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Reviews for Monster

By : Camaro

From ANON - Kat on May 26, 2006
Hardy Har:
I was reading through the reviews for the last chapter and I couldn't help but notice yours. You know, the one about Todesengel and the story "Strong Heart" and how the author's better than Camaro? Well, if you truly don't know exactly what you're talking about, I have only one thing to say to you.
HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA!!
Seriously, I needed that. Thanks ^-^!!
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From ANON - Gothic Gryphon on February 11, 2006
I want to start by saying that Monster is by far one of the only stories I've read thus far that takes elements from "real life" and adds them to a fictional world so gracefully. Most of the yaoi stories I've read have no plot, no insight as to what the characters are thinking and feeling (just pure smut), but Monster has both of those qualities and more, I can tell that you put quite a bit of yourself into the story. You give an unbiased veiw on all of the characters, especially Chichi, who is so often slaughtered in fanfiction and that is something I've only seen twice in fanfiction, keep up the good work Camaro, I will definately keep reading. Expect more reviews in the future and much fanart!

- GG
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From ANON - sinheart on February 10, 2006
shit!!! you should sooo be righting books right now. i mean the last chapter where Vegeta comes alive again is a pure classic!!! but its the good sort of cassic not the corrny type. i really think you should leave ur fic like it is, make people beg a bit in there reviews.
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From ANON - sinheart on February 09, 2006
dude soo luv ur story!!! and i am giving you major props for not giving a flying fuck about all the flames you get. like 'just being honest' if that person is soooo affended by ur story then why did they even bother to read it. i mean no one said they HAD to read ur fic!!!.....sorry im a lil irritated right now. update soon!!!
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From ANON - Anon on February 07, 2006
Yes, I finally finished, and I must say a few things....Amazing, superb, outstanding, great, perfect, jaw-dropping...the list could go on. This could be a movie, seriously. The way you described the characters was amazing. The connection between Goku and the devil was perfectly described. Vegeta's character, wow, I'm excited to see where this goes when I read number 2! The whole time, I was gripping my seat and nervous to read what happens. The way you set up the plot and settings was so creative, it can't be described. Again, great stuff, and I'm off to read more of your work.
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From ANON - Anon on January 26, 2006
Oh...my....GOD! I just read the first three chapters and I must say that I am so impressed I can't even begin to describe! When I first saw this story I was like "Ah, 40 chapters!" I'm so impatient with long stories, I just don't give them a chance, but I saw all the reviews and I recieved such awesome reviews from you for one of my stories, so I decided to check out Monster and I can tell I'm gonna love it! Your writing style is amazing and the way you describe the characters and how Goku feels about all the killings and Vegeta....ok..wow. I'm off to read the rest of this story and am quite excited to see what's going on! Great work.
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From ANON - BrucesGirl on January 15, 2006
I think the only that has been forgotten is your medication! Do they have pills that make people smarter? Better yet, I think someone just forgot to lock you in your damn cage. From what I can see...the only bitch here is you. Have a nice day. ^_^
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From ANON - Hardy Har on January 14, 2006
Its been discoverd. A story even better than yours dearest Cam. Todesengels strong heart is unmatched. How does that make you feel unbeatable and ever forgotten bitch?
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From ANON - ~anz~ ^_~ on December 21, 2005
The Saiyan Prince has done it again!

He beat the devil!

Old Scratch jumped out...Vegeta jumped in!

LOVE IT! ~ LOVE IT! ~ LOVE IT!

Now: Will there be a sequel?
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From ANON - Addict on December 21, 2005
Is there going to be a Monster sequel? Or was that just an open ending? Whatever it is I love it. The ending (Goku's) seemed so bitter sweet because even though he doesn't regret the love he gave he is still holding on to the love of the past very strongly. This made me sad because he seems to miss it and even though he has something new it isn't exactly "right", its just different. I liked that though, a happy ending that isn't necessarily perfect. Good job.

Thank-you.

Addict
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From Tya on December 19, 2005
All I can say is wow, I loved just the Authors note at the beginning. I didn't even have to read the first part of the story to know that I would love this story. Two thumbs way up, especially for the pride you show in your work^_^ Keep on writing, it's wonderful.
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From BrucesGirl on December 19, 2005
Oh look, Camaro.... A flamer. A cute one at that. Well, you know... Cute for an old geezer.
Let's see...how many holes can I poke in his arguments? Let's find out!

you only heard from me because you are such an annoyance. *smirks* "You kids get off my lawn!!"

Most people ignore things that annoy them, so in your case, you're a pathetically bad liar. I agree with Camaro when she said that you had every intention of flaming this story even before you clicked on the link. You know what I think? I think that you didn't really read the three chapters. If you had read into what Goku was saying to begin with, you wouldn't have been able to put it down. I think it's a fantastic psychological view into Goku's mind.

_if_ you are critiquing my spelling skills by reading the fics on this site, that would be due to upload problems. which is why I rarely post here anymore.

Are you insulting the AFF staff with this note? I sure as hell hope not because they are some of the most attentive and nice people on any site that I've ever posted on. In my opinion, you're an idiot. If Camaro thought your spelling was bad, I think your lack of grammar is even worse. There's such a thing as punctuation and capitalization that makes sentences flow together and look like normal, intelligent writing. I'm seeing that you are not intelligent at all.

as far as character development, perhaps you should research what it means. if you cannot hook a reader by the third chapter you definitely need tons of improvement.

You know absolutely nothing about writing novels, do you? Essentially, I'm guessing this story runs about 300 pages give or take, and so, in essence, it is a novel. In any novel, it would be poor plot development if she gave away all the facets of the characters in the first few chapters. Have you ever read Wuthering Heights? If you got hooked in the first few chapters of THAT masterpiece, I think you're a freaking LIAR. God that book was slow...and it was amazing. The mystery in this story is what keeps the readers coming back for more, not to mention that the plot of the story demands a certain amount of detachment from Goku so that he can relive the experience. The characters in this story are masterfully unfolded and put on display with such careful deliberation that I have to wonder about your so-called intelligence that you've harped on.

For the record, I think you're an idiot. This story represents the darkness that hides in all of us...Well...maybe not you. How can darkness hide in a mind filled with stupidity? The world may never know.

Camaro, baby, Don't listen to this idiot. It's obvious he has no knowledge of writing whatsoever, and it's also obvious that he's about as boring as a hamster in a wheel. Do yourself a favor, pat yourself on the back, and throw a BIG party for finishing this whale of a story. It was simply amazing. I'm sure Jayfic will agree with me when I say... DAMN you're good!
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From BrucesGirl on December 19, 2005
Oh you've GOT to be kidding me.

Camaro... *ruffles her feathers and snorts* I can't believe this... I'm sitting here going... ALRIGHT. Where's the sequel? Vegeta (Satan Vegeta) needs to die. He disgusts me.

You know, love has forever been the only dillema of mankind. Even mroe than that, love is the dillema of God as well. How can a being that is all powerful give free will to his subjects and yet not be able to make them love him?

Now THAT'S a question for the books.
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From ANON - ilex9 on December 18, 2005
cool. Here I was going to tell you how much I like your OCs Titus and Aries. Interesting twist, that. Nice job on the "Carrie"-ish ending. I enjoyed the read.
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From ANON - Dark Soul Native on December 17, 2005
I think it was wonderful. I hope your having a sequel.
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