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Reviews for The Arrangement

By : Maldoror

From Mewenn777 on April 05, 2011
That was one epic story. It was great and I loved the bit with all the dreams and how it made Wufei feel so out of it and sometimes so hurt at what he couldn't have (one of those was almost a premonition, maybe he shouldn't have dismissed those dreams' teaching so easily :P). I loved your outland fics but I like your fanfiction just as much (actually I found out that you're the author of one or two gundam fanfics that I read when I was younger and really loved). So thank you for the awesome time I had while reading your work (especially near the end, I couldn't stop and went to bed at 3 in the morning).
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From ANON - Coiria on December 14, 2006
"When they say couples should share common interests, I don't think they had mayhem and emotional repression in mind." ~ That is my favorite line in this story. It makes me laugh, and it perfectly expresses the basis pf Heero and Wufei's relationship. I very much enjoyed the way the characters started off so similar to their canon counterparts and then slowly developed in believable directions. Beautifully written. Hmm, my only suggestion would be to review the posts for missing or repeated words. In each chapter, there tends to be a few burps. Most of the time, I can fill in the blank in a way that makes sense, but I'm a little frustrated when I can't.
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From ANON - Obsidian Pixie on February 03, 2006
Yeah!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I finally finished reading it all. That was so neat. I loved. Thanks for sharing with us!
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From ANON - Camui on January 22, 2006
You're really living up to the author that I have come to respect and adore for a near year. ^^ I read this story non-stop for like... a week (with many breaks in between for work, food, and... food...) and now I'm finished. ...I feel kinda empty, now that the life of Heero and Wufei is complete. Heh... 'life', not 'lives'... it seems perfect. I was never a big fan of 1X5X1 until I read this fic. I used to think it was just impossible. I always was like "Yes, 2X5X2!!"; now I'm like "Hm. 1X2X1. It sucks. No one can interpret it as well as Mal. *glare*" This story put me on a roller coaster of emotions; angst, suspense, surprise, sadness... Hell, a few tears leaked out. I even laughed out loud! Few stories can do that to me. In fact, some things were so funny I had to look away because I couldn't read anymore-- I'd be laughing too hard!

A reason this story really grabs at me, now that I've finished I've realized, is that I met my love during the worst time of my life. Battles, small wars... I had no time to lead a normal life. I'm young (19, for Christ's sake!) and I didn't truly appreciate what life has given me; mainly because I thought it had given me nothing. But, I realize that it gave me the opportunity to let my true self shine, and not be shy or ashamed of what I felt, how I acted. He accepted me for me, caressed my flaws instead of poked them... and this story just brought me back to me and him, naught over a year ago, meeting and clashing, then getting over all odds.

I'll have to tell you my favorite part is Epilogue: Part I. I can totally sympathize with Heero and Wufei about buying a bed and having a nosy lady bothering them. When my boyfriend and I went to go buy our first bed, we went around together testing sturdiness and squeaks for *cough* other reasons *cough* and the lady kept hitting on me... eventually I asked my boyfriend "Is this bed too small? I don't want you falling off during sex because it's too small; that'd be a mood breaker." The lady just kind of left us alone... ^_^

The combat scenes were wonderful as well. Your knowledge of the Gundam universe makes me wonder if you're the one who created the show XD Everything is described perfectly, as if you were there and taking notes so you could write this story.

I also noticed there's not many hits; 3300 or something. I'm not surprised though. Most people go browsing for stories that'll last about 10 chapters, flying through meetings, friendships, sexual encounters, and then -what a surprise- the two fall in love. Well, the very beginning of the story says very bluntly that this is not a romance. I'll admit that I read the first chapter a while ago (a few months maybe) and I just decided I didn't like it. Well, I developed as a writer and I also bettered the way I criticized relationships, and then went back to "The Arrangement". And I found myself hooked. I'm quite ashamed that I gave up on the first try. As a person that's been traumatized (I use that word for lack of a better term) by the spoils of war and battles, I can really appreciate this fic. That's a huge accomplishment for you, even if you don't realize it. I read FMA, Gundam, yada yada and no one can grasp the full concept of battle. I am honored that you can appreciate it and depict is as beautifully as you did.

As it is, I can't wait for your update of "Diplomatic Relations", as that is another story that you have got me hooked on. Good job on being such a wonderful writer. And good job in showing me that some people know what it's like to be in the middle of things. Thanks for reminding me how very special it is that I've found my love, even if it was in the middle of our worst times. Thank you.

