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Reviews for Monster

By : Camaro

From ANON - Dark Soul Native on December 17, 2005
I think it was wonderful. I hope your having a sequel.
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From ANON - Dark Soul Native on December 17, 2005
I think it was wonderful. I hope your having a sequel.
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From ANON - Macha on December 16, 2005
*points and screams* AAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

THAT was totally unexpected. Of course, I want to know if it is the real Vegeta back in his body, or if the devil is just playing tricks again.

If it is the real Vegeta, Goku and Bulma are going to have a LOT of explaining to do.

EEP!
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From Camaro on December 16, 2005
You're so adorable... If you go into a story planning not to like it, then by all means, you'll find a reason not to. I could plan to hate an Anne Rice novel and give myself solid excuses that would support it. You take things too personal old boy. Lay aside your prejudice and perhaps you'll learn a thing or two. Because I will flame anyone, my best friends to my worst enemies; and the same goes for good reviews. You had every intention of flaming the second you clicked on the Monster link, admit that. But had you read past the 3 chapters you tore to pieces in order to solidify your animosity, you might have realized that my characters are quite developed, I simply like to take my time with them.

After all the readers I have, I do have a hard time believing that so many people were turned away by the first three chapters. Or maybe it's because they didn't come into reading this story with the intent and objective to hate it because they didn't fancy the author.. am I right?

As I said before, I was told that your writing is remarkable. I have every intention of reading it as soon as I finish a few things and believe me when I say, despite your crudeness towards me, I will give you a fair review as I always do. I said once that I find you simply intriguing, and that hasn't changed at all.

The only thing that has changed is that you caught me in a rare, forgiving mood due to my New Year's Resolution to be nice. hahah

Hahaha... cute little rotten old men!

::waves::

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From ANON - chibi_vegeta on December 16, 2005

you only heard from me because you are such an annoyance. *smirks* "You kids get off my lawn!!"

_if_ you are critiquing my spelling skills by reading the fics on this site, that would be due to upload problems. which is why I rarely post here anymore.

yay, you win your bet, here's a cookie.

as far as character development, perhaps you should research what it means. if you cannot hook a reader by the third chapter you definitely need tons of improvement.

byeeeeeee

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From Camaro on December 16, 2005
Hahaha.. Um, look pops, it's called editing? Yeah, sometimes people who read over things and see errors like to correct them? I was actually sent an email that there were particular errors in one chapter and I felt the need to go back and see to them. Besides, I've never prided myself on my spelling, though for someone who so often criticizes others for it, you're not exactly the greatest example my dearest.

Please, your apparently little "problem" with me is only that YOUR little ego trips have constantly gotten you on the wrong side of my temper. Three chapters and you pride yourself on knowing whether or not I can develop characters? You're laughable old man. Why don't you go spend christmas with your grandkids or write on your own stories (which I have heard are remarkable by the way) rather than finding lame excuses to degrade mine.

Haha... I knew I'd be hearing from you eventually. I actually had a bet going with a few friends. Thank you.

They all come around one way or another.

Camaro

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From ANON - chibi_vegeta on December 16, 2005

you know, despite all the strokes you constantly give yourself, this fic is really not that good. I gave up reading it after something like the third chapter. your ego is incredible for someone lacking spelling skills or the ability to develop characters.

you've posted 'the last chapter' three times now, attention-whore much?

you keep saying it's over, but you keep torturing people by waving it in our faces repeatedly. stop it.

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From BrucesGirl on December 13, 2005
Hello again, love. I had to read your story again, because I've met a stalemate in mine. Perhaps it's my power of never lacking compassion, but I have such a hard time writing a character who cares nothing for anyone else but herself. I look at mnakind, and I think to myself, even if we were to face something like Sin, we would still be selfish and unloving just as everyone is now. Like in the club, I don't think things would change. We would still dance away our problems and fade them with drugs and sex.

It turns out that true power isn't what we carry in our pocket or write on paper as a title. True power is the ability to ignore the most obvious dillema of humanity: When is it time for us to care about others? It's a powerful thought when it worms its way into a mind, and it can drive a person insane with the question of whether it is worth it or not to seek power or choose compassion.

