure up. *feels all mushy inside*

(Or maybe my brain is mush too. >_>)

inesines 426-515 (skippin' all those lines inbetween): *smiles at first* Not a nightmare, dude. Not a nightm

...

Wufei, you better say yes tot "Dt "Do you want me to?" question. Not a dream, mate.

...

NODREADREAM!!

...

NOOO!

Lines 515-535: Uh-oh. Harbinger. But...hopefully harbinger of confession and the happiness that ensues?

*gets bonked*

Lines 535-540: I don't quite get this paragraph.

Why is just being partners no longer enough?"

Is Heero trying to hear what Wufei has to say directly, or is he saying that he DOESN'Tt tot to go beyond being partners?

Lines 540-578: Yes, yes, yes. The truth is being revealed! He is worried, Wufei; totally! *giddiness*

Lines 578-739:*numb*

I had to read this twice over because it was a little confusing to me; why Wufei had suddenly blown up like that. I spotted it at 578-586, eventually (finally x-x), and although the things Wufei said were inconsistent, as his mind notes, they were a very good portrayal of how unlike Wufei this is and how much all the emotion and the irritation and his struggle to hide everything he has for Heero over the past two months. I could imagine him doing more.

And the way Heero is during this part was done magnificently.

Although I really was becoming more dismayed as it went on. This is like the Series of Unfortunate Events, except these obstacles are so realistic I can only complain on the outside. T_T

Lines 739-774: Oh shite.

Lines 774-784: One of the greatest unexpected endings for me evar. I never really thought of this as the conclu to to the chapter when I was waiting for it the day after Chinese Poles II out, 'cause that kin thn that chapter really got me thinking. But the emotional gathering here was great, and Wufei is so in character it makes me want to cry.
...
...really. *sobs for them and thwacks each weakly*

END REACTION

wait strike that

Line oh-my-god-you've-gotta-be-kidding:

[quote]Next chapter out in 1-2 weeks.[end quote]

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CRUELTY I TELL YOU CRUELTY!!111!!

Okay it really ends now

That was probably kinda jumbled. But it's the most detailed and longest review I've given on AFF so far. x.X

On a last, repetitive, seriously serious note, I really love this story.
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