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Reviews for Monster

By : Camaro
  • From ANON - dharmaserenity on April 17, 2005
    well, let me just say that Hollywood needs to just stop writing the crap they put out as horror these days, because they have nothing on you, my dear. There were pure moments of chilling terror in the first 11 chapters, but most creepy of all was the part where Goku sees his own reflection and it is evil. Then the blood. First off, this may strike terror in me simply because I had a dream just like this.. I'll tell you about it when next we speak. But it is just purely chilling, period.

    The whole sin thing is chilling. I don't know if you ever read Dean Koontz Phantoms, but there was a moment towards the beginning of that book that creeped me out in similar fashion.. I was on a crowded train and nearly freaked because it was that frigthening. I felt a similiar sense of horror reading these passages. Visual equivalent would have to be the movie 28 days later.. freaks me out!

    I am just ensnared at this point, Camaro. I can't stop reading this marvelous fic of yours. You write circles around people getting paid major bucks for far far less. Something needs to be done about this! :)

    Oh, and this:
    Quote: And deeper, darker, and more honest, I liked…….. no, I LOVED the idea that I had something over everyone. It was something no one could ever expect. Oh look Chi Chi, here’s your adorable, gullible husband getting his brains fucked out by his one time arch rival. Oh by the way Yamcha, even though I’m apparently no competition since I’m married, I can sneak behind your back and get sexed up in the same shower you use every day. Look everyone, your stupid, brain-dead savior just got it up the ass and none of you know! How does THAT little scenario sound? : Quote

    Ok, I think anyone that gets involved in a sexual relationship that they know is bad for them thinks like this. Yeah, they know it isin't a good thing, but fuck! It's their little secrect and smirk behind all their nearest and dearest backs about it. SOOOO TRUE!


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  • From ANON - dharmaserenity on April 17, 2005
    Crap, I meant to say just finished reading Chapter 6! See what you are doing to me woman!! LOL

    Jana (Dharmaserenity)
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  • From ANON - dharmaserenity on April 17, 2005
    Ok, I have to come up for air briefly, hence my review. I just finished reading chapter 3... My God, Vegeta is palpable sex and danger. And Goku is like this bag of flesh that responds to any tiny pulse from that hard Saiyan Prince body. I'm riveted!

    This is just arrrraggagtfgah! I may want to bark at the moon any moment now... it is just so naked, raw, pure abandonment.

    I need some water... LOL Anything to quiet my pulse at this point.

    Jana (Dharmaserenity)
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  • From ANON - dharmaserenity on April 17, 2005
    Camaro! Well, I've read the first 3 chapters. I have no idea where you are taking this since for some reason I'm guessing your writing is anything but predictable ^_~, but I'm guessing that we are also seeing Vegeta's thoughts, especially in the Pizza Man dream. I'm probably wrong, just my guess since he says something like you've not met me before. But even if those are Goku's thoughts, it is amazing. These are Saiyans and from what we have seen of them in the early days, they feed off of violence. They were only tamed by life on earth, but what if these instincts are so deep that these are the thoughts that plague them? It makes so much sense. I mean, Vegeta obliterated whole planets with just a mere thought.. how could any of this be considered impossible, right?

    I loved the description of the monster in the first chapter, with his articulated wings and his thick horns -- saw it so clearly in my mind, and even in it's horror it still had a certain, compelling beauty.

    I'm so intrigued!

    I have to take a shower now, so have to break my reading. LOL just realized that sounded like I have to take a shower in response to the story LOL . No, just have to meet friends for brunch, but when I return, I will continue reading. Expect to hear more from me throughout the day.

    Aww, I just feel horrible for Goku if he's finally coming to terms with thoughts and instincts he can only just begin to fathom. His hatred of Vegeta in that first chapter so clearly detailed what will become his own self-loathing. OH, and Vegeta's description was just beautiful, hard and chiselled.

