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Reviews for Monster

By : Camaro

From ANON - Macha on January 29, 2005
lol, and yes, I have read it many times because of that on other sites. Mwuahahahahahahhaha.

So, since this is a chapter on nothing but sex, I will grade the sex. VERY GOOD. *licks lips* Most of the time I find hentia sex (written, *winks*) to be so boring. This wasn't. :)

I am still with the oppionion of "NO Goku! You are taking total advantage of the situation." *shakes head* Bulma isn't complaining though.

I do like the fact she asked about Goku's motives for threatening her. "What if I do tell?" Ah, and she had him exactly where she wanted him once again! *shakes head again*

So, you see, I really am just a sex feind, but this story is usually something out of the ordinary that I don't have to read just about the sex.

This chapter was a nice break from to gore, if not the angst and own personal concerns about Goku's behavior.

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From Bulma on January 28, 2005
That was one helluva chapter, alot of info and insight into Bulma's psyche. I really liked this chapter, hope more will be forthcomming!

Love ya Camaro!

Vegeta's Mate
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From ANON - SweetAngelofMusic on January 28, 2005
GOD, I love your writing!!! This story is increadible, it's sexy, exciting, spellbinding and something
completely different to anything I've ever read, I think you're up there with writers such as Anne Rice...
you could sell this story as a book and I'd definately be the first one to buy it.
Love how it's so dark and full of love, hate, guilt, religion, sex and confusion, it's lush ;)
You're definately worth praise, so don't listen to all the assholes out there -they dont know what they're talking about!
Love ya/Angel
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From PrismaKakkerra on January 26, 2005
Okay.. let me tell you somethings.. One.. this is awesome story, I didnt even read it here I read it at the Vault. Two this maybe tmi, but I got too hard off it. lol Does that make me sick? Yes probbably, but still that makes it a damn good story. lol . I think I told a millon people about it I was so crazy about it. *gravels* I am your new biggest fan. lol. ^.^ thats all I wanted to say. lol

Prisma says he likes the ding but not the ling.
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From ANON - deepoet on January 25, 2005
Oh and Noneya? As in Noneya Business, nobody likes anonymous reviews sweetie! Grow up! Don't say anything if you're scared to.
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From ANON - deepoet on January 25, 2005
Hi Camaro it's deepoet again...I know we got off to a rocky start but that doesn't mean I can't review you story does it? I hope not! But anyway chap. 25 was unexpected but very well worded nonetheless. And 26....I would've liked it alot better if you would have went into details with the Goku/Bulma sex part or maybe you'll do it in 27? One more thing I noticed that you put 25 and 26 up quite quickly! About how long does it take you to write a chapter roughly?
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From chibi7kid on January 25, 2005
Hello Camaro, sorry for not reviewing earler.
'monster' is the best dark fic I've read in years. Hell it makes 'The Texas Chainsaw Massacre' look like a pink show. (don't ask)

Chibi_kid, out.
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From ANON - Macha on January 25, 2005
Goku! NOOOO! What is he thinking? Bulma is drunk and under deress, he's really taking advantage of the situation. *covers eyes in disappointment*

And why did he decide that he needed/wanted to do something sinful on his own? Ack.

Really well written chapter, and despite my disappointment in Goku's behavior, this chapter and it's outcomes are totally believable.
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From ANON - Jenn on January 23, 2005
I enjoyed the update. It's a little hard to see bulmas dad hit bulma, but you explained it well. I was wondering what happened with chichi. I hope the next chapter tells a little bit more of the whole situation.
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From ANON - noneya on January 23, 2005
You've got a bad mind, and the flamers can come bigger than you.
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From ANON - Emily on January 23, 2005
Very right camaro. West it would seem you got yourself into this without researching or knowing that you were biting off more then you could chew. Pretty rude.

Camaro I found this new chapter disturbing. Mabe not in the way you had wanted me to but for other reasons. The past you gve of bulma and her fathers treatment is haunting. Morbidly so since I recognize the patterns as those that you had describe in your blog when talking of your OWN father. I also know that you write from experience and make things personal. I want to talk to you about this more in depth later on. Email me, Emily
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From ANON - Macha on January 23, 2005
Well, we got to see really different sides to Bulma in this chapter. The first part of it, when she was drinking, I don't think I have ever seen Bulma portraied (sp?) as a person who has gone over the edge, but I believe she has. I do understand Goku's confusion/disappointment. Here's a person who's been a solid foundation for him most of his life, and she's lost it.

