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By : Kali

From ANON - Minako on January 28, 2005
I like it.
Aw And I thought Kai would make and nice Mother if they did have and child it would be cute and funny. since Dranzer is and Girl...but it's up to you now. good luck on the next one.
so what is the trouble now? more evil? more Jealousy? more love? somthing has to happen or is this the end of it?...you well tell us right? how about more couples?

tbc...?
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From ANON - Anon on January 23, 2005
What could the problem be? I hope its nothing major. I love the way you described the repairs especially the stained glassed window of the dragon and phoenix. Hurry with the next chapter!!
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From ANON - kari_remon on January 05, 2005
my my, I do not want to believe it's the end. Make my day and don't let it be the end! I was a bit disapointed with the battle, I expected it to be a more fierce battle between good and evil but in the end Boris just burned to a crisp. Are you going to write more of this? There are still lands to be united and who says there is no more evil in the world? Well, regardless of your future plans, this was still a very pleasant chapter as Dranzer and Kai are finaly up and Poor Tala is getting a few days off of being hurt. And what of Hillary and Kenny and the baby? Write more, write more...
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From ANON - Anon on January 05, 2005
That was a wonderful!!! Excellent job!!!
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From ANON - kari_remon on December 28, 2004
Very good chapter! I think my favourite part was Kai entering the room and facing the soldiers. Your descrition was screaming might and power... great effect could almost see it in my mind. I'm a bit sad though, the way things are going it seems only Tyson will be doing anything really. Then again, it's fiction and it's only part one so you can always surprise me and everyone else. Keep up the good job, I'm definitly waiting for the final chapter!
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From ANON - Anon on December 21, 2004
Go get him Ty! Kick his ass and make him pay!!
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From ANON - Light of the Blue Rose on December 21, 2004
~cracks fingers~

Okay now... lets try this.

Hi! I am sooooo sorry. I've been meaning to review your fic for such a long time... and things always seem to get in the way. ~whines about nonsense things for a minute before snapping out of it~ Anyway... this will probably be just a little long winded, but you'll have to excuse that.

First things first.

Point # 1: Tyson/Kai
For one thing... I ABSOLUTELY LOVE this pairing! And you simply write it with the divineness of the gods. There is nothing short of spectacular excellence when and how you write it. I have never read anything that reflects their relationship the way that this and your the other of your fiction I have had the pleasure of reading (Have You Ever... which I will try to touch on later...)

Point # 2: Dragoon and Dranzer
Yay! I love them and the way their characters evolved so far during the story! It's unique the way these characters behave given their circumstances, and the fact that their so involved in the story makes my little girlie heart sore! ~flaps arms uselessly while running around the room in a demented manner~ But then that may just be the fact that I love Dranzer and Dragoon and I find anything with their relationship eternally fascinating.

Point # 3: Tala
Wow. I love him when I can't decide weather to love or hate him. You write him very well, though I fell bad for poor Bryan. Poooor Bryan.

Point # 4 (are you tired of me yet?): Hillary and Kenny
Everyone�s here and they all have important roles in your stories. That is something that I personally find very hard to accomplish, and even if it gave you no end of grief as it does me, you should rest easy knowing that you've pulled it off extraordinarily well. Usually I give up on it... and then the story dies.... -_-; Umm... Oops? ^-^;

Point # 5: Plot (I swear I'm almost done!)
My gosh I love the way you write! ~bounces around happily~
Your stories are simply wonderfully original and excellently written. can I have more please? Not to mention the plot twists that Always have my head spinning in the most pleasant of ways questioning what you're planning on next!

