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By : Pixelgoddess

From ANON - Webtester01 on August 31, 2004
That was very well written. (Chapter 6.) I like the point of vies changes you put in between Kami and Piccolo.

Goku saying things for Vegeta was interesting and funny. I wonder when Vegeta will be saying things for Goku.

I expect the road to recovery to be rough. I could be wrong, but that is usually what happens in my experiece.

Looking forward to more.

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From ANON - Velvet Curse on August 30, 2004
yeh it would wouldn't it? unfortunately i'm not sure how i could achieve that, sorry lol.
i caught all the referrences back to the privious chapter and i can see how things are starting t come together now, i think you can be forgiven for that chapter taking a while to write, it was a pretty long chapter after all and everyone gets writers block from time to time. i don't know, perhaps the reviews from this chapter will fuel the muses for a while ^^
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From ANON - KitsuneAkai13 on August 29, 2004
gah, i luved the switching! *laughs* it was really cool iis cis chap. and i liked the piccolo action, so cool. i hope they can figure out what's wrong with vegeta *sniffs* poor him. *shakes head* i just can't get over the switching, i luv it! so please update again soon! *claps hands* wonderful job again by the way. *waves* ja ne!
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From ANON - suisheu on August 29, 2004
Ohhhhhhhhhhh! How very clever. not being in love, but acknowledging it. I never would have guessed that. so it wasn't in what frieza said, but what Vegeta was thinking? Goddamn kais! **wants to kill them all** makin' poor goku and Vegeta wait and then saying no! Is king kai in it? Is he really being a jerk like the rest of them? Will he maybe get in contact with goku secretly and help them? aw, c'mon! WOW. I can't believe they showed up at the lookout in such a compromising position... heheheeee... so Goku's presence is always with Vegeta because of the "thing" piccolo felt in Vegeta's mind in the beginning? How will seeing all that change the relationship between piccolo and Vegeta, if at all? and most importantly, WHAT IS THE DARN SOLUTION TO THE BLASTED BRAINWASHING?! ::sits down and waits for next chappie Veeeery eagerly:: ^________^
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From ANON - macha on August 29, 2004
Brave Piccolo. I don't think I would have the cahonas (excuse me, my spanish spelling sucks, well, as does all my spelling) to go into Vegeta's mind. I am glad the Prince has enough control over his mind that Piccolo didn't get blasted with Vegeta's entire life. Still, for Piccolo to question his own historical evilness because of what he saw about the lizard is quite telling. I am glad that Piccolo and Vegeta are on 'friend' terms. Even if the Prince does like to pull hentai pranks. Mwuahahah.

So, I was a little confused about Vegeta's worrying about Bulma's reaction if she found out about the brainwashing and what triggered it. Was he concerned that she would be upset that SHE hadn't triggered it (in other words, Vegeta had never admitted his love for her to himself) Or concerned that she could be a possible target?

Oh, I don't mind your oppinion of the drums, or that you would put it in as a possible Vegeta POV. I love those drums. They have a similar affect on me. PLEASE do write the side story. (After it won't give anything away about this story of course.)

Evil, sadistic Kai's. How come I have a feeling not all of the Kai's are of one mind in whatever they are doing? I have a feeling some are just going along with it, while others are directing it. Those selfish bastards. And I really do believe they have there own interests in mind, and it might not be for 'The Good of the Universe'. Sometimes I get a feeling that this plane of exsistance is just some sort of play ground for them. As a matter of fact..... well, I doubt I'd ever write it.

Ah, so the bonding gets more tangled. Will it continue in such a manner, or will they eventually adjust? I guess I will have to wait and find out.
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From ANON - Will on August 25, 2004
Great beginning. Not entirely clear as yet where this one is going - there's the brainwashing issue and the Trunks/Vegeta thing to work out (you make us really feel for them both). And I hope the boys will talk soon about the mating thing (drumsevanevant perhaps?). Very intrigued by this. But until then I am revelling in the warm glow as they explore their happy successful relationship and its affect on boheirheir personalities. I liked the ChiChi/Rezu chapter - they are a part of the story we haven't seen for a while. In Maintaining there was a sense that part of Vegeta's redemption (although mostly through Goku) was involved with his being part of a wider, caring group of people. That his, his decisions to care for Goku's family while he was away created the relationships that became his anchor when he needed them (eg ChiChi's help in getting he and Goku together). Part of Goku's strength was acknowledged to come from this source but I don't think Vegeta ever realised that, or thought about it as applying to himself. I think part of completing his return to health and strength needs to see him drawing closer to his wider 'family', getting to feel that he can truly look upon himself as one of them. Of course, you would have to do this and still keep Vegeta being Vegeta - not easy. Anyway just a thought - happy to defer to the wisdom of the goddess and wait patiently for the story to unfold. I love the banter between Vegeta and Piccolo btw - it cracks me up every time (still chuckle about the 'boyfriend' sequences in Maintaining). Sorry to hear about the back pain - too many sparring sessions perhaps? Hope its betteon -on - keep well.

