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Reviews for The Arrangement

By : Maldoror

From ANON - Rei Schneider on August 21, 2004
OMG!!! o_O This was AWESOME!!!

The lemon scene was great, and so tender (something really strange for those gundam pilots) I was so happy when Heestaystayed with Wufei after sex ^__^ Everything was going ok... but I just knew it wouldn't last long. I knew that one of them will ruin it all.... and I was right! XDDDDDDDDDD
The fight was great! .... well in fact I think it was a one-sided conversation, 'cause Wufei shouted and shouted and Heero just listened, and ocassionally he said: "What?!", "No!" XD ...well I guess that's a proof that he doesn't know exactly what he wants from Wufei.... but I don't think that Heero is the only guilty in all this mess, Wufei is guilty too....he went berserk and poured all his frustrations and insecurities to Heero and I don't think this is a matter of honor, I think that Wufei has serious self-esteem problems ^___^U
I'm so excited! what will happen between this two lovely bishies?!? -------- Hope u can update soon!!!
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From ANON - RavenWings on August 20, 2004
The Word was "lover", wasn't it? ^^' Maybe?

...Okay the "They're so frickin' screwed up! MEN!!!" thing is *very* appropriate right now... I was wondering how long it'd take for 'Fei to realize that Hee-chan had heard him! Of course, he's got a lot of problems figuring out that sorta thing... hell, he's no better than Hee-chan, really... And ya gotta ask... where exactly is he running to? ...Or running from?

Oh, I liked the Yuy-Chang course. *Grins* It figures. *Bounces* I can't wait until you post more! Whee!
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From ANON - bluepixie13 on August 20, 2004
oh no say it ist so dont tell me its the end oh crule world (sniffle) oh well i love the lemon i just cant tell you everything i like about this two chapters. cant waqit to read more. thank you.
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From ANON - Mai on August 20, 2004
*stares blankly at all other reviews answers* I SAW THAT! GOD DAMNIT! *beats head* why didn't I think about that... *sigh* well, that definatly DID surprise me when I read over it and now I VIVIDLY remember pausing and being like 'Whoa Nelly, WTF?' *sigh* but I guess my answer was not meant to be. Lol *blaws a rarry*rry*
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From ANON - Mai on August 20, 2004
Schweeeeeeeeeeet^___^ Very nice, not too squishy lovy-dovie, no confessions of undying love, but enough to make it.... "Sigh Worthy" is all I can say. And then you fuck it all up by making Heero sound like an idiot *snorts in laug* Fe* Fei says he's not a woman, but hey- if I was in that position, I'd have acted a lot like Fei... but the only thing being is that I AM a woman, lol.
So our sweet little Fei-Fei has run off into the morning (I'd say about 9- an hour for booty and 2 for sleeping, it was 6 when they started) and Heero's gotta figure out if it was all a lie, real, or never there in the first place or something... guy's got his work cut out for him if you ask me >:P I'm guessing Wu-man... (Wu-man...hmmm...wuman.....woman.....oh dear.. *shakes head*, no, he's not a woman....*snickers*) is gonna give Winner a call, but hey, I could be wrong. But while he may just get his own place and continue working for Une I really don't see Heero and Fei having a lovely and romantic make-up boo-hoo baby scene where everything is talked about over chocolate cake and icecream. So...hurry up Ho! I wanna see how this works out!....... and at the risk of sounding like Duo^__^;;; more booty, that was a wooooooonderful scene.*drools*
And for your little thinga-majig at the end in your A/N, the only thing I can think of id that he says 'Heero' and not just 'Yuy' Hey, I could be wrong you know! I saw a few things in there I don't remember reading in previous placces...
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From ANON - Rachel on August 20, 2004
AAAGGGGGHHHHHH!!!! 1-2 WEEKS!! (banging head on monitor) How can you just leave us like this?! You're so evil! (jonesing already for the next chapter)

Damn, this is SO good! Most angsty fics just bore me to tears, because they come across as so fakey, but THIS! It's believable and totally consistent with the characters. It makes me want to thwap both of them and hug them at the same time. Great stuff!

Would "THE WORD" be "lover"? (hopeful look)

Rachel
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From ANON - Nozomi on August 20, 2004
I think i found it!!! The Word!!!!! :P it's 'lover', isn't it???

lol. anyway, still an awesome story! I can't wait to read more from you! Hope that 1-2 weeks flies by. *gets a little impatient, since other fic writers haven't been updatin all all....*
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From ANON - PhoenixMageFire on August 20, 2004
You had better update soon, or I won't make cookies!
But still, it's so terrible. Wu-kun almost lets himself be happy, and then by some twist of pride and sheer rock-for-brainism; then he talks himself out of it. This is begining to sound like someone I know in real life.
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From ANON - Rei Schneider on August 19, 2004
o.O This is gettin' better & better!!!
I'm sooooo glad because you updated, "The Arrengement" is my addiction!!!! XDDDDD
.....Wufei wants to get laid.... does Heero wants to get laid too??? ^__^ I think bof thf them need some action *hentai grin* ne?
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From ANON - Rachel on August 19, 2004
BRILLIANT! This story is simple brilliant! I haven't had this much fun reading fanfiction in a long, long time. Your grasp of the characters, their motivations, and complete lack of what I call the "Oh, sure *that* would happen" factor in the plot is amazing (and the sex is pretty hot, too!) the the way you use the language - theree bee been several times where I just cracked up at the image (i.e., Une looking like she caught two Gundams boning each other), and had an instant picture of what you were trying to portray.

Oh, the chapter with 'Spiel Mit Mir' by Rammstein? Guess those years of high school German paid off - I didn't even have to check out the English lyrics to get the gist of the song - and it was SO appropriate for that sequence! Great choice!

