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By : Camaro
  • From ANON - suisheu on December 27, 2004
    Jesus... Was this the only killer in which Goku saw through their own eyes, or were there more than just this Pizza Man? I'd go completely insane if something like that happened to me. I'm astounded that he can just roll over after me wakes up and enjoy the sunshine. Yikes!
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  • From ANON - suisheu on December 27, 2004
    With the sheer violence and malisciousness in which these people kill themsleves,coupled with those piles of burning scripture and the blackness of their eyes, it makes me think of that creature in Goku's dreams. Like maybe he's the one who's doing it all. that person, the one from the video camera, they were screaming "It
    s coming! It's coming!"'' But if they're all supposed to be killing themselves and eachother, then what exactly were they afraid of that 'was coming'? Vegeta wants a drink? Heehee.
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  • From ANON - suisheu on December 27, 2004
    Damn, that made me lose my breath. Why would anyone want to delete your stories? I've run across so many more that are ten times worse. I agree that flamers are made up of underaged corrupted kiddies and ppl looking in the wrong category but never fear, for I am neither. The monster sounds like the devil. It's scary as hell. The whole dream creeped me out, but in a way it is very fascinating.
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  • From ANON - sOMEBODY on December 19, 2004
    This is just a wonderful story. It's so fascinating and you can never tell what’s going to happen next. I also love the spin on Vegeta's character. It's all so mysterious from Goku's eyes ...And here comes the finale, or should I say apocalypse, eh.

    Oh, and also I was listening to this song the other day (Time Is Running Out by Muse) and it just seemed to extremely well with your story. You really should check it out yourself. It’s a great song. That’s all. Thanks for writing such a wonderful story.

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  • From ANON - Agent182 on December 17, 2004
    “How come it is, that every day terrible people live? How come it is that these monsters can get away with murder, with stealing, with anything? And how come the purest of them all is the one to go in the end? You sacrificed yourself to save strangers and to save your family,” He sobbed. “And I can’t understand it. What does that make of me?”

    -I loved this line. It's truth is sickening to me, but the truth all the same. The scene with Krillian was wonderful. It stirred feelings within me that i don't like... but feelings none the less. I loved when he told Gohan that Goku was the sun and the sky. Beautifully written. It seemed hopeful yet sad. The ending was wonderful, with Vegeta showing up and telling Goku to tell him to stop.. the monster within him reappearing. The ending line was wonderful as well.
    I have to say this fic is very good. Original and that is something i always love. I read your profile and i laughed. Not because it was humorous because of the stupidiy of the human race. People always say they want you to tell them what they did wrong, right. That is what reviews are for. to tell you what you did right and what you did wrong. But once you say what they did wrong, they instantly feel offended. Obviously they won't be able to take their writing any further in life. Rejection and failure is a part of being in the writing business. People would rather be fed lies than hear the sad truth. I'm sure you knew this already. Flames are when you sit there and say this fic sucks blah blah blah. I have seen some reviews of yours and they didn't seem like flames to me. You are stating the truth that no one else is willing to admit and the writer isn't willing to hear. I think the stupidity from ff.net is transfering over here. The kids are probably just wanting to piss someone off.
    I've seen fics with many reviews... and the fic was horrible when i read it. Stating that reviews don't really matter. Half of them could have been flames anyways.
    People have no repect for originality. They want to read the same shit and write the same shit. Almost all of the fics on either site are the same. 2 characters fall i love. The end. Boring if you ask me.
    I think if you have the talent you can flaunt it and think highly of yourself. Which you can. I always see the word 'bitch' as someone who is extremely stupid and unkind. You seem very intellegent to me, i don't know about the other part yet but from what i heard from my good friend Macha there is another side to you. I guess i will end my review and say i do love the fic. It drips with originality, something that isn't always loved but should be.
    I think the world has already gone insane. Not many have noticed yet.
    -Agent182
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  • From Bulma on December 17, 2004
    Another riviting chapter, I've read this one already but it is still worth a second read especially when we're getting to the crazy parts that make you wanna jump in and drown in the story line. That's what I love about this fic, it inspires others to just read and never stop, getting so entrapped in the story that they have a fit when they find that the next chapter isn't posted yet. Anyway I just wanted to ask when you are going to send chapter 32 to www.saiyanhideaway.us, I'm about to pull myself bald wondring what is gonna happen next. Ginia sends her regards as well.


    Love ya babe!
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  • From ANON - Macha on December 16, 2004
    I am very curious to understand the look Chichi gave Vegeta. Makes me wonder.

    It was very shocking to hear Bulma voice Goku's own convictions. I wonder if she ever had the feeling that Goku DID know exactly what she was talking about.

    Nice to see a mention of Piccolo.

    I liked Goku's memory of Krillin. And I loved Krillin's explination to Gohan. Very touching.