**Camui**
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From ANON - RadicalArcher on January 18, 2006
If I didn't love you before I read this, I definitely do now. It took me a while to read the entire thing (in between reading everything else you've written), but I have to say that this may just be the best finished story I've read that isn't a hard copy finished book. The characterizations and their development is flawless and completely believable; the interaction between the characters sounds real and natural, and the sex is so hot that I could have lit candles by placing them in front of my monitor! *perverse grin and giggle*

If you do a sequel to this, I will probably be one of the first people in line to read it, because you are awesome and I would love to read more of you work!

~RA
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From ANON - fluff on June 06, 2005
great, i really love this story!
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From SpiritSeeker on April 01, 2005
I wanted to compliment you on this story. This is one of my absolute favorites. This story actually got me interested in the 1x5 5x1 pairing. Thank you for writing such a wonderful story. Your descriptions on thier thoughts was wonderful. The way you made their relationship process slow so they would get to know each other was brilliant. This wasn't a "wham bam thank you mam" story. It is a wonderful, thought provoking journey, and you did a great job. Please continue writing, because I am now one of your greatest fans.
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From ANON - Vampgal on November 23, 2004
wow, wow, wow. I read this entire fic in one sitting I couldn't stop myself. I thought it was too good. I think you got their characters down really well. I absolutely love Wufei now and with Heero? I can actually see their pair work thanks to you. Pretty much I just wanted to say that this fic was beyond awesome and so well written too, I could picture the scenes in my head. Now I have to go and start reading the next story you have. I hope that you might insert another fic like a sequel cause I'd love to see how things are in a few months for them. Keep Writing and stay inspired ::huge smile::
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From ANON - YoungJae on October 28, 2004
First of all, excellent work! I realize that I'm reviewing a hell of a long time after you annouced that this was complete--so sue me for that--but I really didn't have time. So anyways, this piece, from beginning to end, really caught my attention. It's like a Tom Clancy version of a love story and, while on that note, despite your continuous denial that this will be a love story, I for one think that this is the most logical love story I have ever read in all 19 years of my life. Good job there. Seriously, I don't take interest in how someone supposedly either falls in love at first sight or just admits it out of the blue and then it's kissing-time followed by a "fuck me hard" session. Bleh... So...KEEP WRITING! Looking forward to...a sequel was it? Yeah, looking forward to that.
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From ANON - Ju on September 19, 2004
That was the best story I've ever read, ever. It was just so powerful! A real whirlwind adventure, insightful and uplifting. Your writing is just fantastic! Thanks for the great read

Ju xxx
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From ANON - Ju on September 19, 2004
That was the best story I've ever read, ever. It was just so powerful! A real whirlwind advre, re, insightful and uplisting. Your writing is just fantastic! Thanks for the great read

Ju xxx
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From ANON - Rei Schneider on September 13, 2004
OMG!!! This was AWESOME!!! I love it. You are great writer ^__^ THANKS for this interesting beautiful yaoi story!!!!
ps i loved the lemon scene. i'm still drooling XDD
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From ANON - Rachel on September 13, 2004
WOW! Hard to believe it's all done! A magnificent story, far above the usual quality of fanfiction. Just as an interesting tidbit, I printed a hard copy of this story, and even after tossing all the pages that don't actually have story on them, it STILL filled two 4-inch ring binders! It's not often a fanfic consisting of several hundred pages manages to keep my attention, but this one sure did! Bravissima!!

I do hope that you will write other stories in this universe you've created. It was a true pleasure to read, with such an excellent grasp of plot, characterization, grammar that NOT ONCE did I have a "huh?" moment. There is so much potential for additional stories that I genuinely hate the thought that you will not play anymore in your world. Please indulge us with more of your work. (big sad puppy eyes in a blatant attempt to encourage more writing)

Oh, and the virtual cabana boys are awaiting you with fruity drinks with little umbrellas, oil for your foot rubs, and many, many bites of your favorite chocolate for you to nibble while you recover. :)
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From ANON - PhoenixMageFire on September 13, 2004
*drools*
Yes, a wonderful mental image. Bouncing on the bed, even fully clothed in public would be very distracting...
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From ANON - snoggitz on September 12, 2004
this was great. I love the way you illustrate their feelings through body language. It tells alot about their personalities. The ending was sweet in its own way, perfectly fitting their relationship. Best gundam fic i have ever read, hands down. I hope to see more from you. P.S. Ever try writing a screen play? I think you would do well with one.
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