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Reviews for Unbeaten Paths

By : CardDragonBall
  • From ANON - macha on September 13, 2004
    Don't ask me why, but I found the behavior of Trunks and Goten kind of funny. (by that I mean ha ha funny) Crazy sayians! Go from I love you to beating the crap out of eachother to the point of breaking appendages? I guess the boys will just have to wait until Vegeta gets home to find out what's normal and what's not.

    Yeah, having Goku and Radditz on the same ship, with one bedroom, wasn't the best thought out plan. I hope they make it to earth alive. Are you taking bets on how long before Goku I.T.'s himself and Vegeta to earth? Lea Rad Radditz on the autopiloted ship to make it to earth in one piece? I think it may have a distance factor involved, but I don't know.

    I am glad you updated. Sorry I haven't been to your site lately, but I really do like leaving reviews here for you.
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  • From ANON - Tiendron on September 08, 2004
    Love this fic! Please keep it coming!!!! SOON PLEASE?!!!
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  • From ANON - Plyric on September 02, 2004
    LOL! LMAO! That was too f--king funny!!! OMG, Goku just punches Raditz, powers up, and by God, that is THAT! Too funny! I love it! This chappie and the last chappie were FANTASTIC! I cannot wait for more! =)
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  • From ANON - Jessjess on September 02, 2004
    Update dammit! I'm an impatient fan who needs the writer to write more so I can devour their latest works! S, I', I'm feeling kinda Saiyany today, I read too fast. Anyway, I love your work and would like to see more as soon as you can get it up there. Was that nicer? (big puppy eyes with the need for love) I'll be good, I promise!
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  • From ANON - macha on September 01, 2004
    Poor Goku, I am glad all it took was another nap for him to feel so much better. And the Dende clone thing was FUNNY. Yeah, The nameks proabably w jus just let Goku make a wish without a huge hassel. I am surprised that Radditz wasn't more shocked. Maybe laughter was his way of dealing with it. *shrugs*

    Well, now they get to go home to see the devistation that their sons have been creating (or is it just Goten?)

    It's alright. I am glad you felt that I could be a sounding board for your troubles. I really have no idea what kind of problems trying to publish creates, so all I do do is listen. No helpful hints from me.

    I plan on going to check out that site you posted. Is the fantasy story going to be on paper? And yes, I can imagine that tryto eto explain such a story would be horrific.
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  • From ANON - macha on August 26, 2004
    I think I would vacate the area also if Goten was busy with a crowbar. Sounds like a smart thing to do. It was, however, very rude of him to make Bra loose her cheerio. After all, Bulma had been being kind to him, and he left her on that note. *shrugs* Even the best of us are rude at times. Being confused can do that to a normally 'good' person. Well, hmmm, I didn't think that the crowbar activity would have that kind of effect. Don't ask me why I thought this. Goten is half sayian after all. I should have expected it.

    That was one awfully mean way for Vegeta to help Goku get his tail back. I was all set for the spanking, but alas, Goku finally had other things to occupy his mind. I think that he should have been more grateful that the 71 words over DID include his climax. Silly sayian.

    On a different note, you're publishing? WAY COOL. Keep me up to date on how it goes, alright. (please and thank you)
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  • From on August 22, 2004
    Whats happening to Goten? I don't get it...i hope its nothing to bad. Please update soon..i know your busy but its killing me. Sorry Card-san, i don't mean to beg but, i can't help it. Ja ne!
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  • From ANON - macha on August 21, 2004
    I don't know. If I were Vegeta, I think I would be saying, "Nah, nah, na, nah, nah," so it's probably best that I am NOT Vegeta. hehe I would have to agree with his logic on licking wound. He made it, why shouldn't he get to lick it. hehe

