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By : Camaro

From on May 15, 2004
wow, i would love to draw something for this, but unfortunatly...I'm a bad drawer, but I love this, and about your site, if you would permit me to post a fic up, I would be glad to write one, I loved this chapter, as I could almost invision myself as Goku and actually be sitting there, watching that tape, I found one of my best friends dead, she had killed herself, stabbed herself many times with a coat hanger, it was horrible and sadly i must sya i saw her while reading this. As the woman who lay in front of the camera as this was the way i found my friend, sprawled across the floor right in front of me, only her face visible. thats all i'm going to say about that, and i must say it did give mdeepdeeper insight to your fic, i hope your fine

TBF
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From on May 15, 2004
I love your honesty. Immedietly. I agreed with everything you said and felt myself get angrier and angrier as i read the notes. My fic and username were also deleted from ff.n, and it pissed me off, because like you, I had worked hard on my fic, and then those/that asshole at ff.n decided 'hey its too violent, too descriptive blah blah blah' and they deleted it. They're fucking hypocrytes. They can kiss my ass, then go to Hell for deleting not only yours or mine, but everybolselse's fics from their site. In a way I almost feel relieved that they deleted my account, because it saved me having to, but that is my opinion.

For the first chapter...what can I say? it was amazing? it was too good to be true? no, because i'd be repeating everything everyone else has said. so all I say is, can't wait to read more, and if you can find the time, check out my fic, (even if you're not interested in the series, just have a look at the rape scenes/lemons/torture and give me your opinion.) I;d be very grateful.

I'm going to continue now. bye

TornBloodyFaith

P.S I bet ff.n misses u cause ur great! ^_^
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From ANON - jaygoose on May 13, 2004
Flawless as usual...there's not much else to say. Except of course...more...soon...please?
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From ANON - macha on May 11, 2004
Creepy! Fleshless fingers touching one's body is ju CRE CREEPY thought.

Now, even armed with the knowledge that Vegeta's and my standards of Moral, aren't the same, I wasn't expecting him to come up with such and outragious alaby(I don't think I spelled that correctly). Phew, what a whopper. He did know just what strings to pull with Chi Chi though, didn't he. What's he going to do when she actually goes to enroll Gohan in that school? Were Vegeta's induindos (again with the spelling) about the Professor or himself?

I wonder if Goku will actually ever drink with Vegeta again. Waking up in an ally way has to suck. I know that I wouldn't, but I'm not Goku.

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From ANON - macha on May 04, 2004
Ah, sayians in suits, and a story were Vegeta knows himself and is VERY comfortable wihat hat knowledge. *Gives me shivers*

Sorry, this is about to get long.

Some one once told me that women get together with a guy, expecting to be able to change him, and that guys get together with girls expecting not to have to change. Even though that contint has nothing to do with yaoi, here's what I am getting at. A lot of us fanfiction writers write Vegeta expecting to change him, make him somewhat softer, and that's the lovely thing about fanfiction, we can. But you haven't, and don't seem to mind at all about writing him as what most of us would think of as 'dark' when really, you are writing him just as he is. My hat is off to you, your doing an excellent job. Bragging rights are certainly intact.

I had a much longer view on this, but since I am not brave enough to post it where anyone can read it, this is about the flame. You did warn us, and ;you backed that up too.

You seem to be taking this story to some very touching subjects. I am talking mostly about the religion thing. I know you wonbackback down, and I can't wait to read how you wade through it. Most admirable.
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From ANON - Noel on May 04, 2004
Before I rant I must say that this is yet another fabulous chapter. And yes you have the right to arrogant about your talent, you can back it up with your skill.

Now it is time to rant. First and for most the 1st amendment of our wonderful constitution claims the freedom of speech, you have not required anyone to read this master piece of work if if they find it offensive DON"T READ IT. We as writers have this right. That is why these sites are so popularis iis is in the bounds of the constitution and only out of respect for whomever was offended is really the only reason that the story could be removed. Legally you do not have to, that would infringe on the freedom of speech granted to this fine country of ours. Secondly, if they are offended they obviously do not undand and the meaning behind ttorytory (which to me is more than the killings but rather the growths of Kakorot, but I could be wrong it has happened before) Thirdly, if they have no published stories then what right to they have to criticize? None. Until they are able to put themselves and their talents (or lack there of) out there then they have No right to try and squash others and their imagination.

The whole thing is if you don't like it don't read it. There is no reason anyone has to bash the creatively talented. That is unless you fear what you read and have the dark naggings of the characters and are just afraid that reading this story will pull these buried emotions to the surface. Then of Course you could blame the fic when you go to jail. That is what everyone does now, right blame tv, blame movies, blame music? May as well blame the fics right?

Get over it and move on....... As for you Camaro, I hope you have a healthy recovery and keritiriting.

Sorry about the rant but I feel very strongly about people who try and insist that, just because they don't like what they read or see then it must go. You have no idea how angry that makes me.

~*Noel*~
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From ANON - jaygoose on May 04, 2004
Oh...wonderful yet again. I think I said this once. But your descriptions are incredible. I could actually see all those people crammed together in that club and I could feel the thumping of the music. May'm 'm delirious...I'm a bit sick...but I was postive I could. I loved exchange between Vegeta and Goku. Extremely believeable and well written.
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From on May 04, 2004
..........ok...i have to say that when i first ran across this, i was...well...i wasn't sure i could stick with it...the whole premise being to create a story to disgust was a little...i duuno...unappealing for this reader...but i gave it a chance and...well...damn...you've got me hooked...i am totally digging reading this from goku's pov, a very different pov from what i've ever read...and yes, you deffinetely have the talent to back up the arrogance...heh...i will be impatiently awaiting the next chapter...until then...ja ne!
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From Shan on May 04, 2004
The only problem with knowing how talented you are is that it means us reviewers are left with nothing to say. This is greyou you know it, we know it. The end.
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From ANON - Veggie\'s queen on May 03, 2004
Whoa, your here now. Thats good that your still posting at least. I knew youd never give up just because of some assholes that reported you.
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From ANON - jaygoose on May 02, 2004
Perfect once again. I love Vegeta in this one too. Hmm...I like Vegeta in just about anything.
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From ANON - Sabrina on April 30, 2004
I liked this chapter, there is something about the way you write. I like stories that have an odd kind of feel to them, I wish I could write sometimes, but I can never seem to get the feeling right. I hope you feel better from your accident, my friends boyfriend has a red Camaro and I have a Firebird...I guess it kinda looks like a Camaro. Keep up the good writing and don't work too hard!!
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From DietDirtyPop on April 30, 2004
this story makes me shiver....and that takes ALOT!..So Good Job!! I would love to be on the mailing list. I aways get so excited when I see another chapter up.
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From ANON - taboo1 of neighbor FF.net on April 30, 2004
Hm hm hm, this looks like something really special. The story has that same Clive Barker flavor, with this odd, yet welcome zing of...um, I dunno...'magic'. Hope you continue, I'll stroll on in whenever I come across it.
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From ANON - Sabrina on April 27, 2004
You know, it's really hard to find fan fiction out there that actually have content. It gets really old reading story after story of authors having make believe conversations and arguments with fictional characters. But every once in a while you'll find soemthing good. I'm really glad you decided to put this out, despite the obvious potential problems with censorship. I'm not morbid or anything, but there is a particular beauty about the things you wrote about. Things that I find so hard to say, and people find so hard to take. If it's not too much trouble, I'd like to be on your mailing list. Aeris_is_Dead13@Yahoo.com. I guess you can say you made it up on my short list of authors that actually got somewhere with their words, instead of having a good idea and butchering it with bad writing.
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