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Reviews for Quest

By : Pixelgoddess

From on September 17, 2004
This is a really good story, how long did it take you to wright it
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From ANON - Will on September 16, 2004
Goku's vulnerability and hurt is very understandable/authentic, and his dealing with it gives Vegeta the opportunity to be a bit protective and supportive (he has learned a lot from Kakorr hasn't he?). Loved the scene with Goku and Chichi - wouldn't we all like a friend like that sometimes? *sigh* Really looking forward to reading the scenes with Vegeta and Chichi, Vegeta and Bulma. Expecting Chichi and Rezu to feed him chicken soup and Bulma not to let him in the house, but this is the goddess we are talking about so wnowsnows?

A love interest for Piccolo? Not sure the story really needs it in fact - he is kind of cool alone. It would have to be someone (male or female irrelevant) on his level ie fairly cool too - self contained, a fighter/sparring companion, clever, undemonstrative, maybe (like him) with a darker past (hmmm and we do want to punish Krillin don't we? hmmm hmmm hmmmm).

Never experienced a hurricane (they have cyclones up north in summer though) - must be scary. Glad you're OK. Please email when you update.
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From on September 16, 2004
Two days.
Two days straight almost not sleeping *can read in my home only at night* to read Maintaining and Quest.
Couldn't stop. Just got here, at ch. 8... *It's 5:00 AM here now* AND I CAN'T WAIT ANY SECOND FOR MORE!!!
Please, don't let a mere hurricane stop you!
*kidding, I realize that's not a very pleasant thing to joke about...*
You achieved, I believe, to do what I never thought was possible: make Frieza be more despicable and hateful than "it"
already are, and you even had to use child abuse to do it!!! Amazing! I'm glad "it" won't be back. But somehow it's a shame
"it" still exists in Hell... Can't they go there and end his misery forever?
And I was thinking, why dont you do a one-shot to that time between Dende, Gohan and Videl at
the Time Chamber? I think it could be hilarious. Could you do it, just for fun? *I'm not a fan of them, just Goku and Vegeta,
but I really think it would be VERY funny to read*
Anyway, keep the good work. o.O O.o o.O O.o
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From ANON - suisheu on September 14, 2004
Good, this is what they need to do. Talk. Wait, how did bulma get the backup copies? I thought the tapes were removed. Maybe it would be nice if Goku talked with chichi. I'm very proud of Vegeta for being so willing to sacrifice so much for the sake of his mate. Poor Goku.. he's being betrayed by everyone.
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From ANON - macha on September 13, 2004
I am happy Vegeta is going to tell Chichi and Bulma what is going on. I guess he sort of needs to 'clarify' to B, an, and I do believe Chichi would be a big help for Goku. I read some of the responses to the reviews, other than my own, and was glad to see you have plans for her getting invo. '. 'Mothering' is almost the kind of need Goku has.... almost.

I like the 'purring' for each other. It's nice, makes me almost tranquel reading about it.

As for someone in a relationship with Piccolo? I really don't have any ideas. I am very sorry.

I am glad to hear the hurricane is going to miss you.
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From ANON - Velvet Curse on September 13, 2004
hmmm you describe everything so well, i can feel how Goku feels myself and all the confusion in his mind. poor guy. well i really don't know about piccollo, since he can't be with Vegeta obviously i'd say either Dende or an OC. i don't think he's reallt fit with anyone else, but that's my opinion anyway ^^
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From ANON - kitsuneakai13 on September 13, 2004
poor goku has to keep his feelings bottled up, hopefully he can talk to chi-chi now though. *sighs* he's so understanding to vegeta and the situation they're in. but then again as you've said he doesn't see vege and the rapist as the same person. but i'm happy they're going to tell the other peoples, though i think bulma will prob react badly to it. hopefully they'll understand though, vege needs his friends still ^.^ and as fer piccolo? *grins* i'd have to say dende, only because he's a namek too. *shrugs* just like a passing thing since dende seems to experiment with people or whatever (though i suppose that was a one time thing) *blinks* and i hope yur safe from the hurricane. well good luck with the next chap! *waves* ja ne!
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From ANON - Jessjess on September 13, 2004
You know, it's almost tradition in DBZ for everyone to hate Chichi, usually she's a raving lunatic, but every once and a while an author makes her a decent person. I like that, I mean she would be the one who would know all of Goku's quirks quite intimately, and she seems to remember that in this story.
Aw, come on, can't all the saiyans play "Kick the Krillin" across the planet? Two points for every country he flies across! *BIG grin* He wouldn't have to die per se, but a couple of injuries wouldn't hurt, would they? At least, not us.
Glad Ivan the Terrible is going to miss you. Why is it that so many authors I like live in Florida? I think y'all do that so you have an excuse not to update! Yeah!
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From ANON - Jessjess on September 11, 2004
Poor Goku! His freinds are all jerks, especially that Krillin. Can't he just die already? Or grovel, I'd really like to see him grovel. I feel bad for Vegeta too. I'm sorry you have to deal with Ivan, I hope you've decided to move your stuff to high ground and evacuate with your computer if it's still going to be a category five like I heard last. Stay safe and update when you can.
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From ANON - FireFly on September 09, 2004
Ah, nice chapter! I got caught in the hurricane too. Was without power for over 4 days. Oy. You're lucky you were able to even write your ficcy. I just twiddled my thumbs in the dark :P

