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By : Camaro

From ANON - deepoet on January 21, 2005
You know what? I'm not going to say anything bad about this story because it was damn near the best thing I've ever read! But I've been to your page Camaro and I saw that you like to get on people about their misspelled words and grammar mistakes and such...you might want to proof read you own stuff before you do that...just for future references. And one more thing, has Goku ever been to church or no? I noticed you kept changing that one little detail up. Not a biggie just thought I'd bring it up. If you having anything you want to say in regards of what I said just email me and yes this is my REAL email address.-_^
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From ANON - Courtney on January 19, 2005
Hoooly mess! *stares at screen* I have been like.. ADDICTED to this all week. x_x lol I started reading it when I got bored and even though I thought about just stopping I kept resaving so I could come back. WoW. Is that one piece of work. *whistles* You've done an AMAZING job on it. Can't wait to see what else might happen. Wow..
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From ANON - Macha on January 16, 2005
YAY, you're back. I was beginning to wonder. I may just email you.

Anyway, back to the story. O.O The ring has been sitting in the back of my mind during this story. Mostly thought of when there are mentions of Gohan. Vegeta's total lack of concern for where he got the ring and why he felt the need to give it to Gohan concern me. Now they concern me even more, as it seems that people bent on the distruction of Earth and it's 'heros' or 'saints' have often been under the 'influence' of the ring. (Or at least in close proximety to it)

Interesting how Goku was drawn to the one library, (I am supposing in all the world) That could give him some answers. I am very disappointed that he didn't stick around to listen more to what the librian had to say. The guy in the libray didn't seem the kind for idol chit-chat, so if he was yelling things at Goku (other than telling him off for being so rough with the book) I am certain that the pertained greatly to 'something'.

And for one guy to be found in both pictures? I know that the periods of time between those two men weren't great, but those would be drawings and a certain passage of time did happen and you would think that even if the same person were at both events, time would have changed them to the point of being unrecognizable, wouldn't you? Unless, of course, there is something we don't know about this person 'worm tongue'.

*shrugs* or maybe I am just reading too much into it.
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From ANON - Jenn on January 15, 2005
need more...I wanna see what goku does. I love this fanfic. I procrastinated many a homework to read it and I hope the end is as good as all the chapters. OK enough ass kissing, Please update soon. My addiction is running low. ::grins::
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From ANON - jaygoose on January 14, 2005
So I finally am up to speed. I have missed so much. I have got to say that you definitely know how to set a scene. The NY city massacre was wonderfully done. I could actually see it all in my head and I must say that I was quite disturbed. But I loved it. It nice to see read someones work who is not afraid to show the true nature of violence. The blood, the guts and decay. It was quite amazing. Most fanfic writers (myself included but I am trying to move away from it) always lean toward the sanitized kiddy violence that they see on the TV show (the edited one anyway). It nice to see or read the real thing for once.

There so much emotion there. I think that you really put us in the mind set of Goku. There was just too much. I can't blame him for shutting himself off completely. I probably would have done the same thing in that situation.

I love where this is going...whether it be the end of the world or not. This is good stuff and I so enjoy reading it.

And I agree with you on the, Why does all the DBZ yaoi have to be so lovy dovy and shit. I have tried it and failed. I'm just not the mushy type so I no longer see the point in faking it. Besides, Vegeta certainly doesn't seem the type either.

*Goosie*
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From ANON - Tesgura on January 11, 2005
Finaly, someone who really knows their shit. It is so boring reading through the crap-loads of shit others post that have no depth. It's good that someone can really write something worth reading. Thank you.
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From ANON - Lemony Snicket on January 10, 2005
*Cough* Well, I agree with you FULLY about FF.Net! Thoes fucking idiots deleted a story of mine with 386 reviews and a friend of mine's whole account including her story with 1387 reviews! They make me so mad, but like you I will never stop. I change my name every so often to throw them off my track. And your note was so FUNNY! Well said!

Anyway, your story is wonderful! though I've written yaois in love stories I agree: why must they always be love stories?! That is also why one of my favorite authors is Koga's hentai luver on this site. And now you are one as well. I love lemons!

Keep it up!