I am *dying* to read the rest of this story - so here is much virtual chocolate, beer, and cabana boys to give you foot rubs to encourage you to write! write! write!

Waiting with much anticipation - Rachel
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From ANON - Mia on August 19, 2004
YIPPIE!!!! *does a dance* yay! I've been checking up on the story constantly for the last few days- waiting for the BRILLIANT continuation^__^ You ROCK! I could never hope to live up to your killer writting style, and I don't think it would do you justice if I tried. So here I am with my somewhat lacking writter skills, but you are my little hero^__^ This is seriously BES BEST 1X5 fics that I've read so far. And you little tease*mock glare and huffs comically* I thought Fei was gonna get some. Lol, but yay, he get some next time! *evil cackles* I loooooooooved the touch with the red guppies... and the adult course....*sigh* I scared the lawn workers next door with my sudden outburst of laughter^__^ You effect us all- Mai
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From ANON - sminty on August 19, 2004
First I would like to thank you for posting here. For some odd reason mm.org will not show your update, will at least on my computer. It insists that you last update is Aug 2. Anyway I am so glad to find it here ^__^

Oh, this chapter�it was simply wonderful, but all of your chapters are. Wonderfully stressful and unpredictable. I love the glimpse of horrible war-torn memories of death and rats . I feel so sorry for Wufei. His self esteem was already do fragile and now.(wipes tear away) I could only shake my head as I read him declare to overcome depression while simultaneously chant �its my fault, its all my fault.

Oh now the first conversation, To me that conversation though limited in verbal words said SO much, About Heero, anyway. Usually, he expresses his well devotion to Chang though his actions. And yes I will say devotion but he turns his world inside out for Wufei, whether my fav pilot, sees it or not. Heero�s main goal is to maintain the peace oughought so hard to create, but he will put that goal on the backburner without a second thought, and stay home and take care of Wufei, while doing light duty work. I think it is very very sweet. (sigh)

Now back to my point. That first converstation. I think Heero blames himself. He doesn�t blame Wufei because Wufei was being drugged and really didn�t know what the hell was going on. But Heero had been there with him, throughout the whole time. Taking care of him and he didn�t SEE that something was wrong. He knew that something was wrong but he didn�t ask what. You know I think he was afraid that he was losing Wufei, and probably to that Susan woman, too. She was from Wufei�s colonly, she was Chinese and a WOMAN. That is a lot to compete with. Especially since he n�t n�t kow how devoted, (I love the word) Chang is to him. Moreover, since Wufei had been working with that woman, Chang had become more distant and MEAN. So Heeri accepted the abuse so not to lose Chang. Just and Wufei accepts the loneliness so not to lose Heero (well, that�s how I choose to see it) Now back to my point, the conversation. I think Heero blames himself. I wouldn�t even doubt that the stuff he was working was research on the drug Chang was given. So he could understand exactly what Wufei wasd going through and how to help him heal, and so he would never be fooled by it again.

Now the unreadable stiffness Heero displays. I think he is guarding himself and trying to prepare himself when Wufei leaves him. He heard Wufei�s confession on how hard it is to keep up him. He probably feels that Wufei�s ordeal wouldn�t have been as bad if
Chang wasn�t trying to keep from disappointing him. He probably thinks that it is all his fault. It must of hurt to see his friend, lover, partner sleep for two day. To know that they were drugged to the point of insanity and now suffer from all types of internal and brain damage and if he would have just REALlIZED it wouldn�t have happened. Heero probably feels like he failed Wufei. I think that is why he is a bit overprotective now. Okay A LOT over protective. Personally, I have a very high tolerance when it comes to coddling but Heero would have pushed me close to my limit. ^_~ Though I thought it was sweet.

All in all I thought this chapter was great! I was mentally preparing myself for the atypical rift. I forgot what an amazing writer you are. Instead of just being sad, I was frustrated and I screamed at my computer that �My God! They are so screwed up! MEN!!� I loved it! Can�t wait for the next installment. Oh and before I go. I love Quatre!! I love that sneaky little angel of meddling. ^_~

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From ANON - amaryllis on August 18, 2004
*THWAP*

(last two chapters were great, by the way. Everything made sense in the last part of 'Breaking Storm' and this last chapter was a great portrayal of how Wufei would react. Really anticipating the next chapter!! ^_^)
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From ANON - blxie1xie13 on August 16, 2004
poor e ite it must have felt like he culdent trust anything even his mind and for some who has that muchj controll over them sevls that must be the worst part. now lets see if im right heero somhow kows what wufie said and dosent know what to make of it he now has to come to term with some of his own feelings. he wahces him to see how this information affects there relationship. so how far of am i. thanks for the brain bending chapter cant wait for the next update.
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From ANON - Mia on August 16, 2004
I'm getting the feeling here that Wufei is just an idiot and Heero's already started on the path of something more than a simple 'arrangement' and is waiting for Wufei to finally catch up and take notice. Awwww, poor Heero *lol* I find myself thinking Yuy the shy schoolgirl trying to get the blockheaded adorable Wu-man to fially ask him out or something *snorts*. That's just a small thought... Oh, and Wufei IS an idiot. I'm ashamed to say that one of my fav. characters in this show isn't more in tune with himself. But I LOVE your story! *kisses author:SMOOCHIEZ!!!!* One of the best I've read in a looooong time!
Oh, one more thing- MORE SEX. Sorry, but really, it's NC-17 for a reason. Get those boys on the mat for some hard grie^__e^____^ .........or are you gonna make Fei beg for it....O.O oooooooooooooooooooooooh.
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