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By : Camaro
  • From ANON - Macha on May 05, 2005
    lol... It's the classic "The Bad guy needs to gloat," moment. And Goku is playing him like a harp.

    I found this rather interesting:

    I don’t even imagine the child had done a thing, receiving repeated blows from his perfectionist of a father. Now up until this time, I had always allowed the captive to remain in the body of what I possessed, my own purpose only in the mind as I controlled them. But as I saw the inhumanity with which the father tortured the boy, I suddenly wanted to possess the beaten creature wholly and entirely. I didn’t want to be inside him. I wanted to BE him.

    Why would the Devil want to be the beaten child when he could be the father? I have a sneaking suspicion somewhere along the way, Satan had a consious and on some level he is sympothising with that boy. "My Father is a Perfectionist too, and punished me for no obvious reason."

    Don't get me wrong. I have no appreciation for child abuse at all. I think the abuser should have their hands cut of and their eyes gouged out... (hmmm, seems as though that has already happened in this story, numerous times.)



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  • From ANON - Macha on May 05, 2005
    lol... It's the classic "The Bad guy needs to gloat," moment. And Goku is playing him like a harp.

    I found this rather interesting:

    I don’t even imagine the child had done a thing, receiving repeated blows from his perfectionist of a father. Now up until this time, I had always allowed the captive to remain in the body of what I possessed, my own purpose only in the mind as I controlled them. But as I saw the inhumanity with which the father tortured the boy, I suddenly wanted to possess the beaten creature wholly and entirely. I didn’t want to be inside him. I wanted to BE him.

    Why would the Devil want to be the beaten child when he could be the father? I have a sneaking suspicion somewhere along the way, Satan had a consious and on some level he is sympothising with that boy. "My Father is a Perfectionist too, and punished me for no obvious reason."

    Don't get me wrong. I have no appreciation for child abuse at all. I think the abuser should have their hands cut of and their eyes gouged out... (hmmm, seems as though that has already happened in this story, numerous times.)



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  • From Kugatsu on May 04, 2005
    ack! that's all?! *suffers from withdrawl*
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  • From ANON - BLuerossiette on May 04, 2005
    As always, you produce an outstanding chapter.....i can't wait for more
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  • From ANON - Dominic Shade on May 04, 2005
    *clears throat*

    My dearest love Camaro,

    In my wayward travels in this desolate land of false fantasies and desperate desires, I have found myself completely enraptured by the tale you have woven here. Yes, truly Fate itself must have blessed such a creation, your skills are masterful in every sense of the word and I feel as if I am graced simply by reading something done with your divine hands.
    The labor you in which you made this is obvious, it almost too much to comprehend!
    Every intricate detail in ‘Monster’ is exquisitely done with such perfection that it nearly rivals your own beauty….


    Fuck…my mom just walked in an’ I have a doc’s appointment, I’ll finish kissin’ your ass later.


    Good times and rock on,

    Dominic Shade

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  • From ANON - Kethry on May 04, 2005
    Once again you have done it. Taken my world and turned it on it's ear. *shivers* Gods, this story is such a masterfull work. I wish I was batter at reviews so I could expline how much it effects me. It shakes me right down to my toes. The fight between good and choas, the show that even the most pure can be tempted. What is right? what is wrong? The lines are burled. Thank you.

    ~Kethry~
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  • From ANON - debbiechan on May 04, 2005
    HEY, *I* do TOO read this. Although my hang-out is mm.org and I missed 33 and 33.5 somehow (do you still post there? I like the place--there are pansies and posies there but I like to run my hands through them looking for pennies from heaven and whatnot).
    I just read the lopped off breast thing. It was beautiful. I could see it, it was that cinematic and vivid, although for some reason I was numb to the terror. Chapter 34 was more terrifying somehow--and then I saw less cinematic stuff and *heard* more *theatrical* stuff. The monologues were very Greek Tragedy and grand. And scary.
    This piece probably has better writing than Fathoming Love (because it goes into so many more scenes and more quickly and tackles ideas as well as images) but I'm more moved by the FL story. If this one is theatre, then that one's a poem, with more intimate drama.
    Sorry to be to literary. I get that way sometimes. Too much college can do that to a person. Make her stopping talking in normal language.
    Love you.
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  • From ANON - Saiyajin-Neko on May 04, 2005
    NUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!!! T_T Oh my....Now what? How on earth is Goku gonna get out of this? It's impossible really...it seems. Unless the Devil gives up, lol. which is unlikely.