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From ANON - digi on January 10, 2005
i've read over fice thousand fan fics, and this is the best in all areas. it's gorgeous, it's chilling, it makes grin sadistically, it makes me want to see vegeta and goku tussling, as an understatement, over dead bodies, in clubs, any and everywhere.

jesus christ, you're the best goddamn author i've ever run across.
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From ANON - Anon on January 07, 2005
Oooppppsss I mean Horrifying, not horryfying. So sorry
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From ANON - Sliding_Pool235 on January 07, 2005
Completely chilling. I have been hooked from the start and unable to put tihs away.
Now I know why you have the most reviews and it is not for the reasons that people
do on ffnet. There ahve been many times I have found myself with chills while reading
your story and I have one word to sum it up. Horryfying! You write very intense and
very descriptively. I wish I had your imaginatoin and then other times dont know how
you can live with such images in your head to write down. Please email me when you update

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From ANON - Sliding_Pool235 on January 07, 2005
I was goign to wait until I got to the end but I read this and wanted to comment on it.

"""Not long ago, ffnet was ruled by the number of the review ya know? It was all that mattered and even pathetic, trashy and mindless pieces of shit could be viewed as worth reading due to a simple number. It was glorifying and it was power and I dont think there are many who would disagree with me, stupid and petty as that ideal was. Even I fell into the idea of it all, thinking that having the highest number meant that I was actually something of a writer. But it doesn't take popularity or a good rating to tell you what you are and for me, it wasn't until that was all taken away that I realized in many ways, I fell short of being a true author.

Because I conformed to something I didn't believe in. Thats why I'm grateful that my account was deleted off ffnet because it was only than that I discovered that while creativity isn't always popular, its important to ME. So on ffnet, we're all being equaled out and humbled, and for that, I can be thankful. """"

Your correct in saying that alot of the stories that have alot of reviews
are crap because on ffnet, they are. But you should also notice that around here
you have one of the highest rated, most reviewed stories so you should know
that that means that there are others around that appreciate creativity to.

NEver give up because every new chapter inspires me to write something gothic and
gorey of my own. Your inspire alot of people to not conform to what others want.
Keep up the great work and pls pls pls!!! Email me when you update this amazing story.

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From ANON - Anji on January 05, 2005
I couldn't possibly put it better myself macha...the story is coming along and it keeps getting deeper. It scars me that this is happnign to goku...but in a way...you kind of want it...you like it, and you want to see what goku can really do. In reality I just think goku needs a big hug...maybe if we all gave him one he'd know how to love again ^_^;;

Bytheway, I will never forget your kindness Camaro...We all love you!
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From ANON - Macha on January 04, 2005
O.O Oh my. I have one word for this chapter. Bleak.

Even though I know it's not what the story is about, I keep saying to myself, "Goku will come to his senses, I know he will." Of course, in total denial that there is even a possiblity that he won't. Then he goes and breaks Chichi's arm, and says those things, and now my conveictions are falling apart! *sighs* The words he used were so.... Vegeta like in a way. "You won't go any where, because no one will have you."

Gohan blowing up Ichoras (sp?), and Goku knowing that all his words are just that, empty words. *shudders* All the strange behavior, and now this? What kind of thoughts are going through the child's mind? Personally, I hope to never 'understand.' Sure, I'd like to know what he's thinking, but I don't ever want to 'feel' that it's alright to do such things. (Well, I did have my teenage years.... *shrugs* I hope I have grown beyond that *grins*)

And all those people thinking that it's moral decay that is happening, when, really, it's social decay. The standards that governed peoples behaviors have gone out the window in favor of survival. Or is it even worse than that? Has it gone beyond the survival instincts? Just doing these things because one can? If that is the case, then it is moral decay.
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From ANON - anon on January 03, 2005
What is the point of reading if there isnt any love in the story neways? you talk about writing sex for sex sake like its bad and then you put religion and sex in the same story. Your a HYPOCRITE! You may write well but you flame other peoples stories for having rape stuff and then yours has religion and gay sex in it., thsoe two DONT MIX WHORE!!!
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From ANON - Macha on December 28, 2004
Ah, the benifits of reading through this tiwce. I missed something the frist time, but saw it this time. "It wasn't the hand..." Vegeta said. So, if it wasn't the hand that had him terrified, and there was only one other thing discribed in that particular paragragh, it had to be...., well, I am not going to say. I am going to let other folks get it on their own.

So many things in this one chapter. I am very sorry to see that Krillin choose the easy way out, rather than wanting revenge against the thing that had taken is girlfriend. I also think, that somewhere, this effected Goku deeply, because, since Krillin had taken his own life a wish to the dragon couldn't bring him back.(I don't know that Dragons and wishes have any part in this story, but that's how I enterpret it.)

Vegeta's crassness about the whole situation, well, I am glad to see that Goku has finally grown a pair. I just have to wonder how long they will last.

So, Vegeta isn't trying to convince Goku there isn't a God, just trying to turn him from Him? Interesting.
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