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Reviews for Fathoming Love

By : Camaro

From ANON - Macha on February 08, 2005
Ah, Goku gets introduced into the story. The meeting at the grave yard was heart wrenching. Goku's word were very true. Time won't heal it, but only put distance between the then and now. I was very interested while reading when Goku touched the doctor's heart, and then announced that he couldn't heal the hurt found in there.

I wonder if the doctor will eventually put two and two together. He did notice the similarities between Vegeta and Goku. How did Goku know about Laura? Is he stalking the Dr.? I think I remember a vauge reference about when the doctor was home one night, and didn't feel as though he were alone.

Continueing with Vegeta's story. I am glad he is not looking for justifications or forgiveness for the things he has done. He certainly has rebelled since Zarbon kicked him out. Interesting that just as he realizes he doesn't need Zarbon as a protector, Frezia puts the two of the against eachother, in a fight to the death no less. Other than being evil, I wonder what the white bastards motives for this are.
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From ANON - cujo1991 on February 08, 2005
i am fuckin english i dont have microsoft word and u are really sad if u have a wall of hate i even have my boyfriend backing me up on that so PISS OFF cause i have to deal with people like u every day so im really fuckin scared about what u got to say an what u goin to do jump out the computer and kill me AND I READ YR SHIT STORY I WOULD RATHER RIP MY EYES OUT MY SOCKETS BEFORE I READ YR STORIES BITCH
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From ANON - cujo1991 on February 03, 2005
i think this story is rubbish and i have a little problem with english so buttout
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From ANON - Mystic Dragon on November 16, 2004
I've only read up to chapter six, and I admit that I wasn't too impressed at the beginning, but you get serious mad props for the way you've portrayed Frieza and Zarbon. Frieza's characterization especially gave me chills. What a different way, but probably so accurate to look at these characters. Trunks' death was a surprise as well, but with each element, you are building a better story. Congrats!
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From ANON - macha on September 06, 2004
I have to agree with Vegeta on one thing. After having such a vaction, it would seem like someone had condenmed me to hell to go back and work for Frezia. *thinks about three day weekend and having to go back to work tomorrow*

Well, I guess Zarbon really does have Vegeta's best interests (not to mention his own) for making Vegeleepleep in a different room. Although I agree with Zarbon, it's for the best, a childish part of me says, "That SUCKS". *shrugs* If Frezia does find out how close those two have(had) become he will use it against, not one, but both of them. Frezia is and EVIL SCHEMEING BASTARD. (Always will be.)

I can also almost see the shock on Vegeta's face when he really realized he had hit Zarbon. O.O

At least Zarbon explained his reasoning. I can't imagine anyone who has known Vegeta for any length of time to actually believe the Prince would just take a "because, I said so," as any sort of real answer.
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From ANON - macha on August 18, 2004
So, I have to wonder that Tazial keeps have this specific dream of Justin quoting Captian Coral, "Living life with courage, bravery and strength of heart." I am certain that he could have other dreams of his child, but I am thinking that something is trying to tell him that the quote has meaning for him NOW. *shrugs* Or maybe I am just reading too much into the dream.

The second part of this chapter. Well, that certainly was a more interesting 'first time' than mine. Poor Vegeta, how could he not know about reproduction? I guess maybe if Radditz or Nappa (shudders) had been a female, he may have been educated sooner. What a way to learn about the birds and the bees. I loved the discription of the brothel, it was beautiful. I found it very interesting that the outside was red. SO different color scheme wise than what was on the inside. Although very appropriate for what was going on inside.

I don't wonder at Vegeta's confusion about the human races convictions. Both the Eastern and Western religions have issues dealing with sex. I have a theory on the western Christian one though. I think that a lot of the 'rules' were made, because we couldn't be trusted not to do silly things. Like having sex with sibilings and such, which can lead to birth deffects blah, blah. And if there were bastards everywhere (from NOT knowing who your parent(s) were) how would yoow wow whether what you were doing was incest or not? Hince marraige, taking the guessing work out of the euqation. If you only have sex with this person, then these are the results. Well, I do have to say that I believe marraige to be more than just that, othewise we could be trusted to be monogamus without it. *shrugs* Or maybe I am wrong and that piece of paper really is just another form of a pedigree.