    Can't wait till the next chapter hun, Ja ne!
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  • From ANON - dharmaserenity on April 28, 2005
    Can I have a t-shirt made with this emblazoned on it:

    “Never regret what you are,” he whispered, his lips still molded to mine. His eyes looked directly into my own. “Because good, evil, happy, sad, brave or scared, I wouldn’t want you any other way. You’re mine, Kakarot. You’ve always been mine. You’ll always be mine.”



    Powerful stuff yet again, my friend. I'm only just finished with chapter 20. Part of me wants to say what the heck and sit here all night reading the rest of it. But then part of me wants to savor it as I would penne in a red sauce seasoned with roasted red peppers and garlic, sprinkled with a healthy portion of parmesan, a glass of chardonay on the side.... mmmmm.. So, I'm going to take my time with this, because it is that delicious.

    Jana (Dharmaserenity)
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  • From ANON - dharmaserenity on April 24, 2005
    Chapter 17

    I love this chapter I think the most so far. I loved how you got inside their heads, even more so than before. When Goku says to Vegeta, "How can I ever love you?" and Vegeta's reaction to it, plus the discussion at the party afterwards, it was all so, I don't know, insightful, intuitive, voyeuristic, raw, passionate and at the same time cold, fickle, hateful. Wonderful. I'm in awe with each new chapter I read.

    Jana (dharmaserenity)
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  • From ANON - dharmaserenity on April 19, 2005
    This is such an amazing story, Camaro. Two moments of beauty in chapter 15, the description of Bulma as she slept and then of Chi Chi as she told Gohan to spell love, as she looked up at Goku.

    *speechless*

    Jana
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  • From ANON - ChromeApparition on April 19, 2005
    Great chapter as always. But I have to say this story is
    getting weirder and weirder. With Vegeta as the devil
    or however and Goku being the innocent bystander. Unique
    to say the least. When's the next chapter coming up?

    Oh and I found out who you were talking about. That Chayron
    person right? I left them a review if you wanna check it out. I
    know it wasn't necessary but I read what she said and just had to.

    email me.
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  • From ANON - ChromeApparition on April 19, 2005
    Great chapter as always. But I have to say this story is
    getting weirder and weirder. With Vegeta as the devil
    or however and Goku being the innocent bystander. Unique
    to say the least. When's the next chapter coming up?

    Oh and I found out who you were talking about. That Chayron
    person right? I left them a review if you wanna check it out. I
    know it wasn't necessary but I read what she said and just had to.

    email me.
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  • From ANON - tympus on April 18, 2005
    I admier your stuborness and the "mess with me and I'll kill you" additude I to am this way and for these reasons I have desided to give you this review.
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  • From ANON - dharmaserenity on April 17, 2005
    well, let me just say that Hollywood needs to just stop writing the crap they put out as horror these days, because they have nothing on you, my dear. There were pure moments of chilling terror in the first 11 chapters, but most creepy of all was the part where Goku sees his own reflection and it is evil. Then the blood. First off, this may strike terror in me simply because I had a dream just like this.. I'll tell you about it when next we speak. But it is just purely chilling, period.

    The whole sin thing is chilling. I don't know if you ever read Dean Koontz Phantoms, but there was a moment towards the beginning of that book that creeped me out in similar fashion.. I was on a crowded train and nearly freaked because it was that frigthening. I felt a similiar sense of horror reading these passages. Visual equivalent would have to be the movie 28 days later.. freaks me out!

    I am just ensnared at this point, Camaro. I can't stop reading this marvelous fic of yours. You write circles around people getting paid major bucks for far far less. Something needs to be done about this! :)

    Oh, and this:
    Quote: And deeper, darker, and more honest, I liked…….. no, I LOVED the idea that I had something over everyone. It was something no one could ever expect. Oh look Chi Chi, here’s your adorable, gullible husband getting his brains fucked out by his one time arch rival. Oh by the way Yamcha, even though I’m apparently no competition since I’m married, I can sneak behind your back and get sexed up in the same shower you use every day. Look everyone, your stupid, brain-dead savior just got it up the ass and none of you know! How does THAT little scenario sound? : Quote

    Ok, I think anyone that gets involved in a sexual relationship that they know is bad for them thinks like this. Yeah, they know it isin't a good thing, but fuck! It's their little secrect and smirk behind all their nearest and dearest backs about it. SOOOO TRUE!


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