I think I will now conclude this ludicrously long review with great hopes that this will put me in your good books and that you will write more for us soon? Pretty please? ~gives puppy eyes~

Hoping for the best in your future ventures,
Light of the Blue Rose
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From on October 21, 2004
wooooow... I wonder what could be in that sword that will makem aem accept Kai... It would be so good if he could turn into a phoenix to, will it ever happen? hope so :). Yes these chapters are not very forward, but you do need them so don't complain! Ja ne!
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From ANON - EscagirlUK on October 14, 2004
Write more, yeah? This is cool! Can't wait to see what Tyson needs that sword for.
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From ANON - kari_remon on September 20, 2004
considering past chapters, this was pretty small. nevertheless, very important! the introspection kai had about the influence tyson has on him reminds me so much of what happens with gon and killua in hunterxhunter. just like gon, tyson teaches kai how to feel and let go of the things once taught to him, to follow is own path. very well done! well, I guess I do have to wait till the final to figure out why you make cou cousins act like that. guess it's just one more thing I have to wait to see ne? which is a lot by now, and thank god someone asked about kai. humm wonder if he'll fuse with dranzer in the end and defeat black dranzer or something? then again, why not recreate beyblade's part where kai was under black dranzer's influence and have all the bit beast kick her ass? or tyson can beat up to save kai. I dunno, fast is, te way it's going it's impossible to predict where you're going with this. that makes a story very interesting to follow! go on writing!
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From Ezj on September 19, 2004
The fic are just great as it is... If people want to change it
threathen with not writing more... no scratch that I wouldn't
be able to read more either.^^ You make Hillary sound
differnet and in this story she and Tala are a good match.
Really good writing^^
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From on September 17, 2004
jesus, you update fast! surprisingly, you update fast, make big but also good chapters. congratulations, you have a big consideration for your reviewers!
you story is going marvelous, and you swing the important roles between your main characters very well so your story doens't seem very kai centrered or tyson centered. on the other hand, they are not the center of the world so the other charaters also have their own important roles in the story :). I'm liking the daily like situations and your descrition of them as well, Tabitha bringging a special touch to it. rather odd her first word is 'Kai', why does she like him that much? *giggles* nasty situation kai and tyson got caught in (and rather humiliatiing by the way...).
one last note: though some aspects of the medieval ways are well described, some are wrong, like the treatement given between tala and kai (being cousins and all, that doesn't mean they would treat each others like that. in the same line of though, it is not very likely having _prince_ tyson helping kids together with max, in fact, most likely they would never have met. but this is your fic and this is AU, so you have all the liberty)
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From ANON - DarkSetoKaiba on September 14, 2004
DSK/Mandra: Gah! too lazy to log in.. *huffs* ANYWAYS! I never doubted you dear goddess! Anyways, I love it! *snorts* I'm REALLY sure Takao didn't need those images.. LOL *snorts* Bh whh whats with the tala/hillary and one-sided bryan/tala? It's like.. confusing me.. and the kenny/hillary thing.. SHES A WHORE! *giggles* nah, not really just.. yeah.. Lmao. Anyways, thats about it. I really like this and await the next chapter!

Ja!

~Mandi/DSK
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From ANON - Rhonnie on September 13, 2004
Your story is progressing wonderfully. Unfortunately I am a pain in the ass so I am gonna have to say this Tala/Hilary thing makes my stomach turn. lol Sorry I just can't stand the girl.

I am a major Tala/Bryan fan. Their just so perfect together. *shivers*Tala and Hilary*cough*No.

But seriously, ignore my little whining and continue this awesome story! So other than the Hilary/Tala thing your story is one of my favorite and I have read tons of Beyblade fics. Your detail and imagination is one of the best I have seen. Hope to see more real soon and maybe some new stories after this one is done. :)
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From ANON - DarkSetoKaiba on September 10, 2004
Yer yer, Hiidy! OMFG... You know, the way you put it with the Bryan/Tala friendship.. makes it seem like there was something um.. more. between them... and personally.. I want a Bryan/Tala..>.> And uh.. put hillary with kenny and um.. er.. yer.. *twitches* yes im an idiot. You're one of my goddesses! *worships* Which Is why im just like.. blabbering.. *sobs* sorry.. Um, >.> *shuffles feet* I know your a busy goddess with school, and everything else.. but could you grant me something..? A small tiny *shows a small size with her fingers* ficlet of a Tyson/Tala/Kai? *drops down to the floor and sobs* Im sorry sorry! gomen! Forgive me I shouldn't have asked! *worships humbly* But um.. Yeah, Im a big fan of your work and youre one oi my goddesses.. w00t ^_^;; Um, yeah.. Anyways Thats it.. Good job! Can't wait to see more! Ja! *bounces off happily, squealing about the goddess and her awesome writing*
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