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By : Agent182

From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 03, 2004
Oh this is getting sooooooooooooooooo good!

At least for now, he’d rest it off and once again hope that this is wall a dream an that he’d wake up in his warm bed. --This was a heart warming thought and the sentences after it also about Trunks playing video games and so on..we get the sense that he is a very good dad...because he know his childrens daily activities..even knows that Bulma is...uh...screwing that desert bandit...^_^

And he had also found it odd that when he slept that he had no dreams, no thoughts, it was oblacblack--hm...that is very strange indeed. I wonder what these doctors are playing at.

"Good morning Mister Begeta." Vegeta scowled as the Kakkarot impersonator said his name wrong yet again.--lmao...*shakes fist at Goku* He better say that name right or else!!!

If he was even a man… --O.O I hope he is a man...j/k

Awww when Vegeta felt the smile tug at his lips that was so cute and when it faded b/c he heard the last part of Goku's sentence that was even cuter! But sad too b/c that Goku is really creepy I wouldnt want to go for a walk with him either.

it seemed as though he was the only one there beside Kakkarot and the Nameks. --that is VERY strange, I wonder why that is...

White bandages on his wrists. He could see the blood that still tried to leak through. --O_O He's not crazy he's a l a little unwell...to quote Matchbox 20. But seriously that is slightly alarming I hope the Prince isn't trying to kill himself and doesnt know about it...and I hope no one is hurting him either.

We ran some tests on you and you truly believed that you were from this planet called oddly, Planet Begeta-- -_- I hope he isn't trying to mock my precious Prince! He isn't crazy!!! There really is a planet Begeta..er...Vegeta!!!!

"You attacked everyone you saw even your wife and kids, claiming they were human… when you yourself are a human."--this would explain his lack of power but it seems to easy...
"Af"After this you’ll have game time with some of the other patients. That sounds nice doesn’t it?"-- x_x no that does not sound nice...it sounds a lot like what a crazy person would do!!!

"C-ChiChi?" --*gasp* what is she doing there!?

HOW DARE YOU END RIGHT THERE!!!! *attempts to strangle you* You know I love this fic!!!!!!!

Gosh, I am getting a brain-ache trying to figure out what is going on. I'm caught between Vegeta was really 'that' traumatized that he blocked out the last 3 yrs of his life and thinking maybe it isn't real...maybe it is. UGH I JUST DONT KNOW!!!!! I love this fic. And I can't wait until the next time you update.

And where are you!!!! I am online!!!!!!!! Get your butt on the comp right now!!! *sobs* I tried to e-mail you and it rejected my e-mail, I was like O_O!!!!!!!!!!!! So I told Ry to e-mail you some stuff for me...I hope he did. Sometimes I want to kick my e-mail...I sent it like 3 times...It took awhile for my brain to understand that it just wasnt getting through to ya... Ooh I read your review to Naruto person and I love Naruto too...I drew Vegeta as Kakashi it's pretty kewl...well it's not my best art but its ok... Anyway it is 9:22 p.m. and you are still not on..what gives??? And really who am I to be complaining...my computer is an ass! -_- Oh and *gasp* you have a lot to tell us!!!!!!!! I do hope you talk to Ry soon!

As for JayGoose of course I am always watching....mwhahahaha

^.*

-MB-

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From ANON - macha on May 02, 2004
Vegeta din't try to make a run for it. Why the hell not? I would have. Maybe he wants to know more about what's going on, but I think I would have said F-that, and tried to take off.

So, I didn't find it disturbing that he was in the same place when he woke up. I DID find it disturbing that it seemed as though he was taking it all with a grain of salt.

Once again I was wrong about where he had been A/U'd to. I thought, maybe this is HFIL, or just other world, and was expecting all the other patients to be super bad guys like Cell and Buu, but like I said, I was wrong. So, Chi Chi's in the mental ward too, huh? Wonder what kind of trouble those two can get into together.