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From ANON - Velvet Curse on August 23, 2004
mmmm loved this chap, i presume i need not explain why hehe. poor you *pats yr cheek* i give massages, my cousins a massous (how is tht spelt anyway?) and she taught me, but since i don't think a net massage would help all i can do is say hope you feel better soon.
well easy or not ill see in the next few chapters lol
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From ANON - XxNeko_YoukaixX on August 22, 2004
YAY!!!!! I got some Goku & Vegeta sex! *squeals in delight & wags her fluffy tail like crazy* THANK U I LOVE IT! *purrs loudly against Pixelgoddess(MY PLAYMATE SO BACK OFF PEOPLE!!!!)* i was wonderin' when u were gonna update(HA! r u crazy, i was goin' nuts waitin' for the update. i mean i was *puts paws really close togather* this close to just run round outside all day sayin' to the whole world that i haven't gottin' my Saiyan sex now). now since u said the brainwashin' will take 'bout 6 story weeks(ya mean like 6 whole chaps?) before its fixed & i take it will be the most painful(EVIL woman that u r *grin*) 6 story weeks Goku & Vegeta will face is that right? by any chance in Trunks gonna get thrown in this whole mess? *big curious eyes look at Pixelgoddess* oh & sorry to hear 'bout ur back that must suck ass. sorry i can't do much since if i did i'd end up sratchin' ur tender back with these claws of mine 'causin' more pain than revivin' it. soooo i'll just stick with this... *jumps up to Pixelgoddess's shoulders & curls up tightly bristlin' her fur against Pixelgoddess's neck in time with her loud purrin'* (hey looky i'm a one big fluffy neck collar!) hehe i hope this will help ya out a bit. *flashes a big smile*
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From ANON - suisheu on August 22, 2004
What?! You're not gonna tell me anything? Nooooooo! B-but I give you reviews! See? *points at review she is writing* hey, NICELY DONE. I likie chappie. ^_^ Oy, every time I tried to read it, someone else kicked me off the computer. took me all day. meh. Heehee... I love the little games they play... Goku had better watch out! How are they planning on removing the brainwashing? You're telling me they might have found a way? and will trunks be included?
You know the, ah, position, they were in? Vegeta had a few bad memories because of being in it... so when Goku touches the places where his scars used to be, does he also get flashes of past pain? I'm curious as to what the answer may be. update update update! more more more! ::kicks into review mode, ready to write another one::
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From ANON - Webtester01 on August 21, 2004
The emotions between Kakorott and Vegeta are very well portrayed. The complete trust is described well, not to mention the other things that were described well. ;-D
Looking forwrd to more.

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From ANON - KitsuneAkai13 on August 20, 2004
*.* wow. *fans self off* that was intense hehe. totally luved it of course. ^.- i'm happy everything is working out between them too. *restlessly* i can't wait to get more into the switching personality thing, it's fun. *thumbs up* great chap once again, keep up the great work! *pleads* an' update soon, i shall be waiting! *laughs* til next time, ja ne.
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From ANON - macha on August 20, 2004
I am glad that Goku had the forethought to get himself cleaned up before he went to where Vegeta was at. The lemon would have been somewhat hampered by the fish guts I am thinking, and this is one lemon I am glad wasn't hampered.

The part about him IT'ing to a place that was in thin air was FUNNY. hehe

OH, the drums. I like the sounds of drums. Are you going to put those groups of drummers (I think that they are Japanese) in here some how? I am also waiting for the time when Vegeta learns more about bonding and mating rituals. But... I can wait.

Hope your back gets better soon.
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From ANON - Velvet Curse on August 16, 2004
haha well you could do that, but then that would make things far too easy for Goku and Vegeta now wouldn't it? i don't like to see them upset but when they are good things always come after eventually. plus if they destroyed Freiza like that who would we have to hate so much? lol course it's your story hehe. keep it up i still love your writing ^^
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From ANON - suisheu on August 11, 2004
Stupid humans and their stupid curiousity! If that person hadn't grabbed Goten's tail he wouldn't have freaked and gotted hurt. wow, I never realized how hard everything was on chichi. I like the way rezu and Chi ended up together. ^_^ She's a much better and happier woman now. I hope vegeta gets through a little bit of all the turmoil goin ins inside him. Hey, if goku can feel and act as Vegeta feels, and sometimes knows what's going on in his head like when he heard Frieza, couldn't he also be affected by the brainwashing? If he's linked to it somehow through their bonds, could he find a way to figure out what it is? Maybe not. Just wondering. sorry... I can't let it go! RR! I want to, but I'm just so worried now that something will trigger it and someone loved will end up dead. mmm...
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From ANON - jaygoose on August 11, 2004
That was very good and not too mushy at all. I like the descriptions of Rezu. I never could picture her in my head before. That was a big help. I loved the little scenes of Vegeta being fatherly. I can so see them. I liked this a lot. I didn't even miss the Geta and Goku loving.
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