    Ah, naughty evil Vegeta, 'making' Goku do bad things.
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  • From ANON - nni on December 16, 2004
    your just a bitch
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  • From ANON - Anji on December 15, 2004
    Dear Camaro,

    I would just like to say that you are everything you say you are. You are a fantastic writer, a reasonable critic, (and from what I can tell from you photo ~_~) a beautiful woman, and lastly an insperation.

    I came across your story reading the work of...Agent 182 was it? Anyway, I see you have been reccomended by many and rightly I must say. I'v read through your work and can only wish you continue. If you were ever to be called an arrogent bitch it is only because the people who can't handle the truth, hide from it with fear while dis'ing your art.

    I havn't created an account, but I'm thinking of doing so soon...I can say without arrogant feeling's that I'm a good writer. Maybe one day you will get to read my work...I can only hope you update and continue facisnating me, keeping me up hours and hours in the morning just to finish reading the next chapter of everyone of your story's.

    I know this must sound repulsive...I just wanted to tell you myself that, you have potential...Your so young and have so much experiance and skill. You give insperation to me...and I'm sure I'm not the only one. I, being of only 16, can hope that if I don't give up the skill of writing I can become as wonderful as you.

    You've captivated me...congradulation's...on everything.

    ~hidden in the shadows of my room, I dream...~
    Anji~
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  • From ANON - Bulma on December 15, 2004
    To *wouldn't you like to know* You say that you haven't read any of Camaro's work and you never intend to, then how pray tell do you know that she's an arrogent bitch? Has she reviewed your stories and found them lacking? I wonder, since you seem to have the balls to review someone without leaving your name or e-mail, do you have the balls to actually post a story that would be remembered beyond the first reading? Camaro has and still does. If you can have your feelings hurt by someone's comments when they are trying to give you an outside look on how your story may actually affect people, then you don't need to be an author. I am an author, I have bad reviews and good reviews but the thing that I always remember in the back of my head is that reviewers don't only tell you what a good job you are doing.....they tell you what you are doing wrong and a way to fix it.


    Sorry for ranting in your review list Camaro,

    Vegeta's Mate
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  • From ANON - Bulma on December 14, 2004
    A triumph of evil versus good splendidly done. This is a riviting story! I can't wait for you to update, I am going to put this fic on my fav list. Well done Camaro!
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  • From ANON - Camaro on December 12, 2004
    Sorry to have to resort to reviewing my OWN story, I'll delete this later folks but I do have something I'd like to say.


    Ahem*


    Attention: to every piece of shit, wheel chair drooling asshole on this site that thinks I fucking flamed them:


    In the words of the great God Kinney: "To all you SEXUALLY CHALLENGED, Bipolar, whatever the FUCK you are's" I do not flame stories. I'm beyond that and if it was a flame, it might have sounded a bit something like the literarily challenged asscrack comment that I got from "wouldn't you like to know". IF your story contains stupid, bullshit things that need to be taken out, I WILL tell you about it. IF your stories is a pathetic attempt at writing sex for sex's sake when it becomes obvious that you are a sexually deprived, lonely individual on a quest to get laid through writing about it.... I WILL tell you about it. IF your story sucks as a whole and was a complete waste of my time reading it.... I WILL tell you about it.


    AND FINALLY, IF YOU as an AUTHOR are a complete fucking embarrassment to both this site AND yourself... guess what mother fucker... I WILL tell you about it.


    So if I haven't gotten my point across, let me just reiterate. I do not flame. I criticize because I have the talent and experience to do so. I am an English major and I know more than you. Get used to it. If you don't like it.... Let me refer you to someone who gives a fuck. Lastly, you're lucky to get my advice because I'm the only one around here who will give it honestly. I don't care how many reviews you have or how big your "fan base" is. If your story sucks, be prepared to be informed about it if your "greatest number 1 fans!" wont. Use it, admire it, fucking love it because if I took the time out to give it, then obviously I felt it was useful and not wasted on someone who couldn't use it to improve.


    Love

    Camaro
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  • From ANON - wouldnt you like to know on December 12, 2004
    JFYI I think you shoud stop flaming peoples stories and
    giving them advice or whatever because your not the best
    author around and you act like you know it all. i havent
    read any of your storys and i dont' want to because i hear
    your a real arrogant bitch. from what ive read on other
    peoples reviews,
    you are.




    just letting you know
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  • From ANON - Shadow_flyer on December 09, 2004
    I like the sound of this although you sound a bit errogant from the start. ill continue
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  • From ANON - AngelKitty on December 06, 2004
    Yipe. I'm sort of lost at this point. I'm guessing with time, things will start to peice together, but it's still rather antagonizing not knowing what's going on and that I'm going to have to wait a rather long time before peices start to fill in again. This is probably the most suspensful fanfiction I've come across...
    But as I've said before, it's brillant, so always
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