Poor Goku though! He hid how utterly confused, anguished, and depressed he really was until now. Wow. I can't wait for the next chapter!
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From ANON - tsiabriefs on September 09, 2004
i think goku should take all that pain and focus it into some anger, perhaps at the kais. then take that anger and go kick some ass on all the kais til they tell how to fix vegeta. who knows, maybe a rampaging goku would be enough to scare them into cooperating.

i love your writing style and ideas. i read everything i can of yours ^-^

ja ne
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From ANON - macha on September 09, 2004
This was a very sad chapter. I can imagine that Vegeta WOULD have quite the migraine after his session with the nameks in his head.

I feel very sorry for Goku right now. I am glad to know he won't ever blame Vegeta, but I wish he would stop blaming himself. I understand the stage of ... well denial I guess. Has to blame someone, but why himself? If anyone should be blamed it's the F'ing bastard that is in HFIL right now, but often, logic has a hard time beating out emotions. I hope Goku comes around to understanding 'who' he SHOULD be blaming, but I also know it's going to be a long, painful process.

As for him losing his friends one by one. Who does he have to talk to that isn't a turn coat Kai, a bigot, have sayian blood, or an ex? He can't go talk with Bulma, that might set her off, and he would probably feel the need to have Vegeta' permon fon first. Hehe, the only person I can think of right now is Baba, and well, she seems to be in league with the Kai's a times. Well, *Shudders* maybe Yamcha? (Ewwww)
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From ANON - suisheu on September 09, 2004
well Im glad you're alright. I've never experienced any really violent weather other than windstorms and thunderstorms.... Yesssssss!!! you updates!!! ::gives author a hug:: god i've been needing something to read for forever!! I see now, so Goku's no longer affecting Vegeta's brainwashing because he already technically died. Yeah, I understand that now. But Trunks hasn't... hmm... well!!!!???? WHAT IS THE SOLUTION!!! I will ask every time until I knoooooooooow!!!!! i may even start to beg... aw i feel so bad for those two!! But it's good to know that piccolo lays no blame on Vegeta and chooses to maintain their friendship as such. Goku needs someone! Vegeta is the only one who can understand how he feels, so he NEEDS to talk to him! he does feel guilty because he remembers what he did while under Frieza's influence, but, but! Still, Goku needs to talk with him about it. It does no good to hold everything in like Vegeta did. I don't want to see Goku end up like that, all broken and sad. that's not your plan, is it? r-right? And also, they way that they're living with one another, will all this hidden guilt and pain... it's not going to make a void grow between them, is it? Please, say no. Nothing is supposed to get to them!!! argh!!! ((i know its not true, but they love each other!!!)) **waits for next chapter eagerly**
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From ANON - kitsuneakai13 on September 08, 2004
*sniffs* poor goku, so much pain yet he hides it so well, just like vegeta. *frowns* hopefully they find some way to help vegeta. *curiously* mebe goku can talk to chi-chi about his probs, *thoughtfully* unless he doesn't want her to get pulled into their probs. but they need to think of a "cure" soon! vegeta can't go on not luving things forever, but at least he has Goku with him. i hope this little crying episode doesn't cause any probs or misgivings between the two. well great chp, luv the angst and crying and stuff. *waves* until next time ja ne!
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From ANON - XxNeko_YoukaixX on September 07, 2004
awww poor Vegeta to have to go through that again *sniff* oh well the sooner they fix the damn brainwashin' problem the better & then Goku & Vegeta can go back to havin' wild SSJ3 sex! *squeals* but ya know now i feel bad 'bout Piccolo 'cause hes never experienced love before. (he just forever cursed to be alone?) *atempts to rub shoulders with paws* damn these paws there too hard to rub shoulders with *glares at paws* ok forget this i CAN'T do IT! ok now for some bad news *cries* my internet has been a REAL ASS to me *atempts to beat the livin' shit out of it*.....*fails* grrrrr it won't let me on what so ever so right now i'm on crystal's comp (WHO STILL NEEDS TO FUCKIN' CATCH UP ON HER READIN' DAMNIT!! but she promised she will *glares at her* i swear she better) typin' this reveiw since i can't on mine. so i won'r be reviewin' as much as i can for a while (god its gonna kill ma). HOPEFULLY my dad will fix soon (when he stops starin' at it) since we started school today so we're gonna need the net soon for homework (NOOOO!!!! DAMN HOMEWORK IT SHOULD BURN & DIE!!!). i HOPE to review again some time in the furture seeya *cries* (i don't wanna go)
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