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From ANON - Naruto_Kenshin on April 30, 2004
Cool fic. I do hope it is update soon.
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From ANON - CrazyGurl on April 30, 2004
I don't know if would call this confusing but it's definately crazy! I want to know what the hell is going on and why Goku doesn't know Vegeta or that his saiyajin name is Kakarott. And what's up with Vegeta's power? Update soon!
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 28, 2004
I like it. Poor Vegeta. Is he really insane...is it a dream. I have the sinking suspicion that its not. Poor Veggie. It will be interesting to see when and where other characters make their appearances. I can't wait for more.
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From on April 28, 2004
i really like it so far. i want to find out if he was like, previously insane and now is in the 'real world', or if what he thinks is real is and this is something else. i really enjoy your stories. when are you planning on updating Abhor?
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on April 27, 2004
Ok first I have to say I am totally loving the title of this fic!

Announcing that he was better than who ever walked in the room. --Liking that alot...seems very unlike his character...and with this we get a very good description of a bit of his personality.

His jaw clenched. Kakkarot wasn’t one to ignore him. --this is very interesting indeed...and I am alreaday feeling badly for Vegeta...and I definitly need to know what is going on. How coldy Goku is acting...and why?

Kakkarot just eyed the paper he wrote upon with a pencil that seemed to have been to hell and back. --He must have been writing like a mad man.wow...I am definately wondering what is up with Goku..and highly creeped out by him...'doctor Goku'...

and Kakkarot! Kakkarot is too damn stupid to be a doctor of any sort! --ROFL! I am going to have to agree...well then again I dunno..Goku is full of surprises...

That was when his eyes went wide. Pain?--Feeling pain..that is not a good sign at all. I am very worried and I too, want to know what the f*ck is going on! This is freaking creepy stuff. I don't know how it would feel to be Vegeta at this point, but I am pretty sure I would be somewhere along the lines of really hoping thain ain and dreams could collide as one...and that waking up would be the next part of the nightmare...

His fist tightened as he tried to raise his ki- and to his shock… nothing happened. --*GAAHHHAHHH!!!! he has no...*gulp* ki...? Why? WHY!?!?!?!?

I loved Vegeta's facts especially Kakarott is here and he is ignoring me. Very sad...and cute. Made me wonder why you chose to write that as one of Vegeta's facts...It seems as if that is hurting him that Kakarott is ignoring him. And duh, why wouldn't it..just thought it was a wonderful line..almost like confessing some sort of secret love for the man... Maybe not so extreme, but still I loved it...

Or maybe that was heartburn --LoL, oh gosh...how can he worry about heartburn at a time like this?!

There is no one named Kakkarot here." ---I have a horrible feeling about this...soemthing I wont say. But that line made me think of it.

"SHUT UP! Don’t fucking call me Mister Begeta ever again! My name is Veeh-gee-tah!" --ROFL!!! WOO YEAH!!! you tell them Veeh-gee-tah!!!!! That's my Prince!

Maybe if he fell asleep he’d wake from this nightmare, or maybe this was the sick reality…--*sobs* VEGETA!!! No!!! Please be ok!!!!

Man, I am totally loving this fic and I do hope you update in one hour...j/k But I want to know what is going on... This was a very interesting start how can anyone not be intrigued? I love when Goku has that creepy authoritive thing going .the.then I *drool* but seriously very good and well written as always...

Vegeta with no power...
Nameks in this strange hospital...why?
Doctor Goku holding a...NEEDLE!!!! How alarming!!!!!!!

Well...I want to know more...but of course I will be patiently waiting.

And bla...-_- I know I haven't talked to you in awhile but you know the deal with that and stuff. Anyway I have been super busy lately. It's amazing what you discover when one's computer is always acting stupid...I actually went outside...and I hate going outside. It's like a plague to me..all that sun, green stuff (like grass and leaves), oh and annoying flowers...not to mention bugs...bleh... but you should see Ryan and Lucas. It's so funny...well not really, but they are suffering from what the comp has been doing. Ryan was wanting to kill Aol Lucas wanted to destroy Msn..ahh..it was beautiful...but when I left today for school the messengers were working so...ya know Ry should be on! And if he isn't...I am afraid you will have...Lucas to talk to...@_@ ..fun...

and I will talk to you l8ter!

^.*

-MB-

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From ANON - macha on April 27, 2004
'Enjoyed'? I don't think that's the word I would use for this chapter. I found it disturbing. Very disturbing to read about the Prince going through all of that.

And having the Nameks show up in that hospital was disturbing also. (Here I was thinking you had A/U'd him to our world, and there are still Nameks?)

Kakarrot with a needle is also disturbing.

Disturbing enough I want to read the next chapter when you post it!
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