    OH, I HATE it when I get into a logic/emotional loop. It's like those times when I bitch(complain), and then my b/f tries to find a sloution to the problem I have been bitching about, I am not happy about him trying to find a solution(I do think it's rather sweet of him to try though). So, rather than be angry with him, I explained it to him once. I said, "I just want to bitch. I didn't really need help solving it." And now, all I have to say is, "I just want to bitch," and I think he has learned to go into g/f sounds like this "Blah, blah, BLAH, blAH," mode. Just let's me do my bitching. hehe. Not exactly what Goten is going througut iut it seems to have the same lack of answeres. Well, except for the temporary one of Chocolate. *Hmmmm*
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  • From ANON - Lenora on August 16, 2004
    I love you Card. You know what this story needs??? The Twins. The insane troublemaking twins that make up my world. *snickers as Goten facefaults and Trunks sweatdrops* i love doing that to them. keep going!!!!
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  • From on August 11, 2004
    W00t, tails, i can't wait! Please forgive me not reviewing, its hard on me at the moment, and i'm sorry to hear that you are so busy aswell. I can't wait till the next chap (Whenever that might be) i want to see more of Goku and Vegeta and their funny arguments and lovely lemon moments. XD Update as soon as you can Card-san, Ja ne!
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  • From ANON - Hecate18 on July 22, 2004
    I wasn't on the internet for a 'whole' day yesterday... it felt weird, I felt deprived. 0_0

    I liked the introduction to the chapter, it was such a blunt statement. ^_^
    I especially liked: - 'It’s like if you tortured an asexual namek into shifting all uncomfortable back and forth like he was getting something special in his trousers but being asexual…' - LMAO

    I think Trunks and Goten have a good plan going... ^_~

    Sorry for the short review, I asked for overtime at work and my manager put me down for full time... *sighs*
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  • From ANON - Webtester01 on July 22, 2004
    Oh the humor.
    More!
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  • From ANON - Plyric on July 21, 2004
    Yeah, yeah, yeah, I know I just reviewed, but that was Chapter 3. Chapter 2 deserves more than a review, it deserves an award! OMG! THAT Lemon gave me some of the BEST wet dreams I've ever had! (Maybe it's because my imagination runs into the physical? =) ) "Legs opened wider, hips tipped up at him and there was another beautiful whine. “Vegeta…” a breath, then like a dark little secret the blush and: “Fuck me.” Ah. Beautiful. He felt it was his duty, as Kakarot’s lover, to fully appreciate moments like this when the normally dominant man offered up himself." Beautiful! "...whined while Vegeta watched him work himself into a frenzy trying to fuck himself." LOL! "who was still blushing. “You an Evil man, Vegeta,” Kakarot said, kissed him shortly and then pushed himself up and grimaced at the mess they made. “And as a reward, you can fix the bed.” Then he disappeared toward the bathroom, and Vegeta sighed. Laid there for a moment and just grinned. " LMAO, that was such a Vegeta-esque thing for Goku to say and act! I love it! Now, on to Chappie 4! =)


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  • From ANON - Plyric on July 21, 2004
    "...Or when he tore Vegeta’s clothes why [while] they were fighting and his mind got so lost somewhere between ‘bed’ and ‘sex’ that he forgot that he was fighting and inevitably ended up with a face full of some kind of shrubbery as he was kicked across the face of the planet." LMAO!!!! Oh my Goddess, I just got that picture, in full clarity, in my mind. "“We could move out to their house and just have sex for a week after we sanitize the mattress.” There must be something wrong with the royal bloodline. Something that made them think only with a certain part of their brain and the rest of the time they didn’t care too much about what happened." ROFL! Oh, that was the cincher! Plyric *rubs laughter tears from her eyes.* Great lift-off! =)
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  • From ANON - Macha on July 21, 2004
    I have to wonder; if everyone except Vegeta thinks this is a bad idea, why doesn't he listen. Okay, that was kind of stupid, but like I said, I had tndernder.

    I hope the space ship they are traveling on can withstand the stress (pressure) associated with lemons. I also hope they find are able to find planets to resupply on. Looks like that may be necessary.

    Did I miss something? Why are Trunks and Goten only talking about a weeks worth of time?
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