    Jana (Dharmaserenity)
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  • From ANON - Gaia Faye on April 12, 2005
    Holy crap. x_x

    ::waits for update::
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  • From jaygoose on April 12, 2005
    I had a feeling ChiChi's days were numbered. You know usually I loath stories that deal with religious themes but I find that I can actually stomach this one. Go figure eh? Love what you doing here and I can't wait to find out who wins. When dealing with you my dear who really knows.
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  • From ANON - LaRieaux on April 11, 2005
    That...that was a deep chapter...I am at a loss for words, really I am. I am still shocked by the outcome of chapter 33-2. Pure preeminence...is all I can say.
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  • From ANON - Kathryn on April 11, 2005
    Boy...you sure do make the supense heavy, don't you?:) Excellent chapters! I can't wait until your next installment. BYW.....How did your job search go? You can e-mail me when you're not busy. You are one sick bitch...and I LOVE YA!!!!!:) I have to be one as well to enjoy this story....ha...ha!!!
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  • From ANON - Vegeta\'s Mate on April 11, 2005
    O.O; Oh my goodness! ~frown pinches her brows~ I don't know if I should be happy that ChiChi is dead or if I should be upset. I don't like her character, too brash and loud for my tastes. Anyway I am still digesting that part of the chapter , but I can tell you this; it felt like I was sitting in the room watching the scenes as they played out. Nice job and keep it up! UPDATE SOON!
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  • From Kugatsu on April 11, 2005
    Yay! *dances around* woot! and now..my ceaseless demands

    *rattles cage bars* MORE! MORE! MORE! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

    *coughs, withdraws* yes, If you find the time, please do continue.
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  • From ANON - Macha on April 10, 2005
    AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAaaaahhhhhhhhhhh.... Okay, so for the last part of this chapter first, because that's what shocked me the most about it. Nah, I already knew what Amazons did and why they did it. The part that shocked me is that Goku just seemingly knelt there and let it happen. I have to think he was under some sort of thrall not to be able to move. Other wise he would have been able to do more than just reach a hand out. He could have made it over there to cotarize (excuse the spelling) the wound with his ki.

    Crap, Vegeta and Zarbon aren't there any more. And although they didn't seem to be much help, even a peanut gallery would have been some sort of comfort for Goku.

    Silly, silly Satan. He does realize that a church is just an ideal, (or idol) and not really the house of God, doesn't he? Certainly a tool to be used and toted about if you are trying to teach or intimidate the human mind, because we really are so simple minded as to need such phyiscal things to understand simple, and yet foreign, concepts.

    No, Bruder (I am making a huge assumption here) isn't there Goku, His home is some where else.

    Update soon Camaro!!!
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  • From ANON - Macha on April 10, 2005
    Well, I am going to treat each post as a seperate chapter. Oh, and it looks great. :)

    Hmmmm, *scratches chin* So, what Zarbon says may be true, Satan has unlimited power, but apparently he doesn't have unlimited concentration, otherwise, Goku wouldn't be able to see Vegeta's soul form, or Zarbon for who they really are.

    huh, I thought Goku already knew that the devil had Bulma. *shrugs* Ah well, he certainly does now. Not that kicking himself is going to help get her back.

    I am glad someone has been thinking (Zarbon) I'd hate to see Goku going into battle thinking he can do the fusion dance with Vegeta, only to find out THAT's not going to work. hehe lol, BABA, ah, what a smart little witch she is.
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  • From Kugatsu on April 09, 2005
    I like it so far even though so far is 33 chaps! ^w^ keep it up if you can!!!
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  • From ANON - Wow on April 09, 2005
    THis is FUCKING AWSEOME!!!! When are you gunna update though I'm getting pissed! You take fucking forever to update
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  • From ANON - Kat on April 08, 2005
    Hey,
    I have no idea how to fix the problem, but I loved the chapter!! Your story is worth scrolling across the page every few seconds and driving your eyes insane. Just wanted to let you know that, in case you don't get the problem fixed, let people read it anyway!! Love your writing, can't wait for the next one!!
    ~Kat
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