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Reviews for Monster

By : Camaro

From ANON - ~anz~ on August 18, 2005
sorry to hear about the virus, had the same prob...had to get my entire harddrive wiped....

will be waiting with baited breath for your next installment....*has box of kleenex and 12 pack of pretzels on standby*

stay in continued good health

~Anz~

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From ANON - Cat Youkai on August 17, 2005
Ah, so that explains why you hadn't updated since the 7th of July. I was beginning to wonder. Well that makes sense. The same thing had happened to me almost 6 months ago. I had to replace my Harddrive, then I found out that I needed a much larger harddrive (10 GB go much faster then one would think) so my dad and I went out and bought me a much larger harddrive. Don't worry, I am patient, and I will be checking in from time to time. I hope you can get it fixed soon. Good luck.

Love,

Cat Youkai
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From ANON - Dominic Shade on August 17, 2005
Hm...virus by your roomate huh? You know...I could make her disappear.... All I need is the word and your troubles will be over....

Good times and rock on,

Dom
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From Kugatsu on August 16, 2005
*gonk* Alright! I shall await your brilliant return! *jabs fist in the air*
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From ANON - Cat Youkai on August 15, 2005
So I have read all of Dark Angel and now I have finally caught up in Monster. I see similarities between the two stories when it comes to the styles of writing. Also with religion strongly standing out within both stories. I really enjoy this story. It is different from Dark Angel because it is Dragon Ball Z but in its rawest form. Dark Angel was all about the love between two people and how they come together. Monster, from what I can tell is good over coming evil through love. Love not just between two people but also the love for one's self. It is quite poetic. How Goku and everyone else must overcome the Devils influence on the human race.

Another aspect I really enjoyed was making Vegeta and Zarbon took forms of Titus and Aries. I was really stumped as to where Goku had seen such creatures before. I was definitely entranced by their characters. How you made Satan take control over Vegeta's body. Very witty. I am amazed however that Satan would succumb himself to future punishment from Vegeta for even looking at Bulma with sick intentions. Although, when Chi Chi was on the bed, I was not surprised. I saw that coming for some reason. How Satan was putting her down and making her look bad in Goku's eyes. Also, at the picnic, I read between the lines. I would have expected Goku to catch on, but obviously he is 100% pure macho male.

I think my favorite part was when Goku was with Bulma. Camaro, you really showed how much love comes from friendships. Especially the friendship between Bulma and Goku. Their affair doesn't even seem very out of character. It would seem that if the DBZ writers wanted to show the characters as realistic they would have shown the deep love that Goku had for Bulma.

Another part that I really enjoy about you is that you won't let any one person put you down. In Dark Angel you seemed to question your writing skills and now you know how good you are. That the only reason people don't like your stories is because they know they can't write anything like you. That they could only possess a sliver of talent that you hold. I actually find it rather influencing. Yet, I am a strange soul in this world filled with stereotypes. ALso, covering the topic of FFN since you seem pretty crushed that they could not understand your talent. That is the site where I first discovered your writing along with many more aspiring authors. I think because of complaining parents and jealous readers I believe that stories had to be monitored closely. FFN used to be the place to go to find pieces of work that one like myself could only dream about writing. Now, however, those authors have slowly begun to remove themselves from the internet because they lost the freedom and the hope to write and post their pieces of work. I'm proud of you for sticking around and showing the world you aren't a quitter even when it gets hard.

I'm enjoying Monster more than I thought I would when I first started to read it. So keep updating and I hope that you can write more stories just as creative as Monster and Dark Angel.

Love,

Cat Youkai
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From ANON - Dragon-Angel-of-Light on August 08, 2005
The notes at the beginning and end were very well put. The chapter itself was incredible. It's good to see there's a person out there who can make such an original story for yaoi. You're right, most yaoi stories are all about love. I can see I won't be seeing that in this story. Good. I don't rely on reviews much, either. They're nice to get, though! ^ ^ Well, I'm off to read the next chapter!
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From ANON - Goddess Serenity on July 12, 2005
~puddle of drool~ 8-P~ Damn, Goku sounds extra tastey! ~mumbles to herself about yummy Goku~
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From ANON - WashuRight on July 12, 2005
Augh! Simply torturous... you know how to drive a person mad. I waited so long for chapter 36... and now that I have it I'm left with ANOTHER cliff hanger.... I'm going to print this out and add it to my other printed mosnter pages... and start all over again... don't hear me complaing ^_^

Keep it up.. I'm curious as to what form goku is in now... It could be another Super saiya-jin... or somethign you completly came up with. Although when the Devil said that he was completly gorgeous my jaw hit my desk. After all that! Well I can't say I'm surprised I acutally expected him to say something similar...

Well I hope for more.
Veor-Chan
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From ANON - Webtester01 on July 08, 2005
One word: AWESOME!
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From ANON - Macha on July 07, 2005
*BOUNCES* Oh, this was GREAT. *drools* The fight scene was SO discriptive. *nods like a loon* I haven't read a fight scene like this EVER!!! Even the previous ones you have written pale in comparison.

O.o Words for the transformation into SSJ 4? Hmmmm, I missed something somewhere. *shrugs* I liked it anyway. Of course, I am assuming this is SSJ 4.

Unbelieveable... And that is suppose to be a compliment!
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From Kugatsu on July 07, 2005
Whoa...what happened! It's so wonderful to see that you've updated...

This is so compelling.
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From ANON - Dominic Shade on July 07, 2005
Dear Camaro,

(continuing previous ass-kissing)

Ahem, I regret to inform you that I actually won't be praising your glorious fiction, because people have already done that. Niether will I 'flame' such a work, because I deplore such actions against an obviously beautiful thing.

So instead I will do what no other reviewer has done...I'm gonna hit on you.

'Camaro, it's so cold...let me use your thighs as ear muffs?'

'Did I mention I'm doing a survey on the taste of vaginas? Would you like to be a participant?'

'We could make a porno film while we have sex...you don't want to? Well that's okay, we don't have to tape it.'

'You have a beautiful voice...I bet it would sound even better muffled by my pussy.'

'If you've lost your virginity...can I have the box it came in?'

'What do you say to us making like Winnie-the-Pooh so I can get my face stuck in your honey jar?'

And my favorite line:

'Excuse me, but can I impregnate you with my demon spawn?'

Ha! Beat that reviewers! Lol...that's right, I had nothing better to do...plus Camaro is one hot piece of ass.

Good times and rock on,

Dom

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From chayron on July 07, 2005
These words are priceless:

“Why do you persist?” he gasped.
“Because,” I smirked. “I like watching you sweat on top of me.”

Wonderful chapter again! The description of Goku’s body changing was simply absorbing! The pain and Goku’s thoughts that you described! Beautiful.
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From ANON - chichidark on June 25, 2005
Beautiful. Absolutely, purely, geniusly, beautiful. The intellectual violence in this story is almost unrivaled in any fic I have ever read. It has such a profound thought provoking writing style. I loved it. If you haven't already, you should read chibi catherine's ....and in the dark places which you can find at www.members.fortunecity.com/uiggu/#dbz.
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From ANON - Vegeta\'s Mate on June 24, 2005
Beautiful. That is truely the only word that I can think of to describe this chapter. I really love the way that Goku can see the sparks of life and energy that flow through everything, I wonder if he was possessed by god....does god possess people? Or is it more like he "recieved the holy ghost" as the christians say? ~scratches her chin~ Hm, I must think about that question a bit more. Wonderful read, very smooth, flowing chapter. I am desperate to read more.

Love ya babe!

V.M.
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