I have been waiting and waiting for this update. Truth be told, but I did read it at FF, but didn't review there. I am glad that I read it a second time though, othse, se, I think I would have missed out on the dream part, being caught up in the second have of this chapter.
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From ANON - AngelKitty on July 16, 2004
Nothing less of what I expected. When I first started reading this, I was very confused, trying to catch the connection to Vegeta straight on, first figuring he was the speaker. I threw myself way off-and it never occurred to me 'Valentio Briefs' would be Vegeta. I must be out of it today.
When I first read the summery, I was a little worried that it would be one of those brief explanations of 'freeza raped veggie, yadda yadda, met Bulma, everything�s good'. Because up until now, that's the only interpret of Vegeta's 'life' that I've been exposed to.
I must admit I am sinfully pleased with the flow of this story. In a way, it�s very artistic. What I favored the most, at this point, would be the relationship with Zarbon. A beautiful way to look at, and describe it.
I'm positively dying to read more. You've impressed me, yet again. I think I've found my new favorite author.
The best word for your work I have found is "captivating�. The idea, the feeling, the plot, simply the words draw readers, such as myself, in. There are no mistakes in your work, and there are no boring or 'less interesting' parts. Sheer brilliance. Please continue soon
~*AngelKitty*~
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From ANON - Macha on June 30, 2004
It's a very scarring past that Vegeta has. And he was a strong person before it happened to have had the reactions that he did at the time. I certainly couldn't have remained quiet with vomit in my mouth if I had watched the same things unfold in front of me. So, he may think that he was made stronger because of those things, but I believe he was strong before they happened. Was he apathtic? I don't believe so, I truely believe he was very uncomfortable about the situation. He managed to get over the hump, if it even existed in the first place, of "It should have been me. Why wasn't it?" I think it is called something like "Survivors trama". And he does have trama, but I am not certain he has the guilt for surviving when others do not. He couldn't grow up in an environment like he did if he had that kind of a guilt.

I can certainly see where Zarbon would have found Vegeta's declarations insulting and distrubing. He had also rationalized his reasons for killing long before Vegeta ever asked his niave acutiations. So then, we have the fact that Zarbon had actually thought about this befornd tnd therefore couldn't quite be the monster he seemed. Celebrate beauty where you find it, because it may be brief in its existance. What a very harsh life.

You did a wonderful job in your discription of the aliens on the planet being purged. I don't think that I have ever read about gold blood before. Interesting.
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From ANON - Caralin on June 18, 2004
Beautiful...violently...astonishingly...beautiful!
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From ANON - Macha on June 18, 2004
You now have an avid reader of your stories. I was first introduced to your writings by the story 'Monster'. A story which has me totally enthralled. It has taken me six hours to catch up on this one, and I love it also.

You are very discriptive. And that is an understatement. Camaro is now on my list of 'must reads'. If you ever plan on publishing your own works, rather than fanficion, I would certainly like to be notified.

I keep seeing A/N in reguards to readers who don't like your style. I am very happy to see that you are more than capable for sticking up for yourself, because it would be very sad to see you quit writing because of someone else's hang ups.

So, although I know that there is still much to come in the story of Vegeta's life, I still have to wonder about "Did he actually do it?" I believe that he did. So, that being my assumption, there are other questions that follow.

First being the question "why". Second being, "Is Goku the death he keeps refering too."

I will wait patienately for both answers. I am certain that they will be addressed at sometime.

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From ANON - jaygoose on June 18, 2004
Venterntertaining and just all around amazing. *sighs* l love your fics.
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From ANON - ~Faith~ on June 11, 2004
-.- sigh, theres always one right? Gladly i'm not that one little insignifigent stain on the fabric of the earth who tells you your writing sucks. everyone knows it doesn't, people who say such blatent lies in my opinion are intimidated by your sense of deeper meaning, (and i put it simply for any flamers out there who are too incompitent, sorry? did i just say incompitient?i meant to say stupid so yo und understand me, sorry, i mean know what i'm talking about), you are trying to express the hidden feelings of vegeta, show a side of him that the DBZ animators wouldn't even be able to capture and write down in words. You are trying to show that yes, althoughhe is one incrediblly hot manof cold, he, he does have his fears, his doubts, his worries and his cares. If no one can see that, well, i'm sorry to say, you are stupid.

But lets get off the matter of silly little dirt ball cowards, and back onto the reason i'm reviewing, you're fic. I love it, and i must question if there will be another chapter, or if this is the end. Hopefully there will be another chapter, but it's great all the same. Another question...Dr Camdens little boy, did he die in a car accident because his father was D&D? (Drunk driving) If you could email ith ith an answer i would eb most grateful.

~Faith~
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From ANON - jaygoose on June 07, 2004
I am absolutely fucking shocked. Someone actually had the nerve to say that this story is boring. I love this story. It is one of the most interesting ones that I have ever read. Anyway, I am really intrigued by Vegeta's apparent history with Zarbon. The scene where they first meet had my heart pounding. It was beautiful...and strange. I wish I had a better word. If I think of one, I'll let you know. :)
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From ANON - Caralin Fury on June 06, 2004
Camaro! It is really you my darling girl! I waasn't sure at first as your name is different on this site...but a few words into the story and I immediatly recognized your unique (and brilliant) writing style.

I am so glad to have a new Camaro story to savor but I am as equally dismayed to see there are those in the world who lack the vision to appreciate your talent. I know you faced some demons on ff.net and it appears this sight is not exempt from ignorant fools either.

Just know there are serious writers and readers out here that love and admire your work. I am certainly a fan and very excited about the very cool and very intriguing story you are creating!

Caralin
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From ANON - Anon on May 19, 2004
Beautiful
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