So the question is, can we seek both? Maybe that's the true dillema of mankind.
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From ANON - ilex9 on December 12, 2005
I know I said I wsn't going to review this until I finished reading it but I had to stop here and let you know that for me this has picked up in the last couple of chapters as maybe it's starting to come clear what's going on between the lines... or maybe not, I suspect there's a surprise or two right around the bend. Anyway this is different than anything else I've read so far in fanfic, (not that I'm especially well read or anything) even the erotica aspect is so different and there's obviously something more going on than just smut for the sake of smut. The different approach to the Goku / Vegeta duality is really getting interesting as well. If I didn't have a ton of crap to do I'd finish reading this today... unfortunately I'll have to wander back later to do that, but, yeah, I wasn't quite sure you'd suck me in with this at first but mision accomplished.

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From ANON - Doestn change my opinion on December 09, 2005
i cant believe you would finish such a blasphumous hunk of junk. god hates you. you should just kill yourself right now
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From ANON - ~anz~ ^_~ !!! on December 09, 2005
I regret that I can't remember what I wrote before...something about faith, love, courage and persistent perseverance! Well the human mind and psyche doesn't work that way...we always forget...unless it's painful.

It's hard to believe that a year has passed...my how time flies...since i first read this story. It along with a couple of others...was one of the first i read... being a yaoi novice and all... and it was damn good. To this day I have no idea what attracted me...but I can say this...friendship ended up being the result.

This is one of the best fic's I have ever read. It's about relationships...with one's self, one's environment and others. It's also about forgiveness...forgiving and having the ability to forgive...and love.

What can one say about love? Love is all ... And redemption! In the end all were redeemed by love....

This was the best tale of 'THE WORLD THE FLESH AND THE DEVIL' I have ever experienced. And trust me it was/is an incredible experience...the humor, the pathos...the paradox...the joy, the pain and the sorrow...

Thank you for sharing your gift with us...

Thank you for your courage...

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From ANON - ~anz~ ^_~ !!! on December 09, 2005
I regret that I can't remember what I wrote before...something about faith, love, courage and persistent perseverance! Well the human mind and psyche doesn't work that way...we always forget...unless it's painful.

It's hard to believe that a year has passed...my how time flies...since i first read this story. It along with a couple of others...was one of the first i read... being a yaoi novice and all... and it was damn good. To this day I have no idea what attracted me...but I can say this...friendship ended up being the result.

This is one of the best fic's I have ever read. It's about relationships...with one's self, one's environment and others. It's also about forgiveness...forgiving and having the ability to forgive...and love.

What can one say about love? Love is all ... And redemption! In the end all were redeemed by love....

This was the best tale of 'THE WORLD THE FLESH AND THE DEVIL' I have ever experienced. And trust me it was/is an incredible experience...the humor, the pathos...the paradox...the joy, the pain and the sorrow...

Thank you for sharing your gift with us...

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From ANON - Dominic Shade on December 08, 2005
Wow...mind blowing. I've said it before and now I say it again: this entire fict. is one hell of a mind fuck. And I love it, lol, how sick does that make me? I hope the sequel goes just as well...oh hell, I know it will. You're too good a writer to do a sequel that sucks.

...now I'm going off to have some hot sweaty sex with my 47 yr. old hubby. Mmmm...wrinkles....

Good times and rock on,

Dom
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From Jennji on December 08, 2005
I love this story. Ever since I first started reading it, I was hooked. I was forced to go to MA (Monster Annonymous) to deal with my addiction. It just never seemed to end and my body was going through severe withdrawls...::Coughs::

Sorry bout that Camaro. Love the story, always look forward to your works.

-Jenn
(nutty)
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From ANON - DeathByFuzzyDice on November 30, 2005
OMFG!!! You sadistic fuck! I LOVE THIS STORY!!! ^^ Write more!!! Its so... epic and blockbusterish!!! KAKAROT LOVES TEH COCK!!! Give him more. You have to make a fucking movie or something cuz the visuals in this story are AMAZING. The first person point of view makes it so much better than most stories, and THE SURPRISE TWIST!!! omg you rock.
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