The twist about her dad being like that was shocking. I would have NEVER thought of him capable of such things. However, I am a little disappointed in Bulma for taking out her anger on Goku for not being there. She never told him what was happening, and yet she expected him to play the hero for her. Whether or not she wants to believe it, she did learn a few bad things from her mother, two of the being able to cover up what was happening and NOT telling anyone it was happening.

If Goku didn't know that she was in trouble, how was he suppose to help? I believe that if Bulma had told him that she needed the help, Goku would have helped, no questions asked and no proof needed.

Now, if she was looking for someone to just beat her father up, then Goku may have needed the proof, being the angel that Bulma accused him of.
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From ANON - Camaro on January 22, 2005
Dear Nienna West,

Maybe if you had read clearly through my "rant" you would not have been so eager to make a complete MORON of yourself. That rant was towards FANFICTION.NET--NOT Adultfanfiction.net. I, for one, feel entirely justified in all that I said regarding that because of the false advertisement "Unleash your imagination and free your soul" that is so proudly posted on FFnet, and so blatantly corrupted by further bans and rules. Any REAL yaoi or hentai fan despises that ffnet not only banned our content but also continues to promote an ideal that they do NOT uphold.

And to add to your list of ASSumptions, you've also so abrasively concluded that I'm not old enough to be on this adult site. I'm not even going to argue that because any idiot who ACTUALLY took the time out to READ my story--BEFORE clicking a review button and so publicly making an ASS of themself--would know that I'm certainly old enough and talented enough to be here.

I'm just not so sure about you since you've so childishly taken everything I said and totally thrown it out of context in the pursuit to "put me in my place"--so to speak. I understand that it's human nature to hate what we feel is stronger then us and in our nature to despise an idea that pertains to arrogance or possible conceit, but if I were you, I'd take this as a lesson learned.

"One dimension" proved to me one thing that I might have concluded anyways...You insulted a story and an author you didn't even bother to A.) read or B.) understand and as a result, are publicly shown for being an impertinent, brash and foolish little girl.

"Writing for writing's sake" is a saying that basically means, that you write because you're passionate about it: because you want to. Not because you want a review number or praise, but because you FEEL whole when you do it. It's something that I myself have strived very hard to achieve, and I'm still working on it. Do yourself a favor, and write something rather than come by my stories looking for a fight and a challenge when you're not going to get one.

Sheesh! What IS it with people this week? Everyone wants to start shit with me! haha But I have neither the patience nor the concern for that. I just actually saw your "flame" (or whatever stupid category you'd throw it in) and figured it was best to address it and let you know that your assumptions were totally incorrect. Read and understand something before you attack it and make yourself look completely stupid. Do your homework honey.

Love
Camaro
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From ANON - Nienna West on January 22, 2005
Instead of lashing out at the site owner(s) (not to mention, others) with hateful rants and vulgar litanies, why not try a little GRATITUDE ... a little HUMILITY? They're doing all of us a favor, allowing us to post our work FOR FREE! The way I see it, Ayla (et al.) pays the bills and makes the rules, so .... she has the right to delete any story she sees fit, whether it be yours, mine or her baby sister's! If you don't like it here ... why not build your own site?

Are you certain you're even old enough to access this site? Your author's notes and profile tirades certainly don't make you sound like it. Grow up, already! Who knows? Your work might even discover more than ONE dimension for it! 'Writing for writing's sake?' -- Tell me, from which Hair Band Rock Fanzine did you pluck that little gem of a cliche?
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From ANON - anubiset on January 21, 2005
that was different. By far. But not the first time I`ve read works were the sex is the only thing. I do like to see people like you who have a whole diffent view point. Especially since most people think sex has to have love. I could never right something like that. I have this little problem, I like romance. However that does not mean I don`t understand and appreciate works like yours. I am always intrigued by the darker side of human emotions. If you ever get thrown off another site come to mine. It`s a yahoo group, but I would be glad to host your stories. Just e-mail me and I`